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Feels like more of a Shounen Fantasy with Adventurers. Slight Spoilers ahead. So I've read a bit more than 200 chapters now, which felt like going through 2 or 3 books, and I can honestly say it's enjoyable. If you chose this book based on the title like me, you know what you were getting into. Someone who doesn't hide their powers and probably gets benefits related to it. Well, if you thought like that, then you'd be correct. Shye, a not so shy little kid, gets a system from a transmigrator of all things. It's neat The Flashy Adventurer System. The more people are in awe of him, the more points he gets. I won't get into the specifics, but it's a nice system compared to the bazillion of system novels out there. If I had to list one negative that irks me, it would be that the MC is more of a shounen protagonist than someone who is an overpowered protagonist despite having that overpowered tag. I know it's complete subjective, but when your MC is struggling, fighting his peers only to win miraculously it gives me shounen vibes. Again, that's a personal preference. Don't let that bug you too much. It's still a good novel. Just be aware that the MC is a teenager who still has much to learn. He will make mistakes and act a bit stupid, but just remember he wasn't that educated compared to others, and hopefully, you'll be good. Score: 8.2 out of 10 Personal Score 8.3 out of 10
Can't believe this only has 14 Reviews! It deserves more! Btw, I read till ch 250 till now... All I have got is praise for this novel if you can exclude the rough beginning. Given the author is a newbie, they surprise us with the improvement in writing and the story! Except the somewhat stupid MC at the beginning and a bit of no-romance romance, everything is good!! It delivers what is promises! A flashy adventure! Faceslapping! Tons of faceslapping!!!!
Not going to lie, the name was a turn off for me, but I ended up giving it a try. The book has a good starting point, and it's not one that takes 100 chapters before you get drawn in or understand what is happening. The writing quality and grammar and spelling errors are among the best on this app, so the author cares about his work and not just about pushing out chapter after chapter. The story is already rolling before chapter 10, which was a huge plus for me. The world is slowly expanded from the mc pov so you get familiarized with it as the mc is while growing up so everything feels more organic and you don't feel a headache from pure info dump like in other stories. The system actually makes sense in how it works. The way it was created is a unique one in my opinion also which is nice. I'm over 700 chapters in currently btw. Yes, there are "young masters" but it doesn't feel too forced imo and actually feels like a normal thing (in my personal experience🤷♂️). This is not a harem, but has a single love interest. I suppose it wouldn't feel out of place for a second to happen in the future, but I doubt that is what the author will do based on the story so far. There are beasts with cores, skill books, potions, formations, death zones, familiars from another world, heroes become heroes by being granted a hero crest to boost their stats only after rigorously proving themselves beforehand. The book has no mention, and has not shown, any person making potions or formations, which is kind of bugging me. I would rather the mc "raise" trustworthy people to create potions and formations for him. Why buy potions from a store when you can have an underling do it for you for very little cost🤦♂️🤷♂️. The mc still doesn't really know what his wisdom stat is for, like 99% of people, but knows there is benefit so he still ups it. All the mages have to chant🤦♂️. The world building is done really well. This isn't a kingdom building story, but it is definitely an army building one later on in the story. The system is like a computer that can't respond, so no asking questions, no snarky remarks from it. The mc could definitely make more use of his system to get stronger, but sadly, he is not becoming a genius by raising his stats🤦♂️ I won't say he is dumb, but he is definitely not among the smartest😅 (he only has 2 resistances at this point if that tells you anything🤦♂️) A type of TV exists in this world. I think that about does it for my review. Overall, I was very surprised to find out this was actually a good book after my initial distaste for the title(although aptly named🤷♂️)
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Here are some things you can improve on : - Every characters seems so simple minded. There is literally no diversity in character personalities. Everybody seems to suffer young master syndrome - You should add more lore to the story. Your descriptions are too simple. While the quality we readers may search is not necessarily here, reading this book is worth a while and it keeps us constantly interested. I am looking forward to this novel and the others you may write in the future.
So far I quite like this book. The story is fun and the system is interesting. However, these chapters quickly became riddled with lustful scenes even though the students are underage. The reasons for these inappropriate scenes are stupid and shallow. A few of these intereactions were almost pedophilic. If you are going to have scenes like this at least bother to make the characters 18, because this is just wrong, and I can’t justifiably let it go no matter how much I enjoy the book otherwise. Aside from this glaring issue, the book has been lovely so far. And although I could not reccomend this book because it goes against my moral values, I recognize that the author does have skill and seems to value the feedback of the readers. I will check back in for another update when I have read more.
