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Is this MTL? The writing is just too choppy, it's really not an enjoyable reading experience. The story is quite mid, it annoys me more really since everything jumps from one scene to another. The MC is unlikeable, he alienated his father coz' he basically made himself a huge 'kill me' target sign. There's just zero logical sense to whatever he's doing so far. The update speed is quite good.
Mc is soon to be the leader of Senju. He's wise, skillful, and very likeable.You can say that he's the combination of Hashirama, Tobirama and Mito. One of the best Naruto fanfic out there. It's not like the others, and it's quite refreshing if you ask me. Mc is not a reincarnator, nor a transmigrator. Read the story if you like to know more.
It's a great Naruto fanfiction!! I like it!!! 😁👍 It have a great plot/storyline and good english/translation.. I don't mind a harem.. But should you make all of the men bad, like Asuma, Minato, etc.. And please make Hinata still with Naruto.. I don't mind him too op.. But isn't it too much that he's created by combined Hashirama, Izuna, and all the tailed beast?? Love your story.. Keep up the good work author san 😁👍😍😍
I wasn't expecting much when I started reading but man was this good now I'm looking forward to how the story goes
Es muy bien la historia de fondo del clan por qué si tobirama podría a ser lo por el pueblo(clan ), también me gustaría un poco más de desarrollo en cuanto técnicas y pergaminos podría tener así como el dragón de agua madificado de tobirama, me gustó mucho sigue adelante que no te desaliente los comentarios de odio y críticas que quieres solo sexo en cada episodio desarrolla la historia a tu gusto
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Good fan fic, the storyline is quite good the twist and turn is also caught me off guard! I forgot about them for a sec! Hahahha i thought it’ll be random ppl! Nevertheless, i like his personality, author did a great job bring it out! Keep it up man! I think this a jewel in a rough!
Man, I saw the vote. I have no problem with you making Orochimaru a woman, but please do not make there any relationship that goes beyond friendship or a boss-employee relationship. This would be disgusting, and before anyone starts the topic, I have no racism against transgender people, just who Orochimaru is, he is a pervert. He changes his body every three years, experiments on children, and has a staring nature that gives you goosebumps even more than Hisoka.
the start is kind of weird, I recommend just skipping to when Tsunade comes back after read to like Chapter 15, after that, it's very good 5 stars
The best Naruto Fanfic I have ever read the charector development plot progression is absolutely Insane
not sure if this review will be deleted as I didn't see a single review under 4 stars which is normally a red flag because there's always someone that just rates a story poorly because they don't like it.please keep in mind this review was made as of chapter 10 so I'm unsure if things get better or worse.The concept of this fanfic is interesting to me as I haven't read many second chance fanfics for Naruto with an OC instead of pure SI. the Status Screen Jutsu seems to be implemented as a progress tracker and the MC is motivated to increase his skills / stats with training as he can see real results.Sadly the story really needs an editor or beta to go through it as there are multiple issues in every chapter. At the moment it looks like it was typed up on a phone and any review before it was posted was minor at best.The way things have been explained up to chapter 10 makes it seem as if this is a pretty big AU setting without the author explaining that it is due to how Chakra is treated. Training Chakra is being explained like how Qi or spiritual energy is gathered in cultivation stories where as far as I'm aware the only energy that can normally be absorbed from the environment is nature energy. not really a bad thing as it could just be explained as fluff for the setting for how ninjas get stronger but because it isn't explained it just seems wrong.there're also constant spelling issues or places where the wrong word has been used (eg. luxe instead of luxury). Occasionally there's words that are repeated that should have been caught with a quick pass.the MC also seems like a generic Gary Stu, this also isn't necessarily bad as some people including myself enjoy the occasional Mc like this. This fanfic is definitely still readable and it does have its interesting moments but it's hard for me to enjoy it because of how often I've been seeing issues. If the author is able to go through what he's already posted and fix the spelling and grammar issues as well as add a bit of extra context early on I'd probably increase my rating to 4 or 4.5 but at the moment I'm leaving it as 3.
