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oshi no ko oshi no ko oshi no ko oshi no ko oshi no ko oshi no ko oshi no ko oshi no ko oshi no ko oshi no ko oshi no ko oshi no ko oshi no ko oshi no ko oshi no ko oshi no ko
Garbage. Like 99.999% of harem stories on here. The novel only focuses on.. you guessed it the harem and nothing else. ...............................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................
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- Grammar is good even i see some miss "quote" - Too much monologue chapter for each character even its good, but consecutive is bad especially cliffhanger I didnt read or watch oshi no ko, but have certain knowledge about their name character, but because of that I can't guess how far MC knows the future, because of that i didnt like how MC let go his father. i dont know if MC know about stalker is one of Hikaru people, but from how he choose to monitor both of them i assume he knew about it, so by logic MC should kill him even tho Miyako stop him in the end. i decided to stop now because from how you write there will be many monologue chapter and main story will got many cliffhanger, i can't wait how height this novel will grow
for me the best oshi no ko fanfiction the only one that has good story development
BECAUSE SHE IS ALIVE, YOU GET A 5 STAR. GOOD JOB YOUNG LAD. YOU UNDERSTAND THE SACREDNESS OF WINCHEST. KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK. EXPECTING A LOT FROM YOU.
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Muy bueno 👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍
5* Review just for the fact that he didn't break the rules to save Ai. Most of what I've read just bring out an oc(s) they created, inserted them in oshi no ko brings, and boom Ai is saved but this Author make goes a great lengths so that this Aqua can save Ai, and what's matter more(In my opinion) he reform the story slightly here and there so that Ai can be saved and not just break down the whole storyline, and what's more is that his interpretation of Oshi no ko is nearly perfect so if u make urself believe it, u can make this a canon oshi no ko where Ai got savedOf course, the reason I'm going to great lengths to address this, is that Ai's death got me so unsettled that it even makes me unable to sleep for some nights so I try turning my attention to FF hoping Ai can be saved in some timelines and I have to thank the author since I enjoyed reading this and my weird condition has also been cured so Yea thanks u I guesstotally unrelated tho, ur previous FF about stealing heroines is hot *f
honestly, i can only say i like it. the plot in particular i really like, ussually youd expect like system or maybe "golden finger"(thats what chinese people call it) or essentially cheats when someone transmigrates to the world of anime, but usually these things upset the power balance and makes some parts of the novel not make sense. if i had to say though, maybe make aqua more "vulnerable" ? or maybe show emotions or inner thoughts so he seems more human, so far it feels that tinge of unrealism or hole in the stpry where somehow hes able to plan and do all these things without having any difficulty under the so called pretext of practice, after all we are not shown or informed his past life whether hes a genius or a dunce, a lazy person who wants to live a laidback life or a hardworking maniac, well thats it, i like youre story since its just up to 50 chapters rnow from where im reading, it seems to have a lot of potential for worldbuilding. ps: i like how u include the pov of different characters when a big incident happens.
I like it so 5 star.___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
(This happened through the Google translator, since I don't speak English) This is the first time I'm going to write a review and unfortunately it will be a bad one. First of all, the story does not advance, it has more than 49 chapters and everything I saw can be put in 10 maximum 15. the story feels like they want to rush it and drag it out at the same time, which is annoying. I will leave a score of 3.8 stars since as such I cannot say that the story is good, but it is not that bad either.
This is pure gold, I hope ypu are not going to drop this author. There are not many good fanfics like this !
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gonna be hones with you dude, i did not read a single chapter of this story, i just want to tell you that the cover is pretty disturbing, the woman's hands, they are too big, her arm looks disproportional, i honestly feel uncomfortable every time i see it on the recommended, just wanted you all to know, that is freaky
Honestly, this is better than I thought. The first 30 or so chaps were kind of hard to get through as they were almost a copy and paste of canon, but after that it is 👌. I mean, there are plot holes and the grammar isn't the best but still a pretty good Oshi no Ko FF.
I really liked how the author changed the tragedy but I'm kinda scared with the possibility of Ruby having a love interest in Aqua... They're brother and sister so of course I would find that shipp really weird...
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- The idea of involving an idol in a fanfic is a unique idea, and you handle it quite well. however, it is recommended that you pay more attention to character development and create a close connection between the characters so that the reader can delve more deeply into the story and better understand the emotions, thoughts, and behavior of the characters. - Your raft is packed with interesting ideas and sometimes seems complicated. It is recommended that you clarify what is going on and reveal events and ideas more thoroughly so that the reader can better understand and empathize with what is happening. - It is recommended that you edit the text and correct spelling and grammatical errors to make the text look more professional. - You should also pay attention to the development of the plot so that it advances with the flow of the piece. Structure the chapters and events well so that each event contributes to the fanfic as a whole. - Finally, you might recommend that you add more detailed descriptions of locations and character characteristics so that the reader can visualize the events being described and the pictorial imagery of the characters, so they can get more deeply into the work. Overall, your fanfic has interesting ideas, but it is recommended that you pay more attention to character development, visual interpretation, plot structure, and grammatical impropriety to make your work more successful. I hope these guidelines will help you further develop your story and give it the personal style you so desire.
