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Indeed. There are plenty of people who's personality drastically change when they gain power that they personally are not ready for said power and ends up letting said power corrupts their personality. I'm thinking the MC's sister is sort of going to see that change in her brother and if she learns it, might even give her brother a big slap in the face to wake him up since lets face it, its clear that he's letting this Ace Combat System get to his head and is letting it go overboard and acting both thoughtlessly and recklessly as well since he's just making things ten times worst and this is something that his sister might be his word of wisdom and conscious since the ACS might actually be surpressing it. After all, currently speaking, he's just causing the situation to become worst and worst and who knows, his actions might cause a Third World War to happened and he might need to take responsibility over his actions as his sister might be upfront that when you get down to it, all of this chaos wouldn't have happened if he himself didn't start showboating and causing said chaos in the first place. Heck, the fight against the JSDF didn't even needed to go that far as he could've easily ordered his subordinates to fight non-lethally so even if it still ended up in an incident, the damage wouldn't have gone that far. Instead, it turned into a shooting match that got both soldiers and civilians killed because of his carelessness. In a way, the MC is turning into some kind of Lelouch in that because of Lelouch gaining his Geass powers, it quickly went to his head and he used every excuse to justify his actions even using his sister Nunnally despite him just using Nunnally as an excuse to justify on the trouble he caused. I'm seeing a similar parallel to him and Lelouch and he could've just stopped causing trouble after getting a good amount of money from fighting iin Muv-Luv universe as he already treated his sister and got enough money to live in luxury. Instead, just like how Lelouch wasn't satisfied with his vengeance and just kept pushing beyond, the same goes with the MC. Another thing is like I mentioned before, is that the Ace Combat System maybe actually affecting his thoughts and actions far more than he think its doing if that 'Assimilation' percentage is any thought. There are some fics where the MC's were told that the 'Gamer's Mind' ability is more of a downside than an upside is it drastically affects the persons mind as feeling fear, despair and sadness isn't necessary a bad thing as a human gets stronger and better but surpassing what they experience and becomes a stronger person afterwards. What abilities like Gamer Mind does is simply makes it not possible for the person to grow into a better person which is not a good thing when they have something as dangerously powerful as the Gamer ability. Heck,, a DBZ fic where a human MC gained the Gamer ability and was told how bad the Gamer Mind ability was doing to his mind since it just suppresses what he feels and not get rid of what he feels and he doesn't want his Gamer's Mind suddenly being turned off in a crisis and he decided to turn it off. He was simply horrified at what he had been doing and that event convinced him that Gamer's Mind was no boon as he thought but more of an curse at its more similar to the 'Shield Heroes' Cursed Series of weapons and decides not to use it unless its an extreme emergency.
The story is alright though I'm not quite sure I like how the character is shaping up as he's extremely careless and reckless I find as what person thinks its a good idea of showing weapons of mass destruction in real life Earth especially when he should've learned his lesson when you consider the TSF reaction to his Ace Combat planes, he surely is going to cause a ruckus on regular Earth and that's not to think about what his sister is going to think of him once it gets out that he caused an incident that cause the lives of both military civilian when it shouldn't have been an incident in the first place.
I mean, it is good, but I don't really like it, I went in and read it. It was good at the beginning, and then it just went downhill for me.
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loved it! but the last couple of chapters have been kinda dumb lol. he was some kind of super ace at the beginning, then now he's probably about to shoot up Tokyo.
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pretty good read, although the first arc really drags on. and the mc does some pretty spineless things so I'd recommend skimming through the chapters of that arc if you can't tolerate it.
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Worst grammer I have ever seen. The story is good if you can ignore the grammer. Hhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhgggggghhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhbbbbbb
nice story thnks for the chapter ,please.update , 👌👌[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]
Very good if you want to have a good read. The author does have real life, so the schedule is not stable.
boss, the fanfic is great and everything is excellent but you update very slowly, if you change it to 1 chapter every 20 or 10 days this fanfic would be the first in the ranking
i really like this fanfiction but i would really like to fix the personality of mc not scaredy cat scared of some lady but not scared of heights killing and of war quite interesting right? at least do development for him
Pretty good, only down side is upload but that can’t be helped as they’re quite busy.