Loving it so far could be a little better in chapter lengths and but more detailed in world building
it's good just one or two problems, like the rank,level,stats. in the tournament his opponent was strong , how strong? what is the difference between them?... what is level for? what will happen if he level up?? like it's really useless or not needed is the novel...and the stats, like when you add 1 stat to strength how much does it add?like how strong? and every 10 stats the price of stats will increase by 20, so what is the difference between 10,20,30,40 and so on stats number?... and lastly the name of the mc.. like shye? how do i read that? shey?she?gay? it's quite confusing to read if you're a fast reader sometimes you'll mistake it as "she"... that's all 5⭐👍✨✨🌟
I haven't read it yet and my review rating might change later, but this looks really interesting and so does your other story. I have put both in my library to check out later when I have time. I love MC's that show off instead of hiding their power.
simply review from me–op and decent mc. has many young master- syndrome. good story. not so good action scene's because author just wrote *PAH* *PAH* *PAH* and some movements thus make us bored. if author fixe this then i think it will make this novel improve a lot.
This here is your tenth review. Means your story finally has a rating- in my eyes, that's a cause for celebration! No matter how small the step, a step is a step! -That guy who's been here from the beginning
Very enjoyable. There are only two things that I think could be better first the chapters are too short and second the world building could be better but the rest is really good 9,2/10.
I like this story, the system's backstory is a bit shaky but its still believable, and the system itself is very interesting. The world building needs a bit of improvement though.
I am amaze how your story was build, the characters and well developed.
Love the novel so far, as every thing looks good whether the story or the character. Waiting for more chapters ,keep it up.
Hello, I am hoping to create a platform for authors and would love for you to join. There is a 70% compensation for authors from all revenue and a contest at my webpage(My username), along with a discord at the bottom of the webpage. I hope to see you there!
8 chapters in, I genuinely enjoy the story. There are no mistakes in writing, so there was nothing what would disturb me while I was trying to focus on the story. It’s really good and I took a liking in Shye, she is a well written character. Recomend 10/10!
This book is great! Shye is a great character- and his backstory is awesome! Everything is pretty good, but there are some spots where the punctuation isn't the greatest, but a good book overall! : D
What a good concept :) I've read a few system novels and this one got all of the things I want! Good job author! keep going! [img=recommend]
Hello! Author here supporting my work with a 5-star rating XD This is my second novel and I've learned a lot from writing my first one. I've applied all of my learnings in this one and I'm confident that this work will definitely be worth your time! The story is great and will only improve as time goes by. I've got some crazy things planned for this novel so if this work of mine is right up your alley, please give it a try! Thank you in advance <3
Feels like more of a Shounen Fantasy with Adventurers. Slight Spoilers ahead. So I've read a bit more than 200 chapters now, which felt like going through 2 or 3 books, and I can honestly say it's enjoyable. If you chose this book based on the title like me, you know what you were getting into. Someone who doesn't hide their powers and probably gets benefits related to it. Well, if you thought like that, then you'd be correct. Shye, a not so shy little kid, gets a system from a transmigrator of all things. It's neat The Flashy Adventurer System. The more people are in awe of him, the more points he gets. I won't get into the specifics, but it's a nice system compared to the bazillion of system novels out there. If I had to list one negative that irks me, it would be that the MC is more of a shounen protagonist than someone who is an overpowered protagonist despite having that overpowered tag. I know it's complete subjective, but when your MC is struggling, fighting his peers only to win miraculously it gives me shounen vibes. Again, that's a personal preference. Don't let that bug you too much. It's still a good novel. Just be aware that the MC is a teenager who still has much to learn. He will make mistakes and act a bit stupid, but just remember he wasn't that educated compared to others, and hopefully, you'll be good. Score: 8.2 out of 10 Personal Score 8.3 out of 10
Can't believe this only has 14 Reviews! It deserves more! Btw, I read till ch 250 till now... All I have got is praise for this novel if you can exclude the rough beginning. Given the author is a newbie, they surprise us with the improvement in writing and the story! Except the somewhat stupid MC at the beginning and a bit of no-romance romance, everything is good!! It delivers what is promises! A flashy adventure! Faceslapping! Tons of faceslapping!!!!
