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What an average story. But it's quite interesting for a one piece funfic, there are only a lot of plot holes in this story so it makes the story look ordinary.
It's somewhat finished now with the translator done with the mtl LOL. Either way, thank you for translating the mtl it would be unbearable to read the mtl entirely
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Started out interesting until it got repetitive and boring with every characters praising luffy’s moves like your usual chinese novel. Also, when I read Luffy saying “From now on I will undoubtedly rule the seas. I will defeat any one who stands by my path,” my jaw dropped befire I could drop this fanfic. Luffy who said this isn’t even a timeskip Luffy. It’s just outrageous
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I dont Get What the story is about? Is luffy mc? Who released the system? Was it the mc? I need to know something about the story if u wanna read it..
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Me encanta la forma en la que encajan las ediciones con la trama original. Las reacciones de los personajes encajan con sus personalidades, por lo que los comentarios no son mal sonantes. Me preguntó que ocurrirá más adelante con la historia.
Arigatou gozaimasu for the update. I wonder how they'll react if Luffy obtained Gear 5th? Am excited for more updates. I wonder if this WebNovel has any other characters React?
Thanks for the update; I do hope the next chapter will be much longer and want to read what rewards certain people will get I absolutely love how future Luffy will always find a way to stun everyone
A pretty good story/translation but I really wish the rules behind the voting were explained or just made sense because it seems to have no set rules.
Its decent. Its obviously a chinese translation. A lot of stuff that makes no sense. For example traveling between places takes almost no time for some reason. Also the broadcast just arbitrarily stops and starts for no reason. (shows a couple of fights in succession but then suddenly stops when Luffy travels for a day to rescue a crewmate.) TLDR: Decent chinese translation but turn of your brain when it comes to plot/logic.
Thank you for updating. I hope to read more chapters today for my birthday but one at a time is ok too I'm hoping that garp will akainu and Blackbeard before they touch three of his beloved grandsons (Sabo is included since the guy is Luffy's adopted older brother). I also hope will gain Gear 5 very early and that each and every Straw Hat members will gain not just strength of their futures selves but also knowledge
I like the story but the translation isn’t the best and the timeline is all sorts of screwed up they make month long journeys in like two hours and don’t address it they skip and bypass parts. You can tell it just either wasn’t thought out the best when initially written or a lot got lost in translation
Thank you for the update. Hopefully the next chapters will be fast as well I sure hope to read everyone's reactions to each of the Strawhat Crew fight against kaido and the tobbi roppo as well as Luffy's akuma no mi awakening
honestly, this fic is rather ridiculous. Luffy and his crew are pretty much teleporting around the world. I takes luffy under a day, in a tiny boat, to get from windmill to cocoyashi Island, and under a day to get from cocoyashi to syrup village. AND then 1 day to get from Baratie to Water 7 over the calm belt. It's magic I tell you. Also what about Coby, he'll just be a slave forever. captain morgan isn't met so the girl there was probably killed by his sons wolf since zoro wasn't mentioned to be tied up. Buggy just rampaging in Orange town without anybody there to stop him. drum island king will come back at some point and chopper and luffy won't be there to do anything. Garp, sengoku, the admirals, and all the shichibukai has all been in one room just talking during all this time, who know if they have even slept during all this time. also, Dragon can teleport as well, since he somehow got from the revolutionaries island to mock town in a few hours, it must be hereditary...
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I think the author watched a short You Tube video about One Piece and deemed himself an expert. Also, making people aware of betrayals has 0 consequence and characters forget things from one paragraph to the next. An example of this is the Screen shows Nami with the Straw Hats in the Grand Line, yet Arlong isn't even bothered. Maybe he's like "I'm sure that the girl I've enslaved for 10 years left peacefully with that crew capable of killing every singe one of my crewmates in one strike. No need to bother her now."
number10: Luffy vs Moria number 9: Luffy vs Enel number 8: Luffy vs Lucci number 7: Luffy vs Doflamingo number 6: Luffy vs Crocodile? number 5: Luffy vs Crocodile? number 4: Luffy vs katakuri? number 3: Paramount war number 2: number 1: luffy vs Kaido I don't know what Luffy vs Crocodile must be either 5 or 6, I'm sure Luffy vs kaido is 1, Katakuri is better than Crocodile but not better than marineford, feel free to put your own ideas
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It's a great and interesting One Piece fanfiction!! I like it!!! 😍😍 It have a great and interesting storyline/plot, but the translate/english is quite bad (I still understand what it means).. I like that it show Luffy fight, but doesn't that make it a bit different with original story.. Like Zoro come to Luffy in Dawn island (what happen to Coby, Shell Town, etc).. And then Luffy, Zoro, and Nami go to Syrup Village for Ussop (what about Orange Town and Buggy).. I think there few miss about story.. Like Nami hometown is Cocoyashi Village not Orange Town,, it was just Nami who go to God land in Skypea (She go there alone with waver while everyone meet Conis and Pagaya), etc.. But overall it's an interesting and quite good story.. I love it 😍😍 Keep up the good work author san 😁👍👍
This story has nothing that can be salvaged apart from the translation, yet its plot is terrible. and ridiculous.................................
Para quem gosta de FanFiction de reação , essa e muito boa. Praticamente é um reação das maiores lutas dos mugiwaras. To gostando bastante, a reação ta sendo bem fiel até. E a ideia do quiz foi muito boa
I like this story of how the character of one piece reacting to luff's fight or journey this is a very interesting story keep up the good work 👍
good novel I hope you will continue it and not stop writing this novel............................................................................................
