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I read the first 20 chapters and I feel a little familiar with the author's storytelling style. Do you know what the first 20 chapters achieved: making the reader emotional with the face slapping style typical of light novels. The author directly creates a story where the MC succeeds in making a great work and the rest is where the work is tested then the NPCs around act like keyboard warrior commentators where most of them are tasked with mocking the MC for the sake of building face-slapping emotional momentum. There is no depth to the story, just a story of brain pain. I have a feeling that the next chapters will also repeat like this.
needs more detail in his inventions he makes. you keep doing he Or she it's confusing. your charging coins for small chapters 😤
Good...update! update! update! update! update! update! update! update! update! update! update! update! update! update! update! update! update!
This book is very poorly written and inconsistent. The author changes things from sentence to sentence and none of the math makes sense. The author makes claims about reality that are impossible. I can no longer continue reading after chapter 7 because it is so poorly written.
there's no build up to the story just straight to it. it feel like it was rushed and lacking foundation. it was a good concept but poor execution.
It is something one could read while having nothing to do and no other thing to read doesn't mean it is bad just lacking in sense of crisis and excitement hope those will be added too, On the postive side the author is regular the story is fun the character are 3D it is realistic
needs improvements but its already good to read just lack some excitemen[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=update]t
good concept, good idea, it's just that the author doesn't have much experience in writing quite obviously, but no matter I will keep suporting author, so I hope he improves
pretty good over all just would like background info how he got the system and where he started/ came from. I need 140 charactersI need 140 characters
The concept is good, but how do I say this? The novel is just bland. It has no taste, no essence, no soul. Hdjdhhdhdjdjdjdjjdjjdjjdjdjjjdjdjjdj
Poor,naive,typical,waste time ,predictable,boring,IQ5 ..................................................................................................
I read the first 20 chapters and I feel a little familiar with the author's storytelling style. Do you know what the first 20 chapters achieved: making the reader emotional with the face slapping style typical of light novels. The author directly creates a story where the MC succeeds in making a great work and the rest is where the work is tested then the NPCs around act like keyboard warrior commentators where most of them are tasked with mocking the MC for the sake of building face-slapping emotional momentum. There is no depth to the story, just a story of brain pain. I have a feeling that the next chapters will also repeat like this.
needs more detail in his inventions he makes. you keep doing he Or she it's confusing. your charging coins for small chapters 😤
Good...update! update! update! update! update! update! update! update! update! update! update! update! update! update! update! update! update!
This book is very poorly written and inconsistent. The author changes things from sentence to sentence and none of the math makes sense. The author makes claims about reality that are impossible. I can no longer continue reading after chapter 7 because it is so poorly written.
there's no build up to the story just straight to it. it feel like it was rushed and lacking foundation. it was a good concept but poor execution.
It is something one could read while having nothing to do and no other thing to read doesn't mean it is bad just lacking in sense of crisis and excitement hope those will be added too, On the postive side the author is regular the story is fun the character are 3D it is realistic
needs improvements but its already good to read just lack some excitemen[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=update]t
good concept, good idea, it's just that the author doesn't have much experience in writing quite obviously, but no matter I will keep suporting author, so I hope he improves
pretty good over all just would like background info how he got the system and where he started/ came from. I need 140 charactersI need 140 characters
The concept is good, but how do I say this? The novel is just bland. It has no taste, no essence, no soul. Hdjdhhdhdjdjdjdjjdjjdjjdjdjjjdjdjjdj
Poor,naive,typical,waste time ,predictable,boring,IQ5 ..................................................................................................