Not going to lie, the name was a turn off for me, but I ended up giving it a try. The book has a good starting point, and it's not one that takes 100 chapters before you get drawn in or understand what is happening. The writing quality and grammar and spelling errors are among the best on this app, so the author cares about his work and not just about pushing out chapter after chapter. The story is already rolling before chapter 10, which was a huge plus for me. The world is slowly expanded from the mc pov so you get familiarized with it as the mc is while growing up so everything feels more organic and you don't feel a headache from pure info dump like in other stories. The system actually makes sense in how it works. The way it was created is a unique one in my opinion also which is nice. I'm over 700 chapters in currently btw. Yes, there are "young masters" but it doesn't feel too forced imo and actually feels like a normal thing (in my personal experience🤷♂️). This is not a harem, but has a single love interest. I suppose it wouldn't feel out of place for a second to happen in the future, but I doubt that is what the author will do based on the story so far. There are beasts with cores, skill books, potions, formations, death zones, familiars from another world, heroes become heroes by being granted a hero crest to boost their stats only after rigorously proving themselves beforehand. The book has no mention, and has not shown, any person making potions or formations, which is kind of bugging me. I would rather the mc "raise" trustworthy people to create potions and formations for him. Why buy potions from a store when you can have an underling do it for you for very little cost🤦♂️🤷♂️. The mc still doesn't really know what his wisdom stat is for, like 99% of people, but knows there is benefit so he still ups it. All the mages have to chant🤦♂️. The world building is done really well. This isn't a kingdom building story, but it is definitely an army building one later on in the story. The system is like a computer that can't respond, so no asking questions, no snarky remarks from it. The mc could definitely make more use of his system to get stronger, but sadly, he is not becoming a genius by raising his stats🤦♂️ I won't say he is dumb, but he is definitely not among the smartest😅 (he only has 2 resistances at this point if that tells you anything🤦♂️) A type of TV exists in this world. I think that about does it for my review. Overall, I was very surprised to find out this was actually a good book after my initial distaste for the title(although aptly named🤷♂️)
Spoiler de révélation Here are some things you can improve on : - Every characters seems so simple minded. There is literally no diversity in character personalities. Everybody seems to suffer young master syndrome - You should add more lore to the story. Your descriptions are too simple. While the quality we readers may search is not necessarily here, reading this book is worth a while and it keeps us constantly interested. I am looking forward to this novel and the others you may write in the future.
So far I quite like this book. The story is fun and the system is interesting. However, these chapters quickly became riddled with lustful scenes even though the students are underage. The reasons for these inappropriate scenes are stupid and shallow. A few of these intereactions were almost pedophilic. If you are going to have scenes like this at least bother to make the characters 18, because this is just wrong, and I can’t justifiably let it go no matter how much I enjoy the book otherwise. Aside from this glaring issue, the book has been lovely so far. And although I could not reccomend this book because it goes against my moral values, I recognize that the author does have skill and seems to value the feedback of the readers. I will check back in for another update when I have read more.
Loving it so far could be a little better in chapter lengths and but more detailed in world building
it's good just one or two problems, like the rank,level,stats. in the tournament his opponent was strong , how strong? what is the difference between them?... what is level for? what will happen if he level up?? like it's really useless or not needed is the novel...and the stats, like when you add 1 stat to strength how much does it add?like how strong? and every 10 stats the price of stats will increase by 20, so what is the difference between 10,20,30,40 and so on stats number?... and lastly the name of the mc.. like shye? how do i read that? shey?she?gay? it's quite confusing to read if you're a fast reader sometimes you'll mistake it as "she"... that's all 5⭐👍✨✨🌟
I haven't read it yet and my review rating might change later, but this looks really interesting and so does your other story. I have put both in my library to check out later when I have time. I love MC's that show off instead of hiding their power.
simply review from me–op and decent mc. has many young master- syndrome. good story. not so good action scene's because author just wrote *PAH* *PAH* *PAH* and some movements thus make us bored. if author fixe this then i think it will make this novel improve a lot.
This here is your tenth review. Means your story finally has a rating- in my eyes, that's a cause for celebration! No matter how small the step, a step is a step! -That guy who's been here from the beginning
Very enjoyable. There are only two things that I think could be better first the chapters are too short and second the world building could be better but the rest is really good 9,2/10.
I like this story, the system's backstory is a bit shaky but its still believable, and the system itself is very interesting. The world building needs a bit of improvement though.
I am amaze how your story was build, the characters and well developed.
Love the novel so far, as every thing looks good whether the story or the character. Waiting for more chapters ,keep it up.
Hello, I am hoping to create a platform for authors and would love for you to join. There is a 70% compensation for authors from all revenue and a contest at my webpage(My username), along with a discord at the bottom of the webpage. I hope to see you there!
8 chapters in, I genuinely enjoy the story. There are no mistakes in writing, so there was nothing what would disturb me while I was trying to focus on the story. It’s really good and I took a liking in Shye, she is a well written character. Recomend 10/10!
This book is great! Shye is a great character- and his backstory is awesome! Everything is pretty good, but there are some spots where the punctuation isn't the greatest, but a good book overall! : D
What a good concept :) I've read a few system novels and this one got all of the things I want! Good job author! keep going! [img=recommend]
Hello! Author here supporting my work with a 5-star rating XD This is my second novel and I've learned a lot from writing my first one. I've applied all of my learnings in this one and I'm confident that this work will definitely be worth your time! The story is great and will only improve as time goes by. I've got some crazy things planned for this novel so if this work of mine is right up your alley, please give it a try! Thank you in advance <3