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No constant updates and if he does than chapters are smaller than nursery rhyme and the story's sense even worse than it.
Awesome glad to see an amazing artist such as yourself writing a wonderful story such as this can't wait to see what happens next and hope everything goes awesome for you 💯🎉🎊🎆🎇
It doesn't feel like a novel. It's like you're talking to your chaotic friend who recounts his day."I eat this for breakfastafter that, I brush my teethI go to schoolI stop a bully and make left a cringe worthy remark only an absolute weeb can sayI go to classI think about the worldI listen to lectures. "The novel literally goes like that, with no description of the surroundings, feelings, random timeskip, etc. Great idea, terrible, terrible execution.
Too much potential ruined by stupidity. The mc actually believed that there was no mutant after one google session. Also He is a complete noob at combat. He got the ability but had no equivalent mindset . He thinks that Fighting while holding back would train you to fight stronhger opponent. Its like fighting a mid boss with max lvl + Full build gear and thinking it will him fight ths last boss.
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Fun read then came the Virus of a d driven mc to create a harem so I’m out.
It's a pretty average fan-fic, but I give it 4 stars because I can read it in my spare time without thinking. As of now, I'm on episode 63 and the author couldn't provide proper character development for the MC. There is an annoyingly unserious and cavalier MC. ((((I read a lot of Marvel fan-fics on the web. Many events are now standardized. Learning magic from the ancient one, stealing vibranium from Ulysses Klaw, beating some mutants, dealing with hydra, making fun of Nick Furry, being friends with Spiderman being, dating Gwen, etc. etc. etc.)))) In my opinion, this novel is pretty average, and if you've read enough fanfic, it's not hard to guess the plot. The novel is quite good in terms of idea, but the author may have reduced a good idea to average due to his inexperience or not focusing on one novel at a time. (seriously, if you read such a long comment, congratulations and thank you. :) )
when i started reading it it's first chapter was good and 2nd was a little bad but it was of but after it it becomes a mess and after the time skip yeah it becomes total trash saying I Fear shield and not killing anyone in the entire time skip and saying i became happy after saying a person and using his power for such trifle things u know even Avengers did not interfere in those trifle things in movies who not even had about half of power of law or urahara and here our mc doing such meaningless things it's like author just wants to write something even if it's just trash and yeah power levels is a mess so don't read it it's total trash here is an illogical character living in an illusion of goody goody thing with op power so it's trash
Honestly while Law and Kisuke are powerful they are nothing compared to beings in Marvel. I really doubt even Yamamoto will be able to do anything to Dormamu let alone kisuke's half finished template user's spiritual pressure.
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Alright I like how the two templates work. He is OP but not universe ending OP. Not yet atleast which would make the story boring. As for people complaining about the jokes, author you should ignore them. Have you seen a marvel movie without humour?
I like it. The addition of X men in a unique way was pretty good. Looking forward to more chapters
I hope you don't nerf Haki in this because he has laws's body and could easily train himself in it. You could also just use Haki in a way to put spiritual pressure on people without going into soul reaper problems.I don't think you have really explored what people can do in one piece and what kind of special moves they have without devil fruits for combat.armament haki can be pretty devastating if used correctly even without weapon.
You should update the novel more this is a great story can't wait for you to update the next chapter.[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]
keep up the great work............................................................................................................................
It was fine until he made the MC stupid and not funny rip off of the bad Deadpool comics it’s honestly disappointing because the story was doing fine but the MC’s personality ruins it like if he was actually funny it’d be fine but it’s like he’s trying too hard
Horrible and boring character even for a fanfic[img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap]
Writing qualitiy is way too good for webnovel, so there is no other coice but 5/5. The new chapters get released regularly so there is no problem with that. The development so far is very interesting as he creates an identity as a mercenary who at the same time can heal people. As i write this review the latest chapter is 29 so nothing much happened so far but there are many interesting possibilities so i am looking forward to that. With that said we come to the only real negativ thing i have to say about this story: Character development. The MC has 2 different templates that are a great fit together. The problem lies with the MCs behavior. He "trolls" people like 80% of the time, meaning a 1000 word chapter has only about 200 words story development and the rest is just the MC behaving like an idiot. After the first incident a few readers (me included) already wrote this concern in the comments. In the next chapter the author made clear that it is the original chracter trait of the MC, that was for some reason suppressed before. That makes the whole story quite hard to read, at least in my opinion, since the MC is more cringeworthy than funny. So you either skip most dialogues with the risk of missing some information or you read through all of that but have an inner fight to just drop that story and search something else. Roundup: If you have no problem with a cringe MC and very slow story development (because MC "trolling" people takes like 80% of the word count) this story is definitely for you.