I am the bone of my sword Steel is my body and fire is my blood I have created over a thousand blades Unknown to death Nor known to life Have withstood pain to create many weapons Yet those hands shall never hold anything So, as I pray, Unlimited Blade Works
Havent read this, i'm waiting to pile up chapters, but here is a 5 star review to motivate author to keep making new chapters!✨
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As a certified weeb I applaud the weebness here represented, all in all good wish fufillment
Un buen fanfic pero abusa demasiado de los pov (enserio más de 10 capitulos de pov seguidos solo para alargar el suspenso) y está armando un deus ex machina con el padre solo porque si. El transfondo mundial apenas si se toca pero entiendo que es porque recién sale del prólogo. La taza de actualización es buena. La calidad de escritura se puede mejorar pero ya es buena. El desarrollo de la historia varía de ser inexistente por más de 10 capítulos a querer desarrollar todo en 2. Diseño de personajes... Son personajes básicos en general incluso con la cantidad de desarrollo que les dio con los pov.
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This is a really good story. Especially since this is the first Oshi No No fanfiction. Not to mention the MC will have the legendary oyakodon. Keep up the good work.
Ngl i thought a lot about what to write as a review but i don't know what to say well i may be an airhead but it's the fact that this a great novel not because of its a fanfic cause it was depicted by a good author ... As the dark clouds cannot make the sun's brilliance disappear, in this world full of deceits, facts cannot be changed by lies .... So author san keep writing this story i will always wait for the chaps ❤️
Honestly, it is a pleasant surprise to have found a novel as great as the one I am reading, so much so that I look forward to more future updates of the chapters that follow. I thank you author.
This is a shameless review from the author. I think the writing quality is good, it's just that the grammar helped by machine translated. Updates are almost certainly updated every day, unless there is a long vacation. Story development, this is a fanfic so if the original is good, it's easy to make good story. Character design, as long as there is Ai I give 5 stars. World Background, where there is Ai I give 5 stars.
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Historia abandonada por qué el autor no puede sacar dinero del fanfic ?? autor es ghostyz ??? [img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap]
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oshi no ko oshi no ko oshi no ko oshi no ko oshi no ko oshi no ko oshi no ko oshi no ko oshi no ko oshi no ko oshi no ko oshi no ko oshi no ko oshi no ko oshi no ko oshi no ko
Garbage. Like 99.999% of harem stories on here. The novel only focuses on.. you guessed it the harem and nothing else. ...............................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................
Spoiler de révélation - Grammar is good even i see some miss "quote" - Too much monologue chapter for each character even its good, but consecutive is bad especially cliffhanger I didnt read or watch oshi no ko, but have certain knowledge about their name character, but because of that I can't guess how far MC knows the future, because of that i didnt like how MC let go his father. i dont know if MC know about stalker is one of Hikaru people, but from how he choose to monitor both of them i assume he knew about it, so by logic MC should kill him even tho Miyako stop him in the end. i decided to stop now because from how you write there will be many monologue chapter and main story will got many cliffhanger, i can't wait how height this novel will grow
for me the best oshi no ko fanfiction the only one that has good story development
BECAUSE SHE IS ALIVE, YOU GET A 5 STAR. GOOD JOB YOUNG LAD. YOU UNDERSTAND THE SACREDNESS OF WINCHEST. KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK. EXPECTING A LOT FROM YOU.
Spoiler de révélation Muy bueno 👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍
5* Review just for the fact that he didn't break the rules to save Ai. Most of what I've read just bring out an oc(s) they created, inserted them in oshi no ko brings, and boom Ai is saved but this Author make goes a great lengths so that this Aqua can save Ai, and what's matter more(In my opinion) he reform the story slightly here and there so that Ai can be saved and not just break down the whole storyline, and what's more is that his interpretation of Oshi no ko is nearly perfect so if u make urself believe it, u can make this a canon oshi no ko where Ai got savedOf course, the reason I'm going to great lengths to address this, is that Ai's death got me so unsettled that it even makes me unable to sleep for some nights so I try turning my attention to FF hoping Ai can be saved in some timelines and I have to thank the author since I enjoyed reading this and my weird condition has also been cured so Yea thanks u I guesstotally unrelated tho, ur previous FF about stealing heroines is hot *f
honestly, i can only say i like it. the plot in particular i really like, ussually youd expect like system or maybe "golden finger"(thats what chinese people call it) or essentially cheats when someone transmigrates to the world of anime, but usually these things upset the power balance and makes some parts of the novel not make sense. if i had to say though, maybe make aqua more "vulnerable" ? or maybe show emotions or inner thoughts so he seems more human, so far it feels that tinge of unrealism or hole in the stpry where somehow hes able to plan and do all these things without having any difficulty under the so called pretext of practice, after all we are not shown or informed his past life whether hes a genius or a dunce, a lazy person who wants to live a laidback life or a hardworking maniac, well thats it, i like youre story since its just up to 50 chapters rnow from where im reading, it seems to have a lot of potential for worldbuilding. ps: i like how u include the pov of different characters when a big incident happens.