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As usual I'm not good at reviews but I find everything in this fic to my liking. It has a lot of potential. I hope the author will finish it.
good Naruto fanfic ...........................................................................................................
espero que esto llegue a estar en el top.... saludos desde colombia XD .............................................................................................
Just all the available chapters and I have to say it is fire. The story line is great, little to no inconsistency, and the mc is likable. Would recommend people read this.
Até agora eu estou gostando bastante da fanfic, é a minha preferida atualmente, por favor continue com o bom trabalho.........................................
I'm honestly impressed by how unique and entertaining this ff is. hands down one of the best with enough originality and plots to keep you wanting more. writing style is the farthest away from boring. no filler, great development and again amazing original ideas that genuinely make you wonder what's gonna happen nexti hope the author keeps going and not drop this masterpiece.
definitivamente una lectura que disfruto, espero que el autor continúe con este trabajo de calidad y que logre clasificarse en el ranking .........................
As a fellow writer of a Senju novel, I love the difference between mine and yours. From mine as a novel that focuses on a Tsunade that could guide it, to your novel that focuses on a new main character that will reinvent what it means to be a Senju by his own power, I'm glad to see such a good novel from someone else. Let me know if you ever want to collaborate or if you need any aid.
Ggggncgkgkgkgkkffiittkjjfncncjfjfk the year and I am not sure if this is a bit more time to sleep in my opinion we can do it in the year of experience in a good day please is a r I will send the year and I have a
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Just like that, kill them all 👹👹👹 ......................................... .................................................................. ...............,..............
Hello, author. Can you fix the paragraph gap from chapter 25 to all the chapter after it. I love your story and always re-reading it. I will give a proper review after you fix it.
Is this MTL? The writing is just too choppy, it's really not an enjoyable reading experience. The story is quite mid, it annoys me more really since everything jumps from one scene to another. The MC is unlikeable, he alienated his father coz' he basically made himself a huge 'kill me' target sign. There's just zero logical sense to whatever he's doing so far. The update speed is quite good.
Mc is soon to be the leader of Senju. He's wise, skillful, and very likeable.You can say that he's the combination of Hashirama, Tobirama and Mito. One of the best Naruto fanfic out there. It's not like the others, and it's quite refreshing if you ask me. Mc is not a reincarnator, nor a transmigrator. Read the story if you like to know more.
It's a great Naruto fanfiction!! I like it!!! 😁👍 It have a great plot/storyline and good english/translation.. I don't mind a harem.. But should you make all of the men bad, like Asuma, Minato, etc.. And please make Hinata still with Naruto.. I don't mind him too op.. But isn't it too much that he's created by combined Hashirama, Izuna, and all the tailed beast?? Love your story.. Keep up the good work author san 😁👍😍😍
I wasn't expecting much when I started reading but man was this good now I'm looking forward to how the story goes
Es muy bien la historia de fondo del clan por qué si tobirama podría a ser lo por el pueblo(clan ), también me gustaría un poco más de desarrollo en cuanto técnicas y pergaminos podría tener así como el dragón de agua madificado de tobirama, me gustó mucho sigue adelante que no te desaliente los comentarios de odio y críticas que quieres solo sexo en cada episodio desarrolla la historia a tu gusto
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Good fan fic, the storyline is quite good the twist and turn is also caught me off guard! I forgot about them for a sec! Hahahha i thought it’ll be random ppl! Nevertheless, i like his personality, author did a great job bring it out! Keep it up man! I think this a jewel in a rough!
