Omniverse Mayhem

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IWhoMustNotBeName

Hey, it's your everyday Author Here!! Since started writing after those damnable exams....so many mistakes might be there and I'm fixing it..... I am sure some may not like the way I write.... What can I do? After all I'm an inexperience Author who just started writing.... My Last Fanfic doesn't count since I copied half of the words from another...Many blamed me because of it....so I stopped writing that one.. . . . . Please do tell if anything is wrong... whether it is grammar or sentence.... Also give some ideas about the story, girls or powers or even the world's name he should travel in future....Also,..all kinds of greetings are welcome here..(if you understand what I'm hinting then.. Congratulations, you're once a millenia genius.)

LV 4

IWhoMustNotBeName

Hey guys! Since it's my story, I have right to be shameless, ain't I. And, I have already said that this fanfiction is AU. For example:- Harry Potter was known to a good, naive young boy but in my fanfic he may be dark and evil. Similarly, Danzo, the one eyed B#₹₹_ was evil to the core however here his karma may be more than Uzumaki Naruto.. Don't take this seriously it's just a suggestion..

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Dr_Chad

Well in my humble opinion, of course without offending anyone who thinks differently from my point of view, but also by looking at this matter in a different way and without fighting and by trying to make it clear, and by considering each and every ones opinion, I honestly believe that I completely forgot what I was going to say.

LV 13

BroBeforeHoe

i like how the story going so far, even though there's something that shouldnt be there like those typical chinese tropes xD but yeah its okay i guess. try to read 5-10 chapter before u drop it. Adios

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UchihaZenn

Nice story 🖒🖒🖒🖒🖒🖒🖒🖒🖒🖒🖒🖒🖒🖒🖒🖒🖒🖒🖒🖒🖒🖒🖒🖒🖒🖒🖒🖒 Nice story 🖒🖒🖒🖒🖒🖒🖒🖒🖒🖒🖒🖒🖒🖒🖒🖒🖒🖒🖒🖒🖒🖒🖒🖒🖒🖒🖒🖒 Nice story 🖒🖒🖒🖒🖒🖒🖒🖒🖒🖒🖒🖒🖒🖒🖒🖒🖒🖒🖒🖒🖒🖒🖒🖒🖒🖒🖒🖒

LV 4

loooooool

Good story[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]

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SidNaz

Good Beginnings......Very Good Grammar... Excellent backstory and explanation. Chapters are sort...I really like sort chapter since it is easy to read and understand.. And There are not many who nowadays write in sort chapters.. almost every authors are writing either long or super long...For example, Wish of a dragon. Every chapters are 100,000 words.. even though I like that story many would get bored reading long chapters. . . So Good Luck and keep posting everyday!

LV 4

Master_Vaders

left everything at 3 stars but the story development cuz any system that forces user to do a mission or X punishment is kinda garbage.......

LV 13

YWD_

Hmm My advice is don't be too quick to make the main character too strong, if possible, the original main character, don't be too transparent, pity him, make a scene behind about Ehit knowing the main character and or make the villain element more stable it's up to you add more face slapping xina young master so far so good

LV 1

Boa_Hancock09

Keep it up....... Really loved the plot of the new world.. ..................................................... . . . . . . . . . . . . . . .

LV 1

WOLFIE

Best fanfiction.. atleast for a novice like him. What's more that he's only 19 years old.[img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins]

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Aryan_Rambo

Your story is very natural. I really like it. And please keep on writing. . [img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp]

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Insomania

I'm optimistic about this one~ [img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]

LV 14

HHKing

nothing i read anywhere is perfect. the pacing is about right. characters are likeable. choices are agreeable. not much missing. I'm reading this because other things are tedious and force me to look other places for fun entertainment.

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ViaSky

good could use some editing from 1-7 for grammar [img=recommend] [img=recommend] [img=recommend] [img=recommend] [img=recommend] [img=recommend] [img=recommend] [img=recommend]

LV 4

Zaylent

good fanfic the chapter update was halt in the 90+ chapters but its now continuing .................................................................XD

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Shady_Emad_

I LOVE IT.! ....................................................................................💝💝💝💝💝💝💝💝💝💝💝💝🥰🥰🥰🥰🥰🥰🥰🥰🥰🥰🥰🥰🥰🥰😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😘😘😘😘😘😘😘😘😘😘😘💝💝💝...................

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Rocky350

New story is great. Keep it 💯 👌 But don't stop midway cause it destroys our feelings to read. [img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp]