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I really enjoyed the story and the concept of it it's like a whole bunch of anime i like mixed together the world is like the anime magi where they can explore and conquer dungeons for magical weapons and the mc is raised away from humans so he has that goku innocence that i love i really recommend it the only think i kinda didnt like is the power system but other than that everything else is perfect
Hello, I did that author noshame thing, I give 5 stars because I love my own story, and I hype with my own story. Here is what you will get from this story: -Character development -Kids MC that strong and smart -Romance -Medieval era setting -Quite complicated power system -Action with sword and magic -Moral Value And here is what you SHOULD NOT expect from this story -Good grammar (For people who are very biased with grammar, you can skip it, this is my first novel, and English is not my first language. You can judge my English just by reading this review, I merely bad at punctuation and poor choice of words. Cnc is welcome, I want to improve, and I will) -Harem (Maybe multiple girl will have love interests toward MC, but this is NOT harem) -Lemon (this story is 18+ because of its violence and gore)
Everything about this story is good even excellent imo besides two things: Grammar mistakes, like misusing he/she/her/his/prince/princes/princes/princesses/should/could/would. Pacing is slow at certain parts of the story but in general it's fine. Besides that the plot, the character design, the characters' interactions, the drama and the ability to make the reader emotional towards the MC are top-notch. This novel has amazing potential, a hidden gem only if you can ignore those two cons I urge you to read the story otherwise you are going to be frustrated. To the author please fix those mistakes because this story is a gem but unfortunately, most readers won't bear with the grammar mistakes and will drop the novel before realizing the plot is extremely good. Good luck and I hope you the best!
I read upto 26 chapters and it's marvelous. Hoping that authour wouldn't drop this novel
Good book bro. Loving your book, keep it coming. I highly recommend this book, it's really interesting[img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
just read to the recent vol (vol 4) and this make me willing to give more review. I never thought the author will go his story to this path. I will said, this is masterpiece. Spoiler, after MC has struggle with every problem around him, volume 4 is the slice of life with many moral lesson that make you tears a happy tear but also a sad tear. Happy because it leads to how MC start to understand the value of life. Sad because the sins that the mc has done in the past, back attacking his moral.
Good novel with great character development and world building. I will say so far is decent reading. the power system is kinda remind me of hunterxhunter? but a bit close to chakra. Keep up the good work.
(spoiler alert: this is not quite a review) ..... grammar aside, the story has been good so far. though. is this inspired by "How I became a Star" or something like that by kevinmbeautcha? or spirit immortal? i consider good stories to be bad stories of they spend more time stressing the readers and making them sad. what's the point of distracting myself from life if the story just makes me feel sad or disappointed?
Revenge and hate, this is the main theme that author used to write this story. it felt simple and cliche but still interesting. How cliche is it? MC is orphaned and raised by monster, and it killed by human, so he started to hate human and kill them because of it. What make it interesting is how good the execution is. Its not about "look the MC is going to take revenge and start to killing human," but its about "The MC has killed human, so what is the consequence to that child as human? for being a murderer of the same species?" The MC has killed some human, and the family of the human he killed is trying to chase him too. This is where world building and character development works, and author did not disappoint.
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I don’t like the cliche trope of killing the mom of in beginning. Sure it’s an easy way to make the reader sympathetic for the protagonist and give him a purpose but I didn’t personally enjoy reading about another character being tortured this way for the sake of the plot for no real reason. I did enjoy the monster-human interaction intricacies so good job on that should focus in more on that in the future.
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I'm really enjoying it, I'm curious to see how the world will develop. Mc's development is pretty cool, when I started because of the synopsis I was afraid he would turn into a boring nut, I'm glad it didn't happen,
I've only made it to ch 30. The good: First of this is definitely what I would call grim dark. Story is well paced and legitimately interesting. Characters are interesting and not entirely predictable. I do like how consequences actually exist and things are written off, like there is actually a plan. the bad: the only "strong" female characters met so far is a little disappointing (very male dominated world with no diversity so far). There are some grammatical issues but not enough to be distracting (maybe one or a chapterish and I don't think it's even every chapter). There are enough cliches that it is a bit distracting though (person unlocks dangerous prisoners cell and is hurt and guard draws sword on prisoner, this is the stupid persons fault they should know better even if they are a noble, stuff like that)
bem, eu particularmente gostei do livro, entretanto, tem tantos capítulos de vários personagens diferentes. isso é interessante para a construção do mundo, no entanto, fico me perguntando a relevância de certos capítulos... bem, tirando isso, a história é boa, meio devagar mas boa.
