17Critiques
4.52
- Qualité de l’écriture
- Stabilité des mises à jour
- Développement de l’histoire
- Conception des personnages
- Contexte du monde
Partagez vos pensées avec les autres
Écrire un avis
I am so bored reading this that I just skip most text since there is a lot of boring over-the-top text I tried to read but after one chapter I get bored like nothing would happen for the chapter. There is just so much text and Ainz is so inactive he does nothing in over 20 chapters he does some things but they are small and only for some of the chapter and my god does he barely talk to the devils at all he is so scared that he is like I have no info I should lay low and so he does nothing we get more pov from side characters then we do ainz like in overlord he would do a test to see how strong everyone is in the world yet here he does nothing but play student while trying to learn about how strong everyone is yet when he gets the fallen as minions he does not ask them anything if he just talks to them for a minute about the magic he would know that they had a different magic system he is so dumb and slow to act and repetitive that he does nothing
Top tier DxD x Overlord fanfic~ It's a bit heavy all that introspection to characters as Miki or the, Murayama was it? Not sure if it was her or Katase now, thoughts. But still a great novel~ Plus, all that Momonga becoming the 'Biblical God' by both Raynare and Demiurge confusion got me there~
Spoiler de révélation
Всё было бы хорошо, если бы из Аинза не сделали дауном, вы реально читателе это гавно? Аинз первым делом отправил бы разведку, а не действовал бы сразу, это технологический мир, а не средневековье, тут нужны документы, и Аинз как работник офиса с нормальной должностью знает всё это. Аинз надел специальный скрывающие кольца, божественного ранга, он не полностью срывает магию и уровни, а снижают до уровня обычных НПС малого ранга, это уже показывали в аниме. Короче, автором я очень разочарован, вы испоганили хорошую идею фанфика, даже тот момент где гг какого-то фига начал испытывать больше эмоции, хотя вы писали что все его пассивные навыки никуда не уши и новые не прибавились, вы даже это забыли..... Мдааааа.....
Spoiler de révélation
Quite a controversial work, well written, but the plot moves at the speed of a manhole cover. For a large amount of written text, almost nothing happened, many things do not need to be described in such detail, since this really kills all the dynamics, which already do not exist. Also, too much time is spent on secondary things, and not enough on the main ones.
great story there is not really anything to criticize here. The only things that kind of bother me is that there are not enough chapters(they are never enough) and certain aspects of the story don't interest me as much as others. For example the MomongaX Albedo chapters. Still I know it's part of the story and it still fits considering it's a DXD fanfiction. There are also aspects that I realy like for example the misconception of Momanga being the biblical god and his relationship with Miki. Good job so far Author hope you realese a new chapter soon.🥰
Spoiler de révélation
very good indeed... if you like ainz playing 4d chess against himself and the big personalities of DxD this is for you.
You are doing absolutely fabulous work. Keep it up. Just change the beginning of your sypnosis and start by telling the word count, because if someone hasn't opened the chapter they will feel like you write small and inconsistent chapter. But if you mention word count, your views will increase. Just like winds of change. PeaceFan of your work.
nice fanfc[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]
Spoiler de révélation
Great story, please don't drop this. I need more of this. (random gif i found)
good story 👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍🔝👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍
So far this is really good, it fleshes out the characters well and does feal like I’m reading Overlord! Keep it up and take your time!
I only finished reading the prologue, but that was enough for me to get strong emotions from this work. Respect to the author![img=Feeling it][img=Feeling it][img=Feeling it][img=Feeling it][img=Feeling it]
I am so bored reading this that I just skip most text since there is a lot of boring over-the-top text I tried to read but after one chapter I get bored like nothing would happen for the chapter. There is just so much text and Ainz is so inactive he does nothing in over 20 chapters he does some things but they are small and only for some of the chapter and my god does he barely talk to the devils at all he is so scared that he is like I have no info I should lay low and so he does nothing we get more pov from side characters then we do ainz like in overlord he would do a test to see how strong everyone is in the world yet here he does nothing but play student while trying to learn about how strong everyone is yet when he gets the fallen as minions he does not ask them anything if he just talks to them for a minute about the magic he would know that they had a different magic system he is so dumb and slow to act and repetitive that he does nothing
Top tier DxD x Overlord fanfic~ It's a bit heavy all that introspection to characters as Miki or the, Murayama was it? Not sure if it was her or Katase now, thoughts. But still a great novel~ Plus, all that Momonga becoming the 'Biblical God' by both Raynare and Demiurge confusion got me there~
Spoiler de révélation Всё было бы хорошо, если бы из Аинза не сделали дауном, вы реально читателе это гавно? Аинз первым делом отправил бы разведку, а не действовал бы сразу, это технологический мир, а не средневековье, тут нужны документы, и Аинз как работник офиса с нормальной должностью знает всё это. Аинз надел специальный скрывающие кольца, божественного ранга, он не полностью срывает магию и уровни, а снижают до уровня обычных НПС малого ранга, это уже показывали в аниме. Короче, автором я очень разочарован, вы испоганили хорошую идею фанфика, даже тот момент где гг какого-то фига начал испытывать больше эмоции, хотя вы писали что все его пассивные навыки никуда не уши и новые не прибавились, вы даже это забыли..... Мдааааа.....
Spoiler de révélation Quite a controversial work, well written, but the plot moves at the speed of a manhole cover. For a large amount of written text, almost nothing happened, many things do not need to be described in such detail, since this really kills all the dynamics, which already do not exist. Also, too much time is spent on secondary things, and not enough on the main ones.
great story there is not really anything to criticize here. The only things that kind of bother me is that there are not enough chapters(they are never enough) and certain aspects of the story don't interest me as much as others. For example the MomongaX Albedo chapters. Still I know it's part of the story and it still fits considering it's a DXD fanfiction. There are also aspects that I realy like for example the misconception of Momanga being the biblical god and his relationship with Miki. Good job so far Author hope you realese a new chapter soon.🥰
Spoiler de révélation very good indeed... if you like ainz playing 4d chess against himself and the big personalities of DxD this is for you.
You are doing absolutely fabulous work. Keep it up. Just change the beginning of your sypnosis and start by telling the word count, because if someone hasn't opened the chapter they will feel like you write small and inconsistent chapter. But if you mention word count, your views will increase. Just like winds of change. PeaceFan of your work.
nice fanfc[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]
Spoiler de révélation Great story, please don't drop this. I need more of this. (random gif i found)
good story 👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍🔝👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍
So far this is really good, it fleshes out the characters well and does feal like I’m reading Overlord! Keep it up and take your time!
I only finished reading the prologue, but that was enough for me to get strong emotions from this work. Respect to the author![img=Feeling it][img=Feeling it][img=Feeling it][img=Feeling it][img=Feeling it]