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A young but experienced solder held two things dear to his heart, his country and family. Spiraling into darkness as the former betrayed and hunts him down and the latter killed by the former. In the haze of his inner torment and guilt, he is given a chance to turn the page at an unknown price. Rekindled but now dishonored, he walks step by step through the abyss.
The only reason Im giving 4.8 instead of 5 is because in the time I finished reading all the chapters that where out it has not updated I’m hopping that you will start updating it again soon and then I will give it 5 stares
This is one of the best fanfiction I have read the only problem was he was confusing the pronouns in the Jacob Revan scene
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As I continue to read this I find myself liking it more and more... This is both bad and great. I want to read more, but I will soon find myself unable to as I reach the latest chapter. After this happens I will have to scour through the endless amount of fanfics that are about collecting waifu and pointless plot progression with absurdly op main characters that one shot people and have anger issues. I will be sad. But once another chapter comes I will be happy. I'm sadly, and excitedly addicted [img=recommend]
Is good ʕ•̫͡•ʕ•̫͡•ʔ•̫͡•ʔ•̫͡•ʕ•̫͡•ʔ•̫͡•ʕ•̫͡•ʕ•̫͡•ʔ•̫͡•ʔ•̫͡•ʕ•̫͡•ʔ•̫͡•ʔ ʕ•̫͡•ʕ•̫͡•ʔ•̫͡•ʔ•̫͡•ʕ•̫͡•ʔ•̫͡•ʕ•̫͡•ʕ•̫͡•ʔ•̫͡•ʔ•̫͡•ʕ•̫͡•ʔ•̫͡•ʔ
I really like the charakter and story design. I love dishonored and how it was implemented into the marvel world. I can only hope this story will conitinue. Great work👍
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Interesting premise, poor execution I’m currently 5 chapters in and having a real hard time seeing how this novel has such high praises. The author clearly doesn’t put much thought into his main character’s actions and he feels dull. I feel like I’m reading some cookie cutter novel. The plot of the novel is lacking depth of thought in many instances. Why would the main protagonist be put under his brothers command? How does he go from saving Hawkeyes family in a hostage situation to being deployed in Afghanistan? Why would you marry and have kids with the woman your brother proposed to? Why are there hand grenades inside a prison? No seriously, WHY ARE THERE EXPLOSIVES INSIDE A PRISON??? Another issue with this novel is that it struggles not being edgy. I don’t know if the author is trying to make his protagonist seem cool, but I don’t think a guard in a prison is in on your brother’s revenge plot against you. Speaking of revenge plots, does our protagonist even have one? It seems like he doesn’t even think for himself half the time. He literally gets to talk to his family in whatever afterlife their in and they get maybe half a paragraph of writing? Very little emotional impact. Overall I’m disappointed by this novel so far. I hope that it improves later on and if it does I’ll update this review with something I like other than the protagonist’s powers.
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Aa sad beginning, and power source was also nicely design....i was bit confused as what skills were open and and what not that's all. Story is overall awesome....it's good if he find another goal in life.... people don't like sad ending hehe...
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So far so good Keep up the good work .................................................................... ...............................................
Thank you for this beautiful story. ....................................................... .......................................................
so far im living your story and there would litle i would change but im liking where you are going with the story so far. im thinking you might create a team or a backup support for him like there was jn the same so that he would be able to get the stuff he need faster and at the same time have some backup
Muito bom precisa de melhorar um pouco .....................................................................................................................................
Tbh, I am not good at giving review, but I will give 5🌟 because I have been enjoying the story so far. ..............................................
It's a good story, it honestly looks a bit like a Punisher story, right, who lost his family, there were also versions that were because of that, companions who were involved with drug trafficking, it's very similar to the Punisher's story, and this one if it had received some special power or something like that, but it's ok overall.
4.8🌟(15 chap) one of the best fic... mc is like John wick with power, his background is well made. a man is on path of Avenger.............
I have yet to read this, but I am going to give 5 stars simply for the fact that it's a dishonored crossover(?). yeah that's it
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So far so good, but it's only 2 chapters, so not much to say. I would suggest to use ' ' for thoughts rather than **, it looks more readable.
