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Starting notes: - I have read up to chapter 35 as of today (2/8/2023). - I have liked the novel so far and look forward to reading more. - My only complaint has gone away at chapter 25. - My only complaint was a personal preference based complaint about parts of the mc. - And even then I would not call it a complaint but a preference. Gramer is 5/5 I have heard that the stability was good but I have not seen it for myself. Stability 5/5 Story has developed well in speed and pacing. 5/5 - one issue you might find with the novel is that some chapters can be long in explanation but that should not occur after most of the system is explained and has only occured when a new part has been unlocked such as the store. - Although his explanation about what he was going to use his 5 tickets on was long even though it did include some explanations. Charactor design is good. 5/5 - I did not take the mc as someone to have the ends of his hair dyed though. World background is good. 5/5 - Not much to say. - The background is flushed out but having a visual picture of the surroundings is a bit difficult. (Don’t know if it is just me or not). Thank you for your time. Please forgive any miss spellings I have made in this review. Have a wonderful day. Have fun reading this novel.
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Frustrating Protagonist Choices Undermine the Story’s Potential I really wanted to enjoy this story, but I’ve reached a point where the protagonist's poor decision-making has become too frustrating to overlook. Despite being portrayed as a "genius," the MC repeatedly makes choices that feel illogical, especially in a survival scenario like this one. While the goal of turning every party member into a legendary warrior is understandable, the execution feels far too forced—particularly with Chris. From the start, Chris’ situation has felt contrived. While he contributes to the group, his efforts don’t justify the resources—food, protection, and time—spent on him and his sister. His little sister, in particular, is nothing but a burden, and it’s hard to understand why the MC continuously risks so much for her and Chris. In an apocalypse, survival depends on utility, and neither of them offers enough to make their presence worthwhile. What’s even more frustrating is that the MC, supposedly emotionally detached and focused on survival, fails to prioritize personal growth. He regularly passes up critical opportunities to strengthen himself, as if those opportunities are meaningless. To make matters worse, a side character has far superior abilities and is much better suited for the role of protagonist at this point. The inconsistency in the MC’s behavior is another issue. His actions don’t align with his characterization as a "genius" survivor. The only thing that remains consistent is his flat, monotone dialogue, which the story reminds us of every chapter. While the premise is intriguing, the protagonist’s illogical choices and lack of development drag the story down. A more focused and consistent approach to the MC’s growth and motivations would significantly improve the narrative. Chapter 84 at the time of this review.
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I read to a bit after 100. About 75% of the content are thoughts of Mc and other characters. Of those thoughts about half are useless longwinded what ifs that do not matter. Thoughts the Mc does not care about but is curious about and then think about them as a guess and a few paragraphs later as it happened. Stuff gets also repeated, as it happened and as a thought, especially if those things gets mentioned from skills and items - the usual problem with game-like novels. The author also likes to make trivial stuff seem mysterious by not mentioning the elephant in the room for several paragraphs of character thoughts. The most liked start of a paragraph is either "As I was thinking..." or "Thinking about this..." or similar. The whole writing style is not a pleasure to read. You can basically skip half of each chapter without missing much relevant information. Funny enough, the beginning of the nevel wasn't as annoying as the point where I stopped.
I started read because of webnovel recommendation and discover the book history is abandoned. Sad.
This has a good plot but author is petty enough to make long worded names of some items and status view repeat too much to fill the words count and too much duplicate chapters (feels like a scam to me as some people just buy chapter in bulk if they like a story and some chapters don’t even have decent story but only status view) so instead of consistency this author is trying something else ……. God bless u for ur future endeavours author
Nice backstory and development, but the MC is just stupid. I got to 170, he now has his private dungeon with a time difference, tons of manuels and mana types and what does he do, he goes out hunting. Ok, again from the beginning, I'm not even talking about the fact that he keeps making estimates and they don't come true, but rather that he doesn't use everything to survive in the apocalypse. The tree with the 8 fruits, rank 2. Did he research their price, we don't know, but he didn't research the price of the pills either. That would be the first thing to do in the garage to be able to estimate when the creation is plus minus 0. Back to the fruits, assuming he can get them for 50,000 gold, because rank 2, prices probably rise exponentially. Then he gives the boy 2 and doesn't consume any himself so as not to get too strong. For 100,000 gold he could have possibly bought all the basic knowledge for everyone in his group and if he had then implemented any of it, he would definitely have gotten a regular job. But no, 6 Rank 2 fruits are there until chapter 170. He doesn't pick up quest rewards either. Days go by, he was in the dungeon for 3 days, but no, no time. Let's wait until we have a safe place. What could never have happened in the apocalypse. And then he has this space where time passes more slowly and he just doesn't use it. He goes out hunting instead of converting the things he has into his power.
great story but chapters are too short and self monologue of characters become annoying in the story.
