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Книга мне очень сильно понравилась жаль что автор ее забросил хоть в ней и были некоторые моменты что мне не нравились в целом книга очень хороша
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Lack of any real story or plotline, author just gives you point by point highlight instead of actually telling you what happen. Eg: Hokage introudced policies that makes civilian and clan respect and loyal to him, Hokage fixed his students personality defects. Hokage discuss with other kage and end the shinobi war. How you ask? No idea, he just did it and you have accept it and move on.
This story deserves more rating, don't be swayed by negative reviews, this story is worth it. Hopefully one day the author will finish it .....................................................................................................................................................................................................................
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It started getting good once you opened a door too the one piece realm it has great pontential but the whole point was for the hokage too change the naruto world and get strong for upcoming war ex, it also seems rushed and the romance seems too accepting lol I don’t mind harem routes but your also forgetting asuma and his sibling down the road, could be wrong but it’s ok in my book I like these si fanfics
idk the rewievs are kinda bad and they have many likes so i think its true so im also bad reviewing it lol .................................
After reading the synopsis I think the fic has potential. Never seen an hiruzen si fic, so it's a first for me. Also I see some idiots spamming low reviews just caz it's harem. So......
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Ok, I listened to the author about the unfair assessment. And I will appreciate the work. I'm still unhappy with the harem sheet and recommend removing it, otherwise there will be the same problems as with me.
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do wanna see a dude chase after girls the have a generational gap and be proud about it here's ur story l , wanna see ash Ketchum catch every girl that move regard if his old enough to be there Grandpa u have a story .( author if I find this comment deleted than my speculation of u being a pedo is correct
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woo está increíble jaja , es la primera historia que leo en donde el protagonista es sarutobi hiruzen , además tiene un comienzo de 10 , ya que es cuándo asume el puesto de tercer hokage y lo mejor es que es harém jaja
My warning for new readers is that there is a lot of BS in this. I understand what the author was trying to do in the introduction but the execution was just plain awful. The timeline is messed up. And political marriage needs a bit more convincing.
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I HATE HAREM! BUT I like how MC transmigates into Hiruzen Sarutobi. I like how it's pre cannon and set at the beginning of when he becomes Hokage. But seriously though there's not many Hiruzen Sarutobi fanfictions set at this time or at the beginning when Konoha was established (if there is please share). Anyways can't wait for further development of the village and the exploration of One Piece world. Can't wait for the next update.
My friend introduced me to this story, he recommended me to read this awesome story. I am really glad that he did introduced me to this amazing story. i really loved it. One of the best fan-fiction i have ever read.[img=recommend]👌much love.💜💗.
i abandoned it in chapter 2, he gets a role that as long as he puts anyone's name (as long as she is alive), he will receive all his abilities, he keeps thinking only about tobirama and madara, and in the end he chooses tobirama . PS: THE ONLY CONDITION WAS THE PERSON TO BE ALIVE, HE WENT THERE AND LIMITED THE MC'S THOUGHT IN 2 CHARACTERS (A TOTAL STUPIDITY OF THE AUTHOR). (I'M USING GOOGLE TRANSLATOR SORRY IF IT'S WEIRD)
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all in all a good read with a new concept , i also realized some things related to islam and tbh it's interesting that you made the prologue out of it cuz this is the first ... i think ? and the MC is not dump and a pushover so it's good cuz i guess ... the only problem is that it's a little fast paced and there are not many character screens like for example he met luffy but there was not any interactions between them , you just time skipped that scene and some others .
Amazing concept for a story. The charctar development is great and the power level are well thought out many people usually make konoha weak during its foundation forgetting that many people from the warring period are alive and the senju and uchiha are at their peak The world background is also stable and without weird stuff forcibly put into the world so far im looking forward to see the development
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Книга мне очень сильно понравилась жаль что автор ее забросил хоть в ней и были некоторые моменты что мне не нравились в целом книга очень хороша
This ff is very good, keep up your beautiful work. update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update
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Lack of any real story or plotline, author just gives you point by point highlight instead of actually telling you what happen. Eg: Hokage introudced policies that makes civilian and clan respect and loyal to him, Hokage fixed his students personality defects. Hokage discuss with other kage and end the shinobi war. How you ask? No idea, he just did it and you have accept it and move on.
