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The story plot is very intriguing, to begin with! Read the book until the 30th chapter and now I am in love with the book! I need more of this book ASAP!
what a great plot, the synopsis is really good I really want to try out this novel
Great story line with great characters. With a bit of touch to grammar I believe it can be the one of the best I have read with FL mc.
All I have to say is that it is a good and promising novel. I enjoy reading and I am waiting for more chapters. This novel deserves more readers.
Good novel, it is a little miss indeed. I love the novel and the vivid picture which makes me feel as if I am inside the novel. Gonna do more reading.
Writing Quality: There's a lot of switching between past and present tense, and the sentence structure needs a bit of work as well. There is also a lot of information that can be omitted, a lot of the information you give doesn't need to be in the chapters during the story, but instead can be left as a note. The third person is a little tricky, once you decide if you're using past or present tense it does get easier! Great job with what you've done though Story development: I was a little lost after chapter 35, there is a lot of information coming at readers that doesn't quite make sense. I'm hoping further down the line it will begin to click, but the story is developing with grace other than that. Character design: For the FL I was a bit confused at first, she was first described as a goddess, then a cultivator, then a thief, and then a fallen god. I'm also unsure of how she lived for 2000 years but her reactions to things are a bit immature unless gods age differently. The love story mentioned was also very cute but seems a bit extreme for a first date unless they had known each other prior. Over I love the character names and visual descriptions you're doing great :)
Currently on chapter 22. I'll stop here to give my impressions. First of all, I'm not really in the habit of reading novels with LFs because I find them too mushy and without any real thrill. However, this novel changed my vision. I like the way LF breaks the stereotypes of a young girl in danger waiting for charming men to help her. The universe is quite well constructed and the story really takes an intriguing turn. It's weak to strong but at the same time overpowered, just the way I like it. I highly recommend this novel. Keep going on author-san 🙏
ok a good novel with a good starting with creative thought and fun people and creature, if read this try it once. a good nivel with good writing quality.
The Novel is amazing. If you could just ignore some very minor grammatical mistakes, the english is not bad. The characters are colourful, their every action is reasonable. The world background is interesting and even the Fl's past. While the minor villains are cliche, they are very negligible. The constant updates is like a cherry in the pie. Very yummy. All in all, this is a must read book.
I want to follow Su Yunluo in her journey to become stronger. The story is so captivating that am seriously waiting to see how it unfolds. Keep up the good work author take us deeper to a world of fantasy romance.
Great start! This book reminded me of the mesmerizing ghost doctor, which is really good because i loved that book. I love how this book empowers women And i really liked where the story is going, and cannot wait to see the MC rise to top again after falling.
I like this story. This is quite the 'little miss' indeed! Now I do know that there are a few gramatical errors, (Advice: Proofread to make sure that your words are spelled correctly) but other than that, It captures the title and essence of what I believe the Author was going for quite well. It is an enticing tale definitely worth the read.
The story proposes some interesting concepts, but has yet to develop to the point where they can be fully explored. Beyond a few fairly standard plotlines, such as a secret god contract and unique system, I find the main characters relationships with her family very endearing. Keep up the good work, author!
A simplistic yet impressive work of art. The plot progression is extremely neat and the pacing is decent. Hope that you continue and carry on with your future works. I'd love to see how the story unfolds.
Really love the book, i just started to read this and i really love the novel the novel have a good flow ✨👍
Read the first seven chapters so far the pacing and the flow of the story is impeccable also there's a few grammar mistakes hopefully it will get better as the story continues.
I'll be honest here, please improve the grammar as I'm pretty sure many readers will drop this because of it Like you wrote junior brother which means having the master but they're actually blood related so doesn't make much sense This book has great potential as the character design and development is good The book is going well now but please don't increase the faceslapping in the future as that's makes everyone but mc sound stupid A suggestion write something about her past life in between it's hooks the reader Overall you can give it a try it's good and has potential
I wanted to be the 10th it shouldn't of been someone else, the stars aligned and yet nothing came to be. Oh yeah the stories pretty good as well, nice development of characters keep up the good work author
Read 5 chapters but even though it's my first female mc novel it is nice till now I will update this review after reading all
I like the descriptions of characters, emotions and situations. I think it really brings attention to the novel and story development. Keep up the good work! [img=recommend]
a one of a kind amazing book .keep it up author i am waiting for more chapters.
Author speaking, dear readers it my honor to find out that my work is viewed by thousands of people. It encourage me to do more. This novel is on a contest don't just read, support by voting and leaving a review for me. Lot of love to my dearest readers bye.
Reading the first chapter caught my attention..... No error seen but I will review again when I read more chapters. ..Don't drop this one author
A nice story. Very believable characters and I look forward to the new songs. Smooth good rhythm in storytelling and believable dialogue.Excellent world building and character development.- The story has a lot of potential. Will definitely be in my library and I enjoyed this story very much.
Wonderfull novel, I like this novel since it’s very interesting and the story really is fantastic. The author needs to release more chapters
There are a lot of good ideas here. The characters are well thought out and it’s clear a lot of effort is put into the writing. The creatures and people are interesting and the story seems like it has a clear goal. Keep up the good work, Author!
This well-written and engaging book. The supporting characters in the story also add depth to the narrative. The writing style is impressive and easy to follow. The plot unfolds at a steady pace, with just the right amount of twists and surprises to keep readers interested.
The story plot is very intriguing, to begin with! Read the book until the 30th chapter and now I am in love with the book! I need more of this book ASAP!
what a great plot, the synopsis is really good I really want to try out this novel
Great story line with great characters. With a bit of touch to grammar I believe it can be the one of the best I have read with FL mc.
All I have to say is that it is a good and promising novel. I enjoy reading and I am waiting for more chapters. This novel deserves more readers.
Good novel, it is a little miss indeed. I love the novel and the vivid picture which makes me feel as if I am inside the novel. Gonna do more reading.
Writing Quality: There's a lot of switching between past and present tense, and the sentence structure needs a bit of work as well. There is also a lot of information that can be omitted, a lot of the information you give doesn't need to be in the chapters during the story, but instead can be left as a note. The third person is a little tricky, once you decide if you're using past or present tense it does get easier! Great job with what you've done though Story development: I was a little lost after chapter 35, there is a lot of information coming at readers that doesn't quite make sense. I'm hoping further down the line it will begin to click, but the story is developing with grace other than that. Character design: For the FL I was a bit confused at first, she was first described as a goddess, then a cultivator, then a thief, and then a fallen god. I'm also unsure of how she lived for 2000 years but her reactions to things are a bit immature unless gods age differently. The love story mentioned was also very cute but seems a bit extreme for a first date unless they had known each other prior. Over I love the character names and visual descriptions you're doing great :)
Currently on chapter 22. I'll stop here to give my impressions. First of all, I'm not really in the habit of reading novels with LFs because I find them too mushy and without any real thrill. However, this novel changed my vision. I like the way LF breaks the stereotypes of a young girl in danger waiting for charming men to help her. The universe is quite well constructed and the story really takes an intriguing turn. It's weak to strong but at the same time overpowered, just the way I like it. I highly recommend this novel. Keep going on author-san 🙏
ok a good novel with a good starting with creative thought and fun people and creature, if read this try it once. a good nivel with good writing quality.
The Novel is amazing. If you could just ignore some very minor grammatical mistakes, the english is not bad. The characters are colourful, their every action is reasonable. The world background is interesting and even the Fl's past. While the minor villains are cliche, they are very negligible. The constant updates is like a cherry in the pie. Very yummy. All in all, this is a must read book.
I want to follow Su Yunluo in her journey to become stronger. The story is so captivating that am seriously waiting to see how it unfolds. Keep up the good work author take us deeper to a world of fantasy romance.
Great start! This book reminded me of the mesmerizing ghost doctor, which is really good because i loved that book. I love how this book empowers women And i really liked where the story is going, and cannot wait to see the MC rise to top again after falling.
I like this story. This is quite the 'little miss' indeed! Now I do know that there are a few gramatical errors, (Advice: Proofread to make sure that your words are spelled correctly) but other than that, It captures the title and essence of what I believe the Author was going for quite well. It is an enticing tale definitely worth the read.
The story proposes some interesting concepts, but has yet to develop to the point where they can be fully explored. Beyond a few fairly standard plotlines, such as a secret god contract and unique system, I find the main characters relationships with her family very endearing. Keep up the good work, author!
A simplistic yet impressive work of art. The plot progression is extremely neat and the pacing is decent. Hope that you continue and carry on with your future works. I'd love to see how the story unfolds.
Really love the book, i just started to read this and i really love the novel the novel have a good flow ✨👍
Read the first seven chapters so far the pacing and the flow of the story is impeccable also there's a few grammar mistakes hopefully it will get better as the story continues.
I'll be honest here, please improve the grammar as I'm pretty sure many readers will drop this because of it Like you wrote junior brother which means having the master but they're actually blood related so doesn't make much sense This book has great potential as the character design and development is good The book is going well now but please don't increase the faceslapping in the future as that's makes everyone but mc sound stupid A suggestion write something about her past life in between it's hooks the reader Overall you can give it a try it's good and has potential
I wanted to be the 10th it shouldn't of been someone else, the stars aligned and yet nothing came to be. Oh yeah the stories pretty good as well, nice development of characters keep up the good work author
Read 5 chapters but even though it's my first female mc novel it is nice till now I will update this review after reading all
I like the descriptions of characters, emotions and situations. I think it really brings attention to the novel and story development. Keep up the good work! [img=recommend]
a one of a kind amazing book .keep it up author i am waiting for more chapters.
Author speaking, dear readers it my honor to find out that my work is viewed by thousands of people. It encourage me to do more. This novel is on a contest don't just read, support by voting and leaving a review for me. Lot of love to my dearest readers bye.
Reading the first chapter caught my attention..... No error seen but I will review again when I read more chapters. ..Don't drop this one author
A nice story. Very believable characters and I look forward to the new songs. Smooth good rhythm in storytelling and believable dialogue.Excellent world building and character development.- The story has a lot of potential. Will definitely be in my library and I enjoyed this story very much.
Wonderfull novel, I like this novel since it’s very interesting and the story really is fantastic. The author needs to release more chapters
There are a lot of good ideas here. The characters are well thought out and it’s clear a lot of effort is put into the writing. The creatures and people are interesting and the story seems like it has a clear goal. Keep up the good work, Author!
This well-written and engaging book. The supporting characters in the story also add depth to the narrative. The writing style is impressive and easy to follow. The plot unfolds at a steady pace, with just the right amount of twists and surprises to keep readers interested.
A nice background with engaging and intriguing chapters.