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yoo beautiful people! 😈💞 angel1v1 the youngest author is back with her novel "WHERE İS THE WATER" goo and read the first chapter ... it's OUUUTT !!! alright enough with my humble AD haha i just want to say that i really like the storyline of this novel keep going I'm a fan❤️❤️
great story. well written. MC is good. side character's are likable. Though it starts off as a common trop, plot flows nicely and evolves in to its own story. very few grammar mistakes. waiting for more. 😀😀😀😀
is decent and has potential but it hasnt been updated in forever.............................................................................
I was enthralled in the beginning because I love stories about magic but about after chapter 50 the story got really really repetitive you have the mc fighting the same battles over and over again with the same lines and story as he previously went through and then once he entered the last door you basiclly copied and pasted chapter 97 on 99 it just seems you are doing filler pieces for more chapters and my Iinterest in the book is dwindling but I’ll read on in hopes.
We need more brother excellent novel No mistakes so far the novel to my liking bro continue please do not fail us your fans ❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️
is it dropped, it's Dec 26 the today , would like to know why it's not updating.... is it dropped, it's Dec 26 the today , would like to know why it's not updating is it dropped, it's Dec 26 the today , would like to know why it's not updating
Update Update Update Update Update Update Update I don't know if you are alive or not but if you are alive then please update your novel.... it's been a month but still we don't see any new chapter...
From the first few chapter I can see that it could be good and I’m probably going to continue reading so if you would want to read it too I’m up to hear what you think
why don't you update your novel WE NEED MORE CHAPY WE NEED MORE CHAP PLS just some chapter ........................................................................................................
I must say that I really like your story. I found some parts wrong while translating. I guess it's a translation error on the site. please edit the system and write fast.
it's a grate experience but is it getting dropped?...no updates for the last 6d!? I hope the author is doing well and will be back soon [img=update]
Love the story so far, thanks.[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]
Story is Good And I Like it, Part of Mana Problem I don't like, I Wish We Get Faster Update Novels I Read Rebirth of the Thief who Roamed the World (Great Story 💯👌❤️) Tales of Demons and Gods (Unfinished Author Left) The Legendary Mechanic (Great Story 💯👌❤️) MMORPG Rebirth of the Legendary Guardian(💓) MMO: Pierce Heaven Til' It Breaks Master of the End Times This Earth Is A Bit Fearsome The Great Thief Reincarnation Of The Strongest Sword God (3000+ Ch, Great Story Until 😠😠Rushed Ending) Advent of the Archmage End of the Magic Era (Rushed Ending) Night Ranger (Rushed Ending) One Man Army MMORPG: Rebirth of The Strongest Guild Master (Ongoing) Rise of the White Dragon (Ongoing)
I have to say the idea for the novel is really good and interesting enough to pull you in, however I have a list of things that could be improved upon. - First of, excessive technicalities. I get that there are a lot of thoughts behind the magical sides of this novel for world-building's sake, however the made-up technical stuffs feels too much of a filler. Even after reading the 50+ chapters, it feels like I've only read 10 chapters of other novels for how little things has happened. Considering the word count per chapter, the excessive technicalities ended up affecting the story progression. - Next is the MC's character being all over the place. It's like his character is suffering due to forceful attempts for comic relief. During his time on earth before the tutorial, he feels like a goal-driven MC similar to korean MCs of the same novel genre. However when he entered the tutorial, he became more like an arrogant self-entitled chinese MC. I don't know if it's to make him "cool", or "quirky" and set apart from the others because he used to be strong, but it feels more like he's being obnoxious. - Then there's the case for author's hindsight. Holding out details and explanations to what is actually happening behind the scenes is actually a double-edged weapon. Remember to always think of how things look like in your readers' eyes. If you hold an information that will spoil the story for the readers if they know it early, then that's good. But if it turned out to be something that wouldn't change anything if known, or maybe make the readers anticipate what's going to happen, then you're merely taking away the readers' eyes. It's a choice between mystery and later surprising revelation, and early revelation that could be looked forward to as to how it will turn out in the future.
