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OMG. This story is truly magnificent, the language is written fluently and the character design is also top notch. I haven’t read any HP fic before, that just fulfills every good aspect of a story while also giving characters deepness. It feels as if the author is a professional writer, his writing style is just so good. I hope he keeps updating as fast as usually, cause I can’ t get enough of the story.
=Review as of Chapter 72= Writing quality: I've got some writing experience, mainly from contests I entered as a hobby, so my story has, at least, comprehensible sentence structure and good grammar (There will always be one or two mistakes once in a while, but I usually correct them as soon as a reader points them out). I tried to adapt my writing style to the web novel format, so the earlier chapters are a mix of various styles I tried to implement (Even first-person POV). Despite that, I'm proud to say that I've found a style I'm comfortable writing with, and plan to re-write the earlier twenty or so chapters when I have the time. Stability of Updates: I'm a uni student, so there are weeks where I really don't find the time to write, but otherwise, I release at least four chapters a week, with a minimum of 2000 words per chapter. If I find myself with more free time, the chance of more chapters coming out is quite high. Story Development: I can't say much on this topic without making this review a spoiler, which is not my intention. As of now, I'm currently writing the Third-Year, and considering this is a Small AU, the canon plot has gone haywire a long time ago, although some key elements will remain. Character Design: If you've come here with the intention of reading about a Gary Stu story, then don't waste your time. The main character and his sister (who I consider a sub-main character of sorts) are strong compared to their peers but are still nowhere near the level of powerful wizards. If there's one thing that I could write about forever, is the struggles characters face in order to achieve their objectives, so, again, if you want to read about an extremely overpowered character, don't bother. World Background: There isn't much to say here, only that I add certain parts to the Wizarding World that compliment its original setting, and that I try to cover certain small plot holes not addressed in the books. *Extra* Romance: No-Harem :D (But there's more than one FML).
really wanna see alaric be with a slytherin girl they don't get that much love in most fics and someone like flure delacore is soo overused i am tired of it .it would be refrshing and intresting to see him with a slytherin girl like tracy instead of the normal fanfic thing of flure.
Author, just wanna check up on you and make sure you have not dropped this book, the potential is immense.😊😊😊
The development of the characters is trash the plots have many plot holes. Why allow her sister to go to Grofindor when she can be with him in slytherin to make sure that future conflicts won’t happen. Don’t excuse that you want her to have the freedom of choice. It’s just basically common sense to go to slytherin with your brother knowing your situation.
I really like the general concept of the story and hope that the story will continue for a long time and for the author to finish it.
Read the first volume. Writing Quality ✍: 5.0/5 0 above webnovel standards although there are a few misplaced he/she. Overall a good pace and worth to read.
Other than author forcing plot to stay as close to original as possible which should be impossible (by dumbing down MC for example) its quite nice HP fanfic
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Muito bom continue assim🤩🤩............................................................................................................................................................................................................
Are you love idea in the story please continue Rising and don't drop the story[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=update]
Sou do Brasil, mesmo lendo na tradução automática está ótimo, agradeço pelo novos capítulos e digo que a história está incrível, personagens complexos, ótimo desenvolvimento, uma ótima escrita e uma boa premissa, espero que n pare pq seria uma tristeza imensa n poder ler isto
The other reviews seem overwhelmingly positive, but none of them mention the pacing of the story. I only read a few chapters, but it was enough to get an idea of how this story was gonna go. The protagonists are complete Mary Sue's. While they're still toddlers, it's discovered that they're both naturals at the mind arts. At the age of 7, apparently, both protagonists are at the level of 7th year hogwarts students. We're never shown any training or learning, and they've not even received wands yet. They later receive legacy wands, not matched to them, so they should be less efficient and hard to use, but it doesn't really matter for them. Both are suddenly able to use corporeal patronuses. In just a few months, they both become the youngest animagi in history. That's where I decided to drop this story. Development is never shown. There's just short timeskips followed by boosts in power. What's the point of a story like this? Having a character become powerful is nice, but there's no satisfaction if we never get to witness the growth. I was interested because I've not seen many Grindlewald fics, but I'm incredibly disappointed with this.
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What a new idea for this FF, I enjoy the story so keep going please [img=update]
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This fanfic is one of the better harry Potter stories on Web-Novel, be it character development or the background its's wonderful read I will recommend it for anyone wanting to give it a try
As I was just reminded by the author to write a review, I'm doing so now. I'm not particularly good at this, but I'll try a bit. The MC, Alaric, is not a wimp, and he's smart. Like, actually, really smart. He is maybe slightly overpowered, but not unreasonably so. How else would he fight someone like Moldywart without cheats like Harry has? Oh, yeah! He holds a huge grudge against Voldyshorts because he mentally crippled his dad, understandable. Last but not least (I think), he has a certain amount of mugglephobia, which his twin sister doesn't. Said sister is also a boring and proper lion, and he's a snake with other sane snake friends. Dang it! It wasn't the last point! They're both becoming animagi. That's it! I'm finished! Bye!
