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A good start till now, the chapters are a little bit short, but except for that everything else is being good.
if it's SAO, I need to know if it's going to promise anything... and everything's going well so far! _______________________________________________
I want more chapters, don't delay! I'm curious about this work... nha ___________________________________________________________________________
I even feel sorry for his sister... let's see how he overcomes it from now on. _________________________________________________________________
come on, let me see how this mc will look when he's with kirito at the end of it all! O-O ______________________________________________________
keep going author, don't give up. p-p it's by creating more stories that you'll get good at what you do in literary ideas and funds ! ! ! ___
good good good good! now I want to know about this transmigration... 🥽😮 __________________________________________________________________
At first it was a bit boring, but as the story progresses I'm enjoying the friendship the MC has struck up Congratulations on the story, author ✨
It's a good start, but I want to see how the plot unfolds. Keep going author, I'm curious! _________________________________________________
I'm starting to make books again, even with my lack of English... I really want to invest in learning the language and also get help with my literary work. I hope you like this fanfic and that you can support me, I'll be doing my best to improve sz
A good start till now, the chapters are a little bit short, but except for that everything else is being good.
if it's SAO, I need to know if it's going to promise anything... and everything's going well so far! _______________________________________________
I want more chapters, don't delay! I'm curious about this work... nha ___________________________________________________________________________
I even feel sorry for his sister... let's see how he overcomes it from now on. _________________________________________________________________
come on, let me see how this mc will look when he's with kirito at the end of it all! O-O ______________________________________________________
keep going author, don't give up. p-p it's by creating more stories that you'll get good at what you do in literary ideas and funds ! ! ! ___
good good good good! now I want to know about this transmigration... 🥽😮 __________________________________________________________________
At first it was a bit boring, but as the story progresses I'm enjoying the friendship the MC has struck up Congratulations on the story, author ✨
It's a good start, but I want to see how the plot unfolds. Keep going author, I'm curious! _________________________________________________
I'm starting to make books again, even with my lack of English... I really want to invest in learning the language and also get help with my literary work. I hope you like this fanfic and that you can support me, I'll be doing my best to improve sz