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I've read till chapter 197 and I can only say this fanfic is just so so. The translation is not so great and every time the characters speak it is in broken English like they are immigrants who didn't learn the language. The plot and flow of the story itself is also not that good with plenty of plot holes and arcs that are a result of the MC st*pid decisions. There is also not romance (it is as if the MC have a girlfriend but also not) with nothing ever happening. The only nice thing in this fanfic is the system, I honestly quite liked the concept and the way it was executed.
I don't know the exact age of MC before trasmigration, but, since he was working and had a routine, I suppose 20+. Now, that 26+ MC, is embarassed by a 6 year old child's underwear. Just the implicit meaning of this phrase should make you give up this book.
A premissa da história é boa, a tradução também, mas a execução é horrível. Comédia excessiva, um sistema horripilantemente mal projetado, um enredo como ondas aleatórias. Ah quem goste... Definitivamente, não eu.
Story misses op tag. And he is kinda nerfed by author. Mc got system with which provoking a titled gets 800points but by killing a lvl 10 spirit beast(even spirit bamboo that just sits) get 1k points and Mangekyo costs 10k. Thus he could just go into a forest and kill for 1night = millions system points and get everything(shadow clone technique costs 100points...). But ofc mc is a saint and doesn't kill indiscriminately(but breaking children's bones and killing randomly cute beasts to taste is ok). Also just in 1 day he got 2 rings and became lvl 27, one ability is multiple shadow clone with 90% str, guess how many clones he can casually make? (500-600). Take in mind at this point he is 7y, and all the training he did is going to Spirit Forest to kill 2 beasts for the rings in 1day, rest of the year he was at academy bullying children getting their money. I never saw a more op mc in my life and cant't see the story develop naturally without author giving mc a brain aneurysm.
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this novel one of the best novel that I have read with naruto system
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Not bad, it was an interesting story. Wuxia and cultivation-based worlds really have their own unique charm. I might consider writing new fanfic based on some wuxia novel too.
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EXELLENT story I really hope you can continue and finish this story because it’s one of the best I’ve come across in this page and I really think that we need more good Douluo Dalu fics on the level of this jewel. So please PLEASE I beg you not to drop it.
You keep making mc use the Sharingan for trivial matters and because it shows a lot, it becomes boring and predictable. And provoking his enemies in a childish way like (what did you guys hear a dog barking) I also see as a viewer that MC does not have any privacy or ambiguity, which reminds you that MC is from another world and knows the future, which in turn gives you suspense and looking forward to the next as you spoil it more in the future You complicate things a lot Although it does not require that
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it has great potential, not much grammatical error that you can't even spot one, the only bad things is Author giving us (readers) bad misunderstanding like getting 69/969 negative points from male characters, I mmean, it sounds gae. but overall, it's great, and since the Author begged, I'll give him 5 Stars overall.
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Great idea, shitty everything else. Main ability is the Sharingan. Whole point of Sharingan is to copy techniques. The single person with the largest amount and highest quality of techniques has been by his side for literal months and he somehow keeps ignoring his copy ability over and over and over and over and over again. His thoughts when he saw how skilled Tang San was at fighting were literally "better buy the eight gates lol". Like seroiously everything else is great but the level of brainrot the MC exhibits in his usage and purchase of techniques is ridiculous. About the only thing he does half decently is provoke people and even that isn't even that good. I've read fics where the MC manages to get negative emotion points from literally everyone and everyone except for the main villain and his lackeys either like him or have a good impression of him. Anyways 5 stars so this doesn't get deleted.
Spoiler de révélation I've read till chapter 197 and I can only say this fanfic is just so so. The translation is not so great and every time the characters speak it is in broken English like they are immigrants who didn't learn the language. The plot and flow of the story itself is also not that good with plenty of plot holes and arcs that are a result of the MC st*pid decisions. There is also not romance (it is as if the MC have a girlfriend but also not) with nothing ever happening. The only nice thing in this fanfic is the system, I honestly quite liked the concept and the way it was executed.
I don't know the exact age of MC before trasmigration, but, since he was working and had a routine, I suppose 20+. Now, that 26+ MC, is embarassed by a 6 year old child's underwear. Just the implicit meaning of this phrase should make you give up this book.
A premissa da história é boa, a tradução também, mas a execução é horrível. Comédia excessiva, um sistema horripilantemente mal projetado, um enredo como ondas aleatórias. Ah quem goste... Definitivamente, não eu.
Story misses op tag. And he is kinda nerfed by author. Mc got system with which provoking a titled gets 800points but by killing a lvl 10 spirit beast(even spirit bamboo that just sits) get 1k points and Mangekyo costs 10k. Thus he could just go into a forest and kill for 1night = millions system points and get everything(shadow clone technique costs 100points...). But ofc mc is a saint and doesn't kill indiscriminately(but breaking children's bones and killing randomly cute beasts to taste is ok). Also just in 1 day he got 2 rings and became lvl 27, one ability is multiple shadow clone with 90% str, guess how many clones he can casually make? (500-600). Take in mind at this point he is 7y, and all the training he did is going to Spirit Forest to kill 2 beasts for the rings in 1day, rest of the year he was at academy bullying children getting their money. I never saw a more op mc in my life and cant't see the story develop naturally without author giving mc a brain aneurysm.
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this novel one of the best novel that I have read with naruto system
It's Amazing.......................................................................................................................................................................................................................
Not bad, it was an interesting story. Wuxia and cultivation-based worlds really have their own unique charm. I might consider writing new fanfic based on some wuxia novel too.
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EXELLENT story I really hope you can continue and finish this story because it’s one of the best I’ve come across in this page and I really think that we need more good Douluo Dalu fics on the level of this jewel. So please PLEASE I beg you not to drop it.
You keep making mc use the Sharingan for trivial matters and because it shows a lot, it becomes boring and predictable. And provoking his enemies in a childish way like (what did you guys hear a dog barking) I also see as a viewer that MC does not have any privacy or ambiguity, which reminds you that MC is from another world and knows the future, which in turn gives you suspense and looking forward to the next as you spoil it more in the future You complicate things a lot Although it does not require that
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it has great potential, not much grammatical error that you can't even spot one, the only bad things is Author giving us (readers) bad misunderstanding like getting 69/969 negative points from male characters, I mmean, it sounds gae. but overall, it's great, and since the Author begged, I'll give him 5 Stars overall.
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Great idea, shitty everything else. Main ability is the Sharingan. Whole point of Sharingan is to copy techniques. The single person with the largest amount and highest quality of techniques has been by his side for literal months and he somehow keeps ignoring his copy ability over and over and over and over and over again. His thoughts when he saw how skilled Tang San was at fighting were literally "better buy the eight gates lol". Like seroiously everything else is great but the level of brainrot the MC exhibits in his usage and purchase of techniques is ridiculous. About the only thing he does half decently is provoke people and even that isn't even that good. I've read fics where the MC manages to get negative emotion points from literally everyone and everyone except for the main villain and his lackeys either like him or have a good impression of him. Anyways 5 stars so this doesn't get deleted.
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