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I really love the stories development. Honestly I think the romance was rushed and not sure if the FL was the best option, but that's a personal opinion. I like the thought of the MC just continously working to get stronger. Question: Did he get a lot stronger after fighting the Nomu since he almost died? Also, author will you come back to writing this novel? I absolutely love it. It is above a lot of fan pics that I've read. It would be a shame to let it die. Thanks for the good work.
This feels like the author had a cool idea, and decide that instead of adjusting the idea so that it makes sense, he would change everything else so that his idea has to work. There is so much random bs for the plot, like how instead of doing any actual powerscaling, he just straight up puts him in a different universe where all the characters are supposedly stronger (not specified by how much or in what way). And when author finally decides there needs to be some conflict, he goes for mc’s orphanage not having enough money, but wait one of his wishes already asked for $30k, so he just decides that isn’t enough, but mc is still a child and has no way of making money, so he just decides to make up a world martial arts tournament, db style, which doesn’t make much sense in a world where the focus is quirks and some people have mutated bodies that would either give them an unfair advantage or disqualify them. Anyways, it just feels like the story wasn’t really thought out, and so the author keeps coming up with random conveniences so thinks can go how he imagined which is kind of annoying and something that bothers me. If that doesn’t bother you and you can suspend disbelief long enough to deal with the plot conveniences, by all means go ahead, the writing isn’t bad and it’s an interesting story idea.
Me encantaría leerlo, pero ver qué está Out desde hace un año, me quita las ganas.... Una verdadera lastima, pero no hay nada que pueda hacer, odio leer una historia y terminar esperando un par de meses para el próximo capítulo.
I mean it’s was great up until the author introduced another reincarnated person. Just set the whole thing up for a crash and burn. Mad me put my leg down from chair. Haiyah
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It's got good writing quality, progression is mixed from GoH but kinda makes sense in a quirk world, world background is decent and the character personality is chill, kinda easygoing, hero morals goody two shoes begone as well. Story has been good so far, keep it up author. Note: that I am in any way a professional reviewer, read at your own risks
writing quality is excellent. story development with its build up and unexpected new character intro was superb. but main problem being mc when you power up everyone else and your mc is getting beat up even when he was training from the age of 4yrs making it quite meaningless if he is going get beat up when it was a really important( or in Canon). I like the bond he has with his reincarnated friend but this friend is more op and more importantly wins in a fight, so I think he should be the mc, as the main job is being done by him. I don't think mc will be getting stronger soon and since the villains are stronger than him hence reducing mc's role as a support hero.
I really like the world building but I love it if I had some form of main cast interaction but either way it's fine and I love how you are not just copy pasting the time like USJ to sportsfestival to the David sheild's island arc and etc etc.
it's like born on "Shokugeki no Soma" instead became chef but became musician. if mc of this novel came to wuxia or chinmi he's probably average at most.
First of all, as a martial arts focused fix, no overpowered powers and allat. The fighting parts are just straight up pasting skill names (goofy). Partner choice is toga himiko which the MC simps for too much, gives her 1 liter of blood daily. Also, as a 20+ yr old reincarnate he easily gets mad over taunts and cocky opponents like a lil kid. The only interesting thing in this story is the renewal taekwondo but ig the author wasn't able to show how good it is instead of spamming 10 skills like it's an rpg.
Este libro es muy bueno no es cliche el protagonista es bastante bueno :):):)):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):)):):):):):):):):)):)):):):):):):):):):):):):):):)):):):):):):(:
For new readers out there, as you reach Arc 3 of the chapter, fair warning, the author went for more than one reincanator in the story
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I freaking love this fanfic . there are a lot of fanfic out there but this is truly outstanding . other fanfic show or write what's already we know like following plots of anime which is easy way to make your fanfic boring . keep going like this and you will keep getting stones and I want at least 200 ch for this fanfic pls .
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Not bad at all, not many fanfics let the MC pursue a purely martial path without some cultivation/magic bs just for plot armor or something like that. I like the fact that different martial arts were introduced so it's not a repetitive cycle of 'punch, kick, punch' like most writers present as of today (seriously, you'd be surprised at how many just write stuff along the lines of "X punched Y to the sky, then kicked Y back to the ground" without any details whatsoever.) the fact that the world is more 'balanced' with the 2x increase in difficulty makes for an interesting premise when talking about how will the plot develop, don't need to mention how it'll affect cannon because it still hasn't started so it remains to be seen. overall a good novel, could give a little bit more background to the world outside of martial arts and the tournaments and the characters be developed over time, the writing quality is good and I've seen little to no mistakes in the wording and grammar. thank you for giving us a good novel and hope to see more of it in the near future, keep improving and i wish you the best of luck with it~~
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started out great with martial arts focus, then became cringe when MC decides to be a Vigilante/criminal
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El titulo esta mal, es una historia de god high school pero mas nerfeada
so far so good. love how it's the martial arts centered but we need more more more. especially geared 2........................................................................
