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It's a great multiverse and crossover fanfiction!! I like it!!! 😁👍👍 I usually don't like multiverse and crossover story much, because it confusing and MC usually become too strong/op to have a change there (I understand that, but still not my favourite story).. I never read SAO (just know from my friend that like it), but I must say that you make this story so detailed that I like it so much and it make me interest to read SAO (maybe I'll read it one day).. I don't mind harem, just please don't make it too much women for Cotton, and don't steal every heroine 🙏🙏😁 Can't wait to see next chapter.. Keep up the good job author san 😁😁👍👍👍
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the idea flr the story js good but i dont really like hoe you executed it. Thr whome system and the two sides reminds me of demonic ressurection, but worse. The character development is pretty bad i mean we know almost nothing of the mc, you skipped the whole development of the guild and him meeting characters. the only interaction between those two dimensional system players in his guild were where one of them was cooking something and the other was when she left through the backdoor irl. The character development is just seriously bad. Now canon characters like kirito and asuna are also just acting like npc's. Asuna is the typical heroine whose thoughts were written like this 'she is blushing and thinking about how handsome he is'. Thats it. Now world background is also bad. I bet the whole dimensional system is an immediate transfer to another world without a sort of lobby like in other books since rolando said they would most likely meet in other worlds and not in a dimensional in between or something. I like the idea of the system since i read multiple novels with similiar thingd and theyre all fun: 48 hours a day(novel, not the manhua), demonic ressurection(fanfic), devil cage(?)(novel). The two major things i dislike are the characters development and time skips
loved the story but i want lemons author if you know what i mean 😏 😏 😏 😏 😏 😏 😏 😏 😏 😏 😏 😏 😏 😏 😏 😏 😏 😏 😏 😏 😏 😏 😏 😏 😏 😏 😏 😏
Well, this is not bad. I agree with the others that it came with a quite questionable start but the story is going smooth now. This is good enough for me.
I really like this story. The updating schedule of this ff is really stable. I wish the author keeps on posting according to the current rate. I am quite excited for the future chapters of this ff.
A beautiful premise by executed only decently. First, the MC is not intelligent or cautious at all, he just wrecklessly rushes in and plot armor handles the rest. Second, the author writes incredibly bland and non descriptive figjt scenes and summarizes and skips over key info we want to know. For example, he skips all the MCs initial leveling, and neglects to tell us anything at all about how he fought or where or even what. The only reason I initially knew the Mc was grinding using a sword was a skill he purchased from the system. Third, the author has godawful taste in female characters. Asuna as a wife? I mean really? Is salt and pepper on chicken too spicy for you also? Anyway, the concept has tons of potential, and the author can already write decently. This may thus be worth following, but ultimately it feels a bit bland and I cannot rate it more than slightly above average. 6/10, give it a skim if you have nothing else worth reading.
I got nothing to say other than I love this fanfic. At first, there might be some questionable points, and the story is not that smoothly delivered, but in the later chapters, the story delivery got better, and it got me hooked. Overall I enjoyed reading till the current chapter, which is 29.
Just found this last night and now I already caught up. I really enjoyed reading this. Hopefully the next world would be as interesting as the first.
I was planning on writing my first review after the SAO arc, but here I am. I am giving this a rate of 4/5/4/4/5. I liked the story so far. It entertained me enough, as I usually get bored quickly, but this got me hooked. Waiting for more updates.
Currently at chapter 17, and I am loving the story so far. The MC is my cup of tea. At first, the story might seem bland, but it is understandable as it was the author's first work. But from the latest chapters, it seems he is slowly getting better.
Basically a battle royale in anime worlds with multiple players, which I'm honestly on the fence about cause I'm not a huge fan of multiple system/reincarnators/etc but that's all personal opinion. Try it for yourself, I'm not dropping it just gonna sit on it till I'm in the mood for that 4/3/3/5/5
I really loved this fanfic with only 4 chapters, and I found it very similar to a novel I've read, where there is a world system, which has several players from all over the world and they fight each other to complete the missions. Google Translator
Don't mind me. I'm just a shameless author giving myself five stars. I hope that people support my work, and I will try my best to improve my craft.
