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I like Shizuka's relationship with mc so much that I even feel sorry that it is harem, but who am I to judge, I trust you will develop it well, well here I will continue waiting for new caps.
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WQ:5 I mean it may just be my eyes being so used to bad grammar and so that I don't notice it but I doubt it SD:4 Honestly loved it and would've given it a 5 if not for that unnecessary plot twist in the last few chapters though I do understand that it was necessary to calm some people but it sorta took away from that initial feeling we had. CD:5 No complaints here US:5 I legit don't know what the schedule is but I think he gives 3 or 4 per week which is pretty good in my books WB:5 Pretty much automatic for a fanfic but even if it were not one I'd give maybe a 4 or so I see where the complaints came from before but there is no NTR, especially since we were shown that she was married to someone else anyhow. . . . Even if it really didn't matter much with the latest revelation
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For Everyone saying that there's no Tragedy or NTR on tags there's a ploy twist for you ................... ................................
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This is really entertaining. As far as the NTR complaints go, I normally ain't a fan of it but it really isn't that bad here. It felt genuinely necessary even. But that's just me. But after the tragedy, it's smooth sailing and I find myself really liking the story. The writing is pretty good besides the, little more than occasional, mistakes in grammer. [SPOILER BUT NOT A SPOILER]: I still want my sad feelings back.
ΠΡΠ»ΠΈΡΠ½Π°Ρ ΠΈΡΡΠΎΡΠΈΡ ππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππ ππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππ ππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππ ππππππππππππππππππππΠ½Π΅Ρ
ΠΡΠ»ΠΈ ΠΊΠΎΠ³ΠΎ-ΡΠΎ ΠΎΡΡΠ°Π»ΠΊΠΈΠ²Π°Π΅Ρ, ΡΡΠΎ ΡΠΈΠΏΠ° Π·Π΄Π΅ΡΡ Π΅ΡΡΡ ΠΠ’Π , ΡΠΎ ΠΏΡΠΎΡΡΠΎ ΠΏΡΠΎΠΏΡΡΡΠΈΡΠ΅ ΠΏΠ°ΡΡ Π³Π»Π°Π², Π²Ρ Π½Π΅ ΠΏΠΎΠΆΠ°Π»Π΅Π΅ΡΠ΅. ΠΠ΅Π΄Ρ Π΄Π°Π»ΡΡΠ΅ ΡΡΠ°Π½ΠΎΠ²ΠΈΡΡΡ ΡΠΎΠ»ΡΠΊΠΎ ΠΈΠ½ΡΠ΅ΡΠ΅ΡΠ½Π΅Π΅. ΠΠ°ΠΆΠ΄ΡΡ Π³Π»Π°Π²Ρ Π²Ρ Π±ΡΠ΄Π΅ΡΠ΅ ΡΠΌΠ΅ΡΡΡΡΡ, ΡΡΠΎ Ρ Π³Π°ΡΠ°Π½ΡΠΈΡΡΡ. Π‘ΠΏΠ°ΡΠΈΠ±ΠΎ Π°Π²ΡΠΎΡΡ Π·Π° ΡΠΈΠΊΠ°ΡΠ½ΡΠΉ ΡΠ°Π½ΡΠΈΠΊ, Π΄Π°Π²Π½ΠΎ ΡΠ°ΠΊΠΎΠ³ΠΎ Π½Π΅ ΡΠΈΡΠ°Π».
I do what the Author guides. I like the flow of the story. cheers I wish it to be crossposted to ff.net so I can download it as an epub.
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Don't drop before ending the prologue, this story is very much wholesoe after that darl prologue. Also, it's a proper oregairu fanfic with a self insert as hachiman, need I say more?
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Dude, I confess that I was finding a pretty mediocre fan fic, about a cold and calculating generic protagonist, but in this last chapter, I was able to see the personality development of mc, and his effort to understand his own feelings, wonderful work
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Iβm sick of following my dreams, man. Iβm just going to ask where theyβre going and hook up with βem later. Mitch Hedberg The surest sign that intelligent life exists elsewhere in the universe is that it has never tried to contact us. Bill Waterson
This is great story! But why all your stories have past tragedy. Did all your life tragedy? lol I know its needed for story foundation, but you should decrease it a bit man. But i like it this one than the others. Keep it up! And thank you!
A very good story development. The prologue is interesting, similar to a John Wick action movie, maybe a little clichΓ© in some parts and a little surreal in others (less than transmigration) but it fulfills the idea of presenting the nature of the protagonist and his background. . So far, the protagonist's interactions are quite entertaining and sometimes hilarious. I look forward to how this story progresses. Thanks for his work. P.S: LeΓ en tu perfil que hablas muchos idiomas Γ³sea la puta madre como manejas tantos idiomas. Yo solo puedo con mi legua materna y algo del ingles jajaaja[img=faceslap].
