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I mean it’s alright, could’ve been better but. Like what most people said it feels more as if luffy was transported to a different world where gravity fall characters shows up. It’s not really the world of gravity fall.
Well done. Very good fanfic. 👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍
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The mcs name is luffy every wish was basically one piece based and it’s like the whole plot centers around him being luffy.
for first fanfiction this is excellent quality, at least compared to a lot of others. but as a fanfiction in general it could use some improvement. pacing's fine and I get the first 15 or so chapters were more about him training and getting strong and I like the little twists that existed like the one with Bill was pretty smart. I'm not sure if that's how it would actually work out with his deals, but interesting nonetheless though changing his name a at 25 without truly any reason. while he already told his name to everybody else, canonically is even a whole part where Soos is having trouble pronouncing Luffy. might want to eventually go back and edit that but you have the base for something really good here at least so far maybe not something on the level of freaking Harry Potter, but something great nonetheless
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First of all, your fic is very good so far and I hope that you don't drop... like me. I think I'm one of those you mentioned in the synopsis, I wrote one gravity falls fanfic in my first account that I haven't got the chance to access again cause I forgot the password. But anyway, It is very good so far so I'll give five stars.
I am enjoying the story very much! The only problem I have is that new chapters aren't coming out as fast as I want them too but that might be me being too greedy. Keep up the good work please!
Good job, actually not trash, almost decent. MABEL BEST GIRL MABEL BEST GIRL MABEL BEST GIRL MABEL BEST GIRL MABEL BEST GIRL MABEL BEST GIRL
this is soooo awesome bruh!!...i can waite long time for this fanfiction lol pleaseee don't droped this the noice fanfiction and btw i hope for your healthy.
This story is extremely interesting and i love his interaction with his animal friend's and i love his intelligence and his thinking..........
very very cool ........................................................................................................................................................................................................
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Too much one piece not enough gravity falls. The sentence structure also needs to be inproved.
Story is good it keeps me hanging in althoug it's still in the beginning so might change later but keep the work up author. I think the good points of the story are the character and how his daily live is show in the beginning. It's good for the world building and character design. Only have one dislike myself and that is with the luffy part of the character but thats just me not having watched one piece so not totally getting al the things he does. It didn't sit well with me in the beginning and thought that i would drop this webnovel after the first chapter. That because i didn't see it fit in gravity falls, but it does slowly grow on me and i can see it as him being one of the mysteries in gravity falls. So keep the work up author.
The idea and concept behind the fanfiction is pretty solid. But at one point the author just loses track of the original character and just emulates Luffy with a higher degree of intelligence rather than the character displayed in the beginning.
DUDE! This so true! it's extremely hard to find a GOOD Gravity falls that isn't BillDip or its just plain bad. Seriously, what the heck, I thought there would be more fanfics about it seeing as how good the show is but there isn't, hopefully you won't drop it.
the story is good, i liked it a lot, and it's very difficult to find good fanfics lately, please keep up the good work :) [img = recomendar]
Im excited too see what you do over time and how you will use the character when the twins get to the town and i hope that you might be able to keep the story rung even when the show had ended. and im curious a lot of people think that the show and rick and morty are connected because of things we have seen in the notebooks and rick and morty
Very good story and good character development, I just hope I update with more frequency (NOTE: REMEMBERING THE AUTHOR THAT IT HAS BEEN VERIFIED THAT THE WORLD OF GRAVITY FALLS IS LINKED TO 4 MORE DISNEY DRAWINGS, IT WOULD GIVE MORE HISTORY AND MORE DEVELOPMENT IF YOU CAN DO IT WRITE ABOUT THEM )
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Author did a fantastic job on this fanfic. This fanfic in way reminded me of when I was young and made me feel nostalgic. I'm really looking forward to more chapters.
I mean it’s alright, could’ve been better but. Like what most people said it feels more as if luffy was transported to a different world where gravity fall characters shows up. It’s not really the world of gravity fall.
Well done. Very good fanfic. 👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍
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The mcs name is luffy every wish was basically one piece based and it’s like the whole plot centers around him being luffy.
for first fanfiction this is excellent quality, at least compared to a lot of others. but as a fanfiction in general it could use some improvement. pacing's fine and I get the first 15 or so chapters were more about him training and getting strong and I like the little twists that existed like the one with Bill was pretty smart. I'm not sure if that's how it would actually work out with his deals, but interesting nonetheless though changing his name a at 25 without truly any reason. while he already told his name to everybody else, canonically is even a whole part where Soos is having trouble pronouncing Luffy. might want to eventually go back and edit that but you have the base for something really good here at least so far maybe not something on the level of freaking Harry Potter, but something great nonetheless
Spoiler de révélation First of all, your fic is very good so far and I hope that you don't drop... like me. I think I'm one of those you mentioned in the synopsis, I wrote one gravity falls fanfic in my first account that I haven't got the chance to access again cause I forgot the password. But anyway, It is very good so far so I'll give five stars.
I am enjoying the story very much! The only problem I have is that new chapters aren't coming out as fast as I want them too but that might be me being too greedy. Keep up the good work please!
Good job, actually not trash, almost decent. MABEL BEST GIRL MABEL BEST GIRL MABEL BEST GIRL MABEL BEST GIRL MABEL BEST GIRL MABEL BEST GIRL
this is soooo awesome bruh!!...i can waite long time for this fanfiction lol pleaseee don't droped this the noice fanfiction and btw i hope for your healthy.
This story is extremely interesting and i love his interaction with his animal friend's and i love his intelligence and his thinking..........
very very cool ........................................................................................................................................................................................................
Who's the love interest? [img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
Too much one piece not enough gravity falls. The sentence structure also needs to be inproved.
Story is good it keeps me hanging in althoug it's still in the beginning so might change later but keep the work up author. I think the good points of the story are the character and how his daily live is show in the beginning. It's good for the world building and character design. Only have one dislike myself and that is with the luffy part of the character but thats just me not having watched one piece so not totally getting al the things he does. It didn't sit well with me in the beginning and thought that i would drop this webnovel after the first chapter. That because i didn't see it fit in gravity falls, but it does slowly grow on me and i can see it as him being one of the mysteries in gravity falls. So keep the work up author.
The idea and concept behind the fanfiction is pretty solid. But at one point the author just loses track of the original character and just emulates Luffy with a higher degree of intelligence rather than the character displayed in the beginning.
DUDE! This so true! it's extremely hard to find a GOOD Gravity falls that isn't BillDip or its just plain bad. Seriously, what the heck, I thought there would be more fanfics about it seeing as how good the show is but there isn't, hopefully you won't drop it.
the story is good, i liked it a lot, and it's very difficult to find good fanfics lately, please keep up the good work :) [img = recomendar]
Im excited too see what you do over time and how you will use the character when the twins get to the town and i hope that you might be able to keep the story rung even when the show had ended. and im curious a lot of people think that the show and rick and morty are connected because of things we have seen in the notebooks and rick and morty
Very good story and good character development, I just hope I update with more frequency (NOTE: REMEMBERING THE AUTHOR THAT IT HAS BEEN VERIFIED THAT THE WORLD OF GRAVITY FALLS IS LINKED TO 4 MORE DISNEY DRAWINGS, IT WOULD GIVE MORE HISTORY AND MORE DEVELOPMENT IF YOU CAN DO IT WRITE ABOUT THEM )
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Author did a fantastic job on this fanfic. This fanfic in way reminded me of when I was young and made me feel nostalgic. I'm really looking forward to more chapters.