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me encanto mucho este fanfics espesialmente por que no tiene esa estupida moralida de la hedad hosea si la chica que te gusta ve por eya incluso si es menor que tu detodas manera es un fanfisc no una gia para segir en la vida real de todas manera los fis se basan en mundos fitisio donde es legal casarse con menores de heda ejenplo el mundo de naruto es legal carse con menores de 12 años o meno,ho el mundo de to lo ru que es la mis ma baina,el mundo de rosaro+vanpiro,o High School DxD que sige la misma norma que naruto y to lo ru yncluso abeses mas bajo que 12 año asi que por que los demas se tienen que quejar por la jodida heda y tambien que les pasa a las personas con la esajerasion de los pechos esta bien que las protagonistas femenina tenga pecho pero ponerselo de un tamaño esagerado es estupido despues de todo es mejor tener pechos normales que tener bolas de demolion como pechos.
As someone who loves DxD i loved this, not perfect but still amazing. Would definitely recommend that you read it.
That is the best story I have ever read based on DXD. The main hero is polite and gentle with women, which is attracting me a little bit because I hate characters who don't like to cherish girls. And, his system is good and not so overpowered, but his skill "Pheromone" is kinda powerful, but I know that in DXD, it would be hard to get to a girl's hearts. So, Kazuya's skill is kinda cool because he uses it in the best way that it could be. My big respect to an author for creating fanfic like this! [img=Smug]
writing quality 3 stars, the rest 1. I can't say that I enjoyed half of the novel, so I was thinking about leaving more stars for the author, but I can't. my dude is good with his wifes, I don't have a problem with that. my problem is with his character development and his stupidity. I get that he gets polite with women, but, man, I don't know exactly how to say it, so here's how it is: - Mc screams his skills like a 3rd villain - Mc talks like a 3rd villain unnecessarily, like he's gonna say that he'll beat X, that he'll do X, bla, bla - Mc doesn't kill enemies like Naruto, where he literally needs his women form (he got a race like that one from to love ru) and still can't eliminate them cus idk, ask the author. - and cream of the crop: Mc weak af with his mentality (even though he's not a human anymore and I can't believe he isn't drown in his instinct of a superior lifeform like the infinite dragon) and he's still weak. (the last string: Yuri + he's abusing yami, his wife, doing it with a foking slave for 5+ chapters already, even though she's a girl. she's a criminal, ffs)
why not do it interestingly it shouldn't have been there Yuri but there's a reason not to do it, it's interesting that he's caught up with Reina and that it hurt him, he shouldn't be there, he won't be there, he's going to kill her, or he won't be with the team, he had a broken heart, I have nothing to say about the story, it's good, but in the end, not so with you he thought he could give it a drama, I thought about it or not, but here's your story
Tengo que darle una reseña buena a esta historia interesante muy buen trabajo ❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️
Tis my first review The romance is cringe and fast paced..... But the best part is the guts.....the author gives the extremely rare dxd yokai oyakodon....and more...if u have cringe immunity read this .....hats off author
this awesome!!! peak degenerate novel!!! add Testament New devil girls in this
I made it to chapter 49, and well, some annoyances. My first problem with the story is how repetitive the intimate scenes with the harem members are. All of the girls, for the most part, lose their individuality during the intimate scenes and they all turn into a generic begging dog. All of the "first time" chapters for the girls are almost exactly the same in routine, giving the feeling that the protagonist is just going through the motions. This is the same feeling that I am getting from most of the intimate scenes recently. There needs to be uniqueness in conversation, dirty-talk, and the "order of operation". Make the girls feel like a they aren't all clones of a generic soulless doll. Too much intimacy. Surprisingly this is a thing. With the repetitive writing throughout the first 49 chapters, I am getting bored of reading the same thing constantly. This would not be such an issue if at the same time the women in the harem showed individual characteristics, however it seems like they all act the exact same in these scenes, say similar things, and have a lack of IQ. It can't be fun to write about our MC banging a blowup doll with a voice-box that only has 10 lines it says. Cringe. A lot of things the MC says is rough. Some is alright. Some may be necessary to get the point across about the MC's character, but to the point where he says some variations of "I love you too, I loved you since i first saw you," to every heroine? That is the tip of the cringe-iceberg. If the MC wasn't a wannabe shonen protagonist screaming, "take it all inside you" five times a chapter like he just had a plot-armor power-up, i would be more eager to read. -Return the heroines IQ (can still 'love' mc even if they have a brain) -Slow down on the cringe (no tips just do it) -Spice it up (I don't want to read the protagonist and the heroine using the same positions in the same order moaning the same words at each-other each intimate scene) -If you don't spice it up, cut down on the 18+ (so spice it up) {This is an 18+ work. Give the heroines and mc a real relationship and individuality. They shouldn't all act like the same screaming dog in bed.}
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I love this story the characters are good and has an interesting storyline. the romance is really good and fresh. also like the fact the author asks questions and suggestions from viewers shows they really care about us and our entertainment. would rate 5 million stars if possible
While this is not originally written in English there are several translation errors through the story but they are relatively obvious and easy to understand. Why I scored it so low was due to the fact that MC has knowledge he shouldn't and to really enjoy it you have to turn off your brain.
