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Although the idea of system and everyone getting them suddenly isn't something totally new as seen with a book I don't remember name of but everyone get system as gift on Christmas. But the thing about this book is writer had taken quite a unique take on it with territories and coins, the story have a nice flow and Bing readable waiting for more chapter to came so I can Bing read in a go
the storyline is improving each and every single day. The persona design, the plot, and the narration, the entirety is going smoothly and steadily. The quality is getting better too. The storyline has full potential to hook up it's readers. I surely suggest the readers to give it a chance, it will never gonna disappoint you. 💙
Noiceee...Its a good read. The entire system at once concept is great. Keep updating soo I can keep reading. The world building is also perfectly planned and executed.
A fellow author here, Guy's my friend so I want to give a review. Do you have any problem with that? I don't care, okay? Well, no one asked. HHAHAAHAHA
Instantly hooked amd already loved it- I read a few chapters an im definitely saving it to my library to read for later.
I love everything about this novel, Keep up the good job. And I can't wait for the next update😘😘🥰😘🥰🥰😘🥰🤗🥰😘🥰😘🥰😘🥰😘🥰🥰😘🥰😘🥰😘🥰🥰😘🥰😘🥰🥰😘🥰😘
For a first work, this is a start. I would suggest using paragraphs, rather than going sentence by sentence. Next, your descriptions could use some work. While they do get the image you want across, the reader has to make mental leaps to figure what's happened. The word choice could be a lot better in some areas, and the dialogue is rather odd to read most of the time. Finally, some background on how the world and powers work would be good.
author's review : this is my first time writing a novel so the quality and quantity may be lacking I also have some personal work to sort out during that time so in these two weeks I'll arrange my thoughts , improve myself and will try to update as much as possible after that, updates will be regular so those who like this story keep following 😉👍
this novel seems to have enormus potential the world is a little unique to say the least I am very much interested to see the development of MC and his "strugle" for now MC is overpowered there are many question but i guess they will be answered further into the story
The subject, the processing and the background narration are exciting. It has fast pace, but it added more excitement to the story. The protagonist quickly adapts to the suddenly changing world with the short-term trauma he experiences. There are 4 pages at the moment, but it seems like the action will never end. I'm looking forward to the future updates.
Well, well, well.... .. .. .. .. .. .. .. .. .. .. .. So you want to know what I'm about to say?😂😂 This story is awesome even though it has limited chapters, the first few chapters are great. You fell for my trick, didn't you?😂😂.. Now you're laughing 😂😂
The plot of the story seems new and interesting about how suddenly monsters appear, although only one chapter is out but character is portrayed nicely. The fighting scenes were written skillfully. I'm eager to know what will happen in the future and how the protagonist changes in these times.please update frequently as this story have potential.
heyyy author, well i got hooked by your first chap i am not usually into systems but yeah this one really took me by surprise. i think that this novel has a great potential and with more work and focus i guess it will top up among the others
Although the idea of system and everyone getting them suddenly isn't something totally new as seen with a book I don't remember name of but everyone get system as gift on Christmas. But the thing about this book is writer had taken quite a unique take on it with territories and coins, the story have a nice flow and Bing readable waiting for more chapter to came so I can Bing read in a go
the storyline is improving each and every single day. The persona design, the plot, and the narration, the entirety is going smoothly and steadily. The quality is getting better too. The storyline has full potential to hook up it's readers. I surely suggest the readers to give it a chance, it will never gonna disappoint you. 💙
Noiceee...Its a good read. The entire system at once concept is great. Keep updating soo I can keep reading. The world building is also perfectly planned and executed.
A fellow author here, Guy's my friend so I want to give a review. Do you have any problem with that? I don't care, okay? Well, no one asked. HHAHAAHAHA
Instantly hooked amd already loved it- I read a few chapters an im definitely saving it to my library to read for later.
I love everything about this novel, Keep up the good job. And I can't wait for the next update😘😘🥰😘🥰🥰😘🥰🤗🥰😘🥰😘🥰😘🥰😘🥰🥰😘🥰😘🥰😘🥰🥰😘🥰😘🥰🥰😘🥰😘
For a first work, this is a start. I would suggest using paragraphs, rather than going sentence by sentence. Next, your descriptions could use some work. While they do get the image you want across, the reader has to make mental leaps to figure what's happened. The word choice could be a lot better in some areas, and the dialogue is rather odd to read most of the time. Finally, some background on how the world and powers work would be good.
author's review : this is my first time writing a novel so the quality and quantity may be lacking I also have some personal work to sort out during that time so in these two weeks I'll arrange my thoughts , improve myself and will try to update as much as possible after that, updates will be regular so those who like this story keep following 😉👍
this novel seems to have enormus potential the world is a little unique to say the least I am very much interested to see the development of MC and his "strugle" for now MC is overpowered there are many question but i guess they will be answered further into the story
The subject, the processing and the background narration are exciting. It has fast pace, but it added more excitement to the story. The protagonist quickly adapts to the suddenly changing world with the short-term trauma he experiences. There are 4 pages at the moment, but it seems like the action will never end. I'm looking forward to the future updates.
Well, well, well.... .. .. .. .. .. .. .. .. .. .. .. So you want to know what I'm about to say?😂😂 This story is awesome even though it has limited chapters, the first few chapters are great. You fell for my trick, didn't you?😂😂.. Now you're laughing 😂😂
The plot of the story seems new and interesting about how suddenly monsters appear, although only one chapter is out but character is portrayed nicely. The fighting scenes were written skillfully. I'm eager to know what will happen in the future and how the protagonist changes in these times.please update frequently as this story have potential.
heyyy author, well i got hooked by your first chap i am not usually into systems but yeah this one really took me by surprise. i think that this novel has a great potential and with more work and focus i guess it will top up among the others