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I want to like it but I just can't. The story is incredible inconsistent. First we waste 7-10 chapters to introduce some character that we will not see until the MC goes to a new region but then use only 4 to explore the summer camp and 1 to time skip the MC 5 10 years stay in Alola. Brilliant. Then the worth of reincarnation points is completely pointless. The whole point of this fic is that the MC died, decided to not use his reincarnation point and used them anyway. The thing is that having a perfectly fit body that doesn't get ill is like 10 points (out of 650 that he had) but he uses 500 to get an alolan vulpix. A vulpix that later everyone decides to get. With that many point he should have gotten a legendary minimun. Not like it would have mattered. Finally, the world. It's bs and a power trip for the author. The MC is very clearly a SI (if anything because sometime the author forgets about it and talks about himself doing things in place of the MC). Everyone gets a shiny as a starter. Also the first time that he goes to capture pokemon they capture another 2. Of course every single pokemon with two 31ivs or more. Like any fantasy fulfilling protagonist every legendary loves him and gives him things. The second pokemon that he gets is already one. The worst thing is how we skip pretty darn important things. We never saw his starter evolve, and he doesn't even use it. Preffering to use newly capture pokemons. Probably because this isn't the type of fic where the MC slowly and carefully construct his team, but a catch 'em all like with Ash. Before the first gym the MC already has his team full.
The author does a great job melding the pokemon world into a singular story but that is the best thing about the story. The romance is incredibly forced and their is no suspense because the author spoils the entire chapter by putting tha AN at the start of the chapter, the romance is also really cringe as the MC is constantly saying "I wanna form a bond with so and so" everytime romance comes up. The author also has a weird choice for pokemon as Ninetails is fine but he catches a spearow??? Not only is it a horrible typing it also has 2 evos and peaks almost immediately, the author is more focused on fan service than the strength and development of his mc.
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Its a good story i didnt like it but i wont rate it down bcuz of that. The story was just too slow paced for me. But ig if u like slower story this is a good one
🍷 Reading Diary 🍷 Chapters 1-25 | First Impressions. BORING! Too much unnecessary info dumping. Literally had 3 to 5 of ONLY introducing characters that could be introduced in a single chapter later on. That's pretty bad writing, IMO. Nevertheless, at least with all this info dumping at he start of the novel, we get to know a lot about what the future holds for us. Is it going to focus on the anime? Manga? The games? A mix of the three? What about the regions? The limitations Pokemon have in battle (PP, Max. amount of moves, EV, IV, etc)? And the usual questions we have when reading a pokemon fic. The writing is... well, decent? It has many simple mistakes, like: o e (meant to be "one"), mixing up the name of characters, and some other typos. Nothing that makes the novel unreadable, but the mistakes are there. The MC is a mystery to me. Didn't like how he talks like a middle-aged person and no one talks about it, even though he's only 4 years old. However, I like his personality, so it's a 50/50 for me. The plot is still uncertain. He has no end goal, really. At least for now. His first battle shouldn't have happened the way it did, imo. You'll understand once you get there. The way he reincarnated is full of inconsistencies and question marks. Didn't really like it. In his previous life, he accumulated 600 and something Good Karma. The limit is 1000. Because MC didn't want to reincarnate with an OP power/golden finger, God decided to give him a pokemon egg worth 500 Karma points. At this point I'm like "Holy sh#t, that's almost all the good karma he gathered in his WHOLE LIFE, It's definitely a good Pokemon" Well, turns out he traded 80% of his karma to win a shiny ****** (No spoilers here, boya). I was disappointed. He also spent a good 100 points to have a good background, so he doesn't suffer on his childhood. Well, that didn't really work out since his real family died in a "mysterious way" and he's actually adopted. We all know this will lead to trouble later on in his life. Dialogue between characters seems fine. It feels human. It works. There's also a timeskip literally right after chapter 25. A ten-year timeskip, to he exact. He's 15, and that's when his journey actually starts. Right now I give the story a good 3.5/5, maybe a 3/5 if I'm harsh. Just skim through the info dump and have fun. I'll update my thoughts on this after finishing chapter 50. 🍷 Reading Diary 🍷
I 'll probably like it . I haven 't read it yet . the main thing is that I found a stable Pokemon fan fiction with romance . good luck to you author I hope for louI 'll probably like it . I haven 't read it yet . the main thing is that I found a stable Pokemon fan fiction with romance . good luck to you author I hope for the best
Sad that two of your fics i have read and enjoyed were dropped. I really wish you'd pick this back up....... Great fic but needs more chapters
Abandoned??? De los mejores Fanfic de pokemon que he leido.... aunque claro que el pokemon del protagonista es de los que mas me gustan, no diré cual es por que seria un spoiler aunque pronto se enteraran :D
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good story keep it up.........................................................................................................................
