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Is this a novel where they actually go to the part where the game merges with real life Cause most stories just have them playing the video game for almost the whole story
Hi guys, long time no see or no update Si, there were some things that was needed to be attended bow I am all backed up therefore, the novel will start to serialize again from nov! see you and thanks of the support
good novel, but is it to hard to just check for grammar mistakes, i mean theres not a lot, but from you writing i can tell that it is sloppy mistakes, so please proof read it so that the story flows better. keep up the work :D
hello there. what happened? is it in hiatus? It's been so long 🥸😭 don't drop it author San!!! 🥴
The writing quality is abysmal to the point where I have read machine translations that made more sense. The story seems to be all over the place and characters are quite bland the author desperately needs someone to edit past chapters.
Grammer is bad and story is all over the place and adding to that there is a huge lack of information the mc is strong because he is strong how he got there dosent seem to say
the story is common in a lot of Chinese novel, go back in time-> use knowledge to make big money and an head start+ op grow gear (maybe). an big bad event is gonna happened and need to get ready for that and that's about it. this is a fine story but an big problem that some story have and a lot of people don't like this. and that is by making other people(side character) weak to make the main character strong, For Example: MC spent hours trying to mastery the spear, but somehow he still got first boss kill and first dungeon, even in todays gaming world, people that rush or try rushing past the mobs/group of people at the start of an new game is very common, and they are hardcore players. so the facts that MC still get first kill bonus. is pushing the plot a bit too much. like the first boss kill can happened in like the first 10 hours of the game. base on how long MC took to level.
The story is Kind of meh. Grammar and Vocabulary need work. The Characters are kind of stagnant, not sure about this part, sometimes the story is good.
I'm only 5 chapters in but I do think that's enough for me. There's plenty of grammatical mistakes, just barely enough for comprehension. The writing quality is substandard. It just seems like one of those niche rebirth novels where MC is one way or another OP but lacking some screws in his head. Story development is meh, nothing too special but it's not the most boring either. Some scenes are easily predictable. A bit of a shame, I did think this story had some potential had it been written better.
Characters are boring, dialogue is terrible and the grammar is even worse. Whenever he starts writing in all caps to make the MC sound angry (i think? only reason i could think of) it just looks terribly cringe and edgy. Had potential, but all characters are so bland that its like eating good looking food that has absolutely no spice or taste.
The Novel is Good, Although some of the Grammars and etc. Are Broken, But you can still understand what it meant to describe. Would Recommend to my Friends to Read this when the time Comes. All in all, 4 out of 5.
There are so many Grammar mistakes that it is making it hard to read and i do hope author that you can ask help from someone on proof reading your chapters before it is uploaded, but all in all it has potential to be a great novel.
writing and grammer have a lot of problems. there is little to no character development. the story seems to just bounce around. it introduces new chars without really telling you who they are. the Mc is suppose to be the number 1 genius in his high end college but story doesn't really show his intelligence, more of a barbarian fighter. char is suppose to be a mage but only uses spells sometime most fights are him using 1 skill to one hit kill all bosses that out lvl him by 10+ levels. is the second person to get a gods blessing and become an apostle but the first person to is underpowered
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good try but the writing quality is poor. also the story development seems to deteriorate around 20's we jump from a trial to all out war. very confusing. with an editor and a little bit of rework this could be a great book!
"NO HAREM TAG" = RARE, AMAZING, EXCEPTIONAL NOVEL PLOT WITHOUT BRAIN DEAD AND USELESS A.K.A GOOD FOR NOTHING WOMAN IN MC'S LIFE. HOOOORAAAAAAYY!!!
I definitely recommend this book it's a fun read. However, honestly I'm kinda annoyed that the author had the gall to say/ask for readers not to complain about the writing quality but instead point the mistakes out, and here the readers are pointing them out but even after a month or more few to none were addressed or fixed. IDK maybe it's just some that have slipped through the cracks but either way as a reader its kinda annoying.