I like it so 5 star.___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
(This happened through the Google translator, since I don't speak English) This is the first time I'm going to write a review and unfortunately it will be a bad one. First of all, the story does not advance, it has more than 49 chapters and everything I saw can be put in 10 maximum 15. the story feels like they want to rush it and drag it out at the same time, which is annoying. I will leave a score of 3.8 stars since as such I cannot say that the story is good, but it is not that bad either.
This is pure gold, I hope ypu are not going to drop this author. There are not many good fanfics like this !
💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕 . . . . . . . . . 💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕
gonna be hones with you dude, i did not read a single chapter of this story, i just want to tell you that the cover is pretty disturbing, the woman's hands, they are too big, her arm looks disproportional, i honestly feel uncomfortable every time i see it on the recommended, just wanted you all to know, that is freaky
Honestly, this is better than I thought. The first 30 or so chaps were kind of hard to get through as they were almost a copy and paste of canon, but after that it is 👌. I mean, there are plot holes and the grammar isn't the best but still a pretty good Oshi no Ko FF.
I really liked how the author changed the tragedy but I'm kinda scared with the possibility of Ruby having a love interest in Aqua... They're brother and sister so of course I would find that shipp really weird...
Spoiler de révélation ..............,..........................,..................................................................................................
- The idea of involving an idol in a fanfic is a unique idea, and you handle it quite well. however, it is recommended that you pay more attention to character development and create a close connection between the characters so that the reader can delve more deeply into the story and better understand the emotions, thoughts, and behavior of the characters. - Your raft is packed with interesting ideas and sometimes seems complicated. It is recommended that you clarify what is going on and reveal events and ideas more thoroughly so that the reader can better understand and empathize with what is happening. - It is recommended that you edit the text and correct spelling and grammatical errors to make the text look more professional. - You should also pay attention to the development of the plot so that it advances with the flow of the piece. Structure the chapters and events well so that each event contributes to the fanfic as a whole. - Finally, you might recommend that you add more detailed descriptions of locations and character characteristics so that the reader can visualize the events being described and the pictorial imagery of the characters, so they can get more deeply into the work. Overall, your fanfic has interesting ideas, but it is recommended that you pay more attention to character development, visual interpretation, plot structure, and grammatical impropriety to make your work more successful. I hope these guidelines will help you further develop your story and give it the personal style you so desire.
I am the bone of my sword Steel is my body and fire is my blood I have created over a thousand blades Unknown to death Nor known to life Have withstood pain to create many weapons Yet those hands shall never hold anything So, as I pray, Unlimited Blade Works
Havent read this, i'm waiting to pile up chapters, but here is a 5 star review to motivate author to keep making new chapters!✨
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As a certified weeb I applaud the weebness here represented, all in all good wish fufillment
Un buen fanfic pero abusa demasiado de los pov (enserio más de 10 capitulos de pov seguidos solo para alargar el suspenso) y está armando un deus ex machina con el padre solo porque si. El transfondo mundial apenas si se toca pero entiendo que es porque recién sale del prólogo. La taza de actualización es buena. La calidad de escritura se puede mejorar pero ya es buena. El desarrollo de la historia varía de ser inexistente por más de 10 capítulos a querer desarrollar todo en 2. Diseño de personajes... Son personajes básicos en general incluso con la cantidad de desarrollo que les dio con los pov.
Spoiler de révélation This is a really good story. Especially since this is the first Oshi No No fanfiction. Not to mention the MC will have the legendary oyakodon. Keep up the good work.
Ngl i thought a lot about what to write as a review but i don't know what to say well i may be an airhead but it's the fact that this a great novel not because of its a fanfic cause it was depicted by a good author ... As the dark clouds cannot make the sun's brilliance disappear, in this world full of deceits, facts cannot be changed by lies .... So author san keep writing this story i will always wait for the chaps ❤️
Honestly, it is a pleasant surprise to have found a novel as great as the one I am reading, so much so that I look forward to more future updates of the chapters that follow. I thank you author.
This is a shameless review from the author. I think the writing quality is good, it's just that the grammar helped by machine translated. Updates are almost certainly updated every day, unless there is a long vacation. Story development, this is a fanfic so if the original is good, it's easy to make good story. Character design, as long as there is Ai I give 5 stars. World Background, where there is Ai I give 5 stars.