This is a great story. Believable characters that behave logically (for themselves). The world building is only par for the course, but many are worse (IMO). The regularity of updates also leaves something to be desired.All in all an enjoyable find.
could the author stick to Third person POV? In my personal opinion, when the pov is on the mc, he tends to overthink which I end skipping the content till I get to the part where he's actually doing something. If that's not possible, then atleast the author tries to improve on it.The overall story is getting better, by the way.
Great written story. But the main character is just annoying. In the world before the change he was a inventor and in the beginning to kill a giant snake he used chemistry. But all of a sudden he becomes stupid with alchemy and the knowledge packs he buys from the store. And doesn’t try to use the knowledge he has from the world before, that he should have if he was an inventor.
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Rooting for this novel. plus, it's written by my fellow Nigerian.Let's goo!!
dear author, you mentioned the book was starting to lose support, I have some ideas why this might be happening in my opinion as a reader. You are focusing on the wrong things, you have been writing entire chapters dedicated to fights or pill creation and theory, which is good in small doses. But there are no meaningful interactions, the last I remembered was the rat nest and a lot of chapters passed with nothing feeling important. I am inclined to drop the novel because I don't feel emotions while reading it. Hope this helps you find the writing direction for the novel to grow, if you think is needed.
The title and intro are interesting. The writing style and character of the MC are great in my eyes. It gives me great hope that this novel can keep me hooked until the end, even though I am currently only by chapter 4
thanks author for writing this story, from the first chapters I found it incredible!!😊
kind author i enjoyed your story so much i just appreciate it if you don't add a lot of dialogues that of no value to the narration and very annoying e.g. someone did something then ace wondered what he meant and turned to question him but he explained before he spoke why don't directly make him explain honestly it's annoying
I read until chapter 170. The thing that i notice so far is. 1. Every chapter is too short and the author add his thoughts in every chapter adding to word count. 2. Story is too Slowwwwwww. 3. I dont know when the MC will become real alchemist...
This book is so friggin interesting....why am I just seeing it now, lol.. I read the first chapter and I got hooked, thanks for the work author..
I have read till 170 chapters and all I can say is that it is reaàaaaaaally slow.the chapters are short and I feel that quite a few of them could be avoided. The time it took the mc to open the rewards after completing a quest is like 6-8 chapters by which we will even forget what that quest is and many unnecessary interruptions in between. I can see that the author is trying for character development but I honestly feel it is a bit too dragging. While I feel the story is good but couldn't continue with such a dragging pace .
I am in chapter 68, I am afraid of one thing, and that is that you start to nerf the growth of the MC so that the others can catch up, for example with Brother Brian, we already know that the MC is more intelligent, a martial artist, physically an athlete , legendary class, and even so you leave a feeling like the brother will catch up, and the worst thing about this is that to catch up you will literally retard the growth of the MC or start giving Buffs to everyone, it is not necessary that the others are close to him in power, there are more things than power that are necessary, and if you keep wanting to match the others with the MC it's only more desperate. An example of the above is when the MC is described as athletic and a martial genius, his base body is already above 90% of the world, and now by level he goes up he is stronger, but out of nowhere you say that Chris has close to his damage power when he is a child and there is 0 chance that he will get close to his damage, for example, Ace strength multiplier by levels: N1-20 N2-40 N3-80 being Level one his base strength, now put For a child his base strength would be N1-10 N2-20 N3-40, and so at least at the beginning without training between levels, please stop comparing when it's far to start
Note: The first 60 chapters are FREE to read :D gee thanks. better than ones that go paid after 20-40 chapters but still kinda aids ngl. not paying $200 for a novel
Good story but you are pouring too much of water in these chapters. It's like chapter xxx they are standing and talking 5 chapter later they are still standing in same place and moved to another discussion. Sometimes i feel like skipping 2-3 chapters since i know that I won't be losing much by skipping them.
