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The thing that still bothers me is the mc's interaction with Xavier, dude didnt check mc's mind and asking questions, it also wasnt shown whether he knows about mc past life or the system or not. Its abit annoying, cause Im big on consistency and I cant immerse my self if things like this happen, i dont even mind the nerf of the template system cus at some point he will still be op.
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It's a nice chill read with entertaining characters that you usually wouldn't see in a template system story
Hmm it’s looking pretty good so far though I would suggest to keep the word count chapters low or just that one cuz it’ll ruin the flow
HALF of everything in this story is just infodump of useless information. Why do you need to waste your and others time by giving detailed information about thing that you don't even use in the story? Considering there are other reviews with info about you making chapters to just increase word count - answer is obvious.
The thing that still bothers me is the mc's interaction with Xavier, dude didnt check mc's mind and asking questions, it also wasnt shown whether he knows about mc past life or the system or not. Its abit annoying, cause Im big on consistency and I cant immerse my self if things like this happen, i dont even mind the nerf of the template system cus at some point he will still be op.
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It's a nice chill read with entertaining characters that you usually wouldn't see in a template system story
Hmm it’s looking pretty good so far though I would suggest to keep the word count chapters low or just that one cuz it’ll ruin the flow
HALF of everything in this story is just infodump of useless information. Why do you need to waste your and others time by giving detailed information about thing that you don't even use in the story? Considering there are other reviews with info about you making chapters to just increase word count - answer is obvious.