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Nice bro lolololollollooñokkpkpkpjpjphglfldkdldldldldldldldldlddldldldodofifkckvkjddjdjdjdjdjdkdkdjdrkeifjjfjffjfkfjfjfjfjfjfjfkfkcnfndkdixickcjd
love ace combat pls keep up the good work Cool story-Good okokokokokokokokokokokokokokokokkookokokokokokokokokokokokokokokokokokokokokokokokokokokokokokokokokokokokokokokokokokokokokok
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“SCHUM” I am the storm that is approaching Provoking black clouds in isolation I am reclaimer of my name Born in flames, I have been blessed My family crest is a demon of death Forsakened, I am awakened
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Very refreshing story, friend, I can only support you by giving full 5 stars. I really look for novel stories related to modern technology like this, especially the system that the protagonist has and stories like this that I like. Please continue this work well 👍
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Beiutiful just keep it up i feel so imersed in this like fereal please dont drop this as it is amazing EE e Ee E E E E E E e e E e e e e e e e e
1 Star because I don't like the initial attitude of MC he is too careless in his words and also a spineless person. Bruh,Even if he is awkward or not that good at socialising he atleast should be careful what to blabber and what not because you know his system once issued a death penalty for a mission so he should at be careful from the possible 'punisment' for divulging the information about the existence of system. But from what i see, It's just an excuse to increase wordcount without much content thus im dropping it.
Indeed. There are plenty of people who's personality drastically change when they gain power that they personally are not ready for said power and ends up letting said power corrupts their personality. I'm thinking the MC's sister is sort of going to see that change in her brother and if she learns it, might even give her brother a big slap in the face to wake him up since lets face it, its clear that he's letting this Ace Combat System get to his head and is letting it go overboard and acting both thoughtlessly and recklessly as well since he's just making things ten times worst and this is something that his sister might be his word of wisdom and conscious since the ACS might actually be surpressing it. After all, currently speaking, he's just causing the situation to become worst and worst and who knows, his actions might cause a Third World War to happened and he might need to take responsibility over his actions as his sister might be upfront that when you get down to it, all of this chaos wouldn't have happened if he himself didn't start showboating and causing said chaos in the first place. Heck, the fight against the JSDF didn't even needed to go that far as he could've easily ordered his subordinates to fight non-lethally so even if it still ended up in an incident, the damage wouldn't have gone that far. Instead, it turned into a shooting match that got both soldiers and civilians killed because of his carelessness. In a way, the MC is turning into some kind of Lelouch in that because of Lelouch gaining his Geass powers, it quickly went to his head and he used every excuse to justify his actions even using his sister Nunnally despite him just using Nunnally as an excuse to justify on the trouble he caused. I'm seeing a similar parallel to him and Lelouch and he could've just stopped causing trouble after getting a good amount of money from fighting iin Muv-Luv universe as he already treated his sister and got enough money to live in luxury. Instead, just like how Lelouch wasn't satisfied with his vengeance and just kept pushing beyond, the same goes with the MC. Another thing is like I mentioned before, is that the Ace Combat System maybe actually affecting his thoughts and actions far more than he think its doing if that 'Assimilation' percentage is any thought. There are some fics where the MC's were told that the 'Gamer's Mind' ability is more of a downside than an upside is it drastically affects the persons mind as feeling fear, despair and sadness isn't necessary a bad thing as a human gets stronger and better but surpassing what they experience and becomes a stronger person afterwards. What abilities like Gamer Mind does is simply makes it not possible for the person to grow into a better person which is not a good thing when they have something as dangerously powerful as the Gamer ability. Heck,, a DBZ fic where a human MC gained the Gamer ability and was told how bad the Gamer Mind ability was doing to his mind since it just suppresses what he feels and not get rid of what he feels and he doesn't want his Gamer's Mind suddenly being turned off in a crisis and he decided to turn it off. He was simply horrified at what he had been doing and that event convinced him that Gamer's Mind was no boon as he thought but more of an curse at its more similar to the 'Shield Heroes' Cursed Series of weapons and decides not to use it unless its an extreme emergency.