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I believe that if life gives you lemons, you should make lemonade... And try to find somebody whose life has given them vodka, and have a party. Ron White
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I like Shizuka's relationship with mc so much that I even feel sorry that it is harem, but who am I to judge, I trust you will develop it well, well here I will continue waiting for new caps.
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Spoiler de rΓ©vΓ©lation WQ:5 I mean it may just be my eyes being so used to bad grammar and so that I don't notice it but I doubt it SD:4 Honestly loved it and would've given it a 5 if not for that unnecessary plot twist in the last few chapters though I do understand that it was necessary to calm some people but it sorta took away from that initial feeling we had. CD:5 No complaints here US:5 I legit don't know what the schedule is but I think he gives 3 or 4 per week which is pretty good in my books WB:5 Pretty much automatic for a fanfic but even if it were not one I'd give maybe a 4 or so I see where the complaints came from before but there is no NTR, especially since we were shown that she was married to someone else anyhow. . . . Even if it really didn't matter much with the latest revelation
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For Everyone saying that there's no Tragedy or NTR on tags there's a ploy twist for you ................... ................................
Spoiler de rΓ©vΓ©lation This is really entertaining. As far as the NTR complaints go, I normally ain't a fan of it but it really isn't that bad here. It felt genuinely necessary even. But that's just me. But after the tragedy, it's smooth sailing and I find myself really liking the story. The writing is pretty good besides the, little more than occasional, mistakes in grammer. [SPOILER BUT NOT A SPOILER]: I still want my sad feelings back.
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ΠΡΠ»ΠΈ ΠΊΠΎΠ³ΠΎ-ΡΠΎ ΠΎΡΡΠ°Π»ΠΊΠΈΠ²Π°Π΅Ρ, ΡΡΠΎ ΡΠΈΠΏΠ° Π·Π΄Π΅ΡΡ Π΅ΡΡΡ ΠΠ’Π , ΡΠΎ ΠΏΡΠΎΡΡΠΎ ΠΏΡΠΎΠΏΡΡΡΠΈΡΠ΅ ΠΏΠ°ΡΡ Π³Π»Π°Π², Π²Ρ Π½Π΅ ΠΏΠΎΠΆΠ°Π»Π΅Π΅ΡΠ΅. ΠΠ΅Π΄Ρ Π΄Π°Π»ΡΡΠ΅ ΡΡΠ°Π½ΠΎΠ²ΠΈΡΡΡ ΡΠΎΠ»ΡΠΊΠΎ ΠΈΠ½ΡΠ΅ΡΠ΅ΡΠ½Π΅Π΅. ΠΠ°ΠΆΠ΄ΡΡ Π³Π»Π°Π²Ρ Π²Ρ Π±ΡΠ΄Π΅ΡΠ΅ ΡΠΌΠ΅ΡΡΡΡΡ, ΡΡΠΎ Ρ Π³Π°ΡΠ°Π½ΡΠΈΡΡΡ. Π‘ΠΏΠ°ΡΠΈΠ±ΠΎ Π°Π²ΡΠΎΡΡ Π·Π° ΡΠΈΠΊΠ°ΡΠ½ΡΠΉ ΡΠ°Π½ΡΠΈΠΊ, Π΄Π°Π²Π½ΠΎ ΡΠ°ΠΊΠΎΠ³ΠΎ Π½Π΅ ΡΠΈΡΠ°Π».
I do what the Author guides. I like the flow of the story. cheers I wish it to be crossposted to ff.net so I can download it as an epub.
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Don't drop before ending the prologue, this story is very much wholesoe after that darl prologue. Also, it's a proper oregairu fanfic with a self insert as hachiman, need I say more?
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Dude, I confess that I was finding a pretty mediocre fan fic, about a cold and calculating generic protagonist, but in this last chapter, I was able to see the personality development of mc, and his effort to understand his own feelings, wonderful work
Te doy 5 estrellas solo por hablar tantos idiomas lol .............................................. .............................................. ..
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Iβm sick of following my dreams, man. Iβm just going to ask where theyβre going and hook up with βem later. Mitch Hedberg The surest sign that intelligent life exists elsewhere in the universe is that it has never tried to contact us. Bill Waterson
This is great story! But why all your stories have past tragedy. Did all your life tragedy? lol I know its needed for story foundation, but you should decrease it a bit man. But i like it this one than the others. Keep it up! And thank you!
A very good story development. The prologue is interesting, similar to a John Wick action movie, maybe a little clichΓ© in some parts and a little surreal in others (less than transmigration) but it fulfills the idea of presenting the nature of the protagonist and his background. . So far, the protagonist's interactions are quite entertaining and sometimes hilarious. I look forward to how this story progresses. Thanks for his work. P.S: LeΓ en tu perfil que hablas muchos idiomas Γ³sea la puta madre como manejas tantos idiomas. Yo solo puedo con mi legua materna y algo del ingles jajaaja[img=faceslap].
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I believe that if life gives you lemons, you should make lemonade... And try to find somebody whose life has given them vodka, and have a party. Ron White
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