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This review I wanna declare my departure, I just read 10 chaps and I am rather shameless for making a review based on that, but I have a logical reason for that. First is the grammar, it’s like reading MTL, and you expect me to read it by using so much brain power? no thanks, though it is readable compared to MTL, but still I don’t wanna read it cause it irritates me for breaking my immersion towards the story, like nobody would speak such grammatical error, even it is, it’s very unnatural. Second, Lock chapters, considering the quality of the grammar, I would not waste my free pass. There are many novels books that are much worth compared to this and would rather spend them on it than this. Third, too much to read, I have many book and novels in my reading list and would rather read this if I don’t have any much of a choice. In conclusion, I don’t wanna read it unless author fixed the grammars. But I would like to say that this novel has so much potential, although the title is rather misleading! it says cheat internet connection but its just mc having an OP phone like other OG isekai smartphones novels, but this smartphone literally an abyss that eats money to use an app! Also, there’s also the issue where mc just producing products out of nowhere, and the city would not be dumb to not investigate such stuff, a man suddenly pops up and yet producing from who knows where the products came from and earned so much money? well that’s my take for this, the story has no issue asside from what I commented on, and would recommend if you waste your brain and time for this novel.
My man, a lot of people already told you about the grammar so plz try to fix it. You can hired a beta reader.
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This novel has more flaws than that one fantic novel with 1000 chapter and I thought that was bad but this is just worse. The whole structure of the writing need to be fixed before people can enjoy the plot of the novel.
Sorry author. I have to stop reading this novel. I can't understand it at all even it's written in English. Try to find someone else to proofread your work.
This story could be something incredible if this guy had an editor going behind him and correcting his mistakes. Till then i’ve gotta abandon the book. i’ll miss you guys 😢
the story seems like it could be something... but dangggg is the grammar horrible. It is not just grammar but overall sentence structure and meaning. Sry author but this is horrible. I hope you can find someone to edit this.
It would be a nice read if it was understandable and its kinda cringy no doubt but I still like it if you ignore the frequent grammar and english mistakes.
Tienes que escribir más claramente porque puedo concentrarme a veces, pero en general la trama es buena, pero solo mejora tus capacidades de escritura. Sé que es difícil,
The concept is good but the writing quality is disappointing. I can't understand especially the conversations of the characters. Hopefully, the author will improve and edit the early chapters. Have a good journey, dear author.
I read around 2 chapters. I had to give up on the book. The reason is I just couldn't understand most of the time. Most sentence didn't make sense and really what is going on?
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it was a over all good story if your look for a good system story this is the one to go . me myself i allways read system stories and this one has me hooked
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Don't stop writing, you can do it. Don't stop expressing, or you'll dull the skill. Don't stop improving, writer fever makes us ill. Don't stop having fun, story must be told and seen.
this book i great I would have given more rating but the sentences are a bit.... However don't be disappointed correct your writing a bit more and the story will shine. I liked the story overall just make sure u write more clearly maybe get a editor who is good in English
Dont know what is happening with the broken grammar. Sorry but till you edit your work, I cannot continue reading. Great idea with the story, just needs a better quality finish of your work.
I'm sorry, i tried. i really tried. but i can't anymore, it was so confusing for me. if ever try using your language then find someone who can translate this to english or just let someone proofread your english. this may help you a lot from publishing better chapters and also learning english a bit more.
U have to write more clearly cause I can focus sometimes but overall it's plot is good but just improve your writing capabilities I know it's hard but try using grameely u can avoid gramer mistakes
you have a good idea and a great background but you need more writing experience you are all over the place with your writing and I get lost sometimes reading
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Thank you for reading this novel, there are still many shortcomings in terms of writing, especially in English. Sorry, in the future I will correct any mistakes in writing. 🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏
This review I wanna declare my departure, I just read 10 chaps and I am rather shameless for making a review based on that, but I have a logical reason for that. First is the grammar, it’s like reading MTL, and you expect me to read it by using so much brain power? no thanks, though it is readable compared to MTL, but still I don’t wanna read it cause it irritates me for breaking my immersion towards the story, like nobody would speak such grammatical error, even it is, it’s very unnatural. Second, Lock chapters, considering the quality of the grammar, I would not waste my free pass. There are many novels books that are much worth compared to this and would rather spend them on it than this. Third, too much to read, I have many book and novels in my reading list and would rather read this if I don’t have any much of a choice. In conclusion, I don’t wanna read it unless author fixed the grammars. But I would like to say that this novel has so much potential, although the title is rather misleading! it says cheat internet connection but its just mc having an OP phone like other OG isekai smartphones novels, but this smartphone literally an abyss that eats money to use an app! Also, there’s also the issue where mc just producing products out of nowhere, and the city would not be dumb to not investigate such stuff, a man suddenly pops up and yet producing from who knows where the products came from and earned so much money? well that’s my take for this, the story has no issue asside from what I commented on, and would recommend if you waste your brain and time for this novel.
My man, a lot of people already told you about the grammar so plz try to fix it. You can hired a beta reader.
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This novel has more flaws than that one fantic novel with 1000 chapter and I thought that was bad but this is just worse. The whole structure of the writing need to be fixed before people can enjoy the plot of the novel.
Sorry author. I have to stop reading this novel. I can't understand it at all even it's written in English. Try to find someone else to proofread your work.
This story could be something incredible if this guy had an editor going behind him and correcting his mistakes. Till then i’ve gotta abandon the book. i’ll miss you guys 😢
the story seems like it could be something... but dangggg is the grammar horrible. It is not just grammar but overall sentence structure and meaning. Sry author but this is horrible. I hope you can find someone to edit this.
It would be a nice read if it was understandable and its kinda cringy no doubt but I still like it if you ignore the frequent grammar and english mistakes.
Tienes que escribir más claramente porque puedo concentrarme a veces, pero en general la trama es buena, pero solo mejora tus capacidades de escritura. Sé que es difícil,
The concept is good but the writing quality is disappointing. I can't understand especially the conversations of the characters. Hopefully, the author will improve and edit the early chapters. Have a good journey, dear author.
I read around 2 chapters. I had to give up on the book. The reason is I just couldn't understand most of the time. Most sentence didn't make sense and really what is going on?
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it was a over all good story if your look for a good system story this is the one to go . me myself i allways read system stories and this one has me hooked
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Don't stop writing, you can do it. Don't stop expressing, or you'll dull the skill. Don't stop improving, writer fever makes us ill. Don't stop having fun, story must be told and seen.
this book i great I would have given more rating but the sentences are a bit.... However don't be disappointed correct your writing a bit more and the story will shine. I liked the story overall just make sure u write more clearly maybe get a editor who is good in English
Dont know what is happening with the broken grammar. Sorry but till you edit your work, I cannot continue reading. Great idea with the story, just needs a better quality finish of your work.
I'm sorry, i tried. i really tried. but i can't anymore, it was so confusing for me. if ever try using your language then find someone who can translate this to english or just let someone proofread your english. this may help you a lot from publishing better chapters and also learning english a bit more.
U have to write more clearly cause I can focus sometimes but overall it's plot is good but just improve your writing capabilities I know it's hard but try using grameely u can avoid gramer mistakes
you have a good idea and a great background but you need more writing experience you are all over the place with your writing and I get lost sometimes reading
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Thank you for reading this novel, there are still many shortcomings in terms of writing, especially in English. Sorry, in the future I will correct any mistakes in writing. 🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