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Disgusting little mas*chist main charactrr. He let’s his mom slap him, and he says “now that I have a mom, she can do this because she can do whatever she wants.” I didn’t have a mom growing up either, but even then, I’m not ever gonna let her hit me.
Really one punch powers? lol stupid real stupid just choose picolo from dbz (dragon ball z) who has the power to destroy the moon which one punch man can't do from the anime. Like really many people think one punch man is all powerful but really he is the most normal out of most anime mc there are.
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DONT YOH DARE DROP THIS. THIS IS GOOD AND WOULD LIKE TO SEE MORE OF THIS. BECAUSE THIS IS GOOD AND WANT MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE
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Jajajajaja una total basura y con ese click para atraer lectores no la recomiendo perdí el tiempo con esto sí fuera por mi no votaria 😑 desde cuando las operaciones de corazón son tan estúpidas :B y bueno no se puede esperar mucho de una novela con un título como ese
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Don't recommend it to anyone. Although he does get unlimited wishes that is only for a second. In the next second he is in the Shield hero world with no power the Saitama powers he got were also removed after system update so all I have to say is that the title is basically a scam and I want to punch main and kill the author. Thank you ☺️☺️.
honestly, it has good quality, but I came here to see some op guy with infinite wishes, yet not even 10 chapters pass, and this guy loses all his powers, all his infinite wishes, and becomes a slave to the system. not recommended
Not reccomended. Story is all over the place, nothing makes sense at all. For example, he went to the rising of shield hero world because he was summoned there like naofumi. But, to be summoned there he needs to have read a book or a file that contains the story of the hero he will be summoned as. But all he did was step into a store.
The stories very bad. Bad Bad Bad Bad Bad Bad Bad Bad Bad Bad Bad Bad Bad Bad Bad Bad Bad Bad Bad Bad Bad Bad Bad Bad Bad Bad Bad Bad Bad Bad Bad Bad Bad Bad Bad Bad Bad Bad Bad Bad Bad Bad Bad Bad Bad Bad Bad Bad Bad Bad Bad Bad Bad Bad Bad
I am disappointed of this fanfic. Unlimited wishes but click bait, Saitama strength but it got removed, and unlimited life/immortality but also removed. This fanfic is basically just having the protagonist suffer. Whoever wrote this is sadistic towards the protagonists.
Not recommended to anyone. Like seriously MC is slaving himself to his system. Also story is very messy
Warning! Before reading the novel! This is truly not how I thought the novel to turn out to be. The MC is a stupid & is a slave to the system. He would make someone his wife just because the system said him to marry them. There is no character development so if anything, the MC is never gonna grow. [(Overall - I won't recommend this fanfic to anyone)]
It is hard to rate a novel with only 13 chapters so take this with a grain of salt. It is interesting but very messy. The premise is intriguing, we are exposed to Danmachi, shield hero, and dxd all foreshadowing possible storylines and connections. His unlimited wishes may turn many away but if used well could also be really interesting. It is the epitome of op mc wish fulfillment. However, the delivery is lacking. The grammer is average broken fanfic english and many explanations for what or why things are currently happening are missing. Ideally it would be written into the story seamlessly but even info dumps or the mc’s thoughts/reasonings are missing. There is also zero world building and the mc’s abilities seem to randomly change without explanation. The pacing is also uneven. Its not that having the mc be summoned to another world from dxd soon after reincarnating is a bad idea. But it happens way too fast (1-2 short chapters)and without any explanation for the mc’s change in abilities when it happens. There are genuine sections of dialogue which is positive, but they are not strong enough to hold up everything else. Overall, I am interested but confused by much of what happens. I would recommend slowing down the pace a bit to fill in the present. It seems like thw author has an interesting story they want to convey, but do not fully communicate it in writing. This story needs more who, what, when, where, and why.
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good chapters. ***********************************************************************************************************************
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this story is pretty good so far and I'm looking forward for more chapters. so please keep up the good work ......,.........................
at first the story was good with the unlimited wishes, but now the wishes are gone and it's really a horrible. he had the sight to my power unlimited life. it's okay but I wouldn't want to Read it
Disgusting little mas*chist main charactrr. He let’s his mom slap him, and he says “now that I have a mom, she can do this because she can do whatever she wants.” I didn’t have a mom growing up either, but even then, I’m not ever gonna let her hit me.
Really one punch powers? lol stupid real stupid just choose picolo from dbz (dragon ball z) who has the power to destroy the moon which one punch man can't do from the anime. Like really many people think one punch man is all powerful but really he is the most normal out of most anime mc there are.
