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Give him a proper girlfriend bro he's just f* c*ing w ho res and he's being a wussy..........................................................................................................................................................................................................................................
The story is ok, i have to say that progression and characters personalities are somewhat glossed over and lost in that everything and everyone the MC meets literally exists to serve him. It all comes off as very forced even though the author gives a reason as to why its happening. Another thing is that 90% of this is seggs. Literally, like 2 scenes per chapter that take up 70-80% of the chapter. I feel that the author spends maybe TOO much time on it? Seeing as other things dont happen and the story doesnt progress because of it. One last comment i have is that nothing suprising has happened, nothing is giving this novel its own unique voice or presence. You read one line or event and can immediately guess what is going to happen or what direction the story will go. Everything is very predictable so it quickly becomes boring. All and all its not a bad time killer, it IS NOT however a 5 star worthy novel.
this is truly one of the best stories I've ever read, the way the MC really seems to have choices to make instead of deciding everything automatically, the way people behave...has few major flaws. it's a really wonderful story, congratulations author
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I've already read several of the author novels here and on fanfiction, and except for a five-star review and an honest to God thanks, there is nothing else to say!!
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entertainment and the other is a great way to get the best out of the way and I have to say that I am not a fan of the most important things to do in the future and the other is a great way to get the best out of the way.
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Loved the Original by the Real Author. Happy that he decided to join here and Stop the Plagiarism Kkkglglglglgmgmmgmgmmggmmgmgmmgmgmmgmgmgmgmgmgmgmmgmgmmgmgmgmmgmhng
Will the Mc share his women with other people as he did in your other stories? Because then I'm Outta here.....sharing his women with other people is beta-cuckhold Material.. aka not for me
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This dude is the real Pimperor and he is sick and tired of people stealing his work. I personally like his work and the stories he writes. (TLDR: This is the real dude)
What AsuraMonarch said Please support the real Cambrian on this novel and not the one who is plagiarizing his work (Tldr: this is the real cambrian, support him, not the pretender)
The Pimperor is sicked and tired of these reporters. Witness the true Pimperor. (He's made a server announcement and can confirm this is him)
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Give him a proper girlfriend bro he's just f* c*ing w ho res and he's being a wussy..........................................................................................................................................................................................................................................
The story is ok, i have to say that progression and characters personalities are somewhat glossed over and lost in that everything and everyone the MC meets literally exists to serve him. It all comes off as very forced even though the author gives a reason as to why its happening. Another thing is that 90% of this is seggs. Literally, like 2 scenes per chapter that take up 70-80% of the chapter. I feel that the author spends maybe TOO much time on it? Seeing as other things dont happen and the story doesnt progress because of it. One last comment i have is that nothing suprising has happened, nothing is giving this novel its own unique voice or presence. You read one line or event and can immediately guess what is going to happen or what direction the story will go. Everything is very predictable so it quickly becomes boring. All and all its not a bad time killer, it IS NOT however a 5 star worthy novel.
this is truly one of the best stories I've ever read, the way the MC really seems to have choices to make instead of deciding everything automatically, the way people behave...has few major flaws. it's a really wonderful story, congratulations author
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I've already read several of the author novels here and on fanfiction, and except for a five-star review and an honest to God thanks, there is nothing else to say!!
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Great story please dont drop. . ... .. . .. .. . . . . . . .. . . .. . . .. . . . . .. . . . . . . .. . . . . . . . .. . . . . . . .... . . . ..
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entertainment and the other is a great way to get the best out of the way and I have to say that I am not a fan of the most important things to do in the future and the other is a great way to get the best out of the way.
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Loved the Original by the Real Author. Happy that he decided to join here and Stop the Plagiarism Kkkglglglglgmgmmgmgmmggmmgmgmmgmgmmgmgmgmgmgmgmgmmgmgmmgmgmgmmgmhng
Will the Mc share his women with other people as he did in your other stories? Because then I'm Outta here.....sharing his women with other people is beta-cuckhold Material.. aka not for me
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This dude is the real Pimperor and he is sick and tired of people stealing his work. I personally like his work and the stories he writes. (TLDR: This is the real dude)
What AsuraMonarch said Please support the real Cambrian on this novel and not the one who is plagiarizing his work (Tldr: this is the real cambrian, support him, not the pretender)
The Pimperor is sicked and tired of these reporters. Witness the true Pimperor. (He's made a server announcement and can confirm this is him)
I loved this fanfic, this storie is very good thank youuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuu