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Tired of reading this novel, I wanted to give it a chance but I couldn't read more than 19 chapters. It seriously gives you a headache. If you want to read it, you better turn off your brain to be able to read it.
Честно говоря как первый фанфик пойдет но даже в самом начале есть столько ошибок насчёт истории, что даже продолжать не хочется. Буквально, какого черта Гриндевальд в Азкабане, а не в Нурменгарде? Почему его волшебное хранилище в косом переулке в Гринготсе Англий? Он же сам родом из Австрии и Болгарии. Почему в самом начале он не узнает свою фамилию, но в следующей строке он буквально гордиться ей? Честно, я хотел и дальше читать, но просто не смог заставить себя!
Spoiler de révélation
C'est une super fan fiction sur le monde de Harry Potter mais j'ai souvenir de l'avoir déjà lu ce livre avec beaucoup plus de chapitre sur mltnovel. Mais l'histoire est superbe j'adore l'intrigue soit avec le personnage principal, soit avec Green et Cassandre
I came for system yet can't see it shadow till ch 25 sorry but I am going to drop
so far, the book has a very well thought out development. it might start slow, but it is very engrossing and well written and really different than most of the hp fics
There are some minor mistakes in the translations and the chapters are super short. We basically get what if Harry Potter is a K-drama? It kinda feels like that, slow burn with a bunch of slice of life. The MC is naive and too optimistic. He wakes up being tortured, then a buncj of people killed and he still have this Rose-Colored Glasses, that kind of outlook is illogical after all that. It would've been better if Ch 1 was redacted.
It‘s a chinese translation allright! Not the worst translation but not great either. Awkward converations and chapters as a whole. I‘m honest i quit at the sorting ceremony. The idea of the story is intriguing but the chinese master vibe is everywhere. Not my cup of tea. Every chapter was torture and the name of the mc is stupid. All the other 5star reviews ar bots. This is no 5star story.
its literarily a carbon copy of Hogwarts: Toby and his young lady. Everything is literally the same! Same plot, same punchlines down to its grammar. The only difference is that the Mc here is the descendant while the mc of the other story is the "bodyguard" of Grindelwalds descendant (oh yeah, other mc has a better name lol.). Not sure which is the original but if you read any of the two books, you will just basically read the other one.
Said there's a System in the tags but there isn't. I'm not as interested as I was before in the fanfic anymore. ........................................................
The quality is very good, would read more if it updates the chapter very quickly 😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁
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As a fan of Cedric, I was really disappointed when watching him died on screen. This story though brings more life to him! I really love the interactions between Wentworth and Cedric, I ship them
You would find this twist of HPverse in more or less better in the sense of world building! This fanfic took place in a universe where Grindelwald have a descendant himself (our MC). Rather than having a smart or strong MC as far as I've read it, Wentworth would be much more into the type of MC that simply rolls with how the story folds before him. As I said above, the world building in this is probably one of the strongest point. While Wentworth is having a life of his own, the writer doesn't abandon what's happening outside of Hogwarts.
(3.8/5 stars) The writing is good without any spelling/grammar error. The story itself is mid...good as your first harry potter fanfic but if you've read a few already then you'll find mc naive, especially his fanboy attitue toward hogwarts and dumbledore. This is more like slice of life where mc is there to enjoy the dreamy world of magical Harry Potter he've read, instead of immersing himself in that world as real and planning accordingly. I'm not into dumbledore bashing but i do think he should be dealt with causion instead of thinking of him as magical grand fairy.
good stuff really enjoying the alliance theme, would personally like him to delve into elemental magic and put a twist on spells using popular anime moves like Hashiramas great forest emergence or aokijis ice age in the future
As another reviewer has pointed out its Hogwarts: I became the third dark lord, but if you go and read that its only MTL translated were this is properly edited, well its a lot better than the MTl version, I hope the editor releases this quickly as i like this fan fic just can't stand MTLs. As its a fan fic its not like we need to pay stones for it so people need to stop calling its plagiarism, there are plenty of Fanfics that are just edited MTLs, why complain if we have someone willing to edit it for us. Keep up the great work and added to my read list.
this is plagiarism the original book Hogwarts: I became the third dark lord It's already finished and you can look it up and read it, which is worth it.
The story feels kinda slow and easy overall as far as I've read it. It had lots of banters between Wentworth and his colleagues, which makes the story feels more light-hearted and easier to follow compared to other HPverse stories. The story focuses more on how Wentworth just want to focus on experiencing the wizarding world fully, while the adults around him have tons of expectation because he has Grindelwald's blood flowing in him. Would just post 2ch/day until it hits 15k wordcount and be back with 1ch/day, Thank you all!
overall it's quite a good novel but I am wondering why there's a system tag when there's clearly no such thing in this novel
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Tired of reading this novel, I wanted to give it a chance but I couldn't read more than 19 chapters. It seriously gives you a headache. If you want to read it, you better turn off your brain to be able to read it.