Don't waste your time on this bs fanfic........nothing related to mha at all...no character interaction....fkin disappointing that's all...................
a very unique take on a BNHA fanfiction. love the implementation of GOH elements along with a quirk that's perfect for the MC. writing quality is better than most things published on this platform and the story development is going at a perfect pace. keep up the work and I'll be awaiting more.
Very cool and unique fic. Keep going author. Maybe you can involve Ojiro And Itsuka in the future somehow? They are both martial arts based hero-in-training.
It's really a cool fanfic and a good read, but it's worth mentioning that the Martial Arts side is really relevant in this fanfic unlike others where the MC simply learns a cheated martial art and joins the UA. I personally like it, but those who only care about canon-related events and characters might not have the patience to read such a martial arts-focused fic.
Very good. Although character is influences by child mind its still good and mc is very op but not with superpowers but with pure martial arts currently and i just hope hes not going to get a superpower
I don't know anything else but just kept going and get those words up and have a viable ending since we reader's are tired of either dropped FF's or just straight up disappear in the ends of the earth with unfinished FF.
Hey! It's me. I'm purely rating this out of my writing quality and what not. My English is not the worst, it's above average I'd say (Even if I usually reuse words). As for the stability of updates, I update 3 times a week constantly, more if there's a holiday or something to commemorate so I hope that counts as 5 stars. And as for story development, I try to emphasize my MC's journey more than the main plot so the plot is going to take a while to reach, but there will be easter eggs on some main characters, so please keep an eye out. Character Design... Hmm... As of chapter 11, I still haven't finalized a design for him. I've already got his personality and abilities down, but design-wise, not yet. I'll keep you guys updated. And world background. I'm keeping some aspects of the world of BNHA the same before the plot, but once we reach it, oh boy it's going to be interesting. Well, that's my review of Chapters 1 to 11. I'll update more on my review the further we go, but for now, I hope this is enough to satisfy incoming viewers/readers that want a pure review. Thanks for reading this, and I hope you have a great day!
I really love the stories development. Honestly I think the romance was rushed and not sure if the FL was the best option, but that's a personal opinion. I like the thought of the MC just continously working to get stronger. Question: Did he get a lot stronger after fighting the Nomu since he almost died? Also, author will you come back to writing this novel? I absolutely love it. It is above a lot of fan pics that I've read. It would be a shame to let it die. Thanks for the good work.
This feels like the author had a cool idea, and decide that instead of adjusting the idea so that it makes sense, he would change everything else so that his idea has to work. There is so much random bs for the plot, like how instead of doing any actual powerscaling, he just straight up puts him in a different universe where all the characters are supposedly stronger (not specified by how much or in what way). And when author finally decides there needs to be some conflict, he goes for mc’s orphanage not having enough money, but wait one of his wishes already asked for $30k, so he just decides that isn’t enough, but mc is still a child and has no way of making money, so he just decides to make up a world martial arts tournament, db style, which doesn’t make much sense in a world where the focus is quirks and some people have mutated bodies that would either give them an unfair advantage or disqualify them. Anyways, it just feels like the story wasn’t really thought out, and so the author keeps coming up with random conveniences so thinks can go how he imagined which is kind of annoying and something that bothers me. If that doesn’t bother you and you can suspend disbelief long enough to deal with the plot conveniences, by all means go ahead, the writing isn’t bad and it’s an interesting story idea.
Me encantaría leerlo, pero ver qué está Out desde hace un año, me quita las ganas.... Una verdadera lastima, pero no hay nada que pueda hacer, odio leer una historia y terminar esperando un par de meses para el próximo capítulo.
I mean it’s was great up until the author introduced another reincarnated person. Just set the whole thing up for a crash and burn. Mad me put my leg down from chair. Haiyah
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It's got good writing quality, progression is mixed from GoH but kinda makes sense in a quirk world, world background is decent and the character personality is chill, kinda easygoing, hero morals goody two shoes begone as well. Story has been good so far, keep it up author. Note: that I am in any way a professional reviewer, read at your own risks
writing quality is excellent. story development with its build up and unexpected new character intro was superb. but main problem being mc when you power up everyone else and your mc is getting beat up even when he was training from the age of 4yrs making it quite meaningless if he is going get beat up when it was a really important( or in Canon). I like the bond he has with his reincarnated friend but this friend is more op and more importantly wins in a fight, so I think he should be the mc, as the main job is being done by him. I don't think mc will be getting stronger soon and since the villains are stronger than him hence reducing mc's role as a support hero.