Writing Quality : Its good than 90% of the novels out there, although I've seen some types here and there. The POV shifts annoy me though because they are not my kind of thing (not saying they are bad but I'm not one of the POV shift liker no matter the novel Story Development :Story Development is good, not too many plot holes Character Design : The characters are designed well although i feel every character except the Mc is 2D (especially the children), at least until where i have read yet. But i do feel the protagonist's monologues annoying (which i will explain later) Updating Stability : Not much i know about it mate! World Background : The World Background is being built slowly but i feel like not much about the geography and terrain is talked about. Like, is everything around jungle? are there dense trees around or plains? etc. Now onto what i feel is lacking : The characters except Mc are a little too 2D, you should try to work on it. As for working stability, its always the more the better. Now the most crucial thing or annoying thing I find, the mc spends half or full chapter making a choice in monologues stating and unnecessary explaining the obvious and giving useless info. For example : 'I don't know if there's a higher Civilization' this sentence is repeated in almost every chapter and sometimes even more than once. A lot useless info is given in chapters and sometimes the useful part in a chapter is only worth 1 or 2 paragraphs. I know that some filler needs to be there to make the novel longer but i hope there is a balance ( like 50% is useful and 50% filler in a chapter from now's 75% filler at least in the chapters I'm reading currently). I'm saying this because sometimes its painful watching the character spending such long time on obvious decisions. That's all.
this is the first time I have ever written a review on WN, and there is a few points I would like to express. FirstPOV style of writing is making the novels way too long and a bit boring for the for the readers. Second there is way too much information and explaining for things are obvious to the readers, for example, explaining Mabs or ranking for the new update. finally you would make the novel more interesting and fun for the readers if you keep it straight to the point and get rid of the POV style. ( thats my opinion based on my experience reading 500+ novels And to my liking).
I quit, I can't read anymore. Too many plot holes. Mc annoys me This novel is designed to kill my brain cells. This novel can be read if you turn off the brain by 100%.
We are almost at a hundred chapter guys! I really appreciate the support y'all have given me till now and I hope we'll be together to see through this journey. I'll drop another review when the novel reaches a hundred chapter and address some of the issues the readers pointed out. Thanks for reading.
Good novel. I believe you could do better though. All in all, good work.................................................................. ...
The novel is really good I personally think it deserves more popularity than this honestly. First thing to know about this novel is that while it has its downs, it has it ups too. Update is daily Grammar is good Plot is okay All in all, the book is good for a serious read and to binge read.
Good post-apocalypse world story, but I just read 3 first chapters. I hope this novel would become best selling novel someday. Keep the spirit up!
Starting notes: - I have read up to chapter 35 as of today (2/8/2023). - I have liked the novel so far and look forward to reading more. - My only complaint has gone away at chapter 25. - My only complaint was a personal preference based complaint about parts of the mc. - And even then I would not call it a complaint but a preference. Gramer is 5/5 I have heard that the stability was good but I have not seen it for myself. Stability 5/5 Story has developed well in speed and pacing. 5/5 - one issue you might find with the novel is that some chapters can be long in explanation but that should not occur after most of the system is explained and has only occured when a new part has been unlocked such as the store. - Although his explanation about what he was going to use his 5 tickets on was long even though it did include some explanations. Charactor design is good. 5/5 - I did not take the mc as someone to have the ends of his hair dyed though. World background is good. 5/5 - Not much to say. - The background is flushed out but having a visual picture of the surroundings is a bit difficult. (Don’t know if it is just me or not). Thank you for your time. Please forgive any miss spellings I have made in this review. Have a wonderful day. Have fun reading this novel.
Spoiler de révélation Frustrating Protagonist Choices Undermine the Story’s Potential I really wanted to enjoy this story, but I’ve reached a point where the protagonist's poor decision-making has become too frustrating to overlook. Despite being portrayed as a "genius," the MC repeatedly makes choices that feel illogical, especially in a survival scenario like this one. While the goal of turning every party member into a legendary warrior is understandable, the execution feels far too forced—particularly with Chris. From the start, Chris’ situation has felt contrived. While he contributes to the group, his efforts don’t justify the resources—food, protection, and time—spent on him and his sister. His little sister, in particular, is nothing but a burden, and it’s hard to understand why the MC continuously risks so much for her and Chris. In an apocalypse, survival depends on utility, and neither of them offers enough to make their presence worthwhile. What’s even more frustrating is that the MC, supposedly emotionally detached and focused on survival, fails to prioritize personal growth. He regularly passes up critical opportunities to strengthen himself, as if those opportunities are meaningless. To make matters worse, a side character has far superior abilities and is much better suited for the role of protagonist at this point. The inconsistency in the MC’s behavior is another issue. His actions don’t align with his characterization as a "genius" survivor. The only thing that remains consistent is his flat, monotone dialogue, which the story reminds us of every chapter. While the premise is intriguing, the protagonist’s illogical choices and lack of development drag the story down. A more focused and consistent approach to the MC’s growth and motivations would significantly improve the narrative. Chapter 84 at the time of this review.
