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This story has been abandoned or is on hiatus, I really enjoyed reading it.......................................................................................................
Painfully stupid. From the very start with his dumb wishes and dumb talk with a ROB that judges rinnegan worth 2 wishes and the system costs 1, don't know what else to say, it is just dumb xianxia of mediocre level even in its own league.
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Eres grande amigo, es una de las historias sobre cultivo más ligeras y emocionantes para leer de un solo golpe jajaja... Necesito más de esta novela
You can understand that mc is stupid from the first episode. In the next episodes, he still hasn't changed his mentality, I'm a good person, I help innocent people, I don't loot, I don't do bad things for power, I take care of the child of the animal I killed. He is a complete brain disabled. If there is no system in this world, 1 week can't even survive.
I really don't like how he wasted his wishes and really don't like Naruto elements in cultivation world so I always drop them because it really doesn't match my taste and the system 🤮🤮🤮🤮
please update more that's all you really need to do I'm starving for more chapters. ------------------------------------------------------------------------------
There is great flow in the story, the writing is updog , .....................................................................................................
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i do like this novel . but I do dislike the mc in the later chapters . it is like at first mc was smart and a bit calculative as he was living in constant danger . he was also diligent in his cultivation as he got past multiple realms easily , but in later chapters his cultivation diligence is seem decreasing . iam not badmouthing or anything it feels like he is in same realm several months . and mc also become overly emotional and and self blamer . it is like I lost the image of my mc I had in my mind from the start . mc also forgot the dangers of cultivation worlds as he severely underestimate people as uncivilized people . although i dislike mc the story of novel is good and i hope the mc come back to his usual style .
the story base is extremely good, but the the mc is too hipocrite , . And is too weak hearted, also unable to stand on one decesion. Also naive .
I enjoyed it, not many tech /cultivation fusion novels, thought it was cool. . . . . . . . . . . .. . . . .. . . . … . . . . . . . . … . . . .. . .
MC is OP. Also he's not a pushover(so far atleast). MC's cool headed, doesn't goof around wasting his potential, currently on chapter 41, so far no love interest. It's enjoyable so far. Read at your own discretion and judge.
A Cultivation fanfics that is not ATG, TDG, Soul land and BTTH huh? i will give it 5 stars lol....................................................................................................................
It has a good chunk of flaws but some good parts. I mean the flaws kinda out weigh the pros by a bit so that why my rating is so low. Sorry author guy
is the mc interested in women? what i mean is if he'll pursue a woman if he likes them or if he'll never go after any woman. whether its harem or not doesn't matter if he gets in cliche sexual situations yet ignores every woman he sees.
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this mc protag xiaxia or xuanhuan?? ...............................................................................................................................
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This is a "With a SYSTEM" story only more cringe because it is for cultivation. ................. ................. ................. ................. ................. ................. ................. ................. ................. ................. ................. ................. ................. .................
It looks really good. but i hope he doesnt become too obsessed with strength or too scared of powerful hidden experts to actually live a little and enjoy his new life. Ive seen a lot of fics do that and its not very enjoyable.
Started good and funny but devolved to a cheap and badly written Xianxia knock-off. In the first chapters of the story I thought it would be a good "Crackfic" which is fun and making of the Xianxia trope mixed with an absurdly overpowered system. This however quickly dissolved and the MC just became a wanderer type alchemist following all the cliches this trope has to offer, I honestly think the creativity of the author died. The whole thing needs a re-write, the start although creative and funny doesn't flow correctly and is not well written, author the book "Story Genius: How to Use Brain Science to Go Beyond Outlining and Write a Riveting Novel" is a good one on the subject. I would like to see more western comical elements, you gave him the memories of the one and only Rick Sanchez, that is completely absurd and could've made this whole work funnier if you employed some of his crazy characteristics, although memories does not equal personality and thinking patterns they should have had a gigantic change to the MC. The MC should've embraced more of Ricks mad scientist instead of nihilistic genius (since he got young ricks memories), so stuff like him releasing T-Virus equivalents to power up non-cultivators and other wacky stuff that would've made the whole plot more engaging. An over-arching plot-point would be nice, for example MC is in one of the lower realms that exist and in the end we find that the one who is managing/created the realms did so he can sacrifice the souls of people living there for power. However our MC does not care about that. Anyway, in conclusion your novel sparked my imagination but failed to deliver, a good fan-fiction that did something similar would be "You are Courting Death" but that one didn't have a crazy scientist. Overall if you re-write this I know you can do a lot better
This story has been abandoned or is on hiatus, I really enjoyed reading it.......................................................................................................
