5Critiques
- Qualité de l’écriture
- Stabilité des mises à jour
- Développement de l’histoire
- Conception des personnages
- Contexte du monde
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I really do love and enjoy reading the novel, cause It really interesting .. But with what I had noticed, the structure as well as how you distinguish the characters needs some fixing to do... But overall, apart from all that, I really think that your book is amazing
Upon reading this story, I would notice that the main thing holding this story back is its organization and its structure. I believe that this story could have started better with the the introduction of the background of this newly crafted world. Though not everything should be divulged to the reader from the get go. Much of the information should be brought up and the futhered mentioned and expanded on in future chapters. The main character and associates background could have been handled better as well. Some of the characters could have been introduced in a different way and thus solidified the reader's recognition of them. Structure wise, there are a plethora of just open spaces peppered throughout the chapters. Most of them are incredibly unnecessary, so I recommend looking over and reviewing them. I also recommend using a different method to distinguish the characters in their dialogue. There is a story to be told here, you had 53 chapters, so that shows. Cleaning up the story would properly elevate it to another level. At this current iteration, a 3.6 rating would be fitting. World Building saves this one.
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It is a great fantasy . The story is really great . And I wish I could be in this fantasyland as well . I am looking forward to it's updates.
Indeed the world development is great. The way whole world is built is quite interesting but the characters do need some work with their dialogues. Just polish the story a bit more and this can become a great novel. Good luck.
I really do love and enjoy reading the novel, cause It really interesting .. But with what I had noticed, the structure as well as how you distinguish the characters needs some fixing to do... But overall, apart from all that, I really think that your book is amazing
Upon reading this story, I would notice that the main thing holding this story back is its organization and its structure. I believe that this story could have started better with the the introduction of the background of this newly crafted world. Though not everything should be divulged to the reader from the get go. Much of the information should be brought up and the futhered mentioned and expanded on in future chapters. The main character and associates background could have been handled better as well. Some of the characters could have been introduced in a different way and thus solidified the reader's recognition of them. Structure wise, there are a plethora of just open spaces peppered throughout the chapters. Most of them are incredibly unnecessary, so I recommend looking over and reviewing them. I also recommend using a different method to distinguish the characters in their dialogue. There is a story to be told here, you had 53 chapters, so that shows. Cleaning up the story would properly elevate it to another level. At this current iteration, a 3.6 rating would be fitting. World Building saves this one.
it is good story. 🥰🥰🥰🥰🥰🥰👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌 A best fantasy story. 🥰🥰🥰🥰🥰🥰🥰🥰🥰It is really interesting. I love the fantasy.
It is a great fantasy . The story is really great . And I wish I could be in this fantasyland as well . I am looking forward to it's updates.
Indeed the world development is great. The way whole world is built is quite interesting but the characters do need some work with their dialogues. Just polish the story a bit more and this can become a great novel. Good luck.