This story deserves more rating, don't be swayed by negative reviews, this story is worth it. Hopefully one day the author will finish it .....................................................................................................................................................................................................................
👍🏻👍🏻👍🏻👍🏻👍🏻👍🏻👍🏻👍🏻🤌🏻🤌🏻🤌🏻🤌🏻🤌🏻🤌🏻🤌🏻🤌🏻🤌🏻🤌🏻🤌🏻🤌🏻🤌🏻🤌🏻🤌🏻🤌🏻🤌🏻🤌🏻🤌🏻👌🏻🤌🏻👌🏻👌🏻👌🏻👌🏻👌🏻👌🏻👌🏻👌🏻👌🏻👌🏻👌🏻👌🏻👌🏻
It started getting good once you opened a door too the one piece realm it has great pontential but the whole point was for the hokage too change the naruto world and get strong for upcoming war ex, it also seems rushed and the romance seems too accepting lol I don’t mind harem routes but your also forgetting asuma and his sibling down the road, could be wrong but it’s ok in my book I like these si fanfics
idk the rewievs are kinda bad and they have many likes so i think its true so im also bad reviewing it lol .................................
After reading the synopsis I think the fic has potential. Never seen an hiruzen si fic, so it's a first for me. Also I see some idiots spamming low reviews just caz it's harem. So......
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Отлично!!!! аоаораоааовррараорвоввооаоаоаовововововоаовоаоаораоаововоаоаоаоаоаоаоаоаовоаовововоаоаовоаоаоаовоаоаоаоаоаоаоаоаоаоаоаоаоаоаоаоа
Ok, I listened to the author about the unfair assessment. And I will appreciate the work. I'm still unhappy with the harem sheet and recommend removing it, otherwise there will be the same problems as with me.
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do wanna see a dude chase after girls the have a generational gap and be proud about it here's ur story l , wanna see ash Ketchum catch every girl that move regard if his old enough to be there Grandpa u have a story .( author if I find this comment deleted than my speculation of u being a pedo is correct
Spoiler de révélation woo está increíble jaja , es la primera historia que leo en donde el protagonista es sarutobi hiruzen , además tiene un comienzo de 10 , ya que es cuándo asume el puesto de tercer hokage y lo mejor es que es harém jaja
My warning for new readers is that there is a lot of BS in this. I understand what the author was trying to do in the introduction but the execution was just plain awful. The timeline is messed up. And political marriage needs a bit more convincing.
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I HATE HAREM! BUT I like how MC transmigates into Hiruzen Sarutobi. I like how it's pre cannon and set at the beginning of when he becomes Hokage. But seriously though there's not many Hiruzen Sarutobi fanfictions set at this time or at the beginning when Konoha was established (if there is please share). Anyways can't wait for further development of the village and the exploration of One Piece world. Can't wait for the next update.
My friend introduced me to this story, he recommended me to read this awesome story. I am really glad that he did introduced me to this amazing story. i really loved it. One of the best fan-fiction i have ever read.[img=recommend]👌much love.💜💗.
i abandoned it in chapter 2, he gets a role that as long as he puts anyone's name (as long as she is alive), he will receive all his abilities, he keeps thinking only about tobirama and madara, and in the end he chooses tobirama . PS: THE ONLY CONDITION WAS THE PERSON TO BE ALIVE, HE WENT THERE AND LIMITED THE MC'S THOUGHT IN 2 CHARACTERS (A TOTAL STUPIDITY OF THE AUTHOR). (I'M USING GOOGLE TRANSLATOR SORRY IF IT'S WEIRD)
Spoiler de révélation all in all a good read with a new concept , i also realized some things related to islam and tbh it's interesting that you made the prologue out of it cuz this is the first ... i think ? and the MC is not dump and a pushover so it's good cuz i guess ... the only problem is that it's a little fast paced and there are not many character screens like for example he met luffy but there was not any interactions between them , you just time skipped that scene and some others .
Amazing concept for a story. The charctar development is great and the power level are well thought out many people usually make konoha weak during its foundation forgetting that many people from the warring period are alive and the senju and uchiha are at their peak The world background is also stable and without weird stuff forcibly put into the world so far im looking forward to see the development
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