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Very cool 😎😎😎 Good story))) Great job, keep up the good work and good luck to you))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))
One of the best fanfics about Fate. The author has done a good job of gathering and using information, although there are some problems with the main character. Maybe I can't understand him as a reader, but it's really annoying when he cries for no "good reason". You did a great job with the world, but not with the main character....
yo guys could you please answer who is the person at the fanfics cover picture, im not very well versed in this work so i probably wont find her even through search. oh and thanks in advance by the way
After finishing fourth arc(or is it three? eh i consider that one long enough to be an arc) all i can say is that good start but thats it. Uses the same idea as a reward 3 times, which by the way is nothing. Mc is a hypocrite too. Story doesn't go anywhere at least from what we see. Spoiler from now on. Like lots of things happen yes but in the end there is nothing. He gets strong but why? Bc he will face bigger enemies? than who is this enemy. How does some things work like his old self leaving a note to his current self. There are many answer i can think but cmon man 69 chapters and nothing. Every important reward was meaningless moon cell memorices that tell nothing. Nero start was really cool. Drama was good, romance was good and then jack the ripper was also good. He suddenly wanted to do have s*x with his wives enemy suddenly that was weird but ok its going good. Tomamo arc was just wastefull in my opinion. Too focused on drama that was weird. Its ending was going really great tho, i really liked his desperation but then arcuid happened and boom suddenly he acts like nothing happened. I am not even gonna talk about scathacth. I liked how you gave lancer a family life but cmon i hated his interactions with scathacth, they felt so fake and forced.(btw i don't like her as a chrachter too so i may be a little biased. dont know, such a boring chrachter to me). I don't know bro it started as kinda serious than turned into waifu collection. Currenct arc is about sigurd so im interested how youre gonna turn it but im not sure if i will contuine to see the end of it. Anyways its writing quality is good and has great update rate. Mc sucks. Goes from boring to interesting to trash. World is... ok? I mean some places are great but some are just not explained. I did expect more from jack the ripper arc ngl, he mostly went to 2 places(btw that arc could have gone much better with him actually exploring, trying to find clues way longer than how fast it happened). I don't think you are a bad writer, it just went complety different from what i expected(especially after you saying it hardly counts as harem at the start. This is just blatantly harem). I think it could have gone way better with few changes like removing servant summoning, his way paying to upgrade, getting questionable power ups (and actually killing scathatch). Personally i hated how you handled Rin either. Rin has a crash, mc beds 3 people than kills his "child", comes back and marries her in shortest way possible. Not even half a chapter if im not wrong btw. Anyways thats it. I'm sure this is not even a good review just wanted to say these things that bothered me.
Can’t say I like the Mc and even as he grows as a person you do some pretty mesh up stuff and give him to much Emotional trauma in almost every arc can’t enjoy something that you keep on breaking and try fixing and the system and anomaly’s are just getting lame(in my opinion) even thou they add a slight twist to the story it makes it predictable as well we all know a extra big bad or Gaia just meshing with the Mc more and break him or whatever P.s. I’ll give a better and flesh out review after reading over the story with more chapters
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A main character who will never be happy, full of drama...After getting a bad ending in each different world, it becomes predictable what will happen in the next chapters.When you think about it, all the children he had died before they were born. Every story ends the same way...Anyway, hope you have a good day.
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Wonderful fic, the Nero arc was... Very good and sad so I hope you continue to deliver the goods 👍🏼
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This story, like any Fan Fic, is relatively normal for the protagonist to be a reincarnated person with knowledge of the world he is going to. The difference of this Fan Fic is different because it represents for me, the structure of thought that anyone in that position would have and how I carry that difficulty of being a selfish person for their own good or for that of another being unrelated to them, this is The reason why I loved this story and I only wish that the author continues doing this wonderful work. Thank you very much for reading.
"No hay fuerza en la carne, solo debilidad". "No hay constancia en la carne, solo decadencia". "No hay certeza en la carne sino en la muerte"
Hopefully this story won't go hiatus since this fanfiction is the best for fate series in webnovel.
I like this and I wish had more POWER stones to gave you but I don’t so yeah I hope you don’t drop it (just how Vergil dropped Nero’s child support) And also ur Shcum
As it says in the synopsis this is not good for people who don't have great cringe resistance. Mc, I think the writing and story are cringy and I can't stand it. The author is also someone who doesn't know romance and maybe doesn't even understand it even though there are many TV shows or anime about romance. Sorry I just hate your Mc
One of the best Fate fanfics I've ever read, please author don't abandon it It's a shame it only has 10 chapters but anyway it's very good the protagonist is incredibly funny which brings greater charm to the story
Comecei a rir bastante com as partes cômicas. Interessante a mudança no cânone da história, espero que os próximos capítulos sejam legais, tem muito potencial
I see a lot of potential in this story, I'm already dying laughing and it only has 3 chapters. I just hope the author doesn't abandon this story.
is this s story about a guy who wish VN doesn't exist and straight up to gacha. ok I will bite
Very cool 😎😎😎 Good story))) Great job, keep up the good work and good luck to you))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))
One of the best fanfics about Fate. The author has done a good job of gathering and using information, although there are some problems with the main character. Maybe I can't understand him as a reader, but it's really annoying when he cries for no "good reason". You did a great job with the world, but not with the main character....
yo guys could you please answer who is the person at the fanfics cover picture, im not very well versed in this work so i probably wont find her even through search. oh and thanks in advance by the way
After finishing fourth arc(or is it three? eh i consider that one long enough to be an arc) all i can say is that good start but thats it. Uses the same idea as a reward 3 times, which by the way is nothing. Mc is a hypocrite too. Story doesn't go anywhere at least from what we see. Spoiler from now on. Like lots of things happen yes but in the end there is nothing. He gets strong but why? Bc he will face bigger enemies? than who is this enemy. How does some things work like his old self leaving a note to his current self. There are many answer i can think but cmon man 69 chapters and nothing. Every important reward was meaningless moon cell memorices that tell nothing. Nero start was really cool. Drama was good, romance was good and then jack the ripper was also good. He suddenly wanted to do have s*x with his wives enemy suddenly that was weird but ok its going good. Tomamo arc was just wastefull in my opinion. Too focused on drama that was weird. Its ending was going really great tho, i really liked his desperation but then arcuid happened and boom suddenly he acts like nothing happened. I am not even gonna talk about scathacth. I liked how you gave lancer a family life but cmon i hated his interactions with scathacth, they felt so fake and forced.(btw i don't like her as a chrachter too so i may be a little biased. dont know, such a boring chrachter to me). I don't know bro it started as kinda serious than turned into waifu collection. Currenct arc is about sigurd so im interested how youre gonna turn it but im not sure if i will contuine to see the end of it. Anyways its writing quality is good and has great update rate. Mc sucks. Goes from boring to interesting to trash. World is... ok? I mean some places are great but some are just not explained. I did expect more from jack the ripper arc ngl, he mostly went to 2 places(btw that arc could have gone much better with him actually exploring, trying to find clues way longer than how fast it happened). I don't think you are a bad writer, it just went complety different from what i expected(especially after you saying it hardly counts as harem at the start. This is just blatantly harem). I think it could have gone way better with few changes like removing servant summoning, his way paying to upgrade, getting questionable power ups (and actually killing scathatch). Personally i hated how you handled Rin either. Rin has a crash, mc beds 3 people than kills his "child", comes back and marries her in shortest way possible. Not even half a chapter if im not wrong btw. Anyways thats it. I'm sure this is not even a good review just wanted to say these things that bothered me.
Can’t say I like the Mc and even as he grows as a person you do some pretty mesh up stuff and give him to much Emotional trauma in almost every arc can’t enjoy something that you keep on breaking and try fixing and the system and anomaly’s are just getting lame(in my opinion) even thou they add a slight twist to the story it makes it predictable as well we all know a extra big bad or Gaia just meshing with the Mc more and break him or whatever P.s. I’ll give a better and flesh out review after reading over the story with more chapters
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A main character who will never be happy, full of drama...After getting a bad ending in each different world, it becomes predictable what will happen in the next chapters.When you think about it, all the children he had died before they were born. Every story ends the same way...Anyway, hope you have a good day.
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Wonderful fic, the Nero arc was... Very good and sad so I hope you continue to deliver the goods 👍🏼
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This story, like any Fan Fic, is relatively normal for the protagonist to be a reincarnated person with knowledge of the world he is going to. The difference of this Fan Fic is different because it represents for me, the structure of thought that anyone in that position would have and how I carry that difficulty of being a selfish person for their own good or for that of another being unrelated to them, this is The reason why I loved this story and I only wish that the author continues doing this wonderful work. Thank you very much for reading.
"No hay fuerza en la carne, solo debilidad". "No hay constancia en la carne, solo decadencia". "No hay certeza en la carne sino en la muerte"
Hopefully this story won't go hiatus since this fanfiction is the best for fate series in webnovel.
I like this and I wish had more POWER stones to gave you but I don’t so yeah I hope you don’t drop it (just how Vergil dropped Nero’s child support) And also ur Shcum
As it says in the synopsis this is not good for people who don't have great cringe resistance. Mc, I think the writing and story are cringy and I can't stand it. The author is also someone who doesn't know romance and maybe doesn't even understand it even though there are many TV shows or anime about romance. Sorry I just hate your Mc
One of the best Fate fanfics I've ever read, please author don't abandon it It's a shame it only has 10 chapters but anyway it's very good the protagonist is incredibly funny which brings greater charm to the story
Comecei a rir bastante com as partes cômicas. Interessante a mudança no cânone da história, espero que os próximos capítulos sejam legais, tem muito potencial
I see a lot of potential in this story, I'm already dying laughing and it only has 3 chapters. I just hope the author doesn't abandon this story.
is this s story about a guy who wish VN doesn't exist and straight up to gacha. ok I will bite
amazing(uno de los mejores fan fics que lei)