Spoiler de révélation I read to a bit after 100. About 75% of the content are thoughts of Mc and other characters. Of those thoughts about half are useless longwinded what ifs that do not matter. Thoughts the Mc does not care about but is curious about and then think about them as a guess and a few paragraphs later as it happened. Stuff gets also repeated, as it happened and as a thought, especially if those things gets mentioned from skills and items - the usual problem with game-like novels. The author also likes to make trivial stuff seem mysterious by not mentioning the elephant in the room for several paragraphs of character thoughts. The most liked start of a paragraph is either "As I was thinking..." or "Thinking about this..." or similar. The whole writing style is not a pleasure to read. You can basically skip half of each chapter without missing much relevant information. Funny enough, the beginning of the nevel wasn't as annoying as the point where I stopped.
I started read because of webnovel recommendation and discover the book history is abandoned. Sad.
This has a good plot but author is petty enough to make long worded names of some items and status view repeat too much to fill the words count and too much duplicate chapters (feels like a scam to me as some people just buy chapter in bulk if they like a story and some chapters don’t even have decent story but only status view) so instead of consistency this author is trying something else ……. God bless u for ur future endeavours author
Nice backstory and development, but the MC is just stupid. I got to 170, he now has his private dungeon with a time difference, tons of manuels and mana types and what does he do, he goes out hunting. Ok, again from the beginning, I'm not even talking about the fact that he keeps making estimates and they don't come true, but rather that he doesn't use everything to survive in the apocalypse. The tree with the 8 fruits, rank 2. Did he research their price, we don't know, but he didn't research the price of the pills either. That would be the first thing to do in the garage to be able to estimate when the creation is plus minus 0. Back to the fruits, assuming he can get them for 50,000 gold, because rank 2, prices probably rise exponentially. Then he gives the boy 2 and doesn't consume any himself so as not to get too strong. For 100,000 gold he could have possibly bought all the basic knowledge for everyone in his group and if he had then implemented any of it, he would definitely have gotten a regular job. But no, 6 Rank 2 fruits are there until chapter 170. He doesn't pick up quest rewards either. Days go by, he was in the dungeon for 3 days, but no, no time. Let's wait until we have a safe place. What could never have happened in the apocalypse. And then he has this space where time passes more slowly and he just doesn't use it. He goes out hunting instead of converting the things he has into his power.
great story but chapters are too short and self monologue of characters become annoying in the story.
This is a great story. Believable characters that behave logically (for themselves). The world building is only par for the course, but many are worse (IMO). The regularity of updates also leaves something to be desired.All in all an enjoyable find.
could the author stick to Third person POV? In my personal opinion, when the pov is on the mc, he tends to overthink which I end skipping the content till I get to the part where he's actually doing something. If that's not possible, then atleast the author tries to improve on it.The overall story is getting better, by the way.
Great written story. But the main character is just annoying. In the world before the change he was a inventor and in the beginning to kill a giant snake he used chemistry. But all of a sudden he becomes stupid with alchemy and the knowledge packs he buys from the store. And doesn’t try to use the knowledge he has from the world before, that he should have if he was an inventor.
Spoiler de révélation Rooting for this novel. plus, it's written by my fellow Nigerian.Let's goo!!
dear author, you mentioned the book was starting to lose support, I have some ideas why this might be happening in my opinion as a reader. You are focusing on the wrong things, you have been writing entire chapters dedicated to fights or pill creation and theory, which is good in small doses. But there are no meaningful interactions, the last I remembered was the rat nest and a lot of chapters passed with nothing feeling important. I am inclined to drop the novel because I don't feel emotions while reading it. Hope this helps you find the writing direction for the novel to grow, if you think is needed.
The title and intro are interesting. The writing style and character of the MC are great in my eyes. It gives me great hope that this novel can keep me hooked until the end, even though I am currently only by chapter 4
thanks author for writing this story, from the first chapters I found it incredible!!😊
kind author i enjoyed your story so much i just appreciate it if you don't add a lot of dialogues that of no value to the narration and very annoying e.g. someone did something then ace wondered what he meant and turned to question him but he explained before he spoke why don't directly make him explain honestly it's annoying
I read until chapter 170. The thing that i notice so far is. 1. Every chapter is too short and the author add his thoughts in every chapter adding to word count. 2. Story is too Slowwwwwww. 3. I dont know when the MC will become real alchemist...
