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Great story, liked the settings and the character, though I have one big issue with your writing style, you just switch randomly from third person to second person, at moments that comes out as kinda confusing, so please look into that. Other than that, the story,'s hilarious and interesting. Please continue writing.
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Interesting plotline but it has a few grammatical errors. Reading your story is fun and relaxing. If you were all trained that way we would either die or become superhuman 🤣 Keep going author and good luck.
Nice opening!! I feel bad for the chubby guy :(:( well at least he gets the ultimate harem system as compensation? [img=recommend] Looking forward to his reformation in the upcoming chapters!!
this was easy to read because the language was simple and clear. i am not into harm much but it was quite fun to read , thanks to you i explored another genre . i will be rooting for you , so keep writing.
The plot develops well throughout the chapter and the picture created is admirable with an enjoyable storyline. As a reader i got sinked in this world the Author had created. A fsacinating escape from reality into another world. A great read
The novel was amazing, the storyline flowed well, the plot made sense, and the character design was good too. But the grammar wasn't up to scratch. There's a lot of work that needs to be done when it comes to this aspect of things. That said, keep going author, you're doing an amazing job so far.
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Great story, liked the settings and the character, though I have one big issue with your writing style, you just switch randomly from third person to second person, at moments that comes out as kinda confusing, so please look into that. Other than that, the story,'s hilarious and interesting. Please continue writing.
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Interesting plotline but it has a few grammatical errors. Reading your story is fun and relaxing. If you were all trained that way we would either die or become superhuman 🤣 Keep going author and good luck.
Nice opening!! I feel bad for the chubby guy :(:( well at least he gets the ultimate harem system as compensation? [img=recommend] Looking forward to his reformation in the upcoming chapters!!
this was easy to read because the language was simple and clear. i am not into harm much but it was quite fun to read , thanks to you i explored another genre . i will be rooting for you , so keep writing.
The plot develops well throughout the chapter and the picture created is admirable with an enjoyable storyline. As a reader i got sinked in this world the Author had created. A fsacinating escape from reality into another world. A great read
The novel was amazing, the storyline flowed well, the plot made sense, and the character design was good too. But the grammar wasn't up to scratch. There's a lot of work that needs to be done when it comes to this aspect of things. That said, keep going author, you're doing an amazing job so far.
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