🗑️🗑️🗑️🗑️🗑️🗑️🗑️🗑️🗑️🗑️🗑️🗑️🗑️🗑️🗑️🗑️🗑️🗑️🗑️🗑️🗑️🗑️🗑️🗑️🗑️🗑️🗑️🗑️🗑️🗑️🗑️🗑️🗑️🗑️🗑️🗑️🗑️🗑️🗑️🗑️🗑️🗑️🗑️🗑️🗑️🗑️🗑️🗑️🗑️🗑️🗑️🗑️🗑️🗑️🗑️🗑️🗑️🗑️🗑️🗑️🗑️🗑️🗑️🗑️🗑️🗑️🗑️🗑️🗑️🗑️🗑️🗑️🗑️🗑️🗑️🗑️🗑️
DONT YOH DARE DROP THIS. THIS IS GOOD AND WOULD LIKE TO SEE MORE OF THIS. BECAUSE THIS IS GOOD AND WANT MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE
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Jajajajaja una total basura y con ese click para atraer lectores no la recomiendo perdí el tiempo con esto sí fuera por mi no votaria 😑 desde cuando las operaciones de corazón son tan estúpidas :B y bueno no se puede esperar mucho de una novela con un título como ese
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Don't recommend it to anyone. Although he does get unlimited wishes that is only for a second. In the next second he is in the Shield hero world with no power the Saitama powers he got were also removed after system update so all I have to say is that the title is basically a scam and I want to punch main and kill the author. Thank you ☺️☺️.
honestly, it has good quality, but I came here to see some op guy with infinite wishes, yet not even 10 chapters pass, and this guy loses all his powers, all his infinite wishes, and becomes a slave to the system. not recommended
Not reccomended. Story is all over the place, nothing makes sense at all. For example, he went to the rising of shield hero world because he was summoned there like naofumi. But, to be summoned there he needs to have read a book or a file that contains the story of the hero he will be summoned as. But all he did was step into a store.
The stories very bad. Bad Bad Bad Bad Bad Bad Bad Bad Bad Bad Bad Bad Bad Bad Bad Bad Bad Bad Bad Bad Bad Bad Bad Bad Bad Bad Bad Bad Bad Bad Bad Bad Bad Bad Bad Bad Bad Bad Bad Bad Bad Bad Bad Bad Bad Bad Bad Bad Bad Bad Bad Bad Bad Bad Bad
I am disappointed of this fanfic. Unlimited wishes but click bait, Saitama strength but it got removed, and unlimited life/immortality but also removed. This fanfic is basically just having the protagonist suffer. Whoever wrote this is sadistic towards the protagonists.
Not recommended to anyone. Like seriously MC is slaving himself to his system. Also story is very messy
Warning! Before reading the novel! This is truly not how I thought the novel to turn out to be. The MC is a stupid & is a slave to the system. He would make someone his wife just because the system said him to marry them. There is no character development so if anything, the MC is never gonna grow. [(Overall - I won't recommend this fanfic to anyone)]
It is hard to rate a novel with only 13 chapters so take this with a grain of salt. It is interesting but very messy. The premise is intriguing, we are exposed to Danmachi, shield hero, and dxd all foreshadowing possible storylines and connections. His unlimited wishes may turn many away but if used well could also be really interesting. It is the epitome of op mc wish fulfillment. However, the delivery is lacking. The grammer is average broken fanfic english and many explanations for what or why things are currently happening are missing. Ideally it would be written into the story seamlessly but even info dumps or the mc’s thoughts/reasonings are missing. There is also zero world building and the mc’s abilities seem to randomly change without explanation. The pacing is also uneven. Its not that having the mc be summoned to another world from dxd soon after reincarnating is a bad idea. But it happens way too fast (1-2 short chapters)and without any explanation for the mc’s change in abilities when it happens. There are genuine sections of dialogue which is positive, but they are not strong enough to hold up everything else. Overall, I am interested but confused by much of what happens. I would recommend slowing down the pace a bit to fill in the present. It seems like thw author has an interesting story they want to convey, but do not fully communicate it in writing. This story needs more who, what, when, where, and why.
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Spoiler de révélation good chapters. ***********************************************************************************************************************
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Spoiler de révélation this story is pretty good so far and I'm looking forward for more chapters. so please keep up the good work ......,.........................
at first the story was good with the unlimited wishes, but now the wishes are gone and it's really a horrible. he had the sight to my power unlimited life. it's okay but I wouldn't want to Read it