Reading this book like watching anime, I immediately imagine the situation in my head like I watch it. The writing isnt best but the plot is interesting and well build story. Looking forward how the author will develop the story.
Love the way author explain the world. Has a good story with good character. Actually want to drop when the mc bcome slave, I dont like slave troop because I hate seeing mc enslaved, but glad I keep read it because in the end mc didnt feel become slave at all and literally stop being slave after. Very recomended
My first novel in this web, so far so good. I recommend this to anyone who like fantasy novel...........................................................
I am not sure what I was expecting from this novel from the description, maybe something like a comparison of human and monster cultures as part of an allegory for modern vs primitive societies. This story was way different then what I expected and I love it!!! The author has some issues with pronouns, but the character development is amazing. It hits that fine line between over exaggerated archetype and stoic realist that so many novels here lean twords. The author has found the happy medium between them.
The novel is great, the writing isn't the best but that's understandable as the author doesn't live in english speaking country. And author is really talented in drawing her illustrations check out her pixiv profile.
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Discovering this novel when it was only about 13 chapters was like finding hidden gems. I haven't read a good novel like this in a long time. Looking at the previous reviews, you will know that world-building is the best thing about this novel. VERY INTERESTING World building, unique and enjoyable to follow, makes you want to know more about that world. Probably the best on this platform, in my opinion. Actually, the terms used are still quite mainstream terms, such as dungeons, orc monsters, churches that govern society, and kingdom themes, just like other novels, but HECK, There is something different about this novel from the others, somehow I feel a very strong medieval atmosphere when reading this like almost the same as our medieval world but with magic in the social. I know the author has done some research to create this from reading this. The plot is very well written, my expectations were low, but the author gave his best in the plot. I even cried in some parts (I'm the type of person who does not cry when reading books). The emotion in this story is amazing. Character development is great!!! And everything made sense to me. The relationships between the characters are amazing. Most importantly, this novel has illustrations that make us understand each character better. Great world building, a good plot, and good characters, and there is something different from other novels in this pf. CONS: grammar issue (minor). The author once said that English is not his first language, and so do I. Although I'm not perfect in grammar, I can tell that some of the author's punctuation and storytelling timing are often not good. But it's still in the acceptable stage for me. It's still an enjoyable read. It's just that, for people who really care (or strict!) about grammar, it's better not to read this, I don't really like it when people give low ratings just because of grammar (I know it is important but this wn is still have good grammar) If this author had a good English editor and improved the writing, this novel might be the best on the platform. Despite the flaws, I still give it full stars because I love this wn so much. Currently, in chapter 45, The complexity of the dungeon, the mysterious girl who makes people suicide, the anti govern, the council, the prince, and the church! The story hooked me.
*This review is based on my opinion at chapter 36(I havent gone further). Well there's not really much I can say. Great world builinding, good character development. The lone complaint i have is the story's pacing. I am naturally biased towards fast paced stories so I would have a hard time recommending this to someone with the same bias.
i really like the story but i don't think i like where it's heading at the moment from wanting to kill humans and hating them now he is starting to like people more and more. i dont know if that is where the ahuthor is heading but it feels like it. if anybody reads this i still recommend the story so far it's been very good
It is a somewhat nice novel and the concept has an amazing potential if devloped correctly but, the writing make it a bit unpleasant to read. I recommend the author to learn grammar and please use the appropriate time for each sentance.
A unique world created with terms readers are used to like mana, dungeons, orcs, and goblins but isn’t afraid to branch out creates a interesting world that I’m glad I found.
I really enjoyed the story and the concept of it it's like a whole bunch of anime i like mixed together the world is like the anime magi where they can explore and conquer dungeons for magical weapons and the mc is raised away from humans so he has that goku innocence that i love i really recommend it the only think i kinda didnt like is the power system but other than that everything else is perfect
Hello, I did that author noshame thing, I give 5 stars because I love my own story, and I hype with my own story. Here is what you will get from this story: -Character development -Kids MC that strong and smart -Romance -Medieval era setting -Quite complicated power system -Action with sword and magic -Moral Value And here is what you SHOULD NOT expect from this story -Good grammar (For people who are very biased with grammar, you can skip it, this is my first novel, and English is not my first language. You can judge my English just by reading this review, I merely bad at punctuation and poor choice of words. Cnc is welcome, I want to improve, and I will) -Harem (Maybe multiple girl will have love interests toward MC, but this is NOT harem) -Lemon (this story is 18+ because of its violence and gore)
Everything about this story is good even excellent imo besides two things: Grammar mistakes, like misusing he/she/her/his/prince/princes/princes/princesses/should/could/would. Pacing is slow at certain parts of the story but in general it's fine. Besides that the plot, the character design, the characters' interactions, the drama and the ability to make the reader emotional towards the MC are top-notch. This novel has amazing potential, a hidden gem only if you can ignore those two cons I urge you to read the story otherwise you are going to be frustrated. To the author please fix those mistakes because this story is a gem but unfortunately, most readers won't bear with the grammar mistakes and will drop the novel before realizing the plot is extremely good. Good luck and I hope you the best!
I read upto 26 chapters and it's marvelous. Hoping that authour wouldn't drop this novel
Good book bro. Loving your book, keep it coming. I highly recommend this book, it's really interesting[img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
just read to the recent vol (vol 4) and this make me willing to give more review. I never thought the author will go his story to this path. I will said, this is masterpiece. Spoiler, after MC has struggle with every problem around him, volume 4 is the slice of life with many moral lesson that make you tears a happy tear but also a sad tear. Happy because it leads to how MC start to understand the value of life. Sad because the sins that the mc has done in the past, back attacking his moral.
Good novel with great character development and world building. I will say so far is decent reading. the power system is kinda remind me of hunterxhunter? but a bit close to chakra. Keep up the good work.
(spoiler alert: this is not quite a review) ..... grammar aside, the story has been good so far. though. is this inspired by "How I became a Star" or something like that by kevinmbeautcha? or spirit immortal? i consider good stories to be bad stories of they spend more time stressing the readers and making them sad. what's the point of distracting myself from life if the story just makes me feel sad or disappointed?
Revenge and hate, this is the main theme that author used to write this story. it felt simple and cliche but still interesting. How cliche is it? MC is orphaned and raised by monster, and it killed by human, so he started to hate human and kill them because of it. What make it interesting is how good the execution is. Its not about "look the MC is going to take revenge and start to killing human," but its about "The MC has killed human, so what is the consequence to that child as human? for being a murderer of the same species?" The MC has killed some human, and the family of the human he killed is trying to chase him too. This is where world building and character development works, and author did not disappoint.
Spoiler de révélation I don’t like the cliche trope of killing the mom of in beginning. Sure it’s an easy way to make the reader sympathetic for the protagonist and give him a purpose but I didn’t personally enjoy reading about another character being tortured this way for the sake of the plot for no real reason. I did enjoy the monster-human interaction intricacies so good job on that should focus in more on that in the future.
Spoiler de révélation I'm really enjoying it, I'm curious to see how the world will develop. Mc's development is pretty cool, when I started because of the synopsis I was afraid he would turn into a boring nut, I'm glad it didn't happen,
I've only made it to ch 30. The good: First of this is definitely what I would call grim dark. Story is well paced and legitimately interesting. Characters are interesting and not entirely predictable. I do like how consequences actually exist and things are written off, like there is actually a plan. the bad: the only "strong" female characters met so far is a little disappointing (very male dominated world with no diversity so far). There are some grammatical issues but not enough to be distracting (maybe one or a chapterish and I don't think it's even every chapter). There are enough cliches that it is a bit distracting though (person unlocks dangerous prisoners cell and is hurt and guard draws sword on prisoner, this is the stupid persons fault they should know better even if they are a noble, stuff like that)
bem, eu particularmente gostei do livro, entretanto, tem tantos capítulos de vários personagens diferentes. isso é interessante para a construção do mundo, no entanto, fico me perguntando a relevância de certos capítulos... bem, tirando isso, a história é boa, meio devagar mas boa.
