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MC is retard and a masochist. He gets abused and hit by all girls, and gets together with a prostitute. He is the ultimate beta!
The author put such an info dump on the first few chapters I got an headache, and I didn't even know if it's worth it! Later on I lost interest since it got too cliche with the plots and the grammar and compensations were too awkward so I dropped it a chapter 10.
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there are some lack of information, plot holes, and contradictions within the novel. Somethings became really frustrating.
Sorry but I can't read about the so stupid mc, nice idea for the novel but the mc is trash. Where is his old life experience, even a new born child is better than him. 140 chapters mmmmmmmmmmm mmmmmmmmmmm mmmmmmmmmmm mmmmmmmmmmm mmmmmmmmmmm mmmmmmmmmmm
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It's a hobby of mine to give other author story a 5 star rating, no matter if the story is good or bad, no matter if it's about something that i know or not, since as an author myself, i know how much joy does a good review brought to the writer. Also, as far as the story goes, it is good, but it's not my cup of tea.
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I'm generally a harsh critic early warning WQ: 1/5 The writing is a bit choppy and I can't overlook that seeing as how placing chapters on a Google Doc or running it through Microsoft Word would help alleviate 90 percent of all the grammar errors. SD: 2/5 You spend way too much time on filler content to meet word count it feels, I understand trying to make sure the reader understands the complexity of the world however that could be done in a introductory chapter/s before the start of the book CD: 5/5 you do a decent enough job describing and bringing the characters to life with their description and personalities US: 2/5 simply took points from here to get the adequate rating WB: 4/5 You introduced the concept well but feels like something is lacking maybe it got lost in filler information
This novel is very good to read, but Mc is too lazy in my opinion and the ending of the story made me dissatisfied. I really like such novels, if anyone knows similar to this one, please write in the comment.
The onomatopoeia is ruining the reading immersion because it is used in a wrong way. Who daheck “Bam”, “Boom” in s*x scene? As for the story it is a fun read. Too much info dump every 2-3 chapter at the start and too many word count that is too confusing and annoying.
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I like this story so far, funny and quite entertaining. that’s why I bought your book. You improve your writing quality with the development of the story. But there are still some mistakes like missing names, error of gender which makes the story quite confusing sometimes. I am currently reading the 100 chpt and truly hope you are getting better with the next ones And when you said you didn’t know mike Tyson but make your MC a fist fighter it’s quite confusing too…
O protagonista é extremamente estúpido ele merece perder tudo só por isso, e irritante como ele sempre faz as escolhas errada ( não pensa sobre nada a não ser em mulher) ou parece consegue tudo com muita facilidade estou no meio da novel e ele só ficou mais estúpido e não parece estar evoluindo como pessoa ele é um completo lixo absurdo
This novel was a bit of a roller coaster for me. It was going in a certain direction, but then it just went haywire and went in several different directions... for better or worse. I will say it did a decent enough job of avoiding predictable cliches, but as a result the pacing of the story is just... all over the place. I did like alot of the characters in this. It's nice to see you put effort into the female leads as well. It boggles my mind when someone wants to write a harem story and they don't flesh out the female characters, so good on you author for putting that effort in. Grammar needs alot of work. For how much depth you were going for in this novel, it could have easily gone on for 700 chapters. Which it should have. While the ending was not worst I have seen on this site, there were so many loose ends. Overall, I enjoyed my time reading this novel. Thanks for your hard work. I hope to read more Harem works from you and you strive to write even better characters and cool plots.
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Shameless review, skip this one if your looking for a actual review. just wondering what the sauce for the book cover is. You know the Big chested black hair girl? Asking for a friend
This was so good till the end. In the span of like 50 chapters he goes fro this stable middle of the pack strength to this godly being ruling over the world only to bet met with he couldn’t accomplish his dreams because he saw the future and it wasn’t so. Also what’s up with his personality? It went from goofy to overlord in like 10 chapters. I’ assuming the author didn’t want to write this book anymore and quickly finished up.
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I think the story is amazing and very interesting. I would recommend to others, but this is just my opinion. Also have a great day everyone.
Read the whole thing and it was great at first but when I got 3/4 of the way through i realized something was wrong because the story was developing at the same pace and the chapters were close to ending. It seems like the author just wanted to bail on this to write other things so he just wrote a quick the end chapter lol. If I had known it was like this I wouldn't have wasted coins...
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i liked the story its really wondeful and thrilling but can you update any information on when you are gonna issue next season because i can't wait full support from me for next update keep up the good work
An interesting story. I’m not a fan of naive protags but story kept me going. Thankfully, after 200 chapters, protagonist starts showing maturity and story becomes even more intereating. I quite like the Cultivation world volume. Overall, a good novel. By the way, author, does the story end at 314 chaps? I’m not preveliged user
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This is the third review after 210 chapters that includes two volumes. Please read this so that you won't need to waste words to complain. First, Mike is not a hero, not a cold killer, not smart, and not even fearless to his death. He is an idiot that doesn't feel likes thinking through the circumstances. He is emotionally weak so character development is the major part of this book. As a writer, I apologize for not being consistent over some factors that are explained early in the story which over explains many things that are not necessary. You can freely skip those details in your mind. For writing this book, I am very satisfied with my story development and if you read it carefully, you can find hints of future events early in the story. As much as I spent time writing MC, I have tried to keep other main characters 3D. You can find it as you reach the second volume. Finally, the last thing that I want to tell you is something that speaks to the story tags. It's an action, adventure, adult, comedic, dramatic, story set in a world where adult stuff is very common.
MC is retard and a masochist. He gets abused and hit by all girls, and gets together with a prostitute. He is the ultimate beta!
