Chapitre 16: I'm not dead! Somehow
I haven't continued this story for a long time. Yup, I'm the scum author that post a long ass story that isn't even in its climax, and leaves before the good part.
Now about the story, I love the theme I put on... But the main character became to OP. Like I love the telepathic connection The MC and Light have, however the other benefits like MC giving a bit Of EL power to his brother that gave his brother the ability to control EL Energy slowly became annoying. I originally did that So that Light and the MC could have a similar standing. The reason for that was because I want the MC to have Honey's (Oran high school Host club character) personality. Cute and sweet but a badass underneath. Of course, Honey has to have the big brother that looks after him and keeps him in line. So Light was put in that role...
Now, after I re-read it for the 5th time( Bc I have to feed my own unorthodox fanfic needs), I found a lot of area's that didn't make sense. To be honest, other than stopping light from getting the death note and making light's life more fun, he's only there for the minor scenes.
MC has no clue on how to be a detective, it's not how his brain works. The only reason he made progress with the team is because he knew everything beforehand. And the Bird cameras... it wasn't necessary. All he needed to do was use the program for the normal cameras to identify Misa.
Even in the beginning my logic was flawed. The nurse looking at him and being like 'oh he's fine' when he had an eye mutation? Yea that's stupid. I rushed it because I didn't want to deal with it and get right on to the main story... Only later did I realize that it was such a block to the story flow.
My grammar and spelling errors? Haven't even corrected those despite people mentioning it, and rereading it now makes me lose my concentration on the story. Like I put gave instead of have, how annoying is that?
Lastly is one of my own problems, I'm Ace but I still SIMP like a depraved person. I put My Asexuality on Light, with my doubts on if I'm really Ace or if I'm just too picky for my own good. Light and MC took both of my sides in my sexuality, one being my SIMP side (one that I only have for anime and Loki) and the other being my distaste for anything more than a literal Netflix and chill. To the main point of this mini rant, I didn't know how to put my thoughts into a gay perspective. Well, a not Ace gay perspective.
I can tell you right now that I failed.
It doesn't feel like MC really loves L that way, more like a fascination or like an Idol crush. I keep projecting my thoughts into how I'd fanboy all over L rather than see him as an actual romantic partner.
I want to write romance; I find reading romance being therapeutic so I thought why I can't do the same? It ends up being horrendously hard to write something you don't understand.
So, with me listing everything wrong with this and after losing all hope in this book, I thought of a solution.
Why not make a rewrite? I already know everything wrong with this book, so why not correct it in a new one?
So, this will be the official notice of this book being dropped and announcement of me starting a new one.
Though the new one will take a long time to come out, I want to at least be half done with it before releasing it on a regular basis without being stressed about the next update.
Thank you all for your support and understanding! And for reading this fanfic despite its errors and flaws. Thank you!
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