If you like bastardized versions of Law's and Creepy candy shop owner then this might be for you.
My honest review? The only marvel fanfic I have read till available chapters in one sitting
Até o atual momento está bom me mandei mais capítulos para que eu possa degustar ,. ,. .............................................
I'm pretty much like it. Mc seems op. I'm when he gets color haki and conqueror it would be overkill and bankai would BANG!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
It's a great Marvel fanfiction!! I like it!!! 😁👍👍 It have a great plot/story and great translate/english.. I like MC/Law have Urahara and Law templete, that two is one of the smartest people in their own world (Bleach and One Piece).. So, don't that make MC soooo smart with their combined brains?? I think it was overkill.. Just one of templete is already so good (either Urahara or Law is have so great power).. I like how he recruit Emma Frost and Gambit, they're one of my favorites Mutant.. Can't wait to see next chapter.. Love your story.. Keep up the great work author sama 😁👍😍😍😍
I'm giving a five star since the idea of SI using Law's power inspired my fanfiction............................................................
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Really like where you are going but chapters are to short it's like just scroll once and the chapter is finished. Appreciate the work Author
Really liked the idea of the story. Also I don't think it's cringe to stand up to your bullies. MC did the right thing and said the right thing. It might sound cringe but it's the truth that he said. Don't listen to others speaking ill about it.
my greatest complain in this novel is the personality of the mc. its either the author truly sucks at making character dedign or just purposely making the mc a retard so that he can make a character development plot. sorrg not my cup of tea
No constant updates and if he does than chapters are smaller than nursery rhyme and the story's sense even worse than it.
Awesome glad to see an amazing artist such as yourself writing a wonderful story such as this can't wait to see what happens next and hope everything goes awesome for you 💯🎉🎊🎆🎇
It doesn't feel like a novel. It's like you're talking to your chaotic friend who recounts his day."I eat this for breakfastafter that, I brush my teethI go to schoolI stop a bully and make left a cringe worthy remark only an absolute weeb can sayI go to classI think about the worldI listen to lectures. "The novel literally goes like that, with no description of the surroundings, feelings, random timeskip, etc. Great idea, terrible, terrible execution.
Too much potential ruined by stupidity. The mc actually believed that there was no mutant after one google session. Also He is a complete noob at combat. He got the ability but had no equivalent mindset . He thinks that Fighting while holding back would train you to fight stronhger opponent. Its like fighting a mid boss with max lvl + Full build gear and thinking it will him fight ths last boss.
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Fun read then came the Virus of a d driven mc to create a harem so I’m out.
It's a pretty average fan-fic, but I give it 4 stars because I can read it in my spare time without thinking. As of now, I'm on episode 63 and the author couldn't provide proper character development for the MC. There is an annoyingly unserious and cavalier MC. ((((I read a lot of Marvel fan-fics on the web. Many events are now standardized. Learning magic from the ancient one, stealing vibranium from Ulysses Klaw, beating some mutants, dealing with hydra, making fun of Nick Furry, being friends with Spiderman being, dating Gwen, etc. etc. etc.)))) In my opinion, this novel is pretty average, and if you've read enough fanfic, it's not hard to guess the plot. The novel is quite good in terms of idea, but the author may have reduced a good idea to average due to his inexperience or not focusing on one novel at a time. (seriously, if you read such a long comment, congratulations and thank you. :) )
when i started reading it it's first chapter was good and 2nd was a little bad but it was of but after it it becomes a mess and after the time skip yeah it becomes total trash saying I Fear shield and not killing anyone in the entire time skip and saying i became happy after saying a person and using his power for such trifle things u know even Avengers did not interfere in those trifle things in movies who not even had about half of power of law or urahara and here our mc doing such meaningless things it's like author just wants to write something even if it's just trash and yeah power levels is a mess so don't read it it's total trash here is an illogical character living in an illusion of goody goody thing with op power so it's trash
Honestly while Law and Kisuke are powerful they are nothing compared to beings in Marvel. I really doubt even Yamamoto will be able to do anything to Dormamu let alone kisuke's half finished template user's spiritual pressure.
