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It's a nice fic. Author has done a great job portraying MVS world. Although it has a lot of minor mistakes with grammar, spelling mistake etc, it's still easy to immerse. Friendly advice author, if you find it hard to correct those mistakes use free AI tools. Advanced writing AI will enhance the quality. Hope it helps. 😊
A lot of spelling and grammar mistakes but not any major ones so its pretty easy to guess but besides that its a pretty good read. Author might want to make a discord server for people to help him proofread
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don't have much to say because am the author, all thanks to jks, this book is born in existence all I can tell the readers is, the book gets better as it moves on the carefree over powered mc, as he thinks himself to be, found himself in a trickery situation where he is no different from the original mc situation lastly, please don't mind the typos in the novel, I apologized before hand, o would find a way to fix them or get someone to help me out till then do enjoy the book and don't forget to vote, Rate and leave comments thanks.
This look good. even tho i haven't read the novel vampire system. also have you read My Three Wives Are Beautiful Vampires ? if yes then will you consider making a ff
Grammer, wrong sentence structures, and sentences that make no real sense and make you play sherlock holmes to try and find out what the Author might have meant. I tried to at least correct some obvious mistakes and commented under the paragraphs but gave up after some time and instead left a comment on a paragraph with some writing tips, that will hopefully help him/her. People who hate bad grammar and can not excuse it and hate stories filled with it, then this fanfic is not for you. Author, I hope you read this and maybe try to follow the tips and improve your mistakes. Anyway, I will probably not read further and just simply save it in the Library and wait if the Author makes some updates to his already existing chapters and corrects the mistakes. Till then good bye
I have completed reading My vampire system . Please continue the story and bring back Quin Talen.
It's a nice fic. Author has done a great job portraying MVS world. Although it has a lot of minor mistakes with grammar, spelling mistake etc, it's still easy to immerse. Friendly advice author, if you find it hard to correct those mistakes use free AI tools. Advanced writing AI will enhance the quality. Hope it helps. 😊
A lot of spelling and grammar mistakes but not any major ones so its pretty easy to guess but besides that its a pretty good read. Author might want to make a discord server for people to help him proofread
Nice i like this kind of fanfic...hope you continue to upload more,👌👌👌 ,(✧Д✧)→(｡◕‿◕｡)➜( ՞ਊ ՞）→<(￣︶￣)↗(✧Д✧)→*･゜ﾟ(^O^)↝( ՞ਊ ՞）→*･゜ﾟ(^O^)↝( ՞ਊ ՞）→*･゜ﾟ(^O^)↝( ՞ਊ ՞）→╰( ･ ᗜ ･ )➝( ՞ਊ ՞）→
don't have much to say because am the author, all thanks to jks, this book is born in existence all I can tell the readers is, the book gets better as it moves on the carefree over powered mc, as he thinks himself to be, found himself in a trickery situation where he is no different from the original mc situation lastly, please don't mind the typos in the novel, I apologized before hand, o would find a way to fix them or get someone to help me out till then do enjoy the book and don't forget to vote, Rate and leave comments thanks.
This look good. even tho i haven't read the novel vampire system. also have you read My Three Wives Are Beautiful Vampires ? if yes then will you consider making a ff
Grammer, wrong sentence structures, and sentences that make no real sense and make you play sherlock holmes to try and find out what the Author might have meant. I tried to at least correct some obvious mistakes and commented under the paragraphs but gave up after some time and instead left a comment on a paragraph with some writing tips, that will hopefully help him/her. People who hate bad grammar and can not excuse it and hate stories filled with it, then this fanfic is not for you. Author, I hope you read this and maybe try to follow the tips and improve your mistakes. Anyway, I will probably not read further and just simply save it in the Library and wait if the Author makes some updates to his already existing chapters and corrects the mistakes. Till then good bye
I have completed reading My vampire system . Please continue the story and bring back Quin Talen.