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Can anyone tell me how MC's goal changed from becoming strongest to replace WG. I mean MC's background has nothing to do with celestial dragons and there is a reason for hating pirates. I don't get it why he wants to remove WG and don't tell me it's because celestial dragons have few thousands slaves in their home and he wants to save them.
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I like the story so far and I love the concept of it. shyehehshddhdhdhdhdhdhdhdhdhhdhdnfjfhfjfhdjdjjdjdjdjfjdjfjjfjfiee93837373h3j4n4n4 r. r r r dbd r f9
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Not a bad story at the time of this writing. Average hero, average narrative. This is better than what you find in the rubbish mountains of most fanfiction.
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Overall a good story, although there are some grammar mistakes it is barely noticeable and can easily be fixed. The MC is good and overall the character development is pretty solid. The background of the world is just One Piece and it is relatable to how the world work. Overall it is a really good story that I would recommend reading.
So far I quite like the story.It has some grammar mistakes but it's like one spelled wrong in the whole chapter, so ot doesn't ruin the experience.The timeline is original, it's set right before the Rocks pirates form. The story's pace is also good, it doesn't feel forced like some fanfiction I read. The main character is like 7 years old and gets some decent character development which I quite like along with the other main character currently in the story. The author sets up chapters and arcs for the future quite nicely as well.And the system is barely there which I like since most fanfictions make the system too op. Overall the story so far is quite good.
People please make if your going to rate story 1 star make sure your criticisms make sense and aren't stupid. Second this story has nothing to with fairy tail. NOTHING AT ALL.
Thanks for the chapter! Looking forward to more, keep up the great work!Thanks for the chapter! Looking forward to more, keep up the great work!Thanks for the chapter! Looking forward to more, keep up the great work!Thanks for the chapter! Looking forward to more, keep up the great work!
It's pretty bad, a bit boring story for me, and the mc has a system, but not a devil fruit as of chapter 31. So the only thing relating him to Acnologia is the fricking name. Now the author said he would give mc the fruit later on after a few years, but still, na i can't recommend this one.
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Can anyone tell me how MC's goal changed from becoming strongest to replace WG. I mean MC's background has nothing to do with celestial dragons and there is a reason for hating pirates. I don't get it why he wants to remove WG and don't tell me it's because celestial dragons have few thousands slaves in their home and he wants to save them.
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I like the story so far and I love the concept of it. shyehehshddhdhdhdhdhdhdhdhdhhdhdnfjfhfjfhdjdjjdjdjdjfjdjfjjfjfiee93837373h3j4n4n4 r. r r r dbd r f9
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Not a bad story at the time of this writing. Average hero, average narrative. This is better than what you find in the rubbish mountains of most fanfiction.
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Overall a good story, although there are some grammar mistakes it is barely noticeable and can easily be fixed. The MC is good and overall the character development is pretty solid. The background of the world is just One Piece and it is relatable to how the world work. Overall it is a really good story that I would recommend reading.
So far I quite like the story.It has some grammar mistakes but it's like one spelled wrong in the whole chapter, so ot doesn't ruin the experience.The timeline is original, it's set right before the Rocks pirates form. The story's pace is also good, it doesn't feel forced like some fanfiction I read. The main character is like 7 years old and gets some decent character development which I quite like along with the other main character currently in the story. The author sets up chapters and arcs for the future quite nicely as well.And the system is barely there which I like since most fanfictions make the system too op. Overall the story so far is quite good.
People please make if your going to rate story 1 star make sure your criticisms make sense and aren't stupid. Second this story has nothing to with fairy tail. NOTHING AT ALL.
Thanks for the chapter! Looking forward to more, keep up the great work!Thanks for the chapter! Looking forward to more, keep up the great work!Thanks for the chapter! Looking forward to more, keep up the great work!Thanks for the chapter! Looking forward to more, keep up the great work!
It's pretty bad, a bit boring story for me, and the mc has a system, but not a devil fruit as of chapter 31. So the only thing relating him to Acnologia is the fricking name. Now the author said he would give mc the fruit later on after a few years, but still, na i can't recommend this one.