What an average story. But it's quite interesting for a one piece funfic, there are only a lot of plot holes in this story so it makes the story look ordinary.
It's somewhat finished now with the translator done with the mtl LOL. Either way, thank you for translating the mtl it would be unbearable to read the mtl entirely
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Started out interesting until it got repetitive and boring with every characters praising luffy’s moves like your usual chinese novel. Also, when I read Luffy saying “From now on I will undoubtedly rule the seas. I will defeat any one who stands by my path,” my jaw dropped befire I could drop this fanfic. Luffy who said this isn’t even a timeskip Luffy. It’s just outrageous
Spoiler de révélation I dont Get What the story is about? Is luffy mc? Who released the system? Was it the mc? I need to know something about the story if u wanna read it..
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Me encanta la forma en la que encajan las ediciones con la trama original. Las reacciones de los personajes encajan con sus personalidades, por lo que los comentarios no son mal sonantes. Me preguntó que ocurrirá más adelante con la historia.
Arigatou gozaimasu for the update. I wonder how they'll react if Luffy obtained Gear 5th? Am excited for more updates. I wonder if this WebNovel has any other characters React?
Thanks for the update; I do hope the next chapter will be much longer and want to read what rewards certain people will get I absolutely love how future Luffy will always find a way to stun everyone
A pretty good story/translation but I really wish the rules behind the voting were explained or just made sense because it seems to have no set rules.
Its decent. Its obviously a chinese translation. A lot of stuff that makes no sense. For example traveling between places takes almost no time for some reason. Also the broadcast just arbitrarily stops and starts for no reason. (shows a couple of fights in succession but then suddenly stops when Luffy travels for a day to rescue a crewmate.) TLDR: Decent chinese translation but turn of your brain when it comes to plot/logic.
Thank you for updating. I hope to read more chapters today for my birthday but one at a time is ok too I'm hoping that garp will akainu and Blackbeard before they touch three of his beloved grandsons (Sabo is included since the guy is Luffy's adopted older brother). I also hope will gain Gear 5 very early and that each and every Straw Hat members will gain not just strength of their futures selves but also knowledge
I like the story but the translation isn’t the best and the timeline is all sorts of screwed up they make month long journeys in like two hours and don’t address it they skip and bypass parts. You can tell it just either wasn’t thought out the best when initially written or a lot got lost in translation
Thank you for the update. Hopefully the next chapters will be fast as well I sure hope to read everyone's reactions to each of the Strawhat Crew fight against kaido and the tobbi roppo as well as Luffy's akuma no mi awakening
honestly, this fic is rather ridiculous. Luffy and his crew are pretty much teleporting around the world. I takes luffy under a day, in a tiny boat, to get from windmill to cocoyashi Island, and under a day to get from cocoyashi to syrup village. AND then 1 day to get from Baratie to Water 7 over the calm belt. It's magic I tell you. Also what about Coby, he'll just be a slave forever. captain morgan isn't met so the girl there was probably killed by his sons wolf since zoro wasn't mentioned to be tied up. Buggy just rampaging in Orange town without anybody there to stop him. drum island king will come back at some point and chopper and luffy won't be there to do anything. Garp, sengoku, the admirals, and all the shichibukai has all been in one room just talking during all this time, who know if they have even slept during all this time. also, Dragon can teleport as well, since he somehow got from the revolutionaries island to mock town in a few hours, it must be hereditary...
Spoiler de révélation I think the author watched a short You Tube video about One Piece and deemed himself an expert. Also, making people aware of betrayals has 0 consequence and characters forget things from one paragraph to the next. An example of this is the Screen shows Nami with the Straw Hats in the Grand Line, yet Arlong isn't even bothered. Maybe he's like "I'm sure that the girl I've enslaved for 10 years left peacefully with that crew capable of killing every singe one of my crewmates in one strike. No need to bother her now."
number10: Luffy vs Moria number 9: Luffy vs Enel number 8: Luffy vs Lucci number 7: Luffy vs Doflamingo number 6: Luffy vs Crocodile? number 5: Luffy vs Crocodile? number 4: Luffy vs katakuri? number 3: Paramount war number 2: number 1: luffy vs Kaido I don't know what Luffy vs Crocodile must be either 5 or 6, I'm sure Luffy vs kaido is 1, Katakuri is better than Crocodile but not better than marineford, feel free to put your own ideas
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It's a great and interesting One Piece fanfiction!! I like it!!! 😍😍 It have a great and interesting storyline/plot, but the translate/english is quite bad (I still understand what it means).. I like that it show Luffy fight, but doesn't that make it a bit different with original story.. Like Zoro come to Luffy in Dawn island (what happen to Coby, Shell Town, etc).. And then Luffy, Zoro, and Nami go to Syrup Village for Ussop (what about Orange Town and Buggy).. I think there few miss about story.. Like Nami hometown is Cocoyashi Village not Orange Town,, it was just Nami who go to God land in Skypea (She go there alone with waver while everyone meet Conis and Pagaya), etc.. But overall it's an interesting and quite good story.. I love it 😍😍 Keep up the good work author san 😁👍👍
This story has nothing that can be salvaged apart from the translation, yet its plot is terrible. and ridiculous.................................
Para quem gosta de FanFiction de reação , essa e muito boa. Praticamente é um reação das maiores lutas dos mugiwaras. To gostando bastante, a reação ta sendo bem fiel até. E a ideia do quiz foi muito boa
I like this story of how the character of one piece reacting to luff's fight or journey this is a very interesting story keep up the good work 👍
good novel I hope you will continue it and not stop writing this novel............................................................................................
It was good while it lasted... Thanks for the translation boss.