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Can someone spoil me what exactly happened with Jon's mother and Tom Riddle? I don't care so just go ahead and spoil that secret. I will continue to read though.
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It started pretty good but when he started his music it got way too much focus and the story seemed to stagnate. It got too boring for me personally but maybe other people like 3 chapters with 80% song lyrics in it. If you ignore the music part it is a decent story with little flaws that can easily be improved upon
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If there is something I hate about this type of novel, it is that every protagonist who is reincarnated or not (the truth is the same), always has acting skills, and I am already tired of this convenience.
The story in general is not bad it's good the part that I liked the most was his lineage without a doubt, but the MC is very shallow in terms of character development, his first attempt at a conversation with strong emotions was quite forced but it improves over the course of the game story, one of the biggest flaws is the MC trying not to change anything, an example is he could have taken Tom Riddle's diary but he didn't, the MC seems to lack strong emotions and is kind of robotic but improves a little over the course of the story story, the character doesn't seem to have a backstory before he is reincarnated which I understand gets weird a 24 year old guy attracted to 14 year old girls, which can be fixed by having the MC die pretty early at the age of 13-15 years since it wouldn't make much difference but it's still a good story that you can spend time reading.
Nice novel and it seems to be well thought. I hope it last longer than others. Nice novel and it seems to be well thought. I hope it last longer than others.
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it was even acceptable, but it went to the bottom the moment he had his first interaction with Victoria Potter, with the story getting boring and weird... it's just confusing and boring
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I like this FF please continue and please if possible update on the regular...................................................................
I am coming from the previous hp fic and I have to say this one is significantly better specially the fight scenes. It seems like you have stopped using then every 5 seconds. Jokes aside fantastic work author
I like this FF it's characters are more human and don't really feel like 2D the ones that Mc is currently focusing on atleast. It's still too early to say it's a harem so there is a chance that it will go down the drain.
This book is well written. but what has lost stars for me is that it is to similar to your previous hp book. I am only 20 chapters in now but it is still a good read.
Really awesome book, I think the pace the story is taking is perfect and trope is somewhat unique.
Look its kinda slow because of the distribution of content on the chapters but is also much better than the flash like speed that the first had. the thing of the change of the baseline reality (Canon) of the original was a nice touch just... in the first the relationship of the MC with Harry's sister was too much forced atleast in the first 20 chp of the original where i just stoped so dont know much about that but just make characters that have a bit of realism and dont mess up the blank characters that we have. the first was so bad at character design that i lost interest in 20 min. anyway you could expand the world more than the original harry potter it will be good. if you do that make things simple and "human" like basecally everything that made my experience less than desirable was better atleast for now all i see on this new version is a Harry potter fic with great potential and a autor with more vision and experience than the Last? Time so keep the good work i have great hope on this you so keep the good work[img=recommend]
I'm a fan from your previous work (The Secret Heir) so i'm looking foward to see the changes. A mysterious first chapter, hope we can have a long story ahead
well I dropped it. why well it all started with the mc its his fault. you see the mc has what i call Oxymoronism. He goes around saying he needs to hide his true strength ( personally not my fav stratergie but it works )but 10 seconds later complain about not getting any recognition, its the complaining that started to get to me, It felt more like the author wanted throw in extra words for word count or something. Mc is also written like hes some Debonair type a guy but has no social skills whats so ever. The female characters were written like pick me girls especially Victoria. The Genderbending was also getting on my nerves i dont know if this is translated or not. Also what do ppl have against Michael creevy poor dude is always written like hes the sacrifice, The cat (mrs norris) gets saved but poor michael gets forgotten. Harry and Victoria are wriiten like they are individuals even though they are twins, But the Weasley and patil twins are wriitten like ya typical twins with twin speak. The mc comes to the realisation that hes not that different from his father (Tom) But i think its more like he suffering from what all transmigrators suffer with coz as soon as he Realised that he was in HP the first thing he does is make a vow to be the best wizard in alll wizardness.
Can someone spoil me what exactly happened with Jon's mother and Tom Riddle? I don't care so just go ahead and spoil that secret. I will continue to read though.
