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This story is very interesting. I feel compelled to read the next book once it comes out. The characters parents are annoying, and his sister is slightly uncaring. I hope that he can find his dream in this new world.
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interesting premise here. The dialog is simple to follow, yet captivating to keep me reading more. I love the world building as well. Add to my library too look out for more. The only thing i might point out is that prolog is a sneak peak to hook the reader. So having prolog in like 5 different parts is a bit off but that could be your style. I love it!
Okay, first off, mike's parents are too much and I really got annoyed reading their parts haha, this story has only a few chapters but the characters already piqued at my emotions, the author did a great job in establishing the characters' personality. Good work, author!
The story has just started but has already piqued my interest. The character of Mike is lovely but I have a sudden urge to kill the parents. I also love the interactions between the character. I still gotta wait and see for further review
Great use of perspective! Although there are moments when the descriptions don't leave much room for imagination, I believe that the author can further develop this gem. Keep going, author!!
Mike's post-high school journey has piqued my interest. Will he break free or continue to be bound by his parents' tight reins? From the two chapter i read, the writing stands is quite good. I hope author can put out consistent chapter release
Your blurb needs more work. And you have to keep updating your chapters. Though with 2 chapters of your novel the writing quality is good. It can use some more time/work. Hone your writing skills more. Hoping for your best.
Very interested in how Mike's life out of high school is about to unfold. Will he have more freedom in his life or will he be trapped in a a controlling life by his parents. College is typically a place where people discover who they are. I'm intrigued on who we'll see Mike become in the future. Definitly recommend this novel! (Would've been a higher score, but there wasn't really much of a character design except for how Vanessa was described)
I can't really judge with a novel having only 2 chapters but it seems interesting, it started out slow but I would definitely look forward to where it would go.
the storyline is very nice and the use of first person view was really good and very unique and intriguing novel definitely a highly recommended novel
This story is very interesting. I feel compelled to read the next book once it comes out. The characters parents are annoying, and his sister is slightly uncaring. I hope that he can find his dream in this new world.
Spoiler de révélation interesting premise here. The dialog is simple to follow, yet captivating to keep me reading more. I love the world building as well. Add to my library too look out for more. The only thing i might point out is that prolog is a sneak peak to hook the reader. So having prolog in like 5 different parts is a bit off but that could be your style. I love it!
Okay, first off, mike's parents are too much and I really got annoyed reading their parts haha, this story has only a few chapters but the characters already piqued at my emotions, the author did a great job in establishing the characters' personality. Good work, author!
The story has just started but has already piqued my interest. The character of Mike is lovely but I have a sudden urge to kill the parents. I also love the interactions between the character. I still gotta wait and see for further review
Great use of perspective! Although there are moments when the descriptions don't leave much room for imagination, I believe that the author can further develop this gem. Keep going, author!!
Mike's post-high school journey has piqued my interest. Will he break free or continue to be bound by his parents' tight reins? From the two chapter i read, the writing stands is quite good. I hope author can put out consistent chapter release
Your blurb needs more work. And you have to keep updating your chapters. Though with 2 chapters of your novel the writing quality is good. It can use some more time/work. Hone your writing skills more. Hoping for your best.
Very interested in how Mike's life out of high school is about to unfold. Will he have more freedom in his life or will he be trapped in a a controlling life by his parents. College is typically a place where people discover who they are. I'm intrigued on who we'll see Mike become in the future. Definitly recommend this novel! (Would've been a higher score, but there wasn't really much of a character design except for how Vanessa was described)
I can't really judge with a novel having only 2 chapters but it seems interesting, it started out slow but I would definitely look forward to where it would go.
the storyline is very nice and the use of first person view was really good and very unique and intriguing novel definitely a highly recommended novel