Why do people like to invent their own facts/definitions? 2 wives is still a harem. Definitions: Harem: the women occupying a harem; the wives (or concubines) of a polygamous man. Polygamous: practicing, relating to or involving polygamy. Polygamy: The practice of marrying multiple spouses. Multiple: Consisting of, including, or involving more than one.
This has been my favorite Pokemon fanfic I have encountered on this app. Great character perspective heavily featuring my favorite characters from the Anime, Games, and Manga.
One of the best fanfic I have ever read, the mc has no system or cheats(the only cheat that he has was him being friendly fastly with a pokemon), also no abilities from other anime worlds and mc is not OP like other pokemon fanfic mc. There is also small harem of Serena, Lillie and soon to be Cynthia. In the whole series of pokemon, Lillie is my best girl. The only thing that I was disappointed was there was no harem huhu😭😭😭, I like him being with Green, Chloe, Dawn, Misty, May, Iris, and maybe with *ahem* Nurse joy, Officer Jenny and *ahem**ahem**ahem* maybe also with Lusamine
Can't say I've had too much exposure to the Pokemon world more than a few games and the anime up to when Iris was introduced but this is a really good Pokemon novel. It follows the pokemon style of childlike giddyness through writing and I find myself unable to stop reading even if the conversations could use a hint of maturity to them. Definitely worth reading!
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Great story and good mc, I love the pairings. ..................................................................................................................................................
One of the best pokemon stories I have ever read. The only negative comment that I have is that the first 4 chapters are too long and are literally filled with info damp. Specially the second and third chapters. They are so confusing that I don't see the point of have them. I have actually seen this story in Webnovel for a long time without fully reading it. Because every time I get into the 3rd or 4th chapter I just drop it. This time since I had nothing to read and honestly I couldn't have enjoyed it more. To the author I would like to say: add to the book summary that the first 4 chapters are filled with info damp and bear with it. So that everyone can enjoy your story. Thanks for your effort Author-san. I hope you have a very long and healthy life.
Love this fanfic I'm at ch 42 the story is interesting involving all pokemon gens mc has some good pokemons hehe and nice romance slice of life all the other side characters play their role well
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Its very good, however It almost seems a little bit clumsy at times like its hard for me To Immerse myself into the story, it always kinda takes me out of it after awhile (cant explain it better than that srry). But its a Good story and is better than most on here
Hey i have been Reading a lot of fan fic types here and i got to say this one is my favorite it incorperates a new character and POV without feeling like they are shoving the orginal characters in the trash. I love that the realationship is devolping at a pace instead of just jumping to the end and the story pace over all is great. I want to see Mega Aloalan Ninetails by the by if you do art pleassseee.
I really don't like Pokemon, but I loved this fic. The characters are well developed, the relationships are coherent and the harem is not large. The MC so far hasn't been very OP, but there was only one fight, as far as I've read, so I'm not sure.
