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Caeruleum_

Pft! Of course I was going to leave a shameless review. I do want my book to get enough exposure afterall. That being said though, this is my very first book and I would be super grateful if you all could support me and help to make this story better. I also urge you to point out any flaws, plot holes and anything you find odd about the novel. Your feedback really will go a long way. Criticism is nice and all but do not break my fickle heart. I beg of you. Constructive criticism will be very much appreciated though. That's all from this shameless author! Hope you enjoy the book!

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KanTakeAHint

After reading all the chapter in this novel, i only have one thing to say

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Zurbluris

Its nice to see another author from Nigeria here, the novel looks like one that will be amazing too

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DaoistxjmnAv

you should mention who is speaking it's kinda confusing but looks promising

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ItzWaqaz

this one is a good novel and has good storyline just dont discontinue this work because this is my favorite ...... we are waiting for new chapters

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SHiRa155

Good, good. A good novel little duckling. Keep going, i really like the concept of two mc.

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ItzWaqaz

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Yazukoto

Alrighty! As promised I will leave a review! I’m sorry it took so long T-T please don’t make a character named Jason and kill him brutally for revenge! Overall: This is an amazing novel. I’m shocked that the author was able to focus on both mc equally and make us love both of them. I have nothing to say in this regard besides I love it. World building: the author goes in depth to where I can literally imagine what’s they’re explaining. I would love if there was a picture in some instances tbh cause some times my imagination goes wonky and I’ll imagine crazy things. Grammar: I don’t see much issues tbh. It’s a very enjoyable reading. Spoilers down below Cons: I NEED MORE FLUFFY MOMENTS WITH THE LOVERS! Also now that they’re getting ranked up more I hope you don’t put the adults and parents to the side. I would personally love to see the parents swoop in and save them if things were going bad for the mcs. Like when they were younger and the dad stomped the guy for trying to kill his son. I need more of that. Give them some screen time and make them feel more useful please. I wanna see the parents also be of help rather than just using authority or having one moment of action.

The book cover is stunning! Looks promising too. Wish that there would be more clarity on who is speaking, but otherwise, pretty good start.

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ItzNeedless

Stable updates, splendid writing quality, and peak character designing. The story development is consistent with plenty happening so far(46 chapters). The only this I can nitpick about is the slightly long training arc but that's more of a subjective issue. As for the world building, there has been plenty so far so, definitely not lacking on that aspect either. Overall, a great story with marvelous potential. Excited to see what the author has in store for as going forward.

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m_P3rch

Great novel. 2 MCs, which is not often seen, had at first scared me a bit that author would not be able to handle it. But author managed it perfectly so far. Intriguing plot, decent pacing and good writing

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Liam_Hem

A good novel. A new and novel twist to the magic one could form in a concept called series is what I liked about this.

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David_Hughes_9017

An absolutely amazing novel. loved it start to finish. Highly recommend

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DaoistYmLy3X

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Akane_Ryuzaki

In response to the author's plea on chapter 38, I decided to leave a review here. Of course , it'd be a solid 5 stars for me if I read a bit further, up till chapter 38 was enough to earn this overall rating of 4.6 stars. One selling point I could give you would be the tearjerker I was hit with on probably chapter 3-4 ish. I mean, the author made me tear up at the brothers' reunion so early into the story, and ever since then, I've been invested in it.

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Wen_Qing

Finally finished reading the 1st volume! All I can say about this book is it's worth giving coins/free pass for 😂 The pace is a bit slow for some, but it's necessary for world building. The thing I like the most is the fact that the brother's relationship is good. The romance aspect is also not bad. Not the focus of the whole plot, but they still have decent development.

I am so glad you stopped having the pov changes like that. The pacing seems to be just right a little slow at times but it is a good novel. If you could do two chapters a day that would be massive.

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Ana_MZ_27

It's a good story so far can't wait for more chapters 🙂👍[img=update][img=update][img=update]

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The_Golden_Age_

Very enjoyable read. Unique to its genre and we'll written.The novel follows the story of two brothers who both transmigrated into a video game/novel. I love their brotherhood and family dynamic so far and I'm looking forward to it in later chapters. Hopefully author doesn't decide to kill them off.Highly recommended 👑⭐

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DaoistxjmnAv

it is good one [img=update][img=update][img=update]with good start currently following it but you should make the character more detailed