love the story so far I just wanted to know if the mc will be going back to the dxd world anytime soon
Well its that bad you just need to turn you brain off when reading. Its okay if you have time to waste, tho the grammar and the use of pronouns is wrong sometimes, but its still readable Was going to complain to it has too much 18+ chapters but just by the title alone, story is waste Eventho he said that he hate mind control skills. And that his phromone and stuff are just suggestion and just make him like-able but still looks like a mind control just a mild one and not direct. And all the heroines are a little force in relationship. Who would accept accept having sx with someone you just met its so pure bs. Would have believed it if like a week passed but no. In the get go when they meet MC they already spread their legs to him
It's really good. Now I am waiting for mc to return to dxd world. I hope he will fight some strong villain. And I am also waiting to see dxd girls meets to love ru girls.
Grammar is pretty mid (I'm on 13 chapter so maybe later is better), pretty fast put i like that, i don't want write more so I will just summary, pretty solid fanfic and go read it
I don't mind if you give a 3 star review or even 2 or 1 but please don't say things like "I don't like because is bad", no, i want a reason, please refrain from doing that, thanks. I'm saying this because there are people that says that my fic is bad without give me a reason, i'm warning you, i'll remove the review if you do that so think about a reason before give me a review, like i said i don't mind if you give me a 1 star review if you give me a reason, thanks for reading this fic.
boy I have read many fanfics but this one is one of the best. I hope u won't drop it like many but be one of the few who shows a good ending . And personal request please update more chap a day
We know why we are here, since I am going to enjoy reading I will at least give 5 stars in gratitude. .....................................................................................................................................................................................................................
I've only read a few chapters and so far its ok, the update is pretty consistent, the plot(?) is kind of mid ngl, and the grammar is really bad, its still readable, so thats good.👍
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I was actually liking this fanfic, but in the part where Irina and Xenovia appear I stopped reading, because to me it doesn't make sense that MC still wants to have relationships with people who literally want to kill, for me it was a reason to stop reading read, for people who read this review I ask you to read the fanfic and see if it is to your liking. 👍
It's a bit rough around the edges but great for a wish-fulfillment fanfic. (This type of fanfic is one of my favorites, so 👍) ..................
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the Author is like those Chinese hypocrite author, he says he doesn't like mind control or hypnosis but drugging is fine very hypocrite indeed. there's no difference betweeen these the author should cut back on reading chinese hypocrisy novel/fanfic that he can't differentiate what hypocrisy is
me encanto mucho este fanfics espesialmente por que no tiene esa estupida moralida de la hedad hosea si la chica que te gusta ve por eya incluso si es menor que tu detodas manera es un fanfisc no una gia para segir en la vida real de todas manera los fis se basan en mundos fitisio donde es legal casarse con menores de heda ejenplo el mundo de naruto es legal carse con menores de 12 años o meno,ho el mundo de to lo ru que es la mis ma baina,el mundo de rosaro+vanpiro,o High School DxD que sige la misma norma que naruto y to lo ru yncluso abeses mas bajo que 12 año asi que por que los demas se tienen que quejar por la jodida heda y tambien que les pasa a las personas con la esajerasion de los pechos esta bien que las protagonistas femenina tenga pecho pero ponerselo de un tamaño esagerado es estupido despues de todo es mejor tener pechos normales que tener bolas de demolion como pechos.
As someone who loves DxD i loved this, not perfect but still amazing. Would definitely recommend that you read it.
That is the best story I have ever read based on DXD. The main hero is polite and gentle with women, which is attracting me a little bit because I hate characters who don't like to cherish girls. And, his system is good and not so overpowered, but his skill "Pheromone" is kinda powerful, but I know that in DXD, it would be hard to get to a girl's hearts. So, Kazuya's skill is kinda cool because he uses it in the best way that it could be. My big respect to an author for creating fanfic like this! [img=Smug]
writing quality 3 stars, the rest 1. I can't say that I enjoyed half of the novel, so I was thinking about leaving more stars for the author, but I can't. my dude is good with his wifes, I don't have a problem with that. my problem is with his character development and his stupidity. I get that he gets polite with women, but, man, I don't know exactly how to say it, so here's how it is: - Mc screams his skills like a 3rd villain - Mc talks like a 3rd villain unnecessarily, like he's gonna say that he'll beat X, that he'll do X, bla, bla - Mc doesn't kill enemies like Naruto, where he literally needs his women form (he got a race like that one from to love ru) and still can't eliminate them cus idk, ask the author. - and cream of the crop: Mc weak af with his mentality (even though he's not a human anymore and I can't believe he isn't drown in his instinct of a superior lifeform like the infinite dragon) and he's still weak. (the last string: Yuri + he's abusing yami, his wife, doing it with a foking slave for 5+ chapters already, even though she's a girl. she's a criminal, ffs)
why not do it interestingly it shouldn't have been there Yuri but there's a reason not to do it, it's interesting that he's caught up with Reina and that it hurt him, he shouldn't be there, he won't be there, he's going to kill her, or he won't be with the team, he had a broken heart, I have nothing to say about the story, it's good, but in the end, not so with you he thought he could give it a drama, I thought about it or not, but here's your story