A young but experienced solder held two things dear to his heart, his country and family. Spiraling into darkness as the former betrayed and hunts him down and the latter killed by the former. In the haze of his inner torment and guilt, he is given a chance to turn the page at an unknown price. Rekindled but now dishonored, he walks step by step through the abyss.
The only reason Im giving 4.8 instead of 5 is because in the time I finished reading all the chapters that where out it has not updated I’m hopping that you will start updating it again soon and then I will give it 5 stares
This is one of the best fanfiction I have read the only problem was he was confusing the pronouns in the Jacob Revan scene
Spoiler de révélation As I continue to read this I find myself liking it more and more... This is both bad and great. I want to read more, but I will soon find myself unable to as I reach the latest chapter. After this happens I will have to scour through the endless amount of fanfics that are about collecting waifu and pointless plot progression with absurdly op main characters that one shot people and have anger issues. I will be sad. But once another chapter comes I will be happy. I'm sadly, and excitedly addicted [img=recommend]
Is good ʕ•̫͡•ʕ•̫͡•ʔ•̫͡•ʔ•̫͡•ʕ•̫͡•ʔ•̫͡•ʕ•̫͡•ʕ•̫͡•ʔ•̫͡•ʔ•̫͡•ʕ•̫͡•ʔ•̫͡•ʔ ʕ•̫͡•ʕ•̫͡•ʔ•̫͡•ʔ•̫͡•ʕ•̫͡•ʔ•̫͡•ʕ•̫͡•ʕ•̫͡•ʔ•̫͡•ʔ•̫͡•ʕ•̫͡•ʔ•̫͡•ʔ
I really like the charakter and story design. I love dishonored and how it was implemented into the marvel world. I can only hope this story will conitinue. Great work👍
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Interesting premise, poor execution I’m currently 5 chapters in and having a real hard time seeing how this novel has such high praises. The author clearly doesn’t put much thought into his main character’s actions and he feels dull. I feel like I’m reading some cookie cutter novel. The plot of the novel is lacking depth of thought in many instances. Why would the main protagonist be put under his brothers command? How does he go from saving Hawkeyes family in a hostage situation to being deployed in Afghanistan? Why would you marry and have kids with the woman your brother proposed to? Why are there hand grenades inside a prison? No seriously, WHY ARE THERE EXPLOSIVES INSIDE A PRISON??? Another issue with this novel is that it struggles not being edgy. I don’t know if the author is trying to make his protagonist seem cool, but I don’t think a guard in a prison is in on your brother’s revenge plot against you. Speaking of revenge plots, does our protagonist even have one? It seems like he doesn’t even think for himself half the time. He literally gets to talk to his family in whatever afterlife their in and they get maybe half a paragraph of writing? Very little emotional impact. Overall I’m disappointed by this novel so far. I hope that it improves later on and if it does I’ll update this review with something I like other than the protagonist’s powers.
Spoiler de révélation Aa sad beginning, and power source was also nicely design....i was bit confused as what skills were open and and what not that's all. Story is overall awesome....it's good if he find another goal in life.... people don't like sad ending hehe...
🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥
So far so good Keep up the good work .................................................................... ...............................................
Thank you for this beautiful story. ....................................................... .......................................................
so far im living your story and there would litle i would change but im liking where you are going with the story so far. im thinking you might create a team or a backup support for him like there was jn the same so that he would be able to get the stuff he need faster and at the same time have some backup
Muito bom precisa de melhorar um pouco .....................................................................................................................................
Tbh, I am not good at giving review, but I will give 5🌟 because I have been enjoying the story so far. ..............................................
It's a good story, it honestly looks a bit like a Punisher story, right, who lost his family, there were also versions that were because of that, companions who were involved with drug trafficking, it's very similar to the Punisher's story, and this one if it had received some special power or something like that, but it's ok overall.
4.8🌟(15 chap) one of the best fic... mc is like John wick with power, his background is well made. a man is on path of Avenger.............
I have yet to read this, but I am going to give 5 stars simply for the fact that it's a dishonored crossover(?). yeah that's it
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So far so good, but it's only 2 chapters, so not much to say. I would suggest to use ' ' for thoughts rather than **, it looks more readable.