It's a great multiverse and crossover fanfiction!! I like it!!! 😁👍👍 I usually don't like multiverse and crossover story much, because it confusing and MC usually become too strong/op to have a change there (I understand that, but still not my favourite story).. I never read SAO (just know from my friend that like it), but I must say that you make this story so detailed that I like it so much and it make me interest to read SAO (maybe I'll read it one day).. I don't mind harem, just please don't make it too much women for Cotton, and don't steal every heroine 🙏🙏😁 Can't wait to see next chapter.. Keep up the good job author san 😁😁👍👍👍
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the idea flr the story js good but i dont really like hoe you executed it. Thr whome system and the two sides reminds me of demonic ressurection, but worse. The character development is pretty bad i mean we know almost nothing of the mc, you skipped the whole development of the guild and him meeting characters. the only interaction between those two dimensional system players in his guild were where one of them was cooking something and the other was when she left through the backdoor irl. The character development is just seriously bad. Now canon characters like kirito and asuna are also just acting like npc's. Asuna is the typical heroine whose thoughts were written like this 'she is blushing and thinking about how handsome he is'. Thats it. Now world background is also bad. I bet the whole dimensional system is an immediate transfer to another world without a sort of lobby like in other books since rolando said they would most likely meet in other worlds and not in a dimensional in between or something. I like the idea of the system since i read multiple novels with similiar thingd and theyre all fun: 48 hours a day(novel, not the manhua), demonic ressurection(fanfic), devil cage(?)(novel). The two major things i dislike are the characters development and time skips
loved the story but i want lemons author if you know what i mean 😏 😏 😏 😏 😏 😏 😏 😏 😏 😏 😏 😏 😏 😏 😏 😏 😏 😏 😏 😏 😏 😏 😏 😏 😏 😏 😏 😏
Well, this is not bad. I agree with the others that it came with a quite questionable start but the story is going smooth now. This is good enough for me.
I really like this story. The updating schedule of this ff is really stable. I wish the author keeps on posting according to the current rate. I am quite excited for the future chapters of this ff.
A beautiful premise by executed only decently. First, the MC is not intelligent or cautious at all, he just wrecklessly rushes in and plot armor handles the rest. Second, the author writes incredibly bland and non descriptive figjt scenes and summarizes and skips over key info we want to know. For example, he skips all the MCs initial leveling, and neglects to tell us anything at all about how he fought or where or even what. The only reason I initially knew the Mc was grinding using a sword was a skill he purchased from the system. Third, the author has godawful taste in female characters. Asuna as a wife? I mean really? Is salt and pepper on chicken too spicy for you also? Anyway, the concept has tons of potential, and the author can already write decently. This may thus be worth following, but ultimately it feels a bit bland and I cannot rate it more than slightly above average. 6/10, give it a skim if you have nothing else worth reading.
I got nothing to say other than I love this fanfic. At first, there might be some questionable points, and the story is not that smoothly delivered, but in the later chapters, the story delivery got better, and it got me hooked. Overall I enjoyed reading till the current chapter, which is 29.
Just found this last night and now I already caught up. I really enjoyed reading this. Hopefully the next world would be as interesting as the first.
I was planning on writing my first review after the SAO arc, but here I am. I am giving this a rate of 4/5/4/4/5. I liked the story so far. It entertained me enough, as I usually get bored quickly, but this got me hooked. Waiting for more updates.
Currently at chapter 17, and I am loving the story so far. The MC is my cup of tea. At first, the story might seem bland, but it is understandable as it was the author's first work. But from the latest chapters, it seems he is slowly getting better.
Basically a battle royale in anime worlds with multiple players, which I'm honestly on the fence about cause I'm not a huge fan of multiple system/reincarnators/etc but that's all personal opinion. Try it for yourself, I'm not dropping it just gonna sit on it till I'm in the mood for that 4/3/3/5/5
I really loved this fanfic with only 4 chapters, and I found it very similar to a novel I've read, where there is a world system, which has several players from all over the world and they fight each other to complete the missions. Google Translator
Don't mind me. I'm just a shameless author giving myself five stars. I hope that people support my work, and I will try my best to improve my craft.