The author put such an info dump on the first few chapters I got an headache, and I didn't even know if it's worth it! Later on I lost interest since it got too cliche with the plots and the grammar and compensations were too awkward so I dropped it a chapter 10.
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there are some lack of information, plot holes, and contradictions within the novel. Somethings became really frustrating.
Sorry but I can't read about the so stupid mc, nice idea for the novel but the mc is trash. Where is his old life experience, even a new born child is better than him. 140 chapters mmmmmmmmmmm mmmmmmmmmmm mmmmmmmmmmm mmmmmmmmmmm mmmmmmmmmmm mmmmmmmmmmm
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It's a hobby of mine to give other author story a 5 star rating, no matter if the story is good or bad, no matter if it's about something that i know or not, since as an author myself, i know how much joy does a good review brought to the writer. Also, as far as the story goes, it is good, but it's not my cup of tea.
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I'm generally a harsh critic early warning WQ: 1/5 The writing is a bit choppy and I can't overlook that seeing as how placing chapters on a Google Doc or running it through Microsoft Word would help alleviate 90 percent of all the grammar errors. SD: 2/5 You spend way too much time on filler content to meet word count it feels, I understand trying to make sure the reader understands the complexity of the world however that could be done in a introductory chapter/s before the start of the book CD: 5/5 you do a decent enough job describing and bringing the characters to life with their description and personalities US: 2/5 simply took points from here to get the adequate rating WB: 4/5 You introduced the concept well but feels like something is lacking maybe it got lost in filler information
This novel is very good to read, but Mc is too lazy in my opinion and the ending of the story made me dissatisfied. I really like such novels, if anyone knows similar to this one, please write in the comment.
The onomatopoeia is ruining the reading immersion because it is used in a wrong way. Who daheck “Bam”, “Boom” in s*x scene? As for the story it is a fun read. Too much info dump every 2-3 chapter at the start and too many word count that is too confusing and annoying.
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I like this story so far, funny and quite entertaining. that’s why I bought your book. You improve your writing quality with the development of the story. But there are still some mistakes like missing names, error of gender which makes the story quite confusing sometimes. I am currently reading the 100 chpt and truly hope you are getting better with the next ones And when you said you didn’t know mike Tyson but make your MC a fist fighter it’s quite confusing too…
O protagonista é extremamente estúpido ele merece perder tudo só por isso, e irritante como ele sempre faz as escolhas errada ( não pensa sobre nada a não ser em mulher) ou parece consegue tudo com muita facilidade estou no meio da novel e ele só ficou mais estúpido e não parece estar evoluindo como pessoa ele é um completo lixo absurdo
This novel was a bit of a roller coaster for me. It was going in a certain direction, but then it just went haywire and went in several different directions... for better or worse. I will say it did a decent enough job of avoiding predictable cliches, but as a result the pacing of the story is just... all over the place. I did like alot of the characters in this. It's nice to see you put effort into the female leads as well. It boggles my mind when someone wants to write a harem story and they don't flesh out the female characters, so good on you author for putting that effort in. Grammar needs alot of work. For how much depth you were going for in this novel, it could have easily gone on for 700 chapters. Which it should have. While the ending was not worst I have seen on this site, there were so many loose ends. Overall, I enjoyed my time reading this novel. Thanks for your hard work. I hope to read more Harem works from you and you strive to write even better characters and cool plots.
,,,,,,,,,,,,,,:)65555(((((((())))))))??)(,;;:::()))) Karen of your order and your welcome home order from the ice cream shop to the grind your welcome order for the day you get your card from the last day you
Spoiler de révélation Shameless review, skip this one if your looking for a actual review. just wondering what the sauce for the book cover is. You know the Big chested black hair girl? Asking for a friend
This was so good till the end. In the span of like 50 chapters he goes fro this stable middle of the pack strength to this godly being ruling over the world only to bet met with he couldn’t accomplish his dreams because he saw the future and it wasn’t so. Also what’s up with his personality? It went from goofy to overlord in like 10 chapters. I’ assuming the author didn’t want to write this book anymore and quickly finished up.
Spoiler de révélation I think the story is amazing and very interesting. I would recommend to others, but this is just my opinion. Also have a great day everyone.
Read the whole thing and it was great at first but when I got 3/4 of the way through i realized something was wrong because the story was developing at the same pace and the chapters were close to ending. It seems like the author just wanted to bail on this to write other things so he just wrote a quick the end chapter lol. If I had known it was like this I wouldn't have wasted coins...
Spoiler de révélation i liked the story its really wondeful and thrilling but can you update any information on when you are gonna issue next season because i can't wait full support from me for next update keep up the good work
An interesting story. I’m not a fan of naive protags but story kept me going. Thankfully, after 200 chapters, protagonist starts showing maturity and story becomes even more intereating. I quite like the Cultivation world volume. Overall, a good novel. By the way, author, does the story end at 314 chaps? I’m not preveliged user
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This is the third review after 210 chapters that includes two volumes. Please read this so that you won't need to waste words to complain. First, Mike is not a hero, not a cold killer, not smart, and not even fearless to his death. He is an idiot that doesn't feel likes thinking through the circumstances. He is emotionally weak so character development is the major part of this book. As a writer, I apologize for not being consistent over some factors that are explained early in the story which over explains many things that are not necessary. You can freely skip those details in your mind. For writing this book, I am very satisfied with my story development and if you read it carefully, you can find hints of future events early in the story. As much as I spent time writing MC, I have tried to keep other main characters 3D. You can find it as you reach the second volume. Finally, the last thing that I want to tell you is something that speaks to the story tags. It's an action, adventure, adult, comedic, dramatic, story set in a world where adult stuff is very common.