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The story is perfect, but I want you to write reference Chapter about a characters he have and his harem, because honestly I'm lost and I can't remember his harem at all. So I would like to write the name of his harem and a world specific to her.
First, this a suggestion, can you run the chapter through google docs before posting it, it will underline grammatical errors and control-alt-x will make the spellcheck pop up. I think it would improve the fluidity of your novel by a lot. now for review, good novel. updates are good, story development hasn't happened much where I've read to, character development feels forced especially towards the women but it is explained so not bad, really like the world background but i only gave it a 4 because the sanctuary's weren't really explained well, like why or what they are as well as the "real world" it would imply that the sanctuary's are false worlds like the fantasy ones. so an explanation would be better but it's your story
Where is the marvel ??????? When he go in marvel ??? Only marvel worlds is interesting
love the story just feel there are too many women bro I understand he likes more but these are too much bro like the whole Island is filled with lovers it's like he's playing pok*mon with them ""catching em all"" and after each world when he tells about his harem to more women that part feels repetitive and too fake like he tells the same dialog to all of them
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Fantastic read overall nice unique main character with interesting world building too, also love his innate skill "will" it just opens up so many possibilities
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I would recommend that everyone reads this book. I hope the author keeps up the good work.
I'm still reading, but I want to write that I like everything so far, both grammar and plot, history and description, etc. and behind all the pluses you don’t want to look for minuses - I won’t and you don’t look)) xd
The story has an understandable writing quality; However, there are things that I personally don't like, for example, telling people that they are fictional characters and that their world is an anime or movie created by a fat otaku. The existential crisis and denial does not exist after revealing that the world is a fantasy and is not the 'real world'; literally the protagonist mentions to the female characters that he comes from the 'real world'. [img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp]
Its a great book & truthfully a hidden gem . I read the entire book till the latest chapter in a single day & I was neither disappointed nor bored . Its a mystery how this book is not ranked higher or not recommended more . Its truly an entertaining & satisfying find . Just hope it doesn't get dropped .
viejo no se que te fumaste pero te funciono de pana, recomedadisimo recomedadisimo recomedadisimo
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The story is perfect, but I want you to write reference Chapter about a characters he have and his harem, because honestly I'm lost and I can't remember his harem at all. So I would like to write the name of his harem and a world specific to her.
First, this a suggestion, can you run the chapter through google docs before posting it, it will underline grammatical errors and control-alt-x will make the spellcheck pop up. I think it would improve the fluidity of your novel by a lot. now for review, good novel. updates are good, story development hasn't happened much where I've read to, character development feels forced especially towards the women but it is explained so not bad, really like the world background but i only gave it a 4 because the sanctuary's weren't really explained well, like why or what they are as well as the "real world" it would imply that the sanctuary's are false worlds like the fantasy ones. so an explanation would be better but it's your story
Where is the marvel ??????? When he go in marvel ??? Only marvel worlds is interesting
love the story just feel there are too many women bro I understand he likes more but these are too much bro like the whole Island is filled with lovers it's like he's playing pok*mon with them ""catching em all"" and after each world when he tells about his harem to more women that part feels repetitive and too fake like he tells the same dialog to all of them
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Fantastic read overall nice unique main character with interesting world building too, also love his innate skill "will" it just opens up so many possibilities
Spoiler de révélation I would recommend that everyone reads this book. I hope the author keeps up the good work.
I'm still reading, but I want to write that I like everything so far, both grammar and plot, history and description, etc. and behind all the pluses you don’t want to look for minuses - I won’t and you don’t look)) xd
The story has an understandable writing quality; However, there are things that I personally don't like, for example, telling people that they are fictional characters and that their world is an anime or movie created by a fat otaku. The existential crisis and denial does not exist after revealing that the world is a fantasy and is not the 'real world'; literally the protagonist mentions to the female characters that he comes from the 'real world'. [img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp]
Its a great book & truthfully a hidden gem . I read the entire book till the latest chapter in a single day & I was neither disappointed nor bored . Its a mystery how this book is not ranked higher or not recommended more . Its truly an entertaining & satisfying find . Just hope it doesn't get dropped .
viejo no se que te fumaste pero te funciono de pana, recomedadisimo recomedadisimo recomedadisimo
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