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The story is going well, but you will still learn technology...................................... ..................................................................
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He reminds me of record of ragnarok nikolas Tesla in the way how he relies on technology to fight the gods and thats really awsome to me so I look foward to how he shows how far humanity can go with our minds and technology.
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not gonna lie like the concept but the narration was still bad. the background is solid with many correlations and abilities seem plausible. the system was not important and can't be called the system it might as well be called the library and that it, there is no condition nor it mentions again after 1 or 2 chapters at this point it was nothing but a lazy plot device. the interaction is bad, not gonna lie, rather than stories it feel more like draft or timeline map. the point is he appear out of nowhere in the point of interest and open his mouth and everyone think is normal and even corporate than a second in conversation, believe in everything he said without question while Shinji just copy paste answer from type moon wiki in his dialogue. there no struggle at all, he basically build stuff out off nothing without clear explanation. it was face-pace stories so fast that my brain couldn't follow properly, it might be because the author has a hard time to hold back and build up stories and jump in crucial or exciting moments at the same time but make the interaction feel forced and other characters having moment that doesn't make sense by how originally their personality supposed to be.
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Buen fanfic hasta ahora autor-san sigue con el buen trabajo (rellenando palabras )yessssssssssssdddddddddddddddddddddddsssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssss
This is until now the only Fate series that I actually super really literally enjoy reading this. author-san has successfully shaped a shinji that actually makes me love him🥴 The development is great and enjouyable. Hope u will continue with this promising story🥹🫶❤️😘
Maomenos. El odio es un lugar en el que se esconde uno cuando no se puede enfrentar a la tristeza
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Valió la pena ......................................................................................................................................................................................................
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The story is going well, but you will still learn technology...................................... ..................................................................
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Just need to comb through the chapters and fix up some grammar. ----------------------------------------------------------------------------
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He reminds me of record of ragnarok nikolas Tesla in the way how he relies on technology to fight the gods and thats really awsome to me so I look foward to how he shows how far humanity can go with our minds and technology.
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not gonna lie like the concept but the narration was still bad. the background is solid with many correlations and abilities seem plausible. the system was not important and can't be called the system it might as well be called the library and that it, there is no condition nor it mentions again after 1 or 2 chapters at this point it was nothing but a lazy plot device. the interaction is bad, not gonna lie, rather than stories it feel more like draft or timeline map. the point is he appear out of nowhere in the point of interest and open his mouth and everyone think is normal and even corporate than a second in conversation, believe in everything he said without question while Shinji just copy paste answer from type moon wiki in his dialogue. there no struggle at all, he basically build stuff out off nothing without clear explanation. it was face-pace stories so fast that my brain couldn't follow properly, it might be because the author has a hard time to hold back and build up stories and jump in crucial or exciting moments at the same time but make the interaction feel forced and other characters having moment that doesn't make sense by how originally their personality supposed to be.
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Buen fanfic hasta ahora autor-san sigue con el buen trabajo (rellenando palabras )yessssssssssssdddddddddddddddddddddddsssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssss
This is until now the only Fate series that I actually super really literally enjoy reading this. author-san has successfully shaped a shinji that actually makes me love him🥴 The development is great and enjouyable. Hope u will continue with this promising story🥹🫶❤️😘
Maomenos. El odio es un lugar en el que se esconde uno cuando no se puede enfrentar a la tristeza
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