Hello author I wanted to know if there is harem in this novel also who will be the love interest/s?
Just read this yesterday and what a ride, had me engrossed and excited about what was happening. I would recommend people read it first as you will be encaptured into the story pretty quickly. Only downside atm is the low number of chapters and I can’t wait to read more.
this is a good fanfiction it is better than 999.99 of the other Harry Potter FanFictions keep it up author
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A good Fan-fiction with a well built MC. I like the flaws of Alaric. The fact that he don't like muggle is good point for me. I can't stand a perfect MC anymore.
Overall, this is a great fic. The characters are all well written, dialogue reads smooth, and the pacing isn’t too fast or too slow.
This novel is really fascinating , and I must say, it has truly captivated my imagination. The premise revolves around an original character who transmigrates into the body of none other than Grindelwald's grandson. It's an intriguing concept that instantly piqued my interest. One of the aspects I particularly enjoy about this story is the potential for character development. Witnessing the protagonist navigate his complex situation, adapting to his new identity and the challenges it brings, adds layers of depth to the narrative. Exploring the intricate web of relationships within the Harry Potter universe through a fresh perspective is truly refreshing. However, I must admit that the story does have its drawbacks. The main issue for me lies in the lack of chapters and the slow updates. As an ardent fan of the story, it can be a bit frustrating to eagerly await new chapters, hoping to immerse myself further in this captivating world. Nevertheless, the quality of the writing and the author's dedication to the narrative keep me invested, despite the occasional wait. And lastly, I have an immense fondness for the idea of Fleur Delacour being the love interest of the protagonist in this story. The allure of her character, with her grace, beauty, and enchanting presence, captivates me. I envision a potential romance between Alaric and Fleur that would be filled with undeniable chemistry, tender moments, and a profound connection.
Amazing story so far. I just finished reading the first year and must say that I just love the characters. While the twins do seam a bit OP for their age, with the description of their level being “they are up to 7th year curriculum at 7 years of age” sounding quite unrealistic, they are still well written. I can’t wait for more updates.
Decent story up until the potters are still alive which is a huge part of Harry Potter that really took me out of this FF
I love this novel. One of the best I've read on this platform. Hope it keeps being updated
It really seems like a promising story. I also really like the fact that while not necessarily hating muggle, the mc isn't too fond of them either. As of now, it looks well balanced. So good job and continue your good work.
OMG. This story is truly magnificent, the language is written fluently and the character design is also top notch. I haven’t read any HP fic before, that just fulfills every good aspect of a story while also giving characters deepness. It feels as if the author is a professional writer, his writing style is just so good. I hope he keeps updating as fast as usually, cause I can’ t get enough of the story.
=Review as of Chapter 72= Writing quality: I've got some writing experience, mainly from contests I entered as a hobby, so my story has, at least, comprehensible sentence structure and good grammar (There will always be one or two mistakes once in a while, but I usually correct them as soon as a reader points them out). I tried to adapt my writing style to the web novel format, so the earlier chapters are a mix of various styles I tried to implement (Even first-person POV). Despite that, I'm proud to say that I've found a style I'm comfortable writing with, and plan to re-write the earlier twenty or so chapters when I have the time. Stability of Updates: I'm a uni student, so there are weeks where I really don't find the time to write, but otherwise, I release at least four chapters a week, with a minimum of 2000 words per chapter. If I find myself with more free time, the chance of more chapters coming out is quite high. Story Development: I can't say much on this topic without making this review a spoiler, which is not my intention. As of now, I'm currently writing the Third-Year, and considering this is a Small AU, the canon plot has gone haywire a long time ago, although some key elements will remain. Character Design: If you've come here with the intention of reading about a Gary Stu story, then don't waste your time. The main character and his sister (who I consider a sub-main character of sorts) are strong compared to their peers but are still nowhere near the level of powerful wizards. If there's one thing that I could write about forever, is the struggles characters face in order to achieve their objectives, so, again, if you want to read about an extremely overpowered character, don't bother. World Background: There isn't much to say here, only that I add certain parts to the Wizarding World that compliment its original setting, and that I try to cover certain small plot holes not addressed in the books. *Extra* Romance: No-Harem :D (But there's more than one FML).
really wanna see alaric be with a slytherin girl they don't get that much love in most fics and someone like flure delacore is soo overused i am tired of it .it would be refrshing and intresting to see him with a slytherin girl like tracy instead of the normal fanfic thing of flure.
Author, just wanna check up on you and make sure you have not dropped this book, the potential is immense.😊😊😊
The development of the characters is trash the plots have many plot holes. Why allow her sister to go to Grofindor when she can be with him in slytherin to make sure that future conflicts won’t happen. Don’t excuse that you want her to have the freedom of choice. It’s just basically common sense to go to slytherin with your brother knowing your situation.