I really like the world building but I love it if I had some form of main cast interaction but either way it's fine and I love how you are not just copy pasting the time like USJ to sportsfestival to the David sheild's island arc and etc etc.
it's like born on "Shokugeki no Soma" instead became chef but became musician. if mc of this novel came to wuxia or chinmi he's probably average at most.
First of all, as a martial arts focused fix, no overpowered powers and allat. The fighting parts are just straight up pasting skill names (goofy). Partner choice is toga himiko which the MC simps for too much, gives her 1 liter of blood daily. Also, as a 20+ yr old reincarnate he easily gets mad over taunts and cocky opponents like a lil kid. The only interesting thing in this story is the renewal taekwondo but ig the author wasn't able to show how good it is instead of spamming 10 skills like it's an rpg.
Este libro es muy bueno no es cliche el protagonista es bastante bueno :):):)):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):)):):):):):):):):)):)):):):):):):):):):):):):):):)):):):):):):(:
For new readers out there, as you reach Arc 3 of the chapter, fair warning, the author went for more than one reincanator in the story
Spoiler de révélation I freaking love this fanfic . there are a lot of fanfic out there but this is truly outstanding . other fanfic show or write what's already we know like following plots of anime which is easy way to make your fanfic boring . keep going like this and you will keep getting stones and I want at least 200 ch for this fanfic pls .
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Not bad at all, not many fanfics let the MC pursue a purely martial path without some cultivation/magic bs just for plot armor or something like that. I like the fact that different martial arts were introduced so it's not a repetitive cycle of 'punch, kick, punch' like most writers present as of today (seriously, you'd be surprised at how many just write stuff along the lines of "X punched Y to the sky, then kicked Y back to the ground" without any details whatsoever.) the fact that the world is more 'balanced' with the 2x increase in difficulty makes for an interesting premise when talking about how will the plot develop, don't need to mention how it'll affect cannon because it still hasn't started so it remains to be seen. overall a good novel, could give a little bit more background to the world outside of martial arts and the tournaments and the characters be developed over time, the writing quality is good and I've seen little to no mistakes in the wording and grammar. thank you for giving us a good novel and hope to see more of it in the near future, keep improving and i wish you the best of luck with it~~
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started out great with martial arts focus, then became cringe when MC decides to be a Vigilante/criminal
I like it completely original content...........,.,.,.,.,.,.,.x.,.,,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,..,,.,.,.,.,.,,.,.,.,.,., ,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,,.x.,.,.,.,.,., ,.,.,.,.,.,,.,.,.
El titulo esta mal, es una historia de god high school pero mas nerfeada
so far so good. love how it's the martial arts centered but we need more more more. especially geared 2........................................................................
Don't waste your time on this bs fanfic........nothing related to mha at all...no character interaction....fkin disappointing that's all...................
a very unique take on a BNHA fanfiction. love the implementation of GOH elements along with a quirk that's perfect for the MC. writing quality is better than most things published on this platform and the story development is going at a perfect pace. keep up the work and I'll be awaiting more.
Very cool and unique fic. Keep going author. Maybe you can involve Ojiro And Itsuka in the future somehow? They are both martial arts based hero-in-training.
It's really a cool fanfic and a good read, but it's worth mentioning that the Martial Arts side is really relevant in this fanfic unlike others where the MC simply learns a cheated martial art and joins the UA. I personally like it, but those who only care about canon-related events and characters might not have the patience to read such a martial arts-focused fic.
Very good. Although character is influences by child mind its still good and mc is very op but not with superpowers but with pure martial arts currently and i just hope hes not going to get a superpower
I don't know anything else but just kept going and get those words up and have a viable ending since we reader's are tired of either dropped FF's or just straight up disappear in the ends of the earth with unfinished FF.
Hey! It's me. I'm purely rating this out of my writing quality and what not. My English is not the worst, it's above average I'd say (Even if I usually reuse words). As for the stability of updates, I update 3 times a week constantly, more if there's a holiday or something to commemorate so I hope that counts as 5 stars. And as for story development, I try to emphasize my MC's journey more than the main plot so the plot is going to take a while to reach, but there will be easter eggs on some main characters, so please keep an eye out. Character Design... Hmm... As of chapter 11, I still haven't finalized a design for him. I've already got his personality and abilities down, but design-wise, not yet. I'll keep you guys updated. And world background. I'm keeping some aspects of the world of BNHA the same before the plot, but once we reach it, oh boy it's going to be interesting. Well, that's my review of Chapters 1 to 11. I'll update more on my review the further we go, but for now, I hope this is enough to satisfy incoming viewers/readers that want a pure review. Thanks for reading this, and I hope you have a great day!