Although I like your novel very much but it's update quality isn't good..also story development is very slow..but overall it's good...I really like to read it so please update regularly
Great novel so far, keep em coming, I like how it's the MC scheming and moving in the shadow, instead of most other novels when the MC just stumbles into trouble and keeps collecting enemies he can't defeat
GooD stuff Thank you author for the great and fanTastic story Cant wait romread more and see future development Of jeremy. I want him to crush everyone
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Love love love!!! There have been a few other returner novels that have been written of a similar quality but either writers block or real life issues have led the writters to leaving the novels dropped or in hiatus without warning or explanation. I hope and pray this novel gets its chance to grow and shine as I desperately want to learn more about Ortus and this new world!
I read upto 50.... story, background everything is good but there is lot of useless info.... wil this continue????... sometimes I even felt sleepy...... please reduce fillers.... thank you
Interesting, but style and grammar are not the author's forte. His writing style is all over the place, falling prey to traps like "But that's a story for another time." Also, the main character doesn't seem to behave like a wise sage would.
Quite an interesting uptake with an engagement going up past chapter 25, I do still tend to skip read the fight scenes as we know the end result, but still, can't wait beyond the tutorial arch, as I believe the world-building will define the critical factors of success.
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Although ive only read 15 chapters so far i can say that this is a really good novel! I didnt see any mistakes, if there are any it is minimal. The story isnt rushed and is thought out. Im not good at reviews but overall, i would definitely recommend this novel :) Author, are you going to make a discord server? If so, pls Let me know!
this a great story which is fun to read.... if you are reading reviews to check whether to read or not so just give it a shot. I promise you that u won't regret...[img=recommend]
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A great storyline with a strong background. The plot develops well throughout the chapter and the picture created is admirable. Which makes the whole read enjoyable.
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yoo beautiful people! 😈💞 angel1v1 the youngest author is back with her novel "WHERE İS THE WATER" goo and read the first chapter ... it's OUUUTT !!! alright enough with my humble AD haha i just want to say that i really like the storyline of this novel keep going I'm a fan❤️❤️
great story. well written. MC is good. side character's are likable. Though it starts off as a common trop, plot flows nicely and evolves in to its own story. very few grammar mistakes. waiting for more. 😀😀😀😀
is decent and has potential but it hasnt been updated in forever.............................................................................
I was enthralled in the beginning because I love stories about magic but about after chapter 50 the story got really really repetitive you have the mc fighting the same battles over and over again with the same lines and story as he previously went through and then once he entered the last door you basiclly copied and pasted chapter 97 on 99 it just seems you are doing filler pieces for more chapters and my Iinterest in the book is dwindling but I’ll read on in hopes.
We need more brother excellent novel No mistakes so far the novel to my liking bro continue please do not fail us your fans ❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️
is it dropped, it's Dec 26 the today , would like to know why it's not updating.... is it dropped, it's Dec 26 the today , would like to know why it's not updating is it dropped, it's Dec 26 the today , would like to know why it's not updating
Update Update Update Update Update Update Update I don't know if you are alive or not but if you are alive then please update your novel.... it's been a month but still we don't see any new chapter...
From the first few chapter I can see that it could be good and I’m probably going to continue reading so if you would want to read it too I’m up to hear what you think
why don't you update your novel WE NEED MORE CHAPY WE NEED MORE CHAP PLS just some chapter ........................................................................................................