I really like the general concept of the story and hope that the story will continue for a long time and for the author to finish it.
Read the first volume. Writing Quality ✍: 5.0/5 0 above webnovel standards although there are a few misplaced he/she. Overall a good pace and worth to read.
Other than author forcing plot to stay as close to original as possible which should be impossible (by dumbing down MC for example) its quite nice HP fanfic
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is the sister the love instrest? ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------
Muito bom continue assim🤩🤩............................................................................................................................................................................................................
Are you love idea in the story please continue Rising and don't drop the story[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=update]
Sou do Brasil, mesmo lendo na tradução automática está ótimo, agradeço pelo novos capítulos e digo que a história está incrível, personagens complexos, ótimo desenvolvimento, uma ótima escrita e uma boa premissa, espero que n pare pq seria uma tristeza imensa n poder ler isto
The other reviews seem overwhelmingly positive, but none of them mention the pacing of the story. I only read a few chapters, but it was enough to get an idea of how this story was gonna go. The protagonists are complete Mary Sue's. While they're still toddlers, it's discovered that they're both naturals at the mind arts. At the age of 7, apparently, both protagonists are at the level of 7th year hogwarts students. We're never shown any training or learning, and they've not even received wands yet. They later receive legacy wands, not matched to them, so they should be less efficient and hard to use, but it doesn't really matter for them. Both are suddenly able to use corporeal patronuses. In just a few months, they both become the youngest animagi in history. That's where I decided to drop this story. Development is never shown. There's just short timeskips followed by boosts in power. What's the point of a story like this? Having a character become powerful is nice, but there's no satisfaction if we never get to witness the growth. I was interested because I've not seen many Grindlewald fics, but I'm incredibly disappointed with this.
Spoiler de révélation What a new idea for this FF, I enjoy the story so keep going please [img=update]
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This fanfic is one of the better harry Potter stories on Web-Novel, be it character development or the background its's wonderful read I will recommend it for anyone wanting to give it a try
As I was just reminded by the author to write a review, I'm doing so now. I'm not particularly good at this, but I'll try a bit. The MC, Alaric, is not a wimp, and he's smart. Like, actually, really smart. He is maybe slightly overpowered, but not unreasonably so. How else would he fight someone like Moldywart without cheats like Harry has? Oh, yeah! He holds a huge grudge against Voldyshorts because he mentally crippled his dad, understandable. Last but not least (I think), he has a certain amount of mugglephobia, which his twin sister doesn't. Said sister is also a boring and proper lion, and he's a snake with other sane snake friends. Dang it! It wasn't the last point! They're both becoming animagi. That's it! I'm finished! Bye!
Hello author I wanted to know if there is harem in this novel also who will be the love interest/s?
Just read this yesterday and what a ride, had me engrossed and excited about what was happening. I would recommend people read it first as you will be encaptured into the story pretty quickly. Only downside atm is the low number of chapters and I can’t wait to read more.
this is a good fanfiction it is better than 999.99 of the other Harry Potter FanFictions keep it up author
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A good Fan-fiction with a well built MC. I like the flaws of Alaric. The fact that he don't like muggle is good point for me. I can't stand a perfect MC anymore.
Overall, this is a great fic. The characters are all well written, dialogue reads smooth, and the pacing isn’t too fast or too slow.
This novel is really fascinating , and I must say, it has truly captivated my imagination. The premise revolves around an original character who transmigrates into the body of none other than Grindelwald's grandson. It's an intriguing concept that instantly piqued my interest. One of the aspects I particularly enjoy about this story is the potential for character development. Witnessing the protagonist navigate his complex situation, adapting to his new identity and the challenges it brings, adds layers of depth to the narrative. Exploring the intricate web of relationships within the Harry Potter universe through a fresh perspective is truly refreshing. However, I must admit that the story does have its drawbacks. The main issue for me lies in the lack of chapters and the slow updates. As an ardent fan of the story, it can be a bit frustrating to eagerly await new chapters, hoping to immerse myself further in this captivating world. Nevertheless, the quality of the writing and the author's dedication to the narrative keep me invested, despite the occasional wait. And lastly, I have an immense fondness for the idea of Fleur Delacour being the love interest of the protagonist in this story. The allure of her character, with her grace, beauty, and enchanting presence, captivates me. I envision a potential romance between Alaric and Fleur that would be filled with undeniable chemistry, tender moments, and a profound connection.
Amazing story so far. I just finished reading the first year and must say that I just love the characters. While the twins do seam a bit OP for their age, with the description of their level being “they are up to 7th year curriculum at 7 years of age” sounding quite unrealistic, they are still well written. I can’t wait for more updates.
Decent story up until the potters are still alive which is a huge part of Harry Potter that really took me out of this FF
I love this novel. One of the best I've read on this platform. Hope it keeps being updated
It really seems like a promising story. I also really like the fact that while not necessarily hating muggle, the mc isn't too fond of them either. As of now, it looks well balanced. So good job and continue your good work.