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Xmpr30

The idea has alot of potential is really interesting but the writing quality just ruins it. The story is a solid 4 but the grammar and terrible readability bring it down to a 3. I tried reading it while ignoring the grammar, but it always ruins the authenticity of the plot. Can you imagine Icebergs secretary saying: "Then also, I got a phone call from the Navy Side" 'Then also'? Navy Side? It's a mid 20s women talking, not a a 6 year old. If you want it increase your rating, please just improve the grammar! Use something like G Docs and read over your work before posting.

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ReaderCat

I enjoy reading. I don't think about it too much when I read it. I'm not going to write a long post with good and bad aspects. There's a point that I can't ignore even though I haven't thought about it. Everyone praises mc and constantly praises what he does, but we have no idea what mc does.

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Ep_E_X

Good premise,poor execution with stupid self righteous useless mc.. Choices of Characters from the system are too much forced In summary helsjzbjkj osjsobd jdjsokzbdks jdjjdowwi jdjjdjofkngjd...

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Dakfahnirqrh

It had a good start. But it is annoyingly slow-paced. The dude literally have no one aside from hashirama(talking about battle summons) after 150 chapters

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candra_damai

Up...!! Lanjutin..!! Sama yang dingin juga lanjutin..!! Walaupun terlalu banyak bicaranya tapi enak pas santai... Juga kalau bisa karakternya di percepat keluarnya.. Pembaruhanya juga..

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M_Shaz_3A

I don't know how to rate this novel... I read the first 40 chapters. .. and I still can't figure out the exact time frame.... did Luffy start his journey in yet... he only summoned 1 person with combat abilities till now and making him do everything from chopping wood to fighting world government.... I thought MC was supposed to be intelligent 🤔... but he only keeps summoning people with no power.... and some times they are not even related to what profession they are assigned... where there is a need to explain... I don't find any.... when it is not needed there is a full chapter about it..... and those grammatical mistakes... irritating🥶....😭... I gave 5-star characters & world coz they are one-piece characters and worls....

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Rizki_Caturianto

It's a very great fanfiction!! I love it!!! 👍👍😍😍 I like the Kingdom Building system.. And it happen in One Piece (OP) is a very interesting story, because there World Goverment (WG) who wont let a strong kingdom appear.. It's interesting to see their fight.. Can't wait to see next chapter.. Keep up the great work author sama 😁😁👍👍

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burmis

The story has a fine plot, and I really like the idea of making a kingdom. But there is no greater character development nor any great Emotional attachments to any of the characters. About the grammar, I am a person who can read MTL and live with it. But the way the author never use she or her and instead only uses he or His. Is the most obvious and annoying grammar errors in the story.

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Firelord

the author has a big problem with he/she, him/her ,himself/herself. the author is trying to make the Mc look smart, but instead, he made the rest of the world brain dead. The Mc is bragging about how he has spies everywhere but has no. He braggs about having an army of op anime characters but has only hashirama as slave. Hashirama this ,hashirama that , hashirama go bring grass, hashirama go deliver some tree here and the there ,hashirama is just a slave for the Mc getting so tired of all the hashirama spamming. A lot of potholes. I love kingdom building ff, but this ff just spams hashirama too much. 140 chapter later, and he has only hashirama as a fighting character. And the Mc have the world government under his feet after 10 chapters

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Shimano
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Why the heck is this a popular novel??? So many wrongs.

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Florin_7816

I'm gonna say it right here , the story is ok , a nice idea for the One Piece world, but repeating and spamming "kingdom this , kingdom that " and other bs like 100 times a chapter gets annoying really fast , GRAMMER author , is kind of important , but as always you will ignore or delete the comment or review ,

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Only one word full of fillers. idk what to say just waste of time.

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Xmpr30

The idea has alot of potential is really interesting but the writing quality just ruins it. The story is a solid 4 but the grammar and terrible readability bring it down to a 3. I tried reading it while ignoring the grammar, but it always ruins the authenticity of the plot. Can you imagine Icebergs secretary saying: "Then also, I got a phone call from the Navy Side" 'Then also'? Navy Side? It's a mid 20s women talking, not a a 6 year old. If you want it increase your rating, please just improve the grammar! Use something like G Docs and read over your work before posting.

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ReaderCat

I enjoy reading. I don't think about it too much when I read it. I'm not going to write a long post with good and bad aspects. There's a point that I can't ignore even though I haven't thought about it. Everyone praises mc and constantly praises what he does, but we have no idea what mc does.

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Ep_E_X

Good premise,poor execution with stupid self righteous useless mc.. Choices of Characters from the system are too much forced In summary helsjzbjkj osjsobd jdjsokzbdks jdjjdowwi jdjjdjofkngjd...

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Dakfahnirqrh

It had a good start. But it is annoyingly slow-paced. The dude literally have no one aside from hashirama(talking about battle summons) after 150 chapters

1yr
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candra_damai

Up...!! Lanjutin..!! Sama yang dingin juga lanjutin..!! Walaupun terlalu banyak bicaranya tapi enak pas santai... Juga kalau bisa karakternya di percepat keluarnya.. Pembaruhanya juga..

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M_Shaz_3A

I don't know how to rate this novel... I read the first 40 chapters. .. and I still can't figure out the exact time frame.... did Luffy start his journey in yet... he only summoned 1 person with combat abilities till now and making him do everything from chopping wood to fighting world government.... I thought MC was supposed to be intelligent 🤔... but he only keeps summoning people with no power.... and some times they are not even related to what profession they are assigned... where there is a need to explain... I don't find any.... when it is not needed there is a full chapter about it..... and those grammatical mistakes... irritating🥶....😭... I gave 5-star characters & world coz they are one-piece characters and worls....

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Rizki_Caturianto

It's a very great fanfiction!! I love it!!! 👍👍😍😍 I like the Kingdom Building system.. And it happen in One Piece (OP) is a very interesting story, because there World Goverment (WG) who wont let a strong kingdom appear.. It's interesting to see their fight.. Can't wait to see next chapter.. Keep up the great work author sama 😁😁👍👍

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burmis

The story has a fine plot, and I really like the idea of making a kingdom. But there is no greater character development nor any great Emotional attachments to any of the characters. About the grammar, I am a person who can read MTL and live with it. But the way the author never use she or her and instead only uses he or His. Is the most obvious and annoying grammar errors in the story.

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Firelord

the author has a big problem with he/she, him/her ,himself/herself. the author is trying to make the Mc look smart, but instead, he made the rest of the world brain dead. The Mc is bragging about how he has spies everywhere but has no. He braggs about having an army of op anime characters but has only hashirama as slave. Hashirama this ,hashirama that , hashirama go bring grass, hashirama go deliver some tree here and the there ,hashirama is just a slave for the Mc getting so tired of all the hashirama spamming. A lot of potholes. I love kingdom building ff, but this ff just spams hashirama too much. 140 chapter later, and he has only hashirama as a fighting character. And the Mc have the world government under his feet after 10 chapters

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Shimano
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Why the heck is this a popular novel??? So many wrongs.

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Florin_7816

I'm gonna say it right here , the story is ok , a nice idea for the One Piece world, but repeating and spamming "kingdom this , kingdom that " and other bs like 100 times a chapter gets annoying really fast , GRAMMER author , is kind of important , but as always you will ignore or delete the comment or review ,

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UwuCreyo

Only one word full of fillers. idk what to say just waste of time.

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