Честно говоря как первый фанфик пойдет но даже в самом начале есть столько ошибок насчёт истории, что даже продолжать не хочется. Буквально, какого черта Гриндевальд в Азкабане, а не в Нурменгарде? Почему его волшебное хранилище в косом переулке в Гринготсе Англий? Он же сам родом из Австрии и Болгарии. Почему в самом начале он не узнает свою фамилию, но в следующей строке он буквально гордиться ей? Честно, я хотел и дальше читать, но просто не смог заставить себя!
Spoiler de révélation C'est une super fan fiction sur le monde de Harry Potter mais j'ai souvenir de l'avoir déjà lu ce livre avec beaucoup plus de chapitre sur mltnovel. Mais l'histoire est superbe j'adore l'intrigue soit avec le personnage principal, soit avec Green et Cassandre
I came for system yet can't see it shadow till ch 25 sorry but I am going to drop
so far, the book has a very well thought out development. it might start slow, but it is very engrossing and well written and really different than most of the hp fics
There are some minor mistakes in the translations and the chapters are super short. We basically get what if Harry Potter is a K-drama? It kinda feels like that, slow burn with a bunch of slice of life. The MC is naive and too optimistic. He wakes up being tortured, then a buncj of people killed and he still have this Rose-Colored Glasses, that kind of outlook is illogical after all that. It would've been better if Ch 1 was redacted.
It‘s a chinese translation allright! Not the worst translation but not great either. Awkward converations and chapters as a whole. I‘m honest i quit at the sorting ceremony. The idea of the story is intriguing but the chinese master vibe is everywhere. Not my cup of tea. Every chapter was torture and the name of the mc is stupid. All the other 5star reviews ar bots. This is no 5star story.
its literarily a carbon copy of Hogwarts: Toby and his young lady. Everything is literally the same! Same plot, same punchlines down to its grammar. The only difference is that the Mc here is the descendant while the mc of the other story is the "bodyguard" of Grindelwalds descendant (oh yeah, other mc has a better name lol.). Not sure which is the original but if you read any of the two books, you will just basically read the other one.
Said there's a System in the tags but there isn't. I'm not as interested as I was before in the fanfic anymore. ........................................................
The quality is very good, would read more if it updates the chapter very quickly 😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁
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As a fan of Cedric, I was really disappointed when watching him died on screen. This story though brings more life to him! I really love the interactions between Wentworth and Cedric, I ship them
You would find this twist of HPverse in more or less better in the sense of world building! This fanfic took place in a universe where Grindelwald have a descendant himself (our MC). Rather than having a smart or strong MC as far as I've read it, Wentworth would be much more into the type of MC that simply rolls with how the story folds before him. As I said above, the world building in this is probably one of the strongest point. While Wentworth is having a life of his own, the writer doesn't abandon what's happening outside of Hogwarts.
(3.8/5 stars) The writing is good without any spelling/grammar error. The story itself is mid...good as your first harry potter fanfic but if you've read a few already then you'll find mc naive, especially his fanboy attitue toward hogwarts and dumbledore. This is more like slice of life where mc is there to enjoy the dreamy world of magical Harry Potter he've read, instead of immersing himself in that world as real and planning accordingly. I'm not into dumbledore bashing but i do think he should be dealt with causion instead of thinking of him as magical grand fairy.
good stuff really enjoying the alliance theme, would personally like him to delve into elemental magic and put a twist on spells using popular anime moves like Hashiramas great forest emergence or aokijis ice age in the future
As another reviewer has pointed out its Hogwarts: I became the third dark lord, but if you go and read that its only MTL translated were this is properly edited, well its a lot better than the MTl version, I hope the editor releases this quickly as i like this fan fic just can't stand MTLs. As its a fan fic its not like we need to pay stones for it so people need to stop calling its plagiarism, there are plenty of Fanfics that are just edited MTLs, why complain if we have someone willing to edit it for us. Keep up the great work and added to my read list.
this is plagiarism the original book Hogwarts: I became the third dark lord It's already finished and you can look it up and read it, which is worth it.
The story feels kinda slow and easy overall as far as I've read it. It had lots of banters between Wentworth and his colleagues, which makes the story feels more light-hearted and easier to follow compared to other HPverse stories. The story focuses more on how Wentworth just want to focus on experiencing the wizarding world fully, while the adults around him have tons of expectation because he has Grindelwald's blood flowing in him. Would just post 2ch/day until it hits 15k wordcount and be back with 1ch/day, Thank you all!
overall it's quite a good novel but I am wondering why there's a system tag when there's clearly no such thing in this novel