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40 Yards

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Auteur: Jeffery_XXVI

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Synopsis

Wanting to become a striker, Byron Whitaker was hit with a dose of reality that told him that he wasn't adequate enough to be one.

Due to this he is put as a central midfielder and that's where his talents truly shine, his passing, his stamina, his vision. All these things make him realize he was looking at the pitch with a closed mind.

However, in this new position he can still achieve his dream, his dream of becoming a pro player. However, even though he accepted a position change, he would never give up his love for goals.

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    Potatoplanet

    Very nice start, Very nice characters. I actually can’t wait for more.

    1yr
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    isolated_nerd1606

    You have a very nice core for the story , author . Just hold on to it . It has a very nice development . Maybe the only thing holding the story back is over complication of character and repeated use of names . At the same time , So many new names have been introduced that the main character and important supporting characters are being overshadowed . Else , its all good and will be watching over the progression of story.

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