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how weird! The person who attracted the monsters was Lissa, but the main character has a grudge against the monsters. Shouldn't he kill Lissa who started the war? And why are all the killers girls? Other than ... Mantasser? All people are women, no father, no uncle, no brother, none of them exist. There are only aunts, sisters and mothers. The main character does not kill any girl. In fact, the callousness of the main character that the author keeps mentioning is nothing but the author's own illusion. Men are like fodder, and women don't die even if they stab the main character. Although the number of female characters is more than male, the author is afraid that one of them will die, I am afraid that he will even kill the main character to save them. The author says that the main character does not want to leave the salvation of the world in the hands of someone who is busy building a harem, but what happens next? The main character himself is arrested during the construction of the harem. The difference between him and Luke is that Luke is honest about what he is looking for. While the main character deceives himself and looks for the harem. Or maybe he tells himself that if I can't have those women, Luke can't either, so he keeps them close.
Was this drop? Been enjoying this but haven’t seen anything for a while. Hope to read more in the near future.
i don't know why author writting this novel again with new plot when Mc have a same old pushover type this hole novel story based on pushover who shoulders the responsibility of main character what a waste of time only pushovers like this theme.. I hate the original and believe me core of story is same so you can skip this pushover to some of yours losers friends
70+ chapters and I can confidently say that this version is better than the 1st one: - Characters felt alive and vibrant. - Good action and great fight description. - Fray is undergoing consistent character development. - Consistent storytelling. Points of Improvement: - Updating frequency is on the slow side. On a good week only 2-3 chapters. - We still need to see better foreshadowing to add more mystery to the novel (Rin’s backstory is looking good, for example) Overall, Amazing work author, wish we could see more of Fray x Zina (this was missing too in the other novel).
The older version had a better development and writing. this version is at least 4-5 levels lower than the older one.
honestly, i see drop in quality in your new story. the way u write it as if the reader already read your old story. story facing is too fast. too many lost tidbits, n most importanly your character less conviction. you make adam personality like an exited teenagers.
overall im starting to Question if Aslan ever had any Agency or if she is simply fated to be with Luke in every universe and cant ever be with Faye or stay loyal with him even if Luke tortured and basically treats her like garbage?like seriouslyi wish we have atleast some alternate universe chapter where Aslan stayed loyal and basically rejected Luke and her fate as a heroine and truly become free thats all
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I'm giving this a 5 because I know the author is a talented writer. Although caution is needed as the author goes on hiatus occasionally for a very long time. So far, the story is pretty good. If I had read this before reading the original novel I think I would've been hooked. I love system novels, so if you're looking for that, that's something you can find here. Just like the original novel, there's still a lot of mystery and the plot is thick. Now, if I were to come to my personal preference, I would say the old novel is still way better. It was super refreshing, and straight to the point. Along with everything this novel has it wasn't generic. Very hard to put it into words, but the old novel was unique and a gem. I'm sure this novel is gonna be very good as well, so good luck.
The previous version was quite well written and since you said you steer clear of harem elements in this rewrite, it'll be an enjoyable read. Also, the fact it is still FrayXZina is going to be amazing. I just hope there's no redemption arc for Aslin and Luke.
I really really like the idea of making each one of the characters related to a unique plot throughout the novel, I can't wait to see how it will end
Good story and realistic Narrative, I really feel that MC's actions were exactly what I would have done if I were in his place. Also, I really like his personality Ruthless yet not evil. smart and don't search for trouble just to be a villain like what we used to see
Haha I orginally came here to cry for Fray to get an ending but have realized that this is still Frays story just different last name.🥳🙌
Hello, as the author, I'll award myself five stars because I believe I deserve it. The novel promises a fast-paced narrative, intricate language, unique character relationships, numerous mysteries, and various wars, starting with succession battle and ending with world wars between the humen and other races. The MC will not involve himself in the original plot, he will discreetly build hidden power, ultimately becoming the strongest on the continent. We're steering clear of harem elements, ensuring no dull characters or dialogues. If you're intrigued, welcome to our journey.
Thankfully your back and quick question will there still be little technology enhancements plz?
Promising since it's a rewrite of a good novel. Waiting for more chapters to have a definitive review.
What happened to the other story about the guy who chose intelligence over the other stats and was shunned ?