Reading this book like watching anime, I immediately imagine the situation in my head like I watch it. The writing isnt best but the plot is interesting and well build story. Looking forward how the author will develop the story.
Love the way author explain the world. Has a good story with good character. Actually want to drop when the mc bcome slave, I dont like slave troop because I hate seeing mc enslaved, but glad I keep read it because in the end mc didnt feel become slave at all and literally stop being slave after. Very recomended
My first novel in this web, so far so good. I recommend this to anyone who like fantasy novel...........................................................
I am not sure what I was expecting from this novel from the description, maybe something like a comparison of human and monster cultures as part of an allegory for modern vs primitive societies. This story was way different then what I expected and I love it!!! The author has some issues with pronouns, but the character development is amazing. It hits that fine line between over exaggerated archetype and stoic realist that so many novels here lean twords. The author has found the happy medium between them.
The novel is great, the writing isn't the best but that's understandable as the author doesn't live in english speaking country. And author is really talented in drawing her illustrations check out her pixiv profile.
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Spoiler de révélation Discovering this novel when it was only about 13 chapters was like finding hidden gems. I haven't read a good novel like this in a long time. Looking at the previous reviews, you will know that world-building is the best thing about this novel. VERY INTERESTING World building, unique and enjoyable to follow, makes you want to know more about that world. Probably the best on this platform, in my opinion. Actually, the terms used are still quite mainstream terms, such as dungeons, orc monsters, churches that govern society, and kingdom themes, just like other novels, but HECK, There is something different about this novel from the others, somehow I feel a very strong medieval atmosphere when reading this like almost the same as our medieval world but with magic in the social. I know the author has done some research to create this from reading this. The plot is very well written, my expectations were low, but the author gave his best in the plot. I even cried in some parts (I'm the type of person who does not cry when reading books). The emotion in this story is amazing. Character development is great!!! And everything made sense to me. The relationships between the characters are amazing. Most importantly, this novel has illustrations that make us understand each character better. Great world building, a good plot, and good characters, and there is something different from other novels in this pf. CONS: grammar issue (minor). The author once said that English is not his first language, and so do I. Although I'm not perfect in grammar, I can tell that some of the author's punctuation and storytelling timing are often not good. But it's still in the acceptable stage for me. It's still an enjoyable read. It's just that, for people who really care (or strict!) about grammar, it's better not to read this, I don't really like it when people give low ratings just because of grammar (I know it is important but this wn is still have good grammar) If this author had a good English editor and improved the writing, this novel might be the best on the platform. Despite the flaws, I still give it full stars because I love this wn so much. Currently, in chapter 45, The complexity of the dungeon, the mysterious girl who makes people suicide, the anti govern, the council, the prince, and the church! The story hooked me.
*This review is based on my opinion at chapter 36(I havent gone further). Well there's not really much I can say. Great world builinding, good character development. The lone complaint i have is the story's pacing. I am naturally biased towards fast paced stories so I would have a hard time recommending this to someone with the same bias.
i really like the story but i don't think i like where it's heading at the moment from wanting to kill humans and hating them now he is starting to like people more and more. i dont know if that is where the ahuthor is heading but it feels like it. if anybody reads this i still recommend the story so far it's been very good
It is a somewhat nice novel and the concept has an amazing potential if devloped correctly but, the writing make it a bit unpleasant to read. I recommend the author to learn grammar and please use the appropriate time for each sentance.
A unique world created with terms readers are used to like mana, dungeons, orcs, and goblins but isn’t afraid to branch out creates a interesting world that I’m glad I found.