Painfully stupid. From the very start with his dumb wishes and dumb talk with a ROB that judges rinnegan worth 2 wishes and the system costs 1, don't know what else to say, it is just dumb xianxia of mediocre level even in its own league.
Good good good good good good good good good good good good good good good good good good good good good good good good good good good
Eres grande amigo, es una de las historias sobre cultivo más ligeras y emocionantes para leer de un solo golpe jajaja... Necesito más de esta novela
You can understand that mc is stupid from the first episode. In the next episodes, he still hasn't changed his mentality, I'm a good person, I help innocent people, I don't loot, I don't do bad things for power, I take care of the child of the animal I killed. He is a complete brain disabled. If there is no system in this world, 1 week can't even survive.
I really don't like how he wasted his wishes and really don't like Naruto elements in cultivation world so I always drop them because it really doesn't match my taste and the system 🤮🤮🤮🤮
please update more that's all you really need to do I'm starving for more chapters. ------------------------------------------------------------------------------
There is great flow in the story, the writing is updog , .....................................................................................................
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Mc is Gay! [img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap]
i do like this novel . but I do dislike the mc in the later chapters . it is like at first mc was smart and a bit calculative as he was living in constant danger . he was also diligent in his cultivation as he got past multiple realms easily , but in later chapters his cultivation diligence is seem decreasing . iam not badmouthing or anything it feels like he is in same realm several months . and mc also become overly emotional and and self blamer . it is like I lost the image of my mc I had in my mind from the start . mc also forgot the dangers of cultivation worlds as he severely underestimate people as uncivilized people . although i dislike mc the story of novel is good and i hope the mc come back to his usual style .
the story base is extremely good, but the the mc is too hipocrite , . And is too weak hearted, also unable to stand on one decesion. Also naive .
I enjoyed it, not many tech /cultivation fusion novels, thought it was cool. . . . . . . . . . . .. . . . .. . . . … . . . . . . . . … . . . .. . .
MC is OP. Also he's not a pushover(so far atleast). MC's cool headed, doesn't goof around wasting his potential, currently on chapter 41, so far no love interest. It's enjoyable so far. Read at your own discretion and judge.
A Cultivation fanfics that is not ATG, TDG, Soul land and BTTH huh? i will give it 5 stars lol....................................................................................................................
It has a good chunk of flaws but some good parts. I mean the flaws kinda out weigh the pros by a bit so that why my rating is so low. Sorry author guy
is the mc interested in women? what i mean is if he'll pursue a woman if he likes them or if he'll never go after any woman. whether its harem or not doesn't matter if he gets in cliche sexual situations yet ignores every woman he sees.
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this mc protag xiaxia or xuanhuan?? ...............................................................................................................................
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This is a "With a SYSTEM" story only more cringe because it is for cultivation. ................. ................. ................. ................. ................. ................. ................. ................. ................. ................. ................. ................. ................. .................
It looks really good. but i hope he doesnt become too obsessed with strength or too scared of powerful hidden experts to actually live a little and enjoy his new life. Ive seen a lot of fics do that and its not very enjoyable.
Started good and funny but devolved to a cheap and badly written Xianxia knock-off. In the first chapters of the story I thought it would be a good "Crackfic" which is fun and making of the Xianxia trope mixed with an absurdly overpowered system. This however quickly dissolved and the MC just became a wanderer type alchemist following all the cliches this trope has to offer, I honestly think the creativity of the author died. The whole thing needs a re-write, the start although creative and funny doesn't flow correctly and is not well written, author the book "Story Genius: How to Use Brain Science to Go Beyond Outlining and Write a Riveting Novel" is a good one on the subject. I would like to see more western comical elements, you gave him the memories of the one and only Rick Sanchez, that is completely absurd and could've made this whole work funnier if you employed some of his crazy characteristics, although memories does not equal personality and thinking patterns they should have had a gigantic change to the MC. The MC should've embraced more of Ricks mad scientist instead of nihilistic genius (since he got young ricks memories), so stuff like him releasing T-Virus equivalents to power up non-cultivators and other wacky stuff that would've made the whole plot more engaging. An over-arching plot-point would be nice, for example MC is in one of the lower realms that exist and in the end we find that the one who is managing/created the realms did so he can sacrifice the souls of people living there for power. However our MC does not care about that. Anyway, in conclusion your novel sparked my imagination but failed to deliver, a good fan-fiction that did something similar would be "You are Courting Death" but that one didn't have a crazy scientist. Overall if you re-write this I know you can do a lot better