This book is so friggin interesting....why am I just seeing it now, lol.. I read the first chapter and I got hooked, thanks for the work author..
I have read till 170 chapters and all I can say is that it is reaàaaaaaally slow.the chapters are short and I feel that quite a few of them could be avoided. The time it took the mc to open the rewards after completing a quest is like 6-8 chapters by which we will even forget what that quest is and many unnecessary interruptions in between. I can see that the author is trying for character development but I honestly feel it is a bit too dragging. While I feel the story is good but couldn't continue with such a dragging pace .
I am in chapter 68, I am afraid of one thing, and that is that you start to nerf the growth of the MC so that the others can catch up, for example with Brother Brian, we already know that the MC is more intelligent, a martial artist, physically an athlete , legendary class, and even so you leave a feeling like the brother will catch up, and the worst thing about this is that to catch up you will literally retard the growth of the MC or start giving Buffs to everyone, it is not necessary that the others are close to him in power, there are more things than power that are necessary, and if you keep wanting to match the others with the MC it's only more desperate. An example of the above is when the MC is described as athletic and a martial genius, his base body is already above 90% of the world, and now by level he goes up he is stronger, but out of nowhere you say that Chris has close to his damage power when he is a child and there is 0 chance that he will get close to his damage, for example, Ace strength multiplier by levels: N1-20 N2-40 N3-80 being Level one his base strength, now put For a child his base strength would be N1-10 N2-20 N3-40, and so at least at the beginning without training between levels, please stop comparing when it's far to start
Note: The first 60 chapters are FREE to read :D gee thanks. better than ones that go paid after 20-40 chapters but still kinda aids ngl. not paying $200 for a novel
Good story but you are pouring too much of water in these chapters. It's like chapter xxx they are standing and talking 5 chapter later they are still standing in same place and moved to another discussion. Sometimes i feel like skipping 2-3 chapters since i know that I won't be losing much by skipping them.
Writing Quality : Its good than 90% of the novels out there, although I've seen some types here and there. The POV shifts annoy me though because they are not my kind of thing (not saying they are bad but I'm not one of the POV shift liker no matter the novel Story Development :Story Development is good, not too many plot holes Character Design : The characters are designed well although i feel every character except the Mc is 2D (especially the children), at least until where i have read yet. But i do feel the protagonist's monologues annoying (which i will explain later) Updating Stability : Not much i know about it mate! World Background : The World Background is being built slowly but i feel like not much about the geography and terrain is talked about. Like, is everything around jungle? are there dense trees around or plains? etc. Now onto what i feel is lacking : The characters except Mc are a little too 2D, you should try to work on it. As for working stability, its always the more the better. Now the most crucial thing or annoying thing I find, the mc spends half or full chapter making a choice in monologues stating and unnecessary explaining the obvious and giving useless info. For example : 'I don't know if there's a higher Civilization' this sentence is repeated in almost every chapter and sometimes even more than once. A lot useless info is given in chapters and sometimes the useful part in a chapter is only worth 1 or 2 paragraphs. I know that some filler needs to be there to make the novel longer but i hope there is a balance ( like 50% is useful and 50% filler in a chapter from now's 75% filler at least in the chapters I'm reading currently). I'm saying this because sometimes its painful watching the character spending such long time on obvious decisions. That's all.
this is the first time I have ever written a review on WN, and there is a few points I would like to express. FirstPOV style of writing is making the novels way too long and a bit boring for the for the readers. Second there is way too much information and explaining for things are obvious to the readers, for example, explaining Mabs or ranking for the new update. finally you would make the novel more interesting and fun for the readers if you keep it straight to the point and get rid of the POV style. ( thats my opinion based on my experience reading 500+ novels And to my liking).
I quit, I can't read anymore. Too many plot holes. Mc annoys me This novel is designed to kill my brain cells. This novel can be read if you turn off the brain by 100%.
We are almost at a hundred chapter guys! I really appreciate the support y'all have given me till now and I hope we'll be together to see through this journey. I'll drop another review when the novel reaches a hundred chapter and address some of the issues the readers pointed out. Thanks for reading.
Good novel. I believe you could do better though. All in all, good work.................................................................. ...
The novel is really good I personally think it deserves more popularity than this honestly. First thing to know about this novel is that while it has its downs, it has it ups too. Update is daily Grammar is good Plot is okay All in all, the book is good for a serious read and to binge read.
Good post-apocalypse world story, but I just read 3 first chapters. I hope this novel would become best selling novel someday. Keep the spirit up!