Spoiler de révélation Alright I like how the two templates work. He is OP but not universe ending OP. Not yet atleast which would make the story boring. As for people complaining about the jokes, author you should ignore them. Have you seen a marvel movie without humour?
I like it. The addition of X men in a unique way was pretty good. Looking forward to more chapters
I hope you don't nerf Haki in this because he has laws's body and could easily train himself in it. You could also just use Haki in a way to put spiritual pressure on people without going into soul reaper problems.I don't think you have really explored what people can do in one piece and what kind of special moves they have without devil fruits for combat.armament haki can be pretty devastating if used correctly even without weapon.
You should update the novel more this is a great story can't wait for you to update the next chapter.[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]
keep up the great work............................................................................................................................
It was fine until he made the MC stupid and not funny rip off of the bad Deadpool comics it’s honestly disappointing because the story was doing fine but the MC’s personality ruins it like if he was actually funny it’d be fine but it’s like he’s trying too hard
Horrible and boring character even for a fanfic[img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap]
Writing qualitiy is way too good for webnovel, so there is no other coice but 5/5. The new chapters get released regularly so there is no problem with that. The development so far is very interesting as he creates an identity as a mercenary who at the same time can heal people. As i write this review the latest chapter is 29 so nothing much happened so far but there are many interesting possibilities so i am looking forward to that. With that said we come to the only real negativ thing i have to say about this story: Character development. The MC has 2 different templates that are a great fit together. The problem lies with the MCs behavior. He "trolls" people like 80% of the time, meaning a 1000 word chapter has only about 200 words story development and the rest is just the MC behaving like an idiot. After the first incident a few readers (me included) already wrote this concern in the comments. In the next chapter the author made clear that it is the original chracter trait of the MC, that was for some reason suppressed before. That makes the whole story quite hard to read, at least in my opinion, since the MC is more cringeworthy than funny. So you either skip most dialogues with the risk of missing some information or you read through all of that but have an inner fight to just drop that story and search something else. Roundup: If you have no problem with a cringe MC and very slow story development (because MC "trolling" people takes like 80% of the word count) this story is definitely for you.
If you like bastardized versions of Law's and Creepy candy shop owner then this might be for you.
My honest review? The only marvel fanfic I have read till available chapters in one sitting
Até o atual momento está bom me mandei mais capítulos para que eu possa degustar ,. ,. .............................................
I'm pretty much like it. Mc seems op. I'm when he gets color haki and conqueror it would be overkill and bankai would BANG!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
It's a great Marvel fanfiction!! I like it!!! 😁👍👍 It have a great plot/story and great translate/english.. I like MC/Law have Urahara and Law templete, that two is one of the smartest people in their own world (Bleach and One Piece).. So, don't that make MC soooo smart with their combined brains?? I think it was overkill.. Just one of templete is already so good (either Urahara or Law is have so great power).. I like how he recruit Emma Frost and Gambit, they're one of my favorites Mutant.. Can't wait to see next chapter.. Love your story.. Keep up the great work author sama 😁👍😍😍😍
I'm giving a five star since the idea of SI using Law's power inspired my fanfiction............................................................
Historia INCRIVELLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLL
Really like where you are going but chapters are to short it's like just scroll once and the chapter is finished. Appreciate the work Author
Really liked the idea of the story. Also I don't think it's cringe to stand up to your bullies. MC did the right thing and said the right thing. It might sound cringe but it's the truth that he said. Don't listen to others speaking ill about it.
my greatest complain in this novel is the personality of the mc. its either the author truly sucks at making character dedign or just purposely making the mc a retard so that he can make a character development plot. sorrg not my cup of tea