So the story is pretty good so far while I’m at chapter 55. The pacing is nice, the skills seem interesting, and it looks like there is a lot of potential for world building. That being said, it seems to be heading in a direction that makes me feel like I might drop it soon sadly. I’ll list the pros and cons below Pros: -Good pacing -Cool abilities -OP protagonist, if you’re into that -Only about 120~ chapters are in VR, then it goes to real-world (from what I have seen) -Interesting power system of gods and blessings Cons: -Grammar is fine most of the time, weird at other times, and occasionally requires you to read something a few times to understand -A few plot holes -Some illogical power scaling - the Romance (this is making me think about dropping) This will be more detailed as it’s my biggest issue so far. So far, the female lead serve to do 3 things: blush when the MC says something, stutter when interacting with the MC, and receive things from the MC…im not exaggerating. Her unique class, her equipment, her summons, her spells, all from the MC. She is useless 99+% of the time and it’s to the point where the main female side character, who hasn’t gotten as much screen time, is more persuasive as a love interest (no harem confirmed so all hope is lost 😂). To top it off, the MC changes his whole personality when he is with her. About 18 of the 55 chapters I’ve read so far has been centered around them together so there is that… I’ll try some more chapters but it’s not looking good. The worst part is, I feel this behavoiur will get worse when it switches from VR to real life. TLDR: Pretty decent so far, not too many errors but they are apparent, the romance is ruining the story and unless something changes, I’ll probably drop.
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atleast you kept your word about actually making a apocalipse story instead of stretching the vr portion to be 90% of the story. hello
so in summary, grammar= 1/5 everything else= 5/5 The story is wonderful, the characters have depth. the grammar is a godless afront to mother nature
Cons: The grammar is horrid and is almost nonexistent, a few characters feel unnecessary and I just hate even if they have a purpose, such as the sister. She might give the MC a purpose, but it's bad if I hope she dies in every single chapter she is in. The novel uses a ridiculous amount of cliches and is like I said, inconsistent. For ex. in one of the early chapters which was a small example, The notification literally notified him it was nora in front of him but he asked himself where nora is (as if she's not there). Also in one chapter the author forgot to add a description of a class and said they would as soon as possible, its been a month since. The rules that the author makes are inconsistent for example at one point the MC sadly states he can't use a spear because he's a warrior, and then comments right after that classes can use any weapon. Then a few paragraphs later he begins using a spear which I don't know how he has, because according to him warriors start with a sword and shield. He then instead of being a warrior becomes a mage, which is acceptable, but using the very same logic from earlier he shouldn't be able to use a spear but does. Pros: The story seemed bearable and maybe a decent read if the grammar was fixed. Not too many here. Giving it two stars because it actually kept me reading like 5 chapters.
Such a shame, the story got me really hooked but the writing quality makes it a headache to read and understand. Fast passed, the story is going fast, random things happens when there is already something going on. Characters interactions could be more deep and meaningful, tbh I didn’t feel that much emotions and thoughts behind the conversations. Also I don’t quite yet understand the MC on a deeper level, he just does stuffs.
the translation to English is rough. this novel would probably present well in the authors native language. unfortunately the character development and interaction between characters results in no development with the main character being overpowered with a domineering personality.
This story is alright. First thing you notice is writing quality, which is poor. It sounds like a non-native speaker wrote it. I can't really comment on update stability, so I gave it 5 stars. Story development is pretty basic, and I was hoping to feel...more. It's somewhat superficial and honestly required some deeper thought. MC's just running around completing tasks right now without thinking much. Honestly feeling a little bored. Character is pretty basic. Props to actively choosing not to have a Harem. World background is a little disappointing at this point in the story. There's random GM interference to make the journey harder for the MC. It seems highly unnecessary. Also, he decided to add Gods and God's apostles early and make the MC into one, which seems a bit much. I don't know. Honestly just expect more, since the story has a lot of potential.
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The story proluge is good but please fix the skill usage like mp cool down and it takes to much time for the development to takes place make the story more details
I have to say this, the story was really good👍, it had vivid details and story building was very unique and like the plot very much. A hidden jewel, I think it will soon became a famous book.
Good day! You’re one of the writers that I found admirable because you write great sytem/game stories and you’re able to connect to your readers through writing. I love how you strive in writing and your behavior is something we look up to. I am reaching out to you because we feel that you worth our Offer. If you are interested, kindly reply here, click my profile and look for my e mail and I'll discuss everything with you.
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Well, I was reading novels at dreame and wattpad for past few years. I only downloaded web novel at my friend's recommendation. but, this one really has a lot of potential. Author-chan don't drop it.
This book is unique , it's different from other MMORPG books I've ever read . The descriptions are detailed and vivid . The MC is interesting , and I also like the story development . It's surely a recommended book.
Is this a novel where they actually go to the part where the game merges with real life Cause most stories just have them playing the video game for almost the whole story
Hi guys, long time no see or no update Si, there were some things that was needed to be attended bow I am all backed up therefore, the novel will start to serialize again from nov! see you and thanks of the support
good novel, but is it to hard to just check for grammar mistakes, i mean theres not a lot, but from you writing i can tell that it is sloppy mistakes, so please proof read it so that the story flows better. keep up the work :D
hello there. what happened? is it in hiatus? It's been so long 🥸😭 don't drop it author San!!! 🥴
The writing quality is abysmal to the point where I have read machine translations that made more sense. The story seems to be all over the place and characters are quite bland the author desperately needs someone to edit past chapters.
Grammer is bad and story is all over the place and adding to that there is a huge lack of information the mc is strong because he is strong how he got there dosent seem to say
the story is common in a lot of Chinese novel, go back in time-> use knowledge to make big money and an head start+ op grow gear (maybe). an big bad event is gonna happened and need to get ready for that and that's about it. this is a fine story but an big problem that some story have and a lot of people don't like this. and that is by making other people(side character) weak to make the main character strong, For Example: MC spent hours trying to mastery the spear, but somehow he still got first boss kill and first dungeon, even in todays gaming world, people that rush or try rushing past the mobs/group of people at the start of an new game is very common, and they are hardcore players. so the facts that MC still get first kill bonus. is pushing the plot a bit too much. like the first boss kill can happened in like the first 10 hours of the game. base on how long MC took to level.
The story is Kind of meh. Grammar and Vocabulary need work. The Characters are kind of stagnant, not sure about this part, sometimes the story is good.
I'm only 5 chapters in but I do think that's enough for me. There's plenty of grammatical mistakes, just barely enough for comprehension. The writing quality is substandard. It just seems like one of those niche rebirth novels where MC is one way or another OP but lacking some screws in his head. Story development is meh, nothing too special but it's not the most boring either. Some scenes are easily predictable. A bit of a shame, I did think this story had some potential had it been written better.
Characters are boring, dialogue is terrible and the grammar is even worse. Whenever he starts writing in all caps to make the MC sound angry (i think? only reason i could think of) it just looks terribly cringe and edgy. Had potential, but all characters are so bland that its like eating good looking food that has absolutely no spice or taste.
The Novel is Good, Although some of the Grammars and etc. Are Broken, But you can still understand what it meant to describe. Would Recommend to my Friends to Read this when the time Comes. All in all, 4 out of 5.
There are so many Grammar mistakes that it is making it hard to read and i do hope author that you can ask help from someone on proof reading your chapters before it is uploaded, but all in all it has potential to be a great novel.
writing and grammer have a lot of problems. there is little to no character development. the story seems to just bounce around. it introduces new chars without really telling you who they are. the Mc is suppose to be the number 1 genius in his high end college but story doesn't really show his intelligence, more of a barbarian fighter. char is suppose to be a mage but only uses spells sometime most fights are him using 1 skill to one hit kill all bosses that out lvl him by 10+ levels. is the second person to get a gods blessing and become an apostle but the first person to is underpowered
Spoiler de révélation good try but the writing quality is poor. also the story development seems to deteriorate around 20's we jump from a trial to all out war. very confusing. with an editor and a little bit of rework this could be a great book!
"NO HAREM TAG" = RARE, AMAZING, EXCEPTIONAL NOVEL PLOT WITHOUT BRAIN DEAD AND USELESS A.K.A GOOD FOR NOTHING WOMAN IN MC'S LIFE. HOOOORAAAAAAYY!!!
I definitely recommend this book it's a fun read. However, honestly I'm kinda annoyed that the author had the gall to say/ask for readers not to complain about the writing quality but instead point the mistakes out, and here the readers are pointing them out but even after a month or more few to none were addressed or fixed. IDK maybe it's just some that have slipped through the cracks but either way as a reader its kinda annoying.