The story is alright though I'm not quite sure I like how the character is shaping up as he's extremely careless and reckless I find as what person thinks its a good idea of showing weapons of mass destruction in real life Earth especially when he should've learned his lesson when you consider the TSF reaction to his Ace Combat planes, he surely is going to cause a ruckus on regular Earth and that's not to think about what his sister is going to think of him once it gets out that he caused an incident that cause the lives of both military civilian when it shouldn't have been an incident in the first place.
I mean, it is good, but I don't really like it, I went in and read it. It was good at the beginning, and then it just went downhill for me.
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loved it! but the last couple of chapters have been kinda dumb lol. he was some kind of super ace at the beginning, then now he's probably about to shoot up Tokyo.
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pretty good read, although the first arc really drags on. and the mc does some pretty spineless things so I'd recommend skimming through the chapters of that arc if you can't tolerate it.
Spoiler de révélation Worst grammer I have ever seen. The story is good if you can ignore the grammer. Hhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhgggggghhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhbbbbbb
nice story thnks for the chapter ,please.update , 👌👌[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]
Very good if you want to have a good read. The author does have real life, so the schedule is not stable.
boss, the fanfic is great and everything is excellent but you update very slowly, if you change it to 1 chapter every 20 or 10 days this fanfic would be the first in the ranking
i really like this fanfiction but i would really like to fix the personality of mc not scaredy cat scared of some lady but not scared of heights killing and of war quite interesting right? at least do development for him
Pretty good, only down side is upload but that can’t be helped as they’re quite busy.
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Nice bro lolololollollooñokkpkpkpjpjphglfldkdldldldldldldldldlddldldldodofifkckvkjddjdjdjdjdjdkdkdjdrkeifjjfjffjfkfjfjfjfjfjfjfkfkcnfndkdixickcjd
love ace combat pls keep up the good work Cool story-Good okokokokokokokokokokokokokokokokkookokokokokokokokokokokokokokokokokokokokokokokokokokokokokokokokokokokokokokokokokokokokokok
There's no way Oda is a genius 😎 Kskkskskskskskskskskskskskskskskskskskskskskskskskskskskskksskkskskskskskskskskskskskskskksksksksskskskskksksksksksksksksksksksksksskkskskskskss
Spoiler de révélation “SCHUM” I am the storm that is approaching Provoking black clouds in isolation I am reclaimer of my name Born in flames, I have been blessed My family crest is a demon of death Forsakened, I am awakened
Spoiler de révélation Very refreshing story, friend, I can only support you by giving full 5 stars. I really look for novel stories related to modern technology like this, especially the system that the protagonist has and stories like this that I like. Please continue this work well 👍
Can we have ghosteye from Ace combat 6 Dccccccffffffffffffvcnvvbgvjgghhhghgghgghgghfhhghhgjghjghjgjygjghhghghhhhggggfsfddffffffddfdfgfetf4yf5hfyg5hrht
Beiutiful just keep it up i feel so imersed in this like fereal please dont drop this as it is amazing EE e Ee E E E E E E e e E e e e e e e e e
1 Star because I don't like the initial attitude of MC he is too careless in his words and also a spineless person. Bruh,Even if he is awkward or not that good at socialising he atleast should be careful what to blabber and what not because you know his system once issued a death penalty for a mission so he should at be careful from the possible 'punisment' for divulging the information about the existence of system. But from what i see, It's just an excuse to increase wordcount without much content thus im dropping it.