good novel read it all in the day. i will be keeping reading seems promising! mega scizor??? would be dope since he has only one weakness lmao. by the way, author, make sure to use the nine tails in battle (gyms) since it would be a shame not to!. BTW, can you maybe incorporate a mega form for alolan ninetails using a fan fiction drawing and then link it for us to see if you do it would be great to see! love your book keep it up
really good development of the storyline as well as the depiction of the character personalities
Worthy of my humble opinion, it's work if the path from great to wonderful, simply epic, but I really needed more chapters per week kkkkk wonderful and one more thing you have readers from all over the world, I'm from Brasil[img=update]
The reason why i like this story so much is because it’s different from the other pokemon stories where it’s more “realistic.” This story is just more similar to the games, which i personally like so 5 stars. And also DONT DROP
Fanfic incrível,pena que parece ter sido abandonada,tem potêncial para ser uma das melhores,quero muito ver eles desafiando as ligas e até às elites 4 no futuro seria incrível demais
I want to like it but I just can't. The story is incredible inconsistent. First we waste 7-10 chapters to introduce some character that we will not see until the MC goes to a new region but then use only 4 to explore the summer camp and 1 to time skip the MC 5 10 years stay in Alola. Brilliant. Then the worth of reincarnation points is completely pointless. The whole point of this fic is that the MC died, decided to not use his reincarnation point and used them anyway. The thing is that having a perfectly fit body that doesn't get ill is like 10 points (out of 650 that he had) but he uses 500 to get an alolan vulpix. A vulpix that later everyone decides to get. With that many point he should have gotten a legendary minimun. Not like it would have mattered. Finally, the world. It's bs and a power trip for the author. The MC is very clearly a SI (if anything because sometime the author forgets about it and talks about himself doing things in place of the MC). Everyone gets a shiny as a starter. Also the first time that he goes to capture pokemon they capture another 2. Of course every single pokemon with two 31ivs or more. Like any fantasy fulfilling protagonist every legendary loves him and gives him things. The second pokemon that he gets is already one. The worst thing is how we skip pretty darn important things. We never saw his starter evolve, and he doesn't even use it. Preffering to use newly capture pokemons. Probably because this isn't the type of fic where the MC slowly and carefully construct his team, but a catch 'em all like with Ash. Before the first gym the MC already has his team full.
The author does a great job melding the pokemon world into a singular story but that is the best thing about the story. The romance is incredibly forced and their is no suspense because the author spoils the entire chapter by putting tha AN at the start of the chapter, the romance is also really cringe as the MC is constantly saying "I wanna form a bond with so and so" everytime romance comes up. The author also has a weird choice for pokemon as Ninetails is fine but he catches a spearow??? Not only is it a horrible typing it also has 2 evos and peaks almost immediately, the author is more focused on fan service than the strength and development of his mc.
Spoiler de révélation Its a good story i didnt like it but i wont rate it down bcuz of that. The story was just too slow paced for me. But ig if u like slower story this is a good one
🍷 Reading Diary 🍷 Chapters 1-25 | First Impressions. BORING! Too much unnecessary info dumping. Literally had 3 to 5 of ONLY introducing characters that could be introduced in a single chapter later on. That's pretty bad writing, IMO. Nevertheless, at least with all this info dumping at he start of the novel, we get to know a lot about what the future holds for us. Is it going to focus on the anime? Manga? The games? A mix of the three? What about the regions? The limitations Pokemon have in battle (PP, Max. amount of moves, EV, IV, etc)? And the usual questions we have when reading a pokemon fic. The writing is... well, decent? It has many simple mistakes, like: o e (meant to be "one"), mixing up the name of characters, and some other typos. Nothing that makes the novel unreadable, but the mistakes are there. The MC is a mystery to me. Didn't like how he talks like a middle-aged person and no one talks about it, even though he's only 4 years old. However, I like his personality, so it's a 50/50 for me. The plot is still uncertain. He has no end goal, really. At least for now. His first battle shouldn't have happened the way it did, imo. You'll understand once you get there. The way he reincarnated is full of inconsistencies and question marks. Didn't really like it. In his previous life, he accumulated 600 and something Good Karma. The limit is 1000. Because MC didn't want to reincarnate with an OP power/golden finger, God decided to give him a pokemon egg worth 500 Karma points. At this point I'm like "Holy sh#t, that's almost all the good karma he gathered in his WHOLE LIFE, It's definitely a good Pokemon" Well, turns out he traded 80% of his karma to win a shiny ****** (No spoilers here, boya). I was disappointed. He also spent a good 100 points to have a good background, so he doesn't suffer on his childhood. Well, that didn't really work out since his real family died in a "mysterious way" and he's actually adopted. We all know this will lead to trouble later on in his life. Dialogue between characters seems fine. It feels human. It works. There's also a timeskip literally right after chapter 25. A ten-year timeskip, to he exact. He's 15, and that's when his journey actually starts. Right now I give the story a good 3.5/5, maybe a 3/5 if I'm harsh. Just skim through the info dump and have fun. I'll update my thoughts on this after finishing chapter 50. 🍷 Reading Diary 🍷
I 'll probably like it . I haven 't read it yet . the main thing is that I found a stable Pokemon fan fiction with romance . good luck to you author I hope for louI 'll probably like it . I haven 't read it yet . the main thing is that I found a stable Pokemon fan fiction with romance . good luck to you author I hope for the best
Sad that two of your fics i have read and enjoyed were dropped. I really wish you'd pick this back up....... Great fic but needs more chapters
Abandoned??? De los mejores Fanfic de pokemon que he leido.... aunque claro que el pokemon del protagonista es de los que mas me gustan, no diré cual es por que seria un spoiler aunque pronto se enteraran :D
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good story keep it up.........................................................................................................................