So the story is pretty good so far while I’m at chapter 55. The pacing is nice, the skills seem interesting, and it looks like there is a lot of potential for world building. That being said, it seems to be heading in a direction that makes me feel like I might drop it soon sadly. I’ll list the pros and cons below Pros: -Good pacing -Cool abilities -OP protagonist, if you’re into that -Only about 120~ chapters are in VR, then it goes to real-world (from what I have seen) -Interesting power system of gods and blessings Cons: -Grammar is fine most of the time, weird at other times, and occasionally requires you to read something a few times to understand -A few plot holes -Some illogical power scaling - the Romance (this is making me think about dropping) This will be more detailed as it’s my biggest issue so far. So far, the female lead serve to do 3 things: blush when the MC says something, stutter when interacting with the MC, and receive things from the MC…im not exaggerating. Her unique class, her equipment, her summons, her spells, all from the MC. She is useless 99+% of the time and it’s to the point where the main female side character, who hasn’t gotten as much screen time, is more persuasive as a love interest (no harem confirmed so all hope is lost 😂). To top it off, the MC changes his whole personality when he is with her. About 18 of the 55 chapters I’ve read so far has been centered around them together so there is that… I’ll try some more chapters but it’s not looking good. The worst part is, I feel this behavoiur will get worse when it switches from VR to real life. TLDR: Pretty decent so far, not too many errors but they are apparent, the romance is ruining the story and unless something changes, I’ll probably drop.
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atleast you kept your word about actually making a apocalipse story instead of stretching the vr portion to be 90% of the story. hello
so in summary, grammar= 1/5 everything else= 5/5 The story is wonderful, the characters have depth. the grammar is a godless afront to mother nature
Cons: The grammar is horrid and is almost nonexistent, a few characters feel unnecessary and I just hate even if they have a purpose, such as the sister. She might give the MC a purpose, but it's bad if I hope she dies in every single chapter she is in. The novel uses a ridiculous amount of cliches and is like I said, inconsistent. For ex. in one of the early chapters which was a small example, The notification literally notified him it was nora in front of him but he asked himself where nora is (as if she's not there). Also in one chapter the author forgot to add a description of a class and said they would as soon as possible, its been a month since. The rules that the author makes are inconsistent for example at one point the MC sadly states he can't use a spear because he's a warrior, and then comments right after that classes can use any weapon. Then a few paragraphs later he begins using a spear which I don't know how he has, because according to him warriors start with a sword and shield. He then instead of being a warrior becomes a mage, which is acceptable, but using the very same logic from earlier he shouldn't be able to use a spear but does. Pros: The story seemed bearable and maybe a decent read if the grammar was fixed. Not too many here. Giving it two stars because it actually kept me reading like 5 chapters.
Such a shame, the story got me really hooked but the writing quality makes it a headache to read and understand. Fast passed, the story is going fast, random things happens when there is already something going on. Characters interactions could be more deep and meaningful, tbh I didn’t feel that much emotions and thoughts behind the conversations. Also I don’t quite yet understand the MC on a deeper level, he just does stuffs.
the translation to English is rough. this novel would probably present well in the authors native language. unfortunately the character development and interaction between characters results in no development with the main character being overpowered with a domineering personality.
This story is alright. First thing you notice is writing quality, which is poor. It sounds like a non-native speaker wrote it. I can't really comment on update stability, so I gave it 5 stars. Story development is pretty basic, and I was hoping to feel...more. It's somewhat superficial and honestly required some deeper thought. MC's just running around completing tasks right now without thinking much. Honestly feeling a little bored. Character is pretty basic. Props to actively choosing not to have a Harem. World background is a little disappointing at this point in the story. There's random GM interference to make the journey harder for the MC. It seems highly unnecessary. Also, he decided to add Gods and God's apostles early and make the MC into one, which seems a bit much. I don't know. Honestly just expect more, since the story has a lot of potential.
lemme tell you a little story about a boy.. ahahahhahahahahahhahahahahhahahahahahahahahahahahahahahhahahahahahahhaahhahahahhahahahahahhahahahahahahaha
The story proluge is good but please fix the skill usage like mp cool down and it takes to much time for the development to takes place make the story more details
I have to say this, the story was really good👍, it had vivid details and story building was very unique and like the plot very much. A hidden jewel, I think it will soon became a famous book.
Good day! You’re one of the writers that I found admirable because you write great sytem/game stories and you’re able to connect to your readers through writing. I love how you strive in writing and your behavior is something we look up to. I am reaching out to you because we feel that you worth our Offer. If you are interested, kindly reply here, click my profile and look for my e mail and I'll discuss everything with you.
Spoiler de révélation Well, I was reading novels at dreame and wattpad for past few years. I only downloaded web novel at my friend's recommendation. but, this one really has a lot of potential. Author-chan don't drop it.
This book is unique , it's different from other MMORPG books I've ever read . The descriptions are detailed and vivid . The MC is interesting , and I also like the story development . It's surely a recommended book.