I must say that I really like your story. I found some parts wrong while translating. I guess it's a translation error on the site. please edit the system and write fast.
it's a grate experience but is it getting dropped?...no updates for the last 6d!? I hope the author is doing well and will be back soon [img=update]
Love the story so far, thanks.[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]
Story is Good And I Like it, Part of Mana Problem I don't like, I Wish We Get Faster Update Novels I Read Rebirth of the Thief who Roamed the World (Great Story 💯👌❤️) Tales of Demons and Gods (Unfinished Author Left) The Legendary Mechanic (Great Story 💯👌❤️) MMORPG Rebirth of the Legendary Guardian(💓) MMO: Pierce Heaven Til' It Breaks Master of the End Times This Earth Is A Bit Fearsome The Great Thief Reincarnation Of The Strongest Sword God (3000+ Ch, Great Story Until 😠😠Rushed Ending) Advent of the Archmage End of the Magic Era (Rushed Ending) Night Ranger (Rushed Ending) One Man Army MMORPG: Rebirth of The Strongest Guild Master (Ongoing) Rise of the White Dragon (Ongoing)
I have to say the idea for the novel is really good and interesting enough to pull you in, however I have a list of things that could be improved upon. - First of, excessive technicalities. I get that there are a lot of thoughts behind the magical sides of this novel for world-building's sake, however the made-up technical stuffs feels too much of a filler. Even after reading the 50+ chapters, it feels like I've only read 10 chapters of other novels for how little things has happened. Considering the word count per chapter, the excessive technicalities ended up affecting the story progression. - Next is the MC's character being all over the place. It's like his character is suffering due to forceful attempts for comic relief. During his time on earth before the tutorial, he feels like a goal-driven MC similar to korean MCs of the same novel genre. However when he entered the tutorial, he became more like an arrogant self-entitled chinese MC. I don't know if it's to make him "cool", or "quirky" and set apart from the others because he used to be strong, but it feels more like he's being obnoxious. - Then there's the case for author's hindsight. Holding out details and explanations to what is actually happening behind the scenes is actually a double-edged weapon. Remember to always think of how things look like in your readers' eyes. If you hold an information that will spoil the story for the readers if they know it early, then that's good. But if it turned out to be something that wouldn't change anything if known, or maybe make the readers anticipate what's going to happen, then you're merely taking away the readers' eyes. It's a choice between mystery and later surprising revelation, and early revelation that could be looked forward to as to how it will turn out in the future.
Although I like your novel very much but it's update quality isn't good..also story development is very slow..but overall it's good...I really like to read it so please update regularly
Great novel so far, keep em coming, I like how it's the MC scheming and moving in the shadow, instead of most other novels when the MC just stumbles into trouble and keeps collecting enemies he can't defeat
GooD stuff Thank you author for the great and fanTastic story Cant wait romread more and see future development Of jeremy. I want him to crush everyone
[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]
Love love love!!! There have been a few other returner novels that have been written of a similar quality but either writers block or real life issues have led the writters to leaving the novels dropped or in hiatus without warning or explanation. I hope and pray this novel gets its chance to grow and shine as I desperately want to learn more about Ortus and this new world!
I read upto 50.... story, background everything is good but there is lot of useless info.... wil this continue????... sometimes I even felt sleepy...... please reduce fillers.... thank you
Interesting, but style and grammar are not the author's forte. His writing style is all over the place, falling prey to traps like "But that's a story for another time." Also, the main character doesn't seem to behave like a wise sage would.
Quite an interesting uptake with an engagement going up past chapter 25, I do still tend to skip read the fight scenes as we know the end result, but still, can't wait beyond the tutorial arch, as I believe the world-building will define the critical factors of success.
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Spoiler de révélation Although ive only read 15 chapters so far i can say that this is a really good novel! I didnt see any mistakes, if there are any it is minimal. The story isnt rushed and is thought out. Im not good at reviews but overall, i would definitely recommend this novel :) Author, are you going to make a discord server? If so, pls Let me know!
this a great story which is fun to read.... if you are reading reviews to check whether to read or not so just give it a shot. I promise you that u won't regret...[img=recommend]
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Spoiler de révélation A great storyline with a strong background. The plot develops well throughout the chapter and the picture created is admirable. Which makes the whole read enjoyable.
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Too good to see anything, but author just left us man....