Why do people like to invent their own facts/definitions? 2 wives is still a harem. Definitions: Harem: the women occupying a harem; the wives (or concubines) of a polygamous man. Polygamous: practicing, relating to or involving polygamy. Polygamy: The practice of marrying multiple spouses. Multiple: Consisting of, including, or involving more than one.
This has been my favorite Pokemon fanfic I have encountered on this app. Great character perspective heavily featuring my favorite characters from the Anime, Games, and Manga.
One of the best fanfic I have ever read, the mc has no system or cheats(the only cheat that he has was him being friendly fastly with a pokemon), also no abilities from other anime worlds and mc is not OP like other pokemon fanfic mc. There is also small harem of Serena, Lillie and soon to be Cynthia. In the whole series of pokemon, Lillie is my best girl. The only thing that I was disappointed was there was no harem huhu😭😭😭, I like him being with Green, Chloe, Dawn, Misty, May, Iris, and maybe with *ahem* Nurse joy, Officer Jenny and *ahem**ahem**ahem* maybe also with Lusamine
Can't say I've had too much exposure to the Pokemon world more than a few games and the anime up to when Iris was introduced but this is a really good Pokemon novel. It follows the pokemon style of childlike giddyness through writing and I find myself unable to stop reading even if the conversations could use a hint of maturity to them. Definitely worth reading!
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Great story and good mc, I love the pairings. ..................................................................................................................................................
One of the best pokemon stories I have ever read. The only negative comment that I have is that the first 4 chapters are too long and are literally filled with info damp. Specially the second and third chapters. They are so confusing that I don't see the point of have them. I have actually seen this story in Webnovel for a long time without fully reading it. Because every time I get into the 3rd or 4th chapter I just drop it. This time since I had nothing to read and honestly I couldn't have enjoyed it more. To the author I would like to say: add to the book summary that the first 4 chapters are filled with info damp and bear with it. So that everyone can enjoy your story. Thanks for your effort Author-san. I hope you have a very long and healthy life.
Love this fanfic I'm at ch 42 the story is interesting involving all pokemon gens mc has some good pokemons hehe and nice romance slice of life all the other side characters play their role well
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Its very good, however It almost seems a little bit clumsy at times like its hard for me To Immerse myself into the story, it always kinda takes me out of it after awhile (cant explain it better than that srry). But its a Good story and is better than most on here
Hey i have been Reading a lot of fan fic types here and i got to say this one is my favorite it incorperates a new character and POV without feeling like they are shoving the orginal characters in the trash. I love that the realationship is devolping at a pace instead of just jumping to the end and the story pace over all is great. I want to see Mega Aloalan Ninetails by the by if you do art pleassseee.
I really don't like Pokemon, but I loved this fic. The characters are well developed, the relationships are coherent and the harem is not large. The MC so far hasn't been very OP, but there was only one fight, as far as I've read, so I'm not sure.
good novel read it all in the day. i will be keeping reading seems promising! mega scizor??? would be dope since he has only one weakness lmao. by the way, author, make sure to use the nine tails in battle (gyms) since it would be a shame not to!. BTW, can you maybe incorporate a mega form for alolan ninetails using a fan fiction drawing and then link it for us to see if you do it would be great to see! love your book keep it up
really good development of the storyline as well as the depiction of the character personalities
Worthy of my humble opinion, it's work if the path from great to wonderful, simply epic, but I really needed more chapters per week kkkkk wonderful and one more thing you have readers from all over the world, I'm from Brasil[img=update]
The reason why i like this story so much is because it’s different from the other pokemon stories where it’s more “realistic.” This story is just more similar to the games, which i personally like so 5 stars. And also DONT DROP
Fanfic incrível,pena que parece ter sido abandonada,tem potêncial para ser uma das melhores,quero muito ver eles desafiando as ligas e até às elites 4 no futuro seria incrível demais