THE GÀMER : IN THE MULTIVERSE ( AU )

LV 13

funmaxwell

I find the idea of a gamer self-insert into the MCU very interesting. But I couldn't read more than one chapter of this because of the grammar and just how the author put emotion into the story. sure the grammar is understandable but it's bad enough it gives me a headache reading it as there's bad phrasing and grammar mistake in practically every sentence. Then there's how the author shows emotion in the story. example Peter feels sad or Peter says something in a sad tone. I honestly can't stand that. because the author's writing in how the characters should feel instead of describing the characters displaying the emotions the author wants to convey. like if someone wanted to show a character being angry 😡 they do it by having the character yell and cussing at the target of their anger and the author could display them yelling by putting everything in caps example SHUT YOUR PIE HOLE. they're much better ways to show emotion for a character than just writing the emotion the character should feel into the story.

LV 14

ssdxd

okay this story is very confusing the main character was told this world is mixed world of marvel and dc but this Mc keeps forgetting or he's just that stupid, or the author forgot what he put in the earlier chapters. the he/she is so confusing as well when your trying to figure out whom is talking or who is who so. the people who are putting 4 or 5 stars on it not sure where they got that from got to chapter 11 to see if it would get better but it didn't . author needs to do a major edit on the story so it flows better and it clears things up

LV 5

Hero_MT

Good Novel [img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]

LV 4

No_friends_

hero complex the grammar is really bad mc dose not use the gamer system ________________________________________________________________________________

LV 4

Bob_Uchiha_XD

The writing quality is too horrible, the plot doesn't exist, the story development is confusing, the character interaction is unpleasant... and the main problem is that the fanfic seems to be a Chinese cultivation/ xianxian/ wuxia novel .

LV 13

raja2105

Mc coincidentally Spiderman's tween. coincidentally meets Batgirl. coincidentally metts X-Men. coincidence, coincidentally happens everything. no story development.

LV 1

Raul_Sharma

1. I got a dig bick 2. You that read wrong 3. You read it wrong also 4. You checked 5. You smiled 7. You are wondering why you still reading this 8. You see the mistake right? (on7) 10. But did you see I skipped number 6? 10. You checked 11. And saw I doubled number 10 and skipped number 9 13. And did you see I skipped number 2 14. You got tricked 15. But did you see that I skipped number 12 16. You checked and wandered why am I wasting my time on this. (You got tricked)

LV 4

void_ouroboros

By chapter 5 he has used the gamer system a total of not at all except to check affection and his titles. Which shows that he would kill himself just to have a 5% chance to save someone else. The grammar is also absolute garbage. By chapter 5 there has been no world building or character design. he was also in a military boot camp for 7 years and he’s supposedly a genius yet his CQC and knife handling are only at trainee.

LV 14

Slothiticus

Grammer isn't great but is readable albeit frustrating. The story itself though is sub par really isn't any action which is disappointing for a mcu/dc fanfic. Then there is the poorly written plot that centers around illogical interactions between mc and just about every female character that seem to almost all have d cup breast for some reason. I wanted to like this but to be honest there isn't anything in this story as it is now to make it even remotely worth the investment of time.

LV 3

Arcane_Warhammer

The review section is on fire. But the quality of this work is ash. Even the edited part of the work is ashen waste. I can confirm all the criticism is true. Author cannot handle the truth. He either lashes out or be hyper defensive. One time he flat-out said something like if the reviewer did not like his work then, they should not read it. BTW is this author ashamed to a Chinese? Why he set his location in India?Anyhow WQ, SD, CD and World background are all 1 star. Update Stability is 4 star.

LV 5

Psan

What do you expect from a thief. This is a stolen work that was GOOGLE translated from spanish from here, wâttpâd côm/story/210912151-esto-no-es-marvel [img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap]

LV 4

Lackada1sical

Initial Evaluation: Average The introduction is easy to understand 'SI-OC via reincarnation' which MC is aware of & has an adult mentality before he die, right? Then why doesn't it show? your thoughts are everywhere man & there are tons of grammatical error which greatly affects story & MC progression. MC's foreknowledge isn't utilized, adult mentality is a bust & multiple POVs which adds to the confusion. In short, you lack focus when writing & doesn't care about improvement. I have noticed that there are no development when it comes to your thought process or writing skills, even if there are tons of review pertaining to that. It seems that you don't care at all. This review is for future readers so that you won't complain too much and make you aware of the trap this novel is likely portraying.

LV 4

KoRSito

I remember this story(original). I really liked its first chapters, with some grammar errors. but the story comes to an end within the DC/Marvel universe. with the MC discovering that he is more than just a human and with powerful beings "manipulating his way to make him mature". 🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔

LV 4

toshisero

its so bad that i cant get past ch 5. i am regretting for even trying to read this.

LV 12

Issiah_Bentley

the story had readable Grammer it wasn't terrible but every conversation or interaction with other characters felt to easy you can tell this writer is either new or doesn't write that much. it's a great story idea love that but the way it's being implemented is just not for me

LV 14

Parker_Goad

story doesn't flow terrible grammar even after the rewrite and almost everyone is totally idiotic

LV 4

Virelith

Grammer is really bad.. I couldn't even read more than 1 chapter..

is this even your book? because I think I have read this from wolfate and the Portuguese title is esto no es marvel? bro that is not so ethical if is not yours.