Man, I saw the vote. I have no problem with you making Orochimaru a woman, but please do not make there any relationship that goes beyond friendship or a boss-employee relationship. This would be disgusting, and before anyone starts the topic, I have no racism against transgender people, just who Orochimaru is, he is a pervert. He changes his body every three years, experiments on children, and has a staring nature that gives you goosebumps even more than Hisoka.
the start is kind of weird, I recommend just skipping to when Tsunade comes back after read to like Chapter 15, after that, it's very good 5 stars
The best Naruto Fanfic I have ever read the charector development plot progression is absolutely Insane
not sure if this review will be deleted as I didn't see a single review under 4 stars which is normally a red flag because there's always someone that just rates a story poorly because they don't like it.please keep in mind this review was made as of chapter 10 so I'm unsure if things get better or worse.The concept of this fanfic is interesting to me as I haven't read many second chance fanfics for Naruto with an OC instead of pure SI. the Status Screen Jutsu seems to be implemented as a progress tracker and the MC is motivated to increase his skills / stats with training as he can see real results.Sadly the story really needs an editor or beta to go through it as there are multiple issues in every chapter. At the moment it looks like it was typed up on a phone and any review before it was posted was minor at best.The way things have been explained up to chapter 10 makes it seem as if this is a pretty big AU setting without the author explaining that it is due to how Chakra is treated. Training Chakra is being explained like how Qi or spiritual energy is gathered in cultivation stories where as far as I'm aware the only energy that can normally be absorbed from the environment is nature energy. not really a bad thing as it could just be explained as fluff for the setting for how ninjas get stronger but because it isn't explained it just seems wrong.there're also constant spelling issues or places where the wrong word has been used (eg. luxe instead of luxury). Occasionally there's words that are repeated that should have been caught with a quick pass.the MC also seems like a generic Gary Stu, this also isn't necessarily bad as some people including myself enjoy the occasional Mc like this. This fanfic is definitely still readable and it does have its interesting moments but it's hard for me to enjoy it because of how often I've been seeing issues. If the author is able to go through what he's already posted and fix the spelling and grammar issues as well as add a bit of extra context early on I'd probably increase my rating to 4 or 4.5 but at the moment I'm leaving it as 3.
Spoiler de révélation Great fanfiction don't give up on it 👍 great fanfiction don't give up on it 👍 great fanfiction don't give up on it 👍 great fanfiction don't give up on it 👍
XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP
Great Naruto Fanfiction[img=update][img=recommend][img=update][img=recommend][img=update][img=recommend][img=update][img=recommend]
As usual I'm not good at reviews but I find everything in this fic to my liking. It has a lot of potential. I hope the author will finish it.
good Naruto fanfic ...........................................................................................................
espero que esto llegue a estar en el top.... saludos desde colombia XD .............................................................................................
Just all the available chapters and I have to say it is fire. The story line is great, little to no inconsistency, and the mc is likable. Would recommend people read this.
Até agora eu estou gostando bastante da fanfic, é a minha preferida atualmente, por favor continue com o bom trabalho.........................................
I'm honestly impressed by how unique and entertaining this ff is. hands down one of the best with enough originality and plots to keep you wanting more. writing style is the farthest away from boring. no filler, great development and again amazing original ideas that genuinely make you wonder what's gonna happen nexti hope the author keeps going and not drop this masterpiece.
definitivamente una lectura que disfruto, espero que el autor continúe con este trabajo de calidad y que logre clasificarse en el ranking .........................
As a fellow writer of a Senju novel, I love the difference between mine and yours. From mine as a novel that focuses on a Tsunade that could guide it, to your novel that focuses on a new main character that will reinvent what it means to be a Senju by his own power, I'm glad to see such a good novel from someone else. Let me know if you ever want to collaborate or if you need any aid.
Ggggncgkgkgkgkkffiittkjjfncncjfjfk the year and I am not sure if this is a bit more time to sleep in my opinion we can do it in the year of experience in a good day please is a r I will send the year and I have a
Spoiler de révélation Just like that, kill them all 👹👹👹 ......................................... .................................................................. ...............,..............
Hello, author. Can you fix the paragraph gap from chapter 25 to all the chapter after it. I love your story and always re-reading it. I will give a proper review after you fix it.