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The grammar is abysmal and random unnecessary words are added. The names of places and characters are completely butchered and keep changing throughout the story, an example would be hogwarts, which alternates between hog, hoag, hogs and hogwarts. ‘It’ is commonly replaced with ‘she’ and the perspective keeps changing for no real reason. The only thing I enjoyed was the start where it was actually interesting.
One of the best if not THE best Harry Potter story I have ever read. Great world building, greate characters………………….. The grammar needs some work, contain too much unnecessary info but, Still one of the grates read in Harry Potter gonra [img=recommend][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
Too many words to say something very simple badically this is a 100 chapter novel wanting to be a 1000 chapter novel.
It is very difficult to read and feels like I am reading a huge monologue.world building is fine but story progresses very slowly.,...................... ................. ..................................... ...
The story has potential. But the writing (translation if tl) is really bad. The author/tl clearly does not understand when to use pronoun it/his/her. It's all mush up. Next one is the naming did the author/tl did not even try to fix it. Another thing is there are paragraphs that just the author thought he/she can try to be more mysterious but did not really able to work on. It will work if the grammar is okay but it's not. I really like the plot here but after dozens of chapters it doesn't even get fixed.
Interesting story, bad translation. The translator is not even trying to correct mistakes and mispronounced names. There are so many helpful programms that could increase the quality but none are used.
really great story onlything holding you back is the gramer. some points of the story are just unreadable. please get some form of editing
hard to read but good story . [img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]
Meh.😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒
Tbh, the world building is pretty good, but the progression is slowed down by the excessive explaining and details. Not to mention that its really hard to tell whether im reading thoughts, or someone talking.
It is a great fanfiction, actually it could be the best I read about HP. Especially the charachters and the world building are top notch and reallly fun to read. Thank you for the great story author!
great story. i really like this kind of approach. hope to see the main character dive deep into the school(talents) end develop some unique spells.
Extremely interesting, and you are doing a decent job translating. The story reads difficultly in English. I have read up to chapter 10 and the protagonist, Calder, personifies parts of his soul as feminine and sounds extremely pompous. Like a child is trying to sound intelligent by using big words that they don't quite understand while also still using them correctly just not conventionally. Also you keep calling them magicians where as in the Wizarding World they denote themselves as Witches and Wizards, there is not a genderless classification for the magical humans known as Witches and Wizards as a whole.
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The grammar is abysmal and random unnecessary words are added. The names of places and characters are completely butchered and keep changing throughout the story, an example would be hogwarts, which alternates between hog, hoag, hogs and hogwarts. ‘It’ is commonly replaced with ‘she’ and the perspective keeps changing for no real reason. The only thing I enjoyed was the start where it was actually interesting.
One of the best if not THE best Harry Potter story I have ever read. Great world building, greate characters………………….. The grammar needs some work, contain too much unnecessary info but, Still one of the grates read in Harry Potter gonra [img=recommend][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
Too many words to say something very simple badically this is a 100 chapter novel wanting to be a 1000 chapter novel.
It is very difficult to read and feels like I am reading a huge monologue.world building is fine but story progresses very slowly.,...................... ................. ..................................... ...
The story has potential. But the writing (translation if tl) is really bad. The author/tl clearly does not understand when to use pronoun it/his/her. It's all mush up. Next one is the naming did the author/tl did not even try to fix it. Another thing is there are paragraphs that just the author thought he/she can try to be more mysterious but did not really able to work on. It will work if the grammar is okay but it's not. I really like the plot here but after dozens of chapters it doesn't even get fixed.
Interesting story, bad translation. The translator is not even trying to correct mistakes and mispronounced names. There are so many helpful programms that could increase the quality but none are used.
really great story onlything holding you back is the gramer. some points of the story are just unreadable. please get some form of editing
hard to read but good story . [img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]
Meh.😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒
Tbh, the world building is pretty good, but the progression is slowed down by the excessive explaining and details. Not to mention that its really hard to tell whether im reading thoughts, or someone talking.
It is a great fanfiction, actually it could be the best I read about HP. Especially the charachters and the world building are top notch and reallly fun to read. Thank you for the great story author!
great story. i really like this kind of approach. hope to see the main character dive deep into the school(talents) end develop some unique spells.
Extremely interesting, and you are doing a decent job translating. The story reads difficultly in English. I have read up to chapter 10 and the protagonist, Calder, personifies parts of his soul as feminine and sounds extremely pompous. Like a child is trying to sound intelligent by using big words that they don't quite understand while also still using them correctly just not conventionally. Also you keep calling them magicians where as in the Wizarding World they denote themselves as Witches and Wizards, there is not a genderless classification for the magical humans known as Witches and Wizards as a whole.
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too much nonsense and so much translation mistakes