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Translation quality is good 4 stars updating stability 3 stars not bad story development 3 stars not bad character design 1 star bad he's to childish world background 5 stars its demon slayer author 1 star he tries to be funny but it's not it's just annoying overall not back
Eu não sei o que se passa na cabeça desses autores. A porra de uma criança de 5 anos, CINCO ANOS! Correndo pela floresta, saltando de árvore como um macaco e fazendo treinamento? Poupe-me do absurdo! Já ouviram falar de imersão de mundo? AFF. (Pelo menos esse MC treina com 5 anos, ao contrário de uma fic de Naruto em que o MC de 6 meses sai dando lição de moral em Kakashi e comendo espetinhos pelas ruas de konoha.)[img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap]
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Is it dropped or something, I am starting to like this story. I hope the story will continue. ....... ........ .. ........... ...
just tell me who's the female lead and love intrest..... I want to see kanae with someone who deserves her not with a wannabe hero guy SO PLEASE TELL ME
Now this is a good fanfic, it stays true to the original work yet the author adds on and makes it good. Im not saying everything is great but I think its pretty worthwhile to read as you can see the author's passion and effort. Good job on the authors part! [img=recommend]
to be honest, it is very chaotic writing. may have been better in third person. I can't pin down his personality. reading comfort is a bit low.
Could have been better Mc has a hero syndrome and has a boring personality. Decided to save everybody for his “plans” yet people he saves are quite useless. And he tells his brother about him being from another world due to “guilt” 😐 I don’t see how someone can be guilty like that but sure. Could have been better if there was a different mc. Pity dropped Everything other then mc is fine tho
I stopped reading this a while ago not because i dropped but because i didnt add it to my reading list imma try to read the rest tho i may not be commenting
i quiet liked this story and it also has a wolf 🐺😶😶😶😶😶😶😶😶😶😶😶😶😶😶😶😶😶😶😶😶😶😶😶😶😶😶😶😶😶😶😶😶😶😶😶😶😶😶😊😶😊😊😊😊😊😊👍
I was really surprised how well it is written and how well the MC is developed. The story is also interesting. A big plus for me is how fabulously fits well.
Demons evolved? Gods? Ultra powerful bloodlines but MC is weak as a chicken? Naruto series characters appearing randomly? Well, it was good while it lasted, the best thing about this fanfic was unfortunately the mountain arch, and the rest is bs the size of america. I do not like it. I don't like extreme changes in my favorite series for no reason, I would understand the changes if MC changed something relevant in the story and the changes would be inevitable, but here the author changes the structure of the world because he wants to and because he can, I'll wait for some future fanfic of this author where the plot holes are not the size of the bermuda triangle
I feel like everything went downhill after she met the guy or since she walked into town, I don't know, I just know it got worse.
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the power levels don't make sense he is just a bit stronger than tanjiro when he practices stronger breathing style and has 6 years of training more, and I don't like nerfs at all
Oh here u were I thought u dropped this story but u just made it again Now verify if you're the original author and friend i made with By saying your catchphrase
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Well the main reason I dislike this is the mc’s an idiot. I like the author, I like everything besides the mc. Now allow me to explain why, Mc folds under “pressure” Anything to do with his brother and he can’t keep his mouth shut, he was said to be someone who had to survive by himself but he can’t keep his mouth shut, his intellect is questionable, he has mood/personality swings from thinking he won’t miss his parents to crying when she dies, he keeps 0 secrets from his brother who by all purposes should leave him, he’s the typical “acts cold towards his enemies and exceptionally nice to his friends” I know the typical excuse “only they’re gonna know” but that’s a whole lot of plot armor, no amount of slip up can warrant him to not only tell he’s from a different world but also tell everything that happened including his death, the goddess, his reincarnation, I’m assuming the system (of which he uses his inventory for everyone to see, literally in battle pulls glass shards out of his inventory, but magically only the demon saw it) tells him all of that which he could easily just answer the question with saying he has good memory :/ the story was ok except that he’s tryimg to follow the story, For a person’s first novel they should imo should make their own story. Story is pretty boring and monotonous, there’s not much progress and the starting chapters amonth take a while for progress and also after a time skip add tons of things without an explaination. I don’t recommend reading this. Overall 3.2 ⭐️
I'm gonna be honest. I haven't read the fanfic yet but just from the Isekaid Michal Jackson part in the synopsis I already know that you are a person of Culture.
I the 5 star review man has arrived I shall leave a 5 star review and be on the way BTW I rely like this story good for ur first fanfic now I go have a good day
As soon as you tell that your from another world it just ruins the story. Its a immediate turn off. It just ruins the story. Good start otherwise but im gonna stop here.
I love it thank you for the GREAT chapters ............................................ ....................................................
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The story has an interesting concept. However, personally, I have found it very hard to read. The chuuni references all the time make the story very out of place and not to mention the author constantly breaks the story flow by adding author notes between paragraphs. You may enjoy the story, it's just for me I couldn't immerse myself into the story because of these interruptions etc
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Worst fkin ds story ever cringe af.............................................................................................................. .