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It started pretty good but when he started his music it got way too much focus and the story seemed to stagnate. It got too boring for me personally but maybe other people like 3 chapters with 80% song lyrics in it. If you ignore the music part it is a decent story with little flaws that can easily be improved upon
More chapter please ////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////
If there is something I hate about this type of novel, it is that every protagonist who is reincarnated or not (the truth is the same), always has acting skills, and I am already tired of this convenience.
The story in general is not bad it's good the part that I liked the most was his lineage without a doubt, but the MC is very shallow in terms of character development, his first attempt at a conversation with strong emotions was quite forced but it improves over the course of the game story, one of the biggest flaws is the MC trying not to change anything, an example is he could have taken Tom Riddle's diary but he didn't, the MC seems to lack strong emotions and is kind of robotic but improves a little over the course of the story story, the character doesn't seem to have a backstory before he is reincarnated which I understand gets weird a 24 year old guy attracted to 14 year old girls, which can be fixed by having the MC die pretty early at the age of 13-15 years since it wouldn't make much difference but it's still a good story that you can spend time reading.
Nice novel and it seems to be well thought. I hope it last longer than others. Nice novel and it seems to be well thought. I hope it last longer than others.
Mdr c toujours aussi mauvais [img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap]
it was even acceptable, but it went to the bottom the moment he had his first interaction with Victoria Potter, with the story getting boring and weird... it's just confusing and boring
this is too cringe for me [img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp]
More chapter please ////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////
Please continue the FF. Please continue the FF. Please continue the FF. Please continue the FF. Please continue the FF. Please continue the FF.
I like this FF please continue and please if possible update on the regular...................................................................
I am coming from the previous hp fic and I have to say this one is significantly better specially the fight scenes. It seems like you have stopped using then every 5 seconds. Jokes aside fantastic work author
I like this FF it's characters are more human and don't really feel like 2D the ones that Mc is currently focusing on atleast. It's still too early to say it's a harem so there is a chance that it will go down the drain.
This book is well written. but what has lost stars for me is that it is to similar to your previous hp book. I am only 20 chapters in now but it is still a good read.
Really awesome book, I think the pace the story is taking is perfect and trope is somewhat unique.
Look its kinda slow because of the distribution of content on the chapters but is also much better than the flash like speed that the first had. the thing of the change of the baseline reality (Canon) of the original was a nice touch just... in the first the relationship of the MC with Harry's sister was too much forced atleast in the first 20 chp of the original where i just stoped so dont know much about that but just make characters that have a bit of realism and dont mess up the blank characters that we have. the first was so bad at character design that i lost interest in 20 min. anyway you could expand the world more than the original harry potter it will be good. if you do that make things simple and "human" like basecally everything that made my experience less than desirable was better atleast for now all i see on this new version is a Harry potter fic with great potential and a autor with more vision and experience than the Last? Time so keep the good work i have great hope on this you so keep the good work[img=recommend]
I'm a fan from your previous work (The Secret Heir) so i'm looking foward to see the changes. A mysterious first chapter, hope we can have a long story ahead
well I dropped it. why well it all started with the mc its his fault. you see the mc has what i call Oxymoronism. He goes around saying he needs to hide his true strength ( personally not my fav stratergie but it works )but 10 seconds later complain about not getting any recognition, its the complaining that started to get to me, It felt more like the author wanted throw in extra words for word count or something. Mc is also written like hes some Debonair type a guy but has no social skills whats so ever. The female characters were written like pick me girls especially Victoria. The Genderbending was also getting on my nerves i dont know if this is translated or not. Also what do ppl have against Michael creevy poor dude is always written like hes the sacrifice, The cat (mrs norris) gets saved but poor michael gets forgotten. Harry and Victoria are wriiten like they are individuals even though they are twins, But the Weasley and patil twins are wriitten like ya typical twins with twin speak. The mc comes to the realisation that hes not that different from his father (Tom) But i think its more like he suffering from what all transmigrators suffer with coz as soon as he Realised that he was in HP the first thing he does is make a vow to be the best wizard in alll wizardness.