Tengo que darle una reseña buena a esta historia interesante muy buen trabajo ❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️
Tis my first review The romance is cringe and fast paced..... But the best part is the guts.....the author gives the extremely rare dxd yokai oyakodon....and more...if u have cringe immunity read this .....hats off author
this awesome!!! peak degenerate novel!!! add Testament New devil girls in this
I made it to chapter 49, and well, some annoyances. My first problem with the story is how repetitive the intimate scenes with the harem members are. All of the girls, for the most part, lose their individuality during the intimate scenes and they all turn into a generic begging dog. All of the "first time" chapters for the girls are almost exactly the same in routine, giving the feeling that the protagonist is just going through the motions. This is the same feeling that I am getting from most of the intimate scenes recently. There needs to be uniqueness in conversation, dirty-talk, and the "order of operation". Make the girls feel like a they aren't all clones of a generic soulless doll. Too much intimacy. Surprisingly this is a thing. With the repetitive writing throughout the first 49 chapters, I am getting bored of reading the same thing constantly. This would not be such an issue if at the same time the women in the harem showed individual characteristics, however it seems like they all act the exact same in these scenes, say similar things, and have a lack of IQ. It can't be fun to write about our MC banging a blowup doll with a voice-box that only has 10 lines it says. Cringe. A lot of things the MC says is rough. Some is alright. Some may be necessary to get the point across about the MC's character, but to the point where he says some variations of "I love you too, I loved you since i first saw you," to every heroine? That is the tip of the cringe-iceberg. If the MC wasn't a wannabe shonen protagonist screaming, "take it all inside you" five times a chapter like he just had a plot-armor power-up, i would be more eager to read. -Return the heroines IQ (can still 'love' mc even if they have a brain) -Slow down on the cringe (no tips just do it) -Spice it up (I don't want to read the protagonist and the heroine using the same positions in the same order moaning the same words at each-other each intimate scene) -If you don't spice it up, cut down on the 18+ (so spice it up) {This is an 18+ work. Give the heroines and mc a real relationship and individuality. They shouldn't all act like the same screaming dog in bed.}
Spoiler de révélation I love this story the characters are good and has an interesting storyline. the romance is really good and fresh. also like the fact the author asks questions and suggestions from viewers shows they really care about us and our entertainment. would rate 5 million stars if possible
While this is not originally written in English there are several translation errors through the story but they are relatively obvious and easy to understand. Why I scored it so low was due to the fact that MC has knowledge he shouldn't and to really enjoy it you have to turn off your brain.
love the story so far I just wanted to know if the mc will be going back to the dxd world anytime soon
Well its that bad you just need to turn you brain off when reading. Its okay if you have time to waste, tho the grammar and the use of pronouns is wrong sometimes, but its still readable Was going to complain to it has too much 18+ chapters but just by the title alone, story is waste Eventho he said that he hate mind control skills. And that his phromone and stuff are just suggestion and just make him like-able but still looks like a mind control just a mild one and not direct. And all the heroines are a little force in relationship. Who would accept accept having sx with someone you just met its so pure bs. Would have believed it if like a week passed but no. In the get go when they meet MC they already spread their legs to him
It's really good. Now I am waiting for mc to return to dxd world. I hope he will fight some strong villain. And I am also waiting to see dxd girls meets to love ru girls.
Grammar is pretty mid (I'm on 13 chapter so maybe later is better), pretty fast put i like that, i don't want write more so I will just summary, pretty solid fanfic and go read it
I don't mind if you give a 3 star review or even 2 or 1 but please don't say things like "I don't like because is bad", no, i want a reason, please refrain from doing that, thanks. I'm saying this because there are people that says that my fic is bad without give me a reason, i'm warning you, i'll remove the review if you do that so think about a reason before give me a review, like i said i don't mind if you give me a 1 star review if you give me a reason, thanks for reading this fic.
boy I have read many fanfics but this one is one of the best. I hope u won't drop it like many but be one of the few who shows a good ending . And personal request please update more chap a day
We know why we are here, since I am going to enjoy reading I will at least give 5 stars in gratitude. .....................................................................................................................................................................................................................
I've only read a few chapters and so far its ok, the update is pretty consistent, the plot(?) is kind of mid ngl, and the grammar is really bad, its still readable, so thats good.👍
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I was actually liking this fanfic, but in the part where Irina and Xenovia appear I stopped reading, because to me it doesn't make sense that MC still wants to have relationships with people who literally want to kill, for me it was a reason to stop reading read, for people who read this review I ask you to read the fanfic and see if it is to your liking. 👍
It's a bit rough around the edges but great for a wish-fulfillment fanfic. (This type of fanfic is one of my favorites, so 👍) ..................
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the Author is like those Chinese hypocrite author, he says he doesn't like mind control or hypnosis but drugging is fine very hypocrite indeed. there's no difference betweeen these the author should cut back on reading chinese hypocrisy novel/fanfic that he can't differentiate what hypocrisy is