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Spoiler de révélation Translation quality is good 4 stars updating stability 3 stars not bad story development 3 stars not bad character design 1 star bad he's to childish world background 5 stars its demon slayer author 1 star he tries to be funny but it's not it's just annoying overall not back
Eu não sei o que se passa na cabeça desses autores. A porra de uma criança de 5 anos, CINCO ANOS! Correndo pela floresta, saltando de árvore como um macaco e fazendo treinamento? Poupe-me do absurdo! Já ouviram falar de imersão de mundo? AFF. (Pelo menos esse MC treina com 5 anos, ao contrário de uma fic de Naruto em que o MC de 6 meses sai dando lição de moral em Kakashi e comendo espetinhos pelas ruas de konoha.)[img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap]
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Is it dropped or something, I am starting to like this story. I hope the story will continue. ....... ........ .. ........... ...
just tell me who's the female lead and love intrest..... I want to see kanae with someone who deserves her not with a wannabe hero guy SO PLEASE TELL ME
Now this is a good fanfic, it stays true to the original work yet the author adds on and makes it good. Im not saying everything is great but I think its pretty worthwhile to read as you can see the author's passion and effort. Good job on the authors part! [img=recommend]
to be honest, it is very chaotic writing. may have been better in third person. I can't pin down his personality. reading comfort is a bit low.
Could have been better Mc has a hero syndrome and has a boring personality. Decided to save everybody for his “plans” yet people he saves are quite useless. And he tells his brother about him being from another world due to “guilt” 😐 I don’t see how someone can be guilty like that but sure. Could have been better if there was a different mc. Pity dropped Everything other then mc is fine tho
I stopped reading this a while ago not because i dropped but because i didnt add it to my reading list imma try to read the rest tho i may not be commenting
i quiet liked this story and it also has a wolf 🐺😶😶😶😶😶😶😶😶😶😶😶😶😶😶😶😶😶😶😶😶😶😶😶😶😶😶😶😶😶😶😶😶😶😶😶😶😶😶😊😶😊😊😊😊😊😊👍
I was really surprised how well it is written and how well the MC is developed. The story is also interesting. A big plus for me is how fabulously fits well.
Demons evolved? Gods? Ultra powerful bloodlines but MC is weak as a chicken? Naruto series characters appearing randomly? Well, it was good while it lasted, the best thing about this fanfic was unfortunately the mountain arch, and the rest is bs the size of america. I do not like it. I don't like extreme changes in my favorite series for no reason, I would understand the changes if MC changed something relevant in the story and the changes would be inevitable, but here the author changes the structure of the world because he wants to and because he can, I'll wait for some future fanfic of this author where the plot holes are not the size of the bermuda triangle
I feel like everything went downhill after she met the guy or since she walked into town, I don't know, I just know it got worse.
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the power levels don't make sense he is just a bit stronger than tanjiro when he practices stronger breathing style and has 6 years of training more, and I don't like nerfs at all
Oh here u were I thought u dropped this story but u just made it again Now verify if you're the original author and friend i made with By saying your catchphrase
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Well the main reason I dislike this is the mc’s an idiot. I like the author, I like everything besides the mc. Now allow me to explain why, Mc folds under “pressure” Anything to do with his brother and he can’t keep his mouth shut, he was said to be someone who had to survive by himself but he can’t keep his mouth shut, his intellect is questionable, he has mood/personality swings from thinking he won’t miss his parents to crying when she dies, he keeps 0 secrets from his brother who by all purposes should leave him, he’s the typical “acts cold towards his enemies and exceptionally nice to his friends” I know the typical excuse “only they’re gonna know” but that’s a whole lot of plot armor, no amount of slip up can warrant him to not only tell he’s from a different world but also tell everything that happened including his death, the goddess, his reincarnation, I’m assuming the system (of which he uses his inventory for everyone to see, literally in battle pulls glass shards out of his inventory, but magically only the demon saw it) tells him all of that which he could easily just answer the question with saying he has good memory :/ the story was ok except that he’s tryimg to follow the story, For a person’s first novel they should imo should make their own story. Story is pretty boring and monotonous, there’s not much progress and the starting chapters amonth take a while for progress and also after a time skip add tons of things without an explaination. I don’t recommend reading this. Overall 3.2 ⭐️
I'm gonna be honest. I haven't read the fanfic yet but just from the Isekaid Michal Jackson part in the synopsis I already know that you are a person of Culture.
I the 5 star review man has arrived I shall leave a 5 star review and be on the way BTW I rely like this story good for ur first fanfic now I go have a good day
As soon as you tell that your from another world it just ruins the story. Its a immediate turn off. It just ruins the story. Good start otherwise but im gonna stop here.
I love it thank you for the GREAT chapters ............................................ ....................................................
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The story has an interesting concept. However, personally, I have found it very hard to read. The chuuni references all the time make the story very out of place and not to mention the author constantly breaks the story flow by adding author notes between paragraphs. You may enjoy the story, it's just for me I couldn't immerse myself into the story because of these interruptions etc
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Worst fkin ds story ever cringe af.............................................................................................................. .