If you want a proper review this ain’t it but do trust that the stars be accurate
how weird! The person who attracted the monsters was Lissa, but the main character has a grudge against the monsters. Shouldn't he kill Lissa who started the war? And why are all the killers girls? Other than ... Mantasser? All people are women, no father, no uncle, no brother, none of them exist. There are only aunts, sisters and mothers. The main character does not kill any girl. In fact, the callousness of the main character that the author keeps mentioning is nothing but the author's own illusion. Men are like fodder, and women don't die even if they stab the main character. Although the number of female characters is more than male, the author is afraid that one of them will die, I am afraid that he will even kill the main character to save them. The author says that the main character does not want to leave the salvation of the world in the hands of someone who is busy building a harem, but what happens next? The main character himself is arrested during the construction of the harem. The difference between him and Luke is that Luke is honest about what he is looking for. While the main character deceives himself and looks for the harem. Or maybe he tells himself that if I can't have those women, Luke can't either, so he keeps them close.
Was this drop? Been enjoying this but haven’t seen anything for a while. Hope to read more in the near future.
i don't know why author writting this novel again with new plot when Mc have a same old pushover type this hole novel story based on pushover who shoulders the responsibility of main character what a waste of time only pushovers like this theme.. I hate the original and believe me core of story is same so you can skip this pushover to some of yours losers friends
70+ chapters and I can confidently say that this version is better than the 1st one: - Characters felt alive and vibrant. - Good action and great fight description. - Fray is undergoing consistent character development. - Consistent storytelling. Points of Improvement: - Updating frequency is on the slow side. On a good week only 2-3 chapters. - We still need to see better foreshadowing to add more mystery to the novel (Rin’s backstory is looking good, for example) Overall, Amazing work author, wish we could see more of Fray x Zina (this was missing too in the other novel).
The older version had a better development and writing. this version is at least 4-5 levels lower than the older one.
honestly, i see drop in quality in your new story. the way u write it as if the reader already read your old story. story facing is too fast. too many lost tidbits, n most importanly your character less conviction. you make adam personality like an exited teenagers.
overall im starting to Question if Aslan ever had any Agency or if she is simply fated to be with Luke in every universe and cant ever be with Faye or stay loyal with him even if Luke tortured and basically treats her like garbage?like seriouslyi wish we have atleast some alternate universe chapter where Aslan stayed loyal and basically rejected Luke and her fate as a heroine and truly become free thats all
Spoiler de révélation I'm giving this a 5 because I know the author is a talented writer. Although caution is needed as the author goes on hiatus occasionally for a very long time. So far, the story is pretty good. If I had read this before reading the original novel I think I would've been hooked. I love system novels, so if you're looking for that, that's something you can find here. Just like the original novel, there's still a lot of mystery and the plot is thick. Now, if I were to come to my personal preference, I would say the old novel is still way better. It was super refreshing, and straight to the point. Along with everything this novel has it wasn't generic. Very hard to put it into words, but the old novel was unique and a gem. I'm sure this novel is gonna be very good as well, so good luck.
The previous version was quite well written and since you said you steer clear of harem elements in this rewrite, it'll be an enjoyable read. Also, the fact it is still FrayXZina is going to be amazing. I just hope there's no redemption arc for Aslin and Luke.
I really really like the idea of making each one of the characters related to a unique plot throughout the novel, I can't wait to see how it will end
Good story and realistic Narrative, I really feel that MC's actions were exactly what I would have done if I were in his place. Also, I really like his personality Ruthless yet not evil. smart and don't search for trouble just to be a villain like what we used to see
Haha I orginally came here to cry for Fray to get an ending but have realized that this is still Frays story just different last name.🥳🙌
Hello, as the author, I'll award myself five stars because I believe I deserve it. The novel promises a fast-paced narrative, intricate language, unique character relationships, numerous mysteries, and various wars, starting with succession battle and ending with world wars between the humen and other races. The MC will not involve himself in the original plot, he will discreetly build hidden power, ultimately becoming the strongest on the continent. We're steering clear of harem elements, ensuring no dull characters or dialogues. If you're intrigued, welcome to our journey.
Thankfully your back and quick question will there still be little technology enhancements plz?
Promising since it's a rewrite of a good novel. Waiting for more chapters to have a definitive review.
What happened to the other story about the guy who chose intelligence over the other stats and was shunned ?
If